周6-3-Wednesday 考场作文研析（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦Week 6“生活叙事”读写结合，包含读后续写微技能（结尾吸睛法）、浙江高考改编题实践、四步续写提分策略（理要素情线、情节原则、伏笔协同、语言表达）及范文、随堂微练，构建完整读写学习支架。 资料特色显著，融合核心素养，通过“321”“CARE”原则培养思维逻辑，结合万圣节文化渗透文化意识，运用动作链、复合结构等提升语言能力，提供高考改编题及范文助力学习能力。能帮助学生掌握续写技巧，提升高考应对能力，为教师提供系统教学方案，适配高三升学备考需求。

Wednesday　考场作文研析 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 读后续写微技能6　结尾吸睛法　点题升华 续写常见的结尾方式有点题式、主题升华式、人生感悟式、寓情于景式等,凸显主题,画龙点睛。1.点题式:通过一两句话点明文章主旨,突出文章的立意。如2024新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写尾句。2.主题升华式:通过一句高度凝练的话(如名言或谚语)升华主题,如2022年浙江首考读后续写主题体现团队合作的重要性,可用名言“Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of people can travel farther”结尾,画龙点睛。3.人生感悟式:用一两句话表达主角从经历中悟出的人际关系、个人成长等方面的感受。4.寓情于景式:借助对特定的自然景色或生活场景的描写抒发情感,使情和景互相交融。 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 好题探索　(浙江高考改编) 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　Pumpkin (南瓜) carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home⑥, and as the eldest child I have an advantage—I carried an 85-pounder back last year.  第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter⑦, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.  第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening.① At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit⑤, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木塞) forced into a bottle.⑩I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.②  第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 My excitement was short-lived.⑧ The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest③. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in.⑨ When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I can’t get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.④  第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. That video was posted the day before Halloween. 请参考附录二~六 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 提分步骤1　读原文　理基本要素和2情线 Who I, my siblings, my parents When before Halloween Where at home What 为证明“我”的南瓜最大,“我”将头塞进了被掏空的南瓜中,头却被卡住出不来了。 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 理2情线 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 提分步骤2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. ◆衔接1　衔接首句“我被困了五六分钟,但我感觉时间要长很多”:“我”被困在南瓜中是什么感受?“我”想了什么?做了什么?说了什么? ◆过渡句1　家人对“我”的头被困在南瓜中的反应→家人如何帮助“我”将头从南瓜中拔出来。 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接第二段首句中的“那段视频”,再协同原文中的“with my mom filming the annual event”:妈妈拍下了“我”从南瓜中脱困的过程。 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 Para. 2　That video was posted the day before Halloween. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“那段视频在万圣节前夕被发在网上”:人们对视频是什么反应?(结合文化背景:人们在万圣节恶搞、尽情玩闹)可写视频点击量很大,“我”是什么感觉? ◆过渡句2　视频火了对“我”的生活的影响→视频火了对南瓜的影响。 ◆结尾+主题　尾句协同原文背景(万圣节),可通过对比收尾,如“在这个特殊的日子,用自己的窘事为别人带去欢乐也是一件乐事”。 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 提分步骤3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔, 合理协同衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上与原文高度融洽。 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔协同的细节 情节协同 Para. 4　my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space→声音细节 第一段协同描写“我”困在南瓜密闭空间里说话的声音(unnatural)。 Para. 3　my nose briefly prevented entry Para. 4　my nose got in the way 第一段协同描写“我”的头拔出来后,鼻子被南瓜瓤堵住。 物的协同 pumpkin→南瓜是万圣节必备品,也是视频的主角 续写两段中应提及南瓜的作用,保全南瓜是最好的解决办法。 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 提分步骤4　协同原文语言　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 1.利用动作链+with复合结构(原文①②③)描写肢体动作,幽默活泼。 2.在描写人物的语言时,利用直接引语+独立主格(原文④)。3.描写情感时,利用形容词短语作状语或“无灵”主语句(原文⑤⑧)。4.在陈述事实时,灵活利用同位语从句、宾语从句(原文⑥⑦)和强调句+比较级句式(原文⑨)等。5.比喻的修辞手法(原文⑩)。续写的语言也应轻松有趣,与原文保持一致,以体现节日的快乐。 (提示:续写范文Version 2见答案) 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 Version 2 　　I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Growing more panicked, I began to cry. Fortunately, hearing me crying, Dad came and helped me lay my head on the table, so my neck could rest for a while. Then he said to me, “Listen, honey. I have to cut this pumpkin in half.” I had no choice but to keep still with my eyes tightly closed and listen to the knife moving on the pumpkin. Moments later, my head was finally released from this horrible pumpkin cage. Then Mom told me she had just filmed me managing to pull my head out of the pumpkin. 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 That video was posted the day before Halloween. Surprisingly, it became a hit that the video started racking up (累计) hundreds of thousands of views. At the very beginning, hardly could I contain my embarrassment when I was recognized as the one in the video. However, with time going by, my life was back on track. Whenever I thought about the day on which I got my head stuck in a pumpkin, I couldn’t help but laugh out loudly. I would say I learned my lesson—look before you leap (三思而后行)! 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 完成《核心默练》10分钟 随堂微练6 第 1 页 Week 6　询问信&“生活趣事”读后续写 $