周4-3-Wednesday 考场作文研析（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦“申请/自荐信”与“家人之情”读后续写，包含读后续写微技能“CARE”原则细化、四步续写步骤（读原文理要素、思情节、思伏笔、协同语言）、2025全国一卷真题研析、情感线索流程图及伏笔协同方法，辅以语料积累和随堂微练。 资料特色鲜明，以“CARE”“321”原则构建续写框架，通过真题中兄弟因狗产生矛盾后和解的情节，融合动作、情感描写与环境烘托，培养语言表达能力和思维逻辑，“家人之情”主题渗透包容意识提升文化素养，为教师提供结构化教学支架，帮助学生掌握细节描写与主题升华技巧，提升读写综合能力。

Wednesday　考场作文研析 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 读后续写微技能4　“CARE”原则细化续写细节 续写部分用2个首句、3个衔接句和结局构建好框架后,应细化过程性细节(即过渡句),使行文流畅。在推动情节发展时,应遵从coherence→ action→response→emotion(“CARE”)的模式,添加角色之间的互动,如比赛、表演类应加入观众或群体的反应或与主人公的互动。一般创设3个场景,每个场景中涉及具体的动作、情感、神态描写或借助环境描写烘托人物情感变化。如下所示: 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 在构建场景时,还应注意协同原则(coherence),协同原文的伏笔信息。 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 好题探索　(2025·全国一卷) 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.② 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire.⑨ Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.③ My plan was working out just fine.① Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room.⑤ Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors. 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue. A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice.⑦ Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.⑧长短句结合 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first.⑥ However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.④ 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　I realized it was me who was at fault. 　　With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. 请参考附录二~六 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 提分步骤1　读原文　理基本要素和2情线 Who I (自负),my brother(丧妻,健康问题,对狗的依赖), my wife, Toby When in the early summer →a few days later →two months later Where in our new house What “我”担心弟弟的狗Toby影响聚会,要求弟弟看好狗并不让狗进屋,后来下雨,弟弟提前带狗离开,心生芥蒂。两个月后,“我”意识到自己的过错,主动带着妻子做的饼干登门。 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 理2情线 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 提分步骤2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　I realized it was me who was at fault. ◆衔接1　衔接首句“我意识到错在自己”:“我”在内心反问自己什么? “我”感觉如何? ◆过渡句1　妻子给“我”什么建议,她说了什么?(如带上biscuits去弟弟家) 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接第二段首句“我带着妻子做的饼干,来到弟弟家门前”:“我”接受妻子的建议,带着饼干出发。Para. 2　With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“来到弟弟家门前”:弟弟打开门后看到“我”是什么反应?他是什么表情? ◆过渡句2　“我”说了什么?Toby是否欢迎“我”(描写狗的动作)?→“我”做了什么?→弟弟是否同意“我”进门?→“我”向弟弟道歉,弟弟接受道歉。 ◆结尾+主题　(协同尾段中的constant companion)兄弟俩聊天, Toby相陪。可写笑声填满了兄弟俩之间的隔阂,升华为家是无条件包容接纳。 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 提分步骤3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,合理协同衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上与原文高度融洽。 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔协同的细节 人设协同 Para. 2　I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside→“我”固执(坚持不让Toby进屋) Para. 6　I resisted, thinking he should call first→以自我为中心(认为弟弟应先联系自己) 第一段协同描写“我”反思自我;第二段应描写“我”主动道歉。 Para. 4　my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog Para. 6　He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away ... Toby was his constant companion ...→因失去妻子而依赖Toby 第二段可描写弟弟看到“我”和狗的互动后态度软化并接受 “我”的道歉。 Para. 6　My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother ...→妻子是温和的调解者(建议联系弟弟) 第一段可描写妻子再次建议 “我”联系弟弟。 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 情节协同 Para. 2　I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside Para. 4　I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house ... 第一段可描写“我”后悔没让Toby进屋;第二段可描写 “我”为此向弟弟道歉。 Para. 6　Two months passed. 第一段可协同描写兄弟俩两个多月没见。 Para. 5　His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually:“Not a chance.” 第二段可协同描写弟弟看到“我”时眼中的表情还是“Not a chance”。 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 物的协同 Para. 6　Toby was his constant companion →Toby是弟弟的情感依赖 Para. 1　She had prepared lots of snacks和续写第二段首句中的biscuits→食物象征善意与破冰 第二段可描写Toby成为兄弟俩和好的催化剂。 妻子烤的饼干可作为和解媒介。 主题协同 通过描写“我”排斥Toby→接纳,缺乏共情→换位思考,“我”道歉→弟弟接受,体现理解与包容 结尾描写兄弟俩和狗三者相处的温暖场景:It felt good to reconnect. 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 提分步骤4　协同原文语言　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 1.简单句(原文①)、并列句(原文②)与复合句(原文③④)交替使用。 2.非谓语动词描写Toby的动作(原文⑤)和人物心理活动(原文⑥)。3.直接心理描写(原文⑦⑧)。4.比喻与夸张的修辞手法(原文⑨),比喻Toby充满活力,夸大其威胁性。 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 原文续写语料积累　①count on 依赖,依靠,指望(某人做某事);确信(某事会发生)　②knock over 打倒(或击倒、撞倒)　③run back and forth 反复来回跑　④come as a surprise 出乎意料　⑤put oneself in sb.’s shoes 设身处地 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 完成《核心默练》10分钟 随堂微练4 第 1 页 Week 4　申请/自荐信&“家人之情”读后续写 $