周3-6-Saturday 提分读后续写（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢应用文+读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，聚焦“亲子关系”主题的读后续写，包含原文材料、人物要素分析、情节线梳理、续写段落衔接指导、美文诵读范例及佳句与语料积累，构建从输入理解到输出表达的完整学习支架。 资料特色突出，深度融合核心素养，通过梳理父亲嫁接玫瑰等情节培养学生逻辑思维，以“trembling hands”“total mess”等细节描写提升语言表达能力，借助家庭亲情主题渗透文化意识，还提供独立主格等佳句及“be engaged in”等语料助力学习能力提升。能帮助学生掌握读后续写技巧，也为教师提供清晰教学思路，适合高二、高三学生备考需求。

Saturday　提分读后续写 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 　　阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was young, my father was a secondary school teacher in Edensor, England. As the breadwinner, he was deeply engaged in his school responsibilities during my childhood. Consequently, I often felt distant from him because he had few moments to talk or interact with me. My mother, a full-time housewife, managed the household and took care of my younger brother and me, bustling around the kitchen, bedrooms and grocery stores. The back garden of our house was a special place for me; it 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 was not only a secure spot for kids but also my dad’s favorite hobby area. Whenever he was home, he would spend most of his spare time looking after his treasured roses, which my mother also adored. My father would care for his roses with great devotion and affection. Often, I would watch beside him, curious or eager for his attention, but he was usually absorbed. He regularly watered the roses, cleaned the leaves, loosened and turned over the soil, and fed them with essential nutrients. His expectation was the joy and sweetness brought by their blossoming. 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 One day, I saw him cut off some branches and stems. Then, with a sharp knife, he carefully made marks on the main branches. He cut open the marked spots to insert sprouts (嫩枝) into those new cuts and wrapped them with bandages. After all his efforts, he reminded us never to touch them. From then on, whenever my father returned home from work, he would go straight to tend to those plants. 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 Within a month, we all witnessed the entire process: tender stems grow, form buds, and finally bear blossoms in various colors. The garden soon became a place of immense beauty, filled with rose blossoms and surrounded by their sweet fragrance. My parents truly enjoyed themselves there, and so did my brother Tommy and I. Those roses brought us immense happiness, and no one, especially me, wanted to let go of such beauty. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 　　One sunny day, I decided to do something as my dad had done to have more roses. __________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　Later that day, when my dad saw the great mess I had made, he was totally shocked. _______________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 请参考附录二~六 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 基本要素 主要人物父亲:中学教师,责任感强,忙于工作,热衷于照顾玫瑰;母亲:操持家务,支持丈夫的爱好;I:困惑于父亲的疏离(felt distant),渴望被关注(eager for his attention)。 原文情节线父亲忙于工作,“我”感到被疏远→父亲闲暇时热衷于在花园里照顾玫瑰→“我”观察父亲→父亲嫁接玫瑰→玫瑰生长开花,花园美不胜收→玫瑰不仅装点了花园,更拉近了家人间的距离,给全家带来了幸福。 主题家庭与亲情 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 续写情节 第一段 衔接①:衔接首句中的“我决定像我父亲那样做些事情,以便能拥有更多的玫瑰”,可写“我”准备工具,瞒着家人开展“园艺工程”。过渡句:“我”模仿父亲笨拙操作(协同原文第三段中父亲的动作:cut off some branches and stems, carefully made marks on the main branches, cut open the marked spots to insert sprouts into those new cuts and wrapped them with bandages)→花园一片混乱。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句中的“当我父亲看到我造成的一片狼藉时,他完全惊呆了”,可写“我”专心干活,虽弄乱花园,却自认为能让其更美。 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 第二段 衔接③:衔接首句“那天晚些时候,当我父亲看到我造成的一片狼藉时,他完全惊呆了”,可写父亲发现被毁的玫瑰时的不可置信。过渡句:“我”害怕父亲生气→父亲未斥责“我”,而是询问“我”原因,“我”的回答→父亲从“震惊”到“微笑”,耐心教导“我”。尾句(协同原文尾段中的filled with rose blossoms+主题升华):(将“关系改善”比作“玫瑰盛开”)从那天起,他常教“我”园艺知识,“我们”的关系也如园中玫瑰般绚烂绽放。 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 One sunny day, I decided to do something as my dad had done to have more roses. Without telling anyone, I took a pair of scissors and began my “gardening project”. I carefully selected a few branches, and with trembling hands (用颤抖的手), I made the first cut, hoping it would lead to a new rose. I then made clumsy marks on the remaining stems and tried to insert any twigs I could find. The garden soon became a total mess (一片狼藉), with cut branches and scattered leaves everywhere. I was so absorbed in (全神贯注于) my work that I failed to notice how much of a mess I had created, thinking I was making the garden even more beautiful. 美文诵读 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 Later that day, when my dad saw the great mess I had made, he was totally shocked. He froze and stared at the damaged roses in disbelief (不可置信地). At first, I was terrified, fearing his anger. But instead of scolding, he gently asked why I did this. I tearfully told him I wanted more roses like he did. He took a deep breath, his initial shock giving way to (被……替代;为……所取代) a gentle smile. Kneeling beside me, he placed a hand on my shoulder and said, “Let me show you how it’s really done.” From that day on, he spent more time teaching me about gardening, and our relationship bloomed like those beautiful roses in the garden. 美文诵读 第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 佳句　He took a deep breath, his initial shock giving way to a gentle smile. (独立主格)  原文续写语料积累　①be engaged in 忙于　②interact with 与……互动　③My mother, a full-time housewife, managed the household and took care of my younger brother and me, bustling around the kitchen, bedrooms and grocery stores (同位语+分词短语作状语). 母亲是位全职家庭主妇,终日为家务操劳。她既要照料我和弟弟,又得在厨房、卧室和杂货店之间穿梭忙碌。  第 1 页 Week 3　求助信&“亲子关系”读后续写 $