Week 13 险境求生&能“看”会“说”（Word练习）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” Monday　跟着名著学续写 仿效再背诵 ①looking around in great surprise ②she asked curiously ③I answered in delight ④I went on, smiling pleasantly ⑤She looked at it critically for a moment ⑥I took a close look at it Tuesday　黄金素材巧背练 练能生巧 　 Ⅰ.1.She shot him a meaningful look. 2.He raised/lifted his eyes and looked out of the window. 3.She looked her father in the eye and added Ⅱ.1.raised/lifted his eyes from; looked out of the window; watching 2.greeted; asked; took a glance at; respond Ⅲ.①She did not even look up ②Her eyes were fixed/focused on/glued to her plate ③I asked politely with a smile ④she answered without looking up ⑤I continued in a gentle tone ⑥In despair, I asked her whether she was enjoying her dinner ⑦she answered in an annoyed voice/she answered, her voice annoyed Wednesday　续写句式多维练 练能生巧 　 Ⅰ.1.had listened　2.have made　3.had been 4.valued Ⅱ.1.If only I hadn’t quarreled with Tom! I wouldn’t be trapped in this terrible place now. 2.But for Mr. Smith’s patience and encouragement, Steve wouldn’t have realized his dream at last. 3.He turned over the photo album, wishing that he had attended the party last night. 4.If more people took time to care about others, the world would be a better place. Ⅲ.①broke　②Luckily　③sparkled ④abandoned　⑤offering　⑥we wouldn’t have received help from the policeman Thursday　巧学续写微技能 微技能4 1.Anger; roared; madly 2.(1)calmer; grabbed the garlic bread; threw (2)Apparently calmer than me, Elli grabbed the garlic bread and threw it at the bear. 3.he tore down the fence, rushed in and charged 4.nothing could be heard 5.(1)swept away our choking fear; frightened the bear (2)swept away our fear immediately and frightened the bear; who took a few hesitant steps back 6.(1)Feeling thrilled but relieved; safe and sound (2)Thrilled but relieved, we caught the rope tightly and eventually landed on the helicopter, safe and sound. Version 2 　　A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn’t long before he ate up all the bread and came back again. At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.“Thank goodness we are saved!” Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene—we were robbed by a polar bear! 原文续写语料积累 ①punishment　②scare ... off　③close encounter ⑤With an angry roar Friday　练续写最新好题 读后续写 　 基本要素 主要人物 James:冷静领导(voice steady, signaling silence)。 Lily:冷静观察(spotted a stream)。 Emily:情绪化表现(pale face, tears)。 原文情节线 Lily和朋友James, Emily 在探索未知森林时迷路,且指南针失效→James眺望地平线,找寻文明迹象→Emily惊慌失措,Lily 无声支持,James鼓励→巨熊咆哮着出现→James努力保持冷静并指示大家不要轻举妄动→Lily试图寻找逃脱的机会,发现溪流(暗示逃生路径)。 主题 自然环境的危险性(迷路、野兽威胁)、野外求生技能(利用指南针、观察水流方向) 续写情节 第一段 衔接①:衔接首句“‘小溪!’她激动地低声说道”,可写Lily提出逃生方案(沿下游移动)。过渡句:James 同意,三人开始缓慢向小溪挪动→成功走进小溪→熊的反应(观察他们的一举一动)。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句“当他们继续沿着下游前行时,如释重负的感觉涌遍全身”,可写熊对他们失去兴趣离开。 第二段 衔接③:衔接首句“当他们继续沿着下游前行时,如释重负的感觉涌遍全身”,(协同原文的The sun was setting和fading light的描写,此时应该有月光)可写Lily, James和Emily三人在月光指引下,彼此鼓励着继续向下游行进。过渡句:看到小村庄的灯光(灯光象征希望)→成功脱险,满心喜悦和感激。尾句(升华):战胜恐惧→自我强化。 美文诵读 　　“The stream!” she whispered in a low excited voice (激动地低声说道).“We can follow it downstream. It might lead us to civilization.” James nodded. They began to edge their way (缓缓挪动) towards the stream, their eyes fixed on the bear. Inch by inch (缓慢而谨慎地;一步一步), they moved closer, their hearts pounding (心怦怦直跳). Finally, they reached the stream. James gave a gentle signal, and they turned, putting their backs to the bear as they cautiously stepped into the water. The bear watched their every move (注意着他们的一举一动). But as they moved further away, it seemed to lose interest and eventually turned away, disappearing back into the depths of (……的深处) the forest. Relief flooded through their bodies as they continued their downstream journey. The light of the moon guided them through the night, and they whispered encouraging words to each other (彼此低声鼓励) as they pressed onward. Hours later, they stumbled upon (意外发现;偶然遇见) a small village, its lights twinkling in the distance. They had made it. Their hearts were filled with joy and gratitude (心中满是喜悦与感激) as they walked towards the warmth of a new beginning. The journey home was long, but with every step, they grew stronger, knowing that they had faced their fears and emerged victorious in the end (归途漫漫,但每一步都让他们愈发坚韧,深知自己已直面恐惧,终成胜者). 佳句　James gave a gentle signal, and they turned, putting their backs to the bear as they cautiously stepped into the water (分词短语作状语+时间状语从句).  原文续写语料积累　It was a huge bear, its fur a mixture of brown and black, and its eyes flashing with a violent light. The bear smelled the air, and then its gaze settled on the three friends. (描写巨熊的出场) 那是头巨熊,皮毛棕黑交杂,双目迸射出凶光。它嗅探空气,然后,它的视线落在三位朋友身上。 Saturday　练续写最新好题 读后续写 　 基本要素 主要人物 I/we:消防员,职业可以成为续写的协同点。a nine⁃year⁃old boy:被困保险箱。his five⁃year⁃old brother:玩捉迷藏时把保险箱门关了。孩子们的母亲:哭泣、担心、焦急。my workmate: 猜保险箱的六位数密码。 原文情节线 “我”接到警报→9岁男孩被锁在保险箱中→“我”接警后感觉这个任务很棘手→“我们”火速赶到现场,得知男孩被锁在保险箱的原因→除了男孩已故的祖父,无人知道保险箱的密码→消防工作人员开始救援→先往保险箱里输送氧气,同时猜测保险箱的密码。 主题 救人脱困 续写情节 第一段 衔接①:衔接首句“此时我们完全准备好用武力打开保险箱,首先是用钻头”,可写用钻头钻保险箱的门的难易度。过渡句:保险箱里男孩的状况→救援人员的安抚。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句中的“就在我们开始第一次切割时,我的同事输入了正确的密码”,可写小男孩的妈妈想起了一些可能的密码组合。 第二段 衔接③:衔接首句中的“我的同事输入了正确的密码”,可写顺利开启保险箱的门之后大家的反应(众人喝彩欢呼)。过渡句:男孩安然无恙,大家如释重负,家人团聚相拥→男孩家人对“我们”的感激。尾句(升华):结合消防员职业特点,可从职业角度写,男孩幸运得救,让“我”明白消防员工作的意义。 美文诵读 　　We were fully prepared at this point to open the safe by force, starting with a drill. So strong was the safe that it was difficult for me to drill a hole immediately. Plus, the boy’s weak breath urged us to act quickly. “Stay back and you’ll be alright,” I reassured the helpless boy in a comforting voice (用安慰的声音). I examined the safe carefully, pointed the drill to its front door and turned on the drill. As the drill was roaring, I could even sense the parents’ anxious eyes fall on the drill (焦虑的目光落在钻头上). How time flew! Two hours saw our success in drilling a small hole and then we would cut the safe. Luckily, the mother who calmed down, offered us some relative possible combinations. Then, just as we started to make the first cut, my workmate typed in the correct code. “Click!” the door of the safe opened. As the boy poked his head out of (探出头来) the safe, thunderous applause and cheers filled the basement (雷鸣般的掌声和欢呼声响彻地下室). Everyone in the scene felt the stone in their hearts falling down to the ground (感觉心中的大石落地). The boy’s parents approached and gathered him in their warm embraces, tears of gratitude and relief welling up in their eyes. Mission accomplished perfectly, the family conveyed their hearty thanks to us again and again. Pride overwhelmed me (我骄傲极了). The boy’s narrow escape was a reminder of why I chose to serve in the fire department—to protect and save lives, whatever happened. 结尾还可以这样写: The thrilling rescue mission would be engraved in my heart forever (永生难忘) which displayed the true meaning of being a firefighter. Whatever the danger is, just go all out and extend your helping hand readily. 佳句　The boy’s parents approached and gathered him in their warm embraces, tears of gratitude and relief welling up in their eyes. (动作链+独立主格)  原文续写语料积累　feel a thin stream of air 感觉到一股微弱的气流 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Week 13　险境求生&能“看”会“说” Monday　跟着名著学续写 　　《爱丽丝镜中奇遇记》是英国作家刘易斯·卡罗尔创作的儿童文学作品,为《爱丽丝梦游仙境》续作。 阅读下面的节选部分,学习仿效文中描写人物“看”的动作和对话的手法。 　　“I feel it’s marked out just like a large chessboard!”Alice said①.“There ought to be some men moving about somewhere—and so there are!”she added happily, and her heart began to beat quickly with excitement as she went on.②“It’s a great huge game of chess that’s being played. How I wish I were one of them!” She looked rather shy at the real Queen as she said this, but the Queen only smiled pleasantly, and said③,“That’s easily managed. You can be the White Queen’s Pawn, if you like, as Lily’s too young to play.”Just at this moment, somehow or other, they began to run. Alice could never quite make out how it was that they began. All she remembered was that the Queen went so fast that it was all she could do to keep up with her, and still the Queen kept crying“Faster! Faster!”④ The most curious part of the thing was that the trees and the other things round them never changed their places at all: However fast they went, they never seemed to pass anything. “I wonder if all the things move along with us.”thought Alice. The Queen seemed to guess her thoughts, for she cried,“Faster! Don’t try to talk!”⑤ Not that Alice had any idea of doing that. Just as Alice was getting quite exhausted, they stopped. Alice looked round her in great surprise⑥.“Why, I do believe we’ve been under this tree the whole time!” “Of course,”said the Queen,“how else would you have it?”“Well, in our country,”said Alice,“you’d generally get to somewhere else—if you ran very fast for a long time.”⑦ ①对话+表“说”的动词say ②对话+表“说”的动词add(补充说)+副词+情感词汇with excitement ③表“看”的动词+副词+神态描写+表“说”的动词say ④表“说”的动词cry+人物语言 ⑤内心活动描写+表“说”的动词cry+人物语言 ⑥表“看”的动词look round+情感词汇 ⑦表“说”的动词say+对话 仿效再背诵　尝试仿效上文中的描写方式补全短文,并背诵 　　I think young children often appreciate modern pictures better than anyone else. They notice more. My sister is only seven, but she always tells me whether my pictures are good or not. Yesterday I was busy hanging a picture when she came into my room, ①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (惊讶地环顾四周,表“看”的动词+介词短语). “What are you doing?” ②　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她好奇地问).   “I’m hanging this picture on the wall.” ③　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (我高兴地答道,表“说”的动词+介词短语). “It’s a new one. Do you like it?” ④　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (我愉快地微笑着继续说). ⑤　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她用挑剔的眼光看了一会儿画). “It’s all right,” she said, “but isn’t it upside down?” ⑥　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (我仔细看了一下画). She was right! It was!   Tuesday　黄金素材巧背练/默写 素材13　能“看”会“说” 必背好词 看 ①look看(有意识地看)　②see看见(看的结果)　③watch观察;聚精会神地看　④gaze凝视;注视 ⑤stare凝视;盯着看;吃惊地看　⑥glare怒目而视　⑦peek偷看;窥视　⑧glance一瞥,看一眼　⑨peep窥视,偷看　⑩gape目瞪口呆地凝视　11observe观察　12scan仔细察看;端详　13spot看见 怒视/凝视/快速看 ①glare at/stare hard at sb.怒视　②give sb. a look/glance of burning anger愤怒地看/瞥了某人一眼　③flash/glitter with anger闪着/燃烧着怒火　④give/throw/shoot/cast sb. a(n) ... look/glance/stare/glare……看了/瞥了/瞪了某人一眼　⑤look sb. in the eye(s)/face直视某人,正视某人　⑥steal a glance/look at偷偷看……一眼　⑦look/glance over one’s shoulder向后看　⑧meet/avoid sb.’s look/glance/gaze/stare迎上/避开某人的目光/一瞥/凝视 小声说 ①murmur低声说,咕哝　②whisper小声说　③moan呻吟　④mumble嘟哝　⑤in a low voice低声说 大声说 ①call大声说　②cry喊叫　③shout呼叫;大声说　④yell叫喊,大喊　⑤howl大声叫喊 其他说 ①add补充说　②beg乞求　③answer/respond回答,答复　④ask/question询问　⑤explain解释;辩解　⑥complain抱怨　⑦exclaim (因疼痛、愤怒、惊奇等)惊叫,呼喊　⑧sigh叹息道　⑨swear发誓;允诺　⑩stammer结结巴巴地说 必背佳句　先背诵再完成《6分钟素材默写》默写13 Ⅰ.瞥、看、盯、瞪、环视 1.As I glanced at Mark to see what he was doing, he winked at me. 当我瞥了一眼马克,看他在做什么时,他向我眨了眨眼。 2.He shot/threw/cast her a grateful look. 他向她投去感激的一瞥。 3.He just stood there, staring at me blankly.(“看”+副词) 他只是站在那里茫然地看着我。 4.Ben looked at me in horror for a moment and then his eyes dropped to his feet.(“看”+with/in+表“情感”的名词) 本惊恐地看了我一会儿,然后垂下眼睛看着自己的脚。 5.Her eyes fell/landed on the photos.她的目光落在照片上。 6.She sat up, her eyes fixed/focused on Joan’s face.她紧盯着琼的脸坐起来。 7.Winifred sat with her eyes glued to the television screen. 威妮弗雷德坐着,目不转睛地盯着电视屏幕。 8.He couldn’t help eyeing the cakes hungrily. 他饥不可耐地盯着蛋糕。 9.The little prince gazed at him for a long time. 小王子盯着他看了很久。 10.Harry wheeled around to stare at Ron. 哈利猛地转过身来,瞪着罗恩。 11.He looked around/scanned the house, failing to spot Anna and kids. 他环视/细看了一下房子,没有看到安娜和孩子们。 12.The little prince sat down on a stone, and raised his eyes toward the sky. 小王子坐在一块石头上,抬头望着天空。 13.Every time she caught his eye, she would glance away embarrassed. 每次遇到他的目光,她都会窘迫地往别处看。 Ⅱ.能“言”善“说” 14.She shot him an angry glance and said impatiently, “Leave me alone!” (表“说”的动词+副词) 她生气地瞥了他一眼,不耐烦地说:“别烦我!” 15.He stopped me and added in a soft tone, “I do miss you!” [表“说”的动词+in a(n) ... tone] 他拦住我,轻轻地说:“我真想你!” 16.“Who broke the glass?” the boy asked in a trembling voice/the boy asked, his voice trembling. [表“说”的动词+in a(n) ... voice或one’s voice+形容词/doing] 男孩声音颤抖地问道:“谁打碎的玻璃?” 17.“Help me!” she yelled at the top of her voice. (表“说”的动词+介词短语) “救命!”她扯开嗓子喊道。 18.“Get out!” she screamed in anger.“出去!”她愤怒地尖叫道。 19.“You see,” he continued, smiling unpleasantly.(表“说”的动词+非谓语动词)“你明白。”他继续说道,脸上带着令人不快的笑容。 20.“I don’t want to go!” screamed Wilbur, throwing himself to the ground. “我不想去!”威尔伯尖叫着,扑倒在地。 练能生巧 Ⅰ.利用并仿效素材补全以下各句,并背诵 1.她意味深长地看了他一眼。 __________________________________________________ 2.他抬起眼睛向窗外望去。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ (双连动词) 3.她直视着父亲,补充道:“我希望我没有那么多的事情要做。” __________________________________________________, “I wish I didn’t have so much to do.”(双连动词) Ⅱ.用恰当的表“看”或“说”的词汇和表达补全下面描写“看”或“说”的片段 1.他终于完成了任务,从电脑屏幕上抬起眼睛,伸展双手,打了个长长的呵欠,然后望着窗外,看着楼下的孩子们打篮球。 Finally finishing the task, he 　　　　　　　　the computer screen, reached out his hands, had a long yawn, and then 　　　　　　　　　　, 　　　　the children playing basketball downstairs.  2.她和她婆婆打招呼,问道:“你来过这里吗?”她婆婆瞥了她一眼,停顿了一下,皱了皱眉,却没回答。 She 　　　　her mother-in-law and 　　　　, “Have you been here?” Her mother-in-law 　　　　　　　　 her, paused and frowned for a while, but she didn’t 　　　　 anyhow.  Ⅲ.续写微作文 根据提示,使用合适的对话句式和表“看”的词汇补全以下情景对话 Mrs. Rumbold was a large, unsmiling lady in a black dress.①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她甚至连头都没抬一下) when I took my seat beside her. ②　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她的眼睛盯着自己的盘子,被动句) and she was busy eating. I tried to make conversation. “Will you be spending your holidays abroad this year?” ③　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (我微笑着礼貌地问道,表“说”的动词+副词+神态描写). “No,” ④　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她头也不抬地回答,表“说”的动词+介词短语). “Will you be staying in England?” ⑤　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (我继续用温和的语气问,表“说”的动词+语气). “No,” she shook her head. ⑥　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (失望中,我问她晚餐是否吃得满意,间接引语,表“说”的动词+介词短语). “Young man,” ⑦　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她用一种恼火的声音回答,表“说”的动词+声音), “if you ate more and talked less, we would both enjoy our dinner!”  Wednesday　续写句式多维练 　借虚拟语气传情达意 虚拟语气通过谓语动词的特殊形式来表示,常用来表达惊异、惋惜、遗憾、理应如此等含义,在读后续写中常用以下3个句式表达比较强烈的感情。 高分句式44　主语+wish sb. did/had done/could do　真希望…… 对现在事实的假设用did或were;对过去事实的假设用had done;对将来事实的假设用would/could/might do。 “I wish we could help him to earn money,”said Clara. “我真希望我们能帮助他赚钱。”克莱拉说。 高分句式45　Without/But for+名词, sb. would do/would have done　没有/要不是……的话,某人就…… 对现在事实的假设用would do;对过去事实的假设用would have done。 ①Without setbacks, our life would not be filled with wonderful stories.如果没有挫折,我们的人生就不会充满精彩的故事。 ②But for this experience, I wouldn’t have realized I should spend more time with my family.要不是这次经历,我不会意识到我应该花更多的时间和家人在一起。 高分句式46　If only sb. did/had done　要是……就好了 If only+主语+did/were表示现在的愿望;If only+主语+had done表示过去的愿望;If only+主语+could do表示将来的愿望。 If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag.要是她没有把手机忘在包里就好了。 练能生巧 Ⅰ.根据语境,用括号内动词的正确形式补全下面的虚拟语气句式,并背诵 1.“If only I 　　　　　　(listen) to my mother’s advice!” the little girl whispered to herself.  2.But for your instruction, I would not 　　　　　(make) such great progress.  3.Steven lowered his head with embarrassment, wishing he 　　　　　　　(be) more careful.   4.If more of us 　　　　(value) family above money, it would be a better world.   Ⅱ.对Ⅰ中各句进行一对一仿写,并背诵 1.我要是没和汤姆吵架就好了!我现在就不会被困在这个可怕的地方了。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ 2.要不是 Mr. Smith 的耐心和鼓励, Steve是无法最终实现他的梦想的。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ 3.他翻看相册,真希望自己也参加了昨晚的派对。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ 4.如果更多的人花时间去关心别人,世界会变得更好。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Ⅲ.微续写 用虚拟语气句式或所给词的正确形式补全下面的 “险境求生”类续写,并诵读背诵 Without thinking too much, I kicked the door hard, which ①　　　　 (break) open with a loud crash. We stumbled inside. ②　　　　 (lucky), I found enough dry wood to start a fire. The next morning, a policeman found the gate broken and came in. Mary’s eyes ③　　　　 (sparkle) with relief. We explained what had happened and how we had ended up in the ④　　　　 (abandon) house. The policeman wasted no time ⑤　　　　 (offer) his spare gasoline. Soon, everything was ready.When waving goodbye, I suddenly realized that fortune never came alone. If it weren’t for Mary, I would never have been there to discover the house, and ⑥　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (我们不会得到警察的帮助,虚拟语气). Indeed, helping others can bring its  own rewards. Thursday　巧学续写微技能 好题探索　不速之客之北极熊　(2020·浙江卷) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside“the polar bear capital of the world”—the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada. Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears—like all wild animals—should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times. As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.① The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire.② He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.③ Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew.⑤ We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air.④ Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though—he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子). I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter, I took some pictures of the bear. Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burned the bear’s eyes, but didn’t hurt him. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar, the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.⑥ 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. (请参考素材4,素材9,素材10,素材15,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 理6要素 ①Who my wife, I, camp manager, a young male polar bear ②When one fall ③Where at a research camp ④What an encounter with the polar bear ⑤Problem 摄影爱好者如何免受北极熊的攻击自救脱险,饥饿的北极熊如何获取食物并自保 ⑥Theme 险境求生、解决问题、人与动物 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“北极熊返回营地”:被胡椒喷雾剂刺痛眼睛的北极熊是否被激怒了?是否会更猛烈地撞击围栏? ◆过渡句1　“我” 和妻子看到发怒的北极熊的反应?→如何利用随身物品应对北极熊的攻击?采取什么新的办法有效避险? ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“就在那一瞬间”,营造人与北极熊之间的对峙氛围,如北极熊马上要破栏而入。 Para. 2　At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“直升机赶到”:如何利用直升机脱险(直升机发出的巨大声响吓走北极熊)? ◆过渡句2　安全脱险→看到北极熊做了什么(协同原文的garlic bread)? ◆结尾+主题　(协同原文首段提到的to photograph polar bears)拍照成功。主题可升华为意识到与野生动物相处的危险性和对大自然力量的敬畏。 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.4 He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts. Para.5 he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws 段一尾句可描写北极熊用巨大的熊爪撕破铁丝网,营造危急场面 情节的协同 Para.5 Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. 段二开头可写直升机发出的巨大声音吓退北极熊 Para.1 to photograph polar bears 段二尾句可协同描写用相机抓拍北极熊,首尾呼应 Para.7 With an angry roar, the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes. 段一开头可描写北极熊愤怒地发动攻击和眼部发红受伤的状况 物的协同 our garlic bread, camera, pepper spray 段一描写“我们”与北极熊对峙时可写用bread投喂北极熊以拖延时间,或再次尝试用胡椒喷雾剂自救 段二尾句可写拿起相机拍摄北极熊 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.原文侧重动作和场景描写。2.双连或三连动作链(原文①②③④),描写人和北极熊的具体动作。3.形容词或介词短语作状语(原文⑤⑥),描写人和北极熊的情感。 续写第一段(场景1 熊吼叫、猛砸围栏　场景2 应对熊攻击　场景3 出现危机) 场景1　熊吼叫、猛砸围栏 1.他红肿的眼睛里满是愤怒,他咆哮着,疯狂地用有力的爪子砸着铁丝栅栏。 (情感名词+双连动作链+副词) 　　　　 filling his red swollen eyes, he 　　　　, and smashed his powerful paws 　　　　against the wire fence.   场景2　应对熊攻击 2.埃莉显然比我冷静,她抓起蒜蓉面包朝北极熊扔去。 (1)Elli was apparently 　　　　　than me, so she 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　and 　　　　　it at the bear. (情感形容词+双连动作链)  (2)__________________________________________________ (形容词短语置于句首+双连动作链) 场景3　出现危机 3.“咔嚓”一声巨响,他扯坏栅栏冲进来,径直朝我们扑来! (三连动作链) With a loud crack, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　straight for us!  4.寒风呼啸,除了心怦怦猛跳的声音,我们什么也听不见。 (被动句,场景描写,间接烘托人物内心的恐惧) The icy wind howling, 　　　　　　　　　　　but the beat of our hearts thumping.   续写第二段(场景4 引擎噪音作用　场景5 安全脱险　场景6 空中观察熊,拍照记录) 场景4　引擎噪音作用(驱散恐惧、吓退熊) 5.它的引擎声立刻驱散了令人窒息的恐惧,也吓坏了北极熊,他迟疑地后退了几步。 (1)The noise of its engine 　　　　　　　　　　　　immediately and 　　　　　　　　. He took a few hesitant steps back. (并列句)  (2)The noise of its engine 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. (非限制性定语从句)  场景5　安全脱险 6.我们激动的同时也松了一口气,紧紧抓住绳子,最后安然无恙地登上了直升机。 (1)　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, we caught the rope tightly and eventually landed on the helicopter, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. (非谓语动词+形容词短语作状语)  (2)__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________(形容词短语作状语) A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Anger filling his red swollen eyes, he roared and smashed his powerful paws madly against the wire fence. I froze with terror, my palms sweating. Apparently calmer than me, Elli grabbed the garlic bread and threw it at the bear. He stopped, sniffed and then wolfed it down. However, in not even a minute he banged again. With a loud crack, he tore down the fence, rushed in and charged straight for us! Elli and I huddled together. The icy wind howling, nothing could be heard but the beat of our hearts thumping.At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. The noise of its engine swept away our choking fear immediately and frightened the bear, who took a few hesitant steps back. Out of the helicopter descended a rope to pull us up. Thrilled but relieved, we caught the rope tightly and eventually landed on the helicopter, safe and sound. What a thrilling experience! While overlooking the camp from aboard, I was amazed to spot the bear clumsily ran towards the leftovers of our dinner. Without delay, I reached into my backpack, pulled out the camera, and froze the impressive moment. 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 n. 粗暴对待;糟蹋　②　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 把……吓跑  ③　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 近距离接触 ④on one’s way 即将到来  ⑤　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.  熊怒吼一声,跑到湖边洗眼睛。 Friday　练续写最新好题 读后续写　熊影之下逃生 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The sun was setting, casting a golden light over the dense forest. Lily and her friends, James and Emily, were lost in the wilds, their hearts heavy with fear and uncertainty. They had been exploring the unexplored for days, but a wrong turn had led them off the course. The air was filled with the whispering of insects and the rustling (沙沙声) of leaves in the wind. Lily held her compass (指南针) tightly, but it seemed to be swinging in circles, offering no clear direction. James, their fearless leader, scanned the horizon for any sign of civilization, but the only thing visible was the shades of trees stretching into the distance. Emily’s face was pale, her eyes filled with tears. She grabbed a branch tightly, as if it could provide some comfort in this moment of desperation. Lily reached out and grasped her hand, offering a silent promise. “We’ll find our way,” James said, his voice steady. “Just stay close and trust each other.” Just then, they heard a distant roar that shook the ground beneath their feet. The roar grew louder, echoing through the forest like a thunderclap. Lily’s heart skipped a beat, and she tightened her grip on Emily’s hand. James raised his arm, signaling them to stay silent and still. Slowly, the source of the roar emerged from the shadows. It was a huge bear, its fur a mixture of brown and black, and its eyes flashing with a violent light. The bear smelled the air, and then its gaze settled on the three friends. James moved forward, his hands raised in a calming gesture. “Stay still,” he whispered. “Don’t make any sudden movements.” Lily’s mind raced. She knew they had to find a way to escape, but with the bear blocking their path, every option seemed impossible. Suddenly, she spotted a small stream nearby, its water glinting (闪光) in the fading light. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 “The stream!” she whispered in a low excited voice. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　Relief flooded through their bodies as they continued their downstream journey. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ (请参考素材4,素材10,主题素材12,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) Saturday　练续写最新好题 读后续写　解救被困保险箱的男孩 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　I worked at a local station of the Berlin fire department.We got an alert (警报) around 8:25 pm that Friday and rushed to the fire engine, where the printout from the dispatcher (调度员) said there was a nine-year-old boy locked in a safe. I asked myself: if it were a safe, would it be airtight? I was aware that it might already be too late by the time we arrived. I had to plan for a bad outcome. On the other hand, if we were in time, how long would it take us to open the safe? I knew it would be an incredibly difficult task. It’s what safes are designed for—not to be opened. It took less than five minutes to reach the property. When I saw a woman crying on the street, I knew the situation was serious. She was the boy’s mother and she led us into the basement. She told us the boy was alive and we started talking to him; he was very calm. We asked how it had happened: during a game of hide-and-seek with his five-year-old brother, he had thought the safe would be a good place to hide. The boy’s parents had got the house from his mother’s father. The unlocked safe had been there when they moved in and was in an area they didn’t use much. The boy’s little brother had shut the safe, then he couldn’t open it again. The only person who knew the combination was the boy’s late grandfather. From the outset, the biggest priority was getting oxygen to the boy. We got oxygen from the hospital. The boy said that he could feel a thin stream of air. I asked his parents if anyone had opened the safe before and they said no. So we had to guess a six-digit code. We started typing them in—but we had to wait 10 minutes between each attempt before we could try again. So quickly we tried them all. No luck. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 We were fully prepared at this point to open the safe by force, starting with a drill. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ Then, just as we started to make the first cut, my workmate typed in the correct code. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ (请参考素材3,素材9,主题素材11,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 默写 13 　 先背诵P114素材13必背佳句,再默写 A组 1.As I glanced at Mark to see what he was doing, he ____________________ (向我眨了眨眼). 2.________________________________________他向她投去感激的一瞥。 3.He just stood there, ________________________________________ (茫然地看着我). 4.Ben looked at me in horror for a moment and then his eyes __________ (drop) to his feet. 5.________________________________________她的目光落在照片上。 6.She sat up, her eyes __________ (fix)/__________ (focus) on Joan’s face. 7.Winifred sat with her eyes __________ (glue) to the television screen. 8.He couldn’t help __________ (eye) the cakes hungrily. 9.The little prince ____________________ (盯着他) for a long time. 10.Harry wheeled around __________ (stare) at Ron. B组 11.He ____________________ (环视/细看) the house, failing to spot Anna and kids. 12.The little prince sat down on a stone, and ______________________________ (抬头望着天空). 13.Every time she caught his eye, she would ____________________ (窘迫地往别处看). 14.She shot him an angry glance and ________________________________________ (不耐烦地说), “Leave me alone!” 15.He stopped me and ________________________________________ (轻轻地说),“I do miss you!” 16.“Who broke the glass?” the boy ________________________________________/the boy __________, ___________________ (声音颤抖地问道). 17.“Help me!” she ________________________________________ (扯开嗓子喊道). 18.“Get out!” she ________________________________________ (愤怒地尖叫道). 19.“You see,” he __________ (继续说道), smiling unpleasantly. 20.“I don’t want to go!” __________ (尖叫) Wilbur, throwing himself to the ground. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $