Week 7 逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇（Word练习）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 Monday　跟着名著学续写 仿效再背诵 ①Cold December wind passed right through my worn coat ②There was a sad look in her eyes ③Her face, which was once so full of life, was now miserable and full of pain ④I felt very sad ⑤I tried to find something to say that would cheer her up Tuesday　黄金素材巧背练 练能生巧 　 Ⅰ.1.with a sad look in his eyes 2.I was too upset to eat or drink 3.Loneliness and grief/sadness/sorrow came in waves 4.he drowned his sadness in wine Ⅱ.1.(1)Informed of the bad news, she felt extremely sad. (2)①Informed of the bad news, she felt her heart ache, tears streaming/rolling/flowing/running down her cheeks/face. ②Informed of the bad news, she felt seized by a burst of sadness and sank onto the chair, crying her eyes/heart out. ③Informed of the bad news, she was beside herself with grief, feeling like she were floating in an ocean of sadness. 2.(1)Separation from her children made her sad and her heart ache. (2)A wave of sadness welled up inside her and she felt as if a knife were cutting her heart. (3)She was pale and thin, and sadness/sorrow clouded over her eyes. Ⅲ.Wang Hua failed to work out the two questions on the math paper, and the bell rang, signaling the end of the exam. With a sinking heart, Wang Hua moved out of the classroom. Great sorrow/sadness clouded her eyes. An air of sadness could be sensed ten meters away. Soon, tears welled up in her eyes. Definitely, she would fail the math exam! Disappointment and sadness came in waves, and tears streamed down her cheeks. The only thing she was desperate to do was rush back home and throw herself into her little bed and weep wildly! Wednesday　续写句式多维练 练能生巧 　 Ⅰ.1.As soon as/Immediately/Directly/Instantly/The moment/The minute/The second/The instant 2.unfolding　3.When/As　4.began　5.before Ⅱ.1.As soon as I saw Tom, my heart sank. 2.I was on the point of giving up when something caught my eye. 3.As the room quieted, Jack returned to his seat. 4.She had hardly finished her speech when the audience burst into applause. 5.It was not long/didn’t take long before the little girl adapted to the new school life. Ⅲ.①The moment/minute/instant/second/Immediately Josh sat his parents down at the kitchen table　②faded　③He had hardly/no sooner finished speaking when/than his mum sighed　④As/When his dad nodded in agreement ⑤patting Thursday　巧学续写微技能 微技能4 1.I shrugged off all my exhaustion, seized the broom, and rushed to the classroom. 2.I swept the room three times; went over four times with the cloth 3.I watched nervously as she took her handkerchief and rubbed it over the tables and benches. 4.she quietly remarked 5.my college entrance examination; this was the best one I had ever passed 6.prove my worthiness and fulfill my dreams 原文续写语料积累 ②admit ... as ③on fire constantly with one ambition Friday　练续写最新好题 读后续写 　 基本要素 主要人物 I:有毅力,10岁确立奥运梦并坚持训练(loved skating, practiced rain or shine);失误后的强烈羞耻感(most embarrassing moment)与失败感(Olympic dream has come to an end)。父亲:初期给“我”报名(signed me up),赛后阻止“我”提前离场(poor sportsmanship to leave),体现情感支持与责任教育的双重角色。 原文情节线 “我”10岁时热爱滑冰,有了奥运梦→父亲支持“我”报名训练→每日早起,刻苦训练三年→首次参加自由滑比赛→赛前自信(父亲和朋友们鼓励+自我激励)→因紧张(butterflies in my stomach)导致表演失误(摔倒+超时)→尴尬退场(观众沉默)→排名最后,梦想受挫。 主题 梦想与挫折、 体育精神 续写情节 第一段 衔接①:衔接首句“次日清晨,我没在五点半起床练习滑冰”,可写(协同原文的Your Olympic dream has come to an end)失败的回忆让“我”想放弃。过渡句:父亲敲门进入→“我”情绪爆发(奥运梦破灭/羞耻感)→父亲劝说(从奥运到热爱)。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句“父亲的话让我确信,这才是我的真心所爱”,可写“我”被父亲的话打动。 第二段 衔接③:衔接首句“父亲的话让我确信,这才是我的真心所爱”,可写“我”确认“我”热爱滑冰,感觉一切都不如滑冰。过渡句:“我”穿衣起床,重返训练场→“我”虽迟到,但团队欢迎“我”,教练肯定“我”。尾句:(协同原文的The speed, the biting cold, and the feel of the wind on my face)描写“我”回归冰面的场景(一切都是熟悉的感觉)+感悟升华(热爱即归属)。 美文诵读 　　The next morning, I didn’t get up at 5:30 for my skating practice. Any thought of my failure sent me ashamed (使我无地自容) and made me want to quit. As I buried my face in the pillow (将脸埋进枕头), I heard a knock on the door, and it was Daddy. “I am not going anywhere,” I groaned in a sad voice (难过地嘟囔). “Why not?” Daddy inquired. “I will never make it to the Olympics. How will I face everyone?” I choked out. “Maybe the Olympics isn’t the goal,” he responded gently. “Maybe you skate just because you love it.” It always pains (使痛苦;使苦恼) me to admit my parents are actually smart, but he had a point (言之有理). Daddy’s words convinced me this was what I truly loved. I did love it. Everything paled in comparison to (相形见绌;显得逊色) skating. I got dressed, set off and arrived at the training center. Late though I was, Coach Caleb and every one of my friends shouted my name and gave me a hug the moment they saw me. Nobody mentioned my disastrous competition. “I’m glad you’re back,” said Caleb. As I stepped on the ice again, feeling my blades cutting into the ice, I breathed in the familiar smell. It was good to be back, and I knew I was in the right place (我再次踏上冰面,感受冰刀切入冰中,呼吸着熟悉的味道——归来真好,我知此处即心安). 佳句　Late though I was (倒装句), Coach Caleb and every one of my friends shouted my name and gave me a hug the moment they saw me (时间状语从句).  原文续写语料积累　The butterflies in my stomach were back, working against me, making me feel so nervous. 那种忐忑不安的感觉又回来了,让我无法自控,使我感到无比紧张。 Saturday　练续写最新好题 读后续写 　 基本要素 主要人物 Maya:坚韧勇敢,贫困环境中坚持太空梦(dream beyond the wildest);解决问题,主动获取资源(bought books, sought guidance from mentors)。父母:支持。 主题 逆境中的个人成长与梦想坚守、科学探索精神 原文情节线 少女Maya生活在偏远村庄,怀揣成为宇航员探索太空的梦想→虽遭外界质疑(背景贫困→不切实际),但她未放弃,坚持自学天文学→父母态度转变(从忽视到支持)→高中最后一年,她争取著名天体物理学奖学金→为通过严格选拔(知识/技能/天赋测试),Maya积极准备,备考面试→经过漫长等待(自我怀疑与坚持),结果落选了。 续写情节 第一段 衔接①:衔接首句“虽然很失望,但她拒绝放弃自己的梦想”,可写Maya虽面试失利,但未放弃梦想。过渡句:父母安慰Maya,竭力资助她继续学业→Maya坚持学习,联系教授,结识相关领域专业人士,寻求太空探索的其他机会。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句“玛雅的决心打动了这位宇航员,他成为她的导师,引领她踏上新征程”,可写玛雅的坚韧品质吸引了一个宇航员的注意。 第二段 衔接③:衔接首句“玛雅的决心打动了这位宇航员,他成为她的导师,引领她踏上新征程”,可写Maya获得实践机会,参与研究项目。过渡句:Maya的坚持终得回报→实现梦想,成为宇航员。尾句(主题升华):回顾所有质疑与挫折,她发现它们不再是绊脚石,而是成长的契机。忠于梦想、直面阻碍,人终可抵达巅峰。 美文诵读 　　Disappointment washed over her, but she refused to let it stop her dreams. Although the interview was a failure, Maya refused to let self⁃doubt (自我怀疑) consume her. Her parents also comforted her that they would try their best to sponsor her further education without the scholarship. With firm determination, Maya kept learning; meanwhile, sought alternative paths. She reached out to (寻求帮助) professors, connected with (联系) concerned professionals, and explored other opportunities in the field of space exploration. Maya’s toughness and perseverance attracted the attention of (吸引注意) a famous astronaut who recognized her passion and potential. Moved by Maya’s determination, the astronaut became her mentor, guiding her on a new journey. Maya gained hands⁃on experience, participated in research projects, and immersed herself in (沉浸于) the world of space exploration. Years passed, and Maya’s perseverance paid off (取得成功;得到回报). She became an accomplished astrophysicist (天体物理学家) and, eventually, realized her childhood dream of becoming an astronaut. Maya went into space and stared at the earth from above, feeling excited about her great achievements. Looking back on (回顾) all the skepticism and setbacks, she felt they were no longer roadblocks but opportunities for growth. One can achieve extraordinary heights by staying committed to dreams, and persisting in the face of obstacles (忠于梦想,面对阻碍坚持不懈,才可抵达巅峰). 佳句　Although the interview was a failure, Maya refused to let self⁃doubt consume her. (让步状语从句) 原文续写语料积累　①beyond the wildest dream 做梦都没想到　②let go of 任由……发展　③pour countless hours into 投入无数时间 ④Doubts and anxieties stuck in her mind, but she reminded herself of the importance of perseverance. (“无灵”主语句) 疑虑与焦虑萦绕心头,但她提醒自己坚持的重要性。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Week 7　逐梦人生&悲伤难过篇 Monday　跟着名著学续写 　　《黑骏马》的作者是安娜·塞维尔。该书是一部19世纪下半叶轰动欧洲文坛的经典儿童小说,在欧美畅销不衰,唤醒一代又一代读者去理解所有不会说话的动物。小说主人公黑骏马是一匹漂亮的优种黑马,从小受过良好的训练,温顺聪明,主人非常喜欢他。但好景不长,主人家里有了变故,黑骏马不得不被卖掉。他一连被卖过多次,接触过各种人:有喝多了酒就拿马撒气的醉汉,有动辄抽他鞭子的出租马车车夫,有不把动物当回事的野蛮人,也有把动物当成朋友的好人家。他尝尽了人间的酸甜苦辣。 阅读下面的节选部分,学习仿效文中利用具体动作、心理活动等描写表现人物的悲伤与难过的手法。 　　One day we were waiting outside one of the London parks when a dirty old cab drove up beside ours. The horse was brown, with bones that showed through her coat. I was eating some hay and the wind took a little of it her way. The poor animal put out her long thin neck and picked it up, then turned and looked for more. There was a hopeless look in her dull eye and I wondered where I’d seen her before.① Then she looked straight at me.“Black Beauty, is that you?”she said. It was Ginger! But how different she looked! Her face, which was once so full of life, was now miserable and full of pain, and her breathing was very bad.② I moved closer to her so that we could have a quiet talk and it was a sad story that she told me.③ She went from owner to owner several times, each one poorer than the one before. “So at last I was bought by a man who keeps a number of cabs and horses, and hires them out,”said Ginger.“They whip (鞭打) me and work me seven days a week. They say that they paid more for me than I was worth, and now they’re trying to get their money back by working me until I drop.” “You used to stand up and fight when people were cruel to you,”I said. “Yes, I did once,”said Ginger.“But men are stronger than we are, and if they’re cruel and have no feelings, then there’s nothing we can do about it. Oh, I wish the end would come. I wish I were dead.” I was very sad. I put my nose against hers but could find nothing to say that would cheer her up.④ I think she was pleased to see me, because she said,“You’re the only friend I have ever had.” ①神态描写:黯淡的眼中流露出一抹绝望 ②外貌描写:悲惨痛苦的脸,表现金杰的悲伤与难过 ③用sad story引入下文对金杰的悲惨过往的描述 语言描写:用金杰的讲述道出她被虐待的经历,盼望死期到来的悲伤 ④情感词汇+肢体动作描写,表现黑骏马内心的悲伤 仿效再背诵　尝试仿效上文中的描写方式补全短文,并背诵 　　①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (十二月的冷风吹透了我破旧的外套). I might have wished to be at home, but those days it wasn’t much warmer there than it was standing at the bus stop. Mama had written a letter to the electric company explaining that we were late paying our bill because my sister was ill and Daddy had been laid off, but the power was cut off anyway. That’s why we were on our way into town to pay the bill in person. ②　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她的眼神很是悲伤). ③　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她的脸,曾经是那么有生气的一张脸,现在满是悲惨和痛楚). ④　　　　　 (我感到非常难过). ⑤　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (我想说点什么让她高兴起来). But I ended up covering my face with my hands, too upset to speak. Tears began to gather in my eyes.   Tuesday　黄金素材巧背练/默写 素材7　悲伤、难过、沮丧 必背好词 名词/动词 sorrow, sadness, grief, depression, sink(消沉) 形容词/副词 sorrowful, upset, frustrated, miserable, depressed, heart-broken, sadly, painfully, miserably face/eye ①with a sad face面带悲伤　②sorrowful eyes悲伤的双眼　③give sb. a sad look/glance伤心地瞥了/看了某人一眼 heart/spirits ①with a heavy/sinking/sorrowful/broken heart心情沉重/难过/心碎　②one’s heart be full of/be filled with sadness心中满是悲伤 ③be down/low in spirits情绪低落 voice ①in a sorrowful tone/voice伤心地说 ②sadness fills one’s voice声音里满是悲伤 cry ①sob/weep with one’s face hidden in one’s hands掩面啜泣　②cry one’s heart /eyes out悲痛欲绝 其他 ①grief overwhelms sb.某人不胜悲伤　②be overcome with sorrow悲伤不已　③be beside oneself with grief悲痛欲绝　④drown sadness in wine借酒浇愁 必背佳句　先背诵再完成《6分钟素材默写》默写7 Ⅰ.用面部和眼睛+情感词汇描写悲伤、难过(悲伤 的神色、眼神、苦笑) 1.She was pale and thin, and her eyes looked sad. 她苍白、消瘦,眼睛里流露出哀伤。 2.As he looked at Katherine, great sorrow/sadness clouded his eyes. (“无灵”主语句) 他看着凯瑟琳,满眼忧伤。 3.A look of grief crossed/flashed across his face. 他脸上掠过悲伤的神色。 4.There was such a sad look in her eyes. 她的眼神很是悲伤。 5.He gave a slight, sad smile. 他露出一丝苦笑。 Ⅱ.声音和哭泣里透露的悲伤、难过 6.There was more than a hint of sadness in his voice. 他的声音中流露出了深切的悲伤。 7.I feel my throat tighten at the sadness in his voice. 他伤感的语气让我喉头一紧。 8.There was clearly nothing left to do but drop herself onto the shabby little couch and weep. 很明显,除了瘫倒在破旧的小沙发上哭泣,她什么也做不了。 9.She was numb with grief as she watched him go. She cried the bitterest tears of her life. 她看着他离去,无比悲伤。她流下了一生中最伤心的泪。 10.I felt like I were floating in an ocean of sadness, and words could not express my sorrow.(比喻) 我感觉自己正漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。言语无法表达我的哀伤。 11.Grief/Sadness/Sorrow came in waves. He sank onto the chair, crying his eyes out. 悲伤如潮水一般涌来。他倒在椅子上,悲痛欲绝。 Ⅲ.用心、情绪等描写悲伤、难过、沮丧(情绪低落、难受、心痛) 12.The good mood left me and I sank into depression. 好心情离我而去,我陷入沮丧之中。 13.Her heart sank as a troubling thought crept into her mind. 一个令人不安的念头闪过脑海,她的心猛地一沉。 14.Everywhere he went, he carried his unhappiness with him like a black cloud.(比喻) 无论走到哪里,他总是情绪低落,像被一团黑色的云笼罩着。 15.Seeing her so upset really tore him apart/tore his heart out. 看到她那么伤心,他感到很难受/伤心。 16.It makes my heart ache to see her sink to the ground in sorrow. 看到她难过地倒在地上,我心里真难过。 17.Franklin’s heart sank when Mr.Bragg said he wanted to come back for a second visit. (“无灵”主语句) 当布拉格先生说他想再来一次时,富兰克林的心都凉了。 (典范英语8) 18.There were sad hearts at his house that night. He felt as if a knife were cutting his heart. 那天晚上他家里的人心里都很悲伤。他觉得心如刀割。 19.A wave of sadness welled up inside her. Tears were beginning to gather in her eyes. (“无灵”主语句) 一阵悲伤涌上她的心头。她眼里涌上泪水。 Ⅳ.融情于景/场景描写 20.An air of sadness could be sensed ten meters away. 十米以外都能感觉到一种悲伤的气氛。 21.An air of sorrow and depression settled over the crowd. (氛围描写) 人群中弥漫着悲伤和沮丧的气氛。 22.It was freezing and foggy, the ground was soaking, and our thin dresses and cloaks were not enough to keep us warm. Cold and hungry, I looked at the miserable garden and wondered about my future here. 天气很冷,有雾,地面湿透了,我们单薄的衣服和斗篷不足以保暖。我又冷又饿,望着那凄凉的花园,思索着我在这里的未来。(《简·爱》) 练能生巧 Ⅰ.利用并仿效素材补全以下各句,并背诵 1.“我希望不会,”多里安说,眼中带着悲伤。 “I hope not,” said Dorian, __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________. 2.我难过得不想吃,也不想喝,但她陪我坐了一会儿,轻声跟我说话,给我擦眼泪。 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, but she sat with me for some time, talking gently to me, and wiping away my tears.  3.孤独和悲伤不断涌上心头。泪水模糊了她的眼睛。 __________________________________________________. Tears half blinded her. 4.听到这个消息,他绝望地借酒浇愁。 At the news, so desperate was he that __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________. Ⅱ.按要求完成以下各题 1.得知那个坏消息后,她悲伤不已。 (1)先尝试用概括描述,将意思表达清楚。 __________________________________________________ (2)在概括描述的基础上增加细节描述,注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 ①__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ (心痛,潸然泪下) ②__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ (悲痛欲绝,倒在椅子上,哭得死去活来) ③__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ (悲痛欲绝,漂浮在悲伤的海洋里) 2.根据所给情节,用一句话续写描写她见不到孩子的悲伤难过之情。注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 It was heartbreaking for her that she couldn’t see her children. (1)____________________________________________________________________________________________________ (心在痛) (2)____________________________________________________________________________________________________ (悲伤涌上心头,心如刀割) (3)____________________________________________________________________________________________________ (苍白、憔悴,眼里满是哀伤) Ⅲ.续写微作文 请根据所给情节,尝试续写王华考试失利之后难过的情节。利用动作、神态和氛围描写等表现人物的难过,可适当添加对情感的描写(词数80个左右) Wang Hua failed to work out the two questions on the math paper, and the bell rang, signaling the end of the exam.____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ Wednesday　续写句式多维练 　巧妙衔接过渡句 时间衔接除了利用表时间的衔接过渡词汇,如at the moment, at the same time, meanwhile, then, in the end等,也可以利用时间状语从句进行过渡,以使语句间更连贯。 高分句式21　As soon as/Once/Immediately/Directly/Instantly/The moment(minute/second/instant)等引导的时间状语从句,主语+谓语　一……就…… ①The summer heat hit me as soon as I got off the flight.我刚下飞机,夏日的热浪就扑面而来。(译林B2) ②“Where’s my letter?”said Harry, the moment Uncle Vernon had squeezed through the door.“我的信呢?”弗农姨父刚刚挤进门,哈利就问。(《哈利·波特》) 高分句式22　主语+had no sooner done ... than+主语+did .../主语+had hardly done ... when+主语+did ... 　刚……这时…… 主语+be about to do/be doing/be on the point of doing ... when ... 　正要/正在/刚要……这时…… I was looking at the photos on the noticeboard when I heard a voice behind me.“New here?”我正在看布告栏上的照片,这时身后忽然传来一个声音:“你是新生吗?”(外研B1) 高分句式23　主语+谓语+as/when/while/before时间状语从句...　当…… It didn’t take long before .../It was not long before ...　没过多久就…… ①He rolled over and fell asleep again, and when he woke next day, he didn’t remember the dream at all.他翻过身去,又睡着了。第二天醒来时,他一点儿也不记得这个梦了。(《哈利·波特》) ②It didn’t take long before the two dogs played around the house, cheerfully running after each other.没过多久,这两只狗狗就在房子周围玩耍起来,高高兴兴地追着对方跑。(浙江高考) 空间衔接除了用下面的句式,还可以利用全部倒装句过渡到下一场景。 高分句式24　On/Upon+动名词/On/Upon arrival,主语+谓语　一……就…… On stepping into the room, a familiar bark came into my ears.刚走进屋子,一阵熟悉的犬吠声就传入了我的耳中。 练能生巧 Ⅰ.用括号内单词的正确形式或恰当的衔接过渡词汇补全以下各句,并背诵 1.　　　　　　　　　　 he moved, the sheep scattered, their eyes wide with unease.  2.Harry was on the point of 　　　　(unfold) his letter when it was jerked sharply out of his hand.  3.　　　　 he came to the last question, he sighed desperately.  4.He had hardly stepped out of the house when it 　　　　(begin) to pour.  5.It didn’t take long 　　　　the firefighters put out the big fire.  Ⅱ.对Ⅰ中各句进行一对一仿写,并背诵 1. 我一看到Tom,心就沉了下去。 __________________________________________________ 2.我正打算放弃,就在这时,有个东西吸引了我的目光。 __________________________________________________ 3.教室里安静下来时,杰克回到了自己的座位上。 __________________________________________________ 4.她刚结束演讲,观众就爆发出了掌声。 __________________________________________________ 5.没过多久,这个小女孩就适应了新的校园生活。 __________________________________________________ Ⅲ.微续写 根据汉语提示或用所给词的正确形式补全下面的“逐梦人生”类续写片段,并诵读背诵 ①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (乔希一让父母在餐桌旁坐下), he took a deep breath, and said, “I’ve decided to keep chess as a passion, not a profession.” His mother’s smile ②　　　　 (fade), but Josh continued, “I love chess, but I also want time for friends, school, and other things that make me happy.” He added, “If I force myself to only play chess, I might end up hating it.” ③　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (他话音刚落,母亲便叹了口气), “I just want you to succeed.” Josh reached for her hand. “I will—but in my own way.” ④　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (父亲点头表示赞同时), a look of relief spread across his face. “Balance is success too,” he said, ⑤　　　　 (pat) Josh’s shoulder.  Thursday　巧学续写微技能 好题探索　最好的考试 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My Best Examination One day, while at work in a coalmine in Malden, I happened to overhear two miners talking about a great school for poor people in Virginia. The school was established to provide opportunities for poor but worthy students who could work out all or a part of the cost of board, and at the same time be taught some trade or industry. I was on fire constantly with one ambition, and that was to go to school.① I decided at once to go to that school. Finally the great day came and I started for Hampton.② I had only a small, cheap bag that contained what few articles of clothing I could get.③ The distance from Malden to Hampton is about five hundred miles. I had not been away from home many hours before it began to grow painfully evident that I did not have enough money to pay my fare (路费) to Hampton.④ →贫穷、路程遥远,没钱买票 By walking and begging rides in some way, I finally reached the grounds of the school after a number of days, tired and dirty.⑤ As soon as possible after reaching, I presented myself before the head teacher for assignment to a class. Having been so long without proper food, a bath, and change of clothing, I was like a worthless loafer (游手好闲者).⑥ I did not, of course, make a very favourable impression upon her, and I could see at once that there were doubts in her mind about the wisdom of admitting me as a student. I tried to impress her in all the ways I could with my worthiness. How I wished that I could get a chance to show what was in me!⑦ After some time, the head teacher said to me,“The adjoining (隔壁的) classroom needs sweeping. Take the broom and sweep it.” 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　It occurred to me at once that here was my chance. The head teacher went into the room and inspected the floor and closets. (请参考素材7,素材1,素材9,主题素材3,主题素材5,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 理6要素 ①Who I (a coal miner), the head teacher ②When one day→a number of days later ③Where in a coalmine→in the school ④What My best examination ⑤Problem 没能给校长留下好印象;如何证明自己优秀 ⑥Theme 抓住机会、不畏艰难、全力以赴;通过努力劳动实现梦想 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　It occurred to me at once that here was my chance. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“我的机会来了”:“我”得到机会时难以置信的心情。 ◆过渡句1　“我”高兴地拿起扫把去隔壁教室→干活的场景描写:一遍遍扫地,擦柜子、桌凳等。 ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句“校长走进房间,检查地板和柜子”:“我”打扫完成后报告校长。 Para. 2　The head teacher went into the room and inspected the floor and closets. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“校长走进房间,检查地板和柜子”:“我”紧张地看着校长接着检查桌凳(动作描写)。 ◆过渡句2　校长宣布检查的结果(表情、语言描写),“我”被认可后的激动的情绪。 ◆结尾+主题　协同原文标题(My Best Examination):扫地是入学考试,是自己通过的最好的一场考试。 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.2 I was on fire constantly with one ambition, and that was to go to school. Para.3 By walking and begging rides in some way, I finally reached the grounds of the school after a number of days, tired and dirty. Para.4 I tried to impress her in all the ways I could with my worthiness.→“我”有梦想、意志坚定,不怕吃苦且渴望证明自己优秀 段一协同描写“我”一遍遍打扫教室、一遍遍擦桌凳和柜子的场景,侧面突出“我”吃苦耐劳;同时添加心理描写:渴望证明自己 情节的协同 Para.1 The school was established to provide opportunities for poor but worthy students ... Para.4 How I wished that I could get a chance to show what was in me!→要证明自己的优秀 段二用校长的话协同描写“我”证明了自己的优秀 Para.3 tired and dirty; Having been so long without proper food, a bath, and change of clothing→脏兮兮,衣衫褴褛,饥肠辘辘 段一协同描写“我”忘记了自己又累又饿,全力以赴打扫教室 Para.4 ... there were doubts in her mind about the wisdom of admitting me as a student→校长怀疑“我”的能力 段一可协同描写“我”决定打消校长的怀疑(remove her doubts) 物的协同 特定物的协同, the broom, closets 段一协同描写拿起扫把 段二协同描写校长宣布结果 主题的协同 标题My Best Examination 尾段协同best examination并升华 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.使用并列句(原文①②)和从句(原文③④)。2.形容词短语作状语(原文⑤)描写人物情感。3.非谓语动词短语作状语(原文⑥)说明自身境况。4.感叹句(原文⑦)描写人物内心活动。 续写第一段(场景1 得到打扫任务　场景2 细致打扫　场景3 清扫汇报) 场景1　得到打扫任务 1.我摆脱了所有的疲惫,抓起扫帚,向教室冲去。 __________________________________________________ 场景2　细致打扫 2.我把教室扫了三遍。然后我拿了块布,把里面的东西擦了四遍。所有的柜子,每条长凳,每张桌子,我都用抹布擦了四遍。(排比) 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. Then I got a cloth and I dusted it four times. All the closets, every bench and every desk, I 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   续写第二段(场景4 细查卫生　场景5 获准入校　场景6 结尾+升华) 场景4　细查卫生 3.我紧张地看着她拿起手帕在桌子和长凳上擦来擦去。 __________________________________________________ 场景5　获准入校(时间状语从句过渡) 4.当她在地板上找不到一点污垢,在家具上找不到一粒灰尘时,她轻声说:“我想你可以入学了。” When she was unable to find one bit of dirt on the floor, or a particle of dust on any of the furniture, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　, “I guess you will do to enter this institution.”  场景6　结尾+升华 5.打扫那间教室就是我的大学入学考试!从那以后,我通过了几次考试,但我一直觉得这是我通过的最好的一次考试。 The sweeping of that room was 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　! I have passed several examinations since then, but I have always felt that 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.  6.那一刻,我知道这是我经历过的最好的一场考试,因为我有机会证明我的价值,实现我的梦想。 At that moment, I knew this was the best examination that I had had because I had the opportunity to 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.  It occurred to me at once that here was my chance. Never did I receive an order with more delight. I shrugged off all my exhaustion, seized the broom, and rushed to the classroom. I swept the room three times. Then I got a cloth and I dusted it four times. All the closets, every bench and every desk, I went over four times with the cloth. I had the feeling that in a large measure my future depended upon the impression I made upon the teacher in the cleaning of that room. When I was through, I reported to her. The head teacher went into the room and inspected the floor and closets. I watched nervously as she took her handkerchief and rubbed it over the tables and benches. When she was unable to find one bit of dirt on the floor, or a particle of dust on any of the furniture, she quietly remarked, “I guess you will do to enter this institution.” I was one of the happiest souls on earth. The sweeping of that room was my college entrance examination! I have passed several examinations since then, but I have always felt that this was the best one I had ever passed. 原文续写语料积累 ①be on fire with one ambition 雄心勃勃　　　　　②　　　　　　　　　　　　 接收……为  ③I was 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, and that was to go to school.  我一直渴望上学。 Friday　练续写最新好题 读后续写　梦想与热爱 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was 10 years old, I loved skating and had an Olympic dream. The speed, the biting cold, and the feel of the wind on my face all fascinated me deeply. So my dad signed me up in a skating center. From then on, I woke up at 5:30 every morning, rain or shine, and practiced skating with Coach Caleb. Today was the day I was going to compete in a freestyle skating program for the first time in three years. Today was the day I was not skating for my coach or Dad, but for the judges. I skated to the center ice. “You’ve got this, Jessie,” Daddy yelled from the audience. My friends held up crossed fingers and blew me kisses. I can do this! I thought as the music was on. What I felt was the power of certainty with my sparkly competition dress. I started my program with a step forward and a smile, followed by a beautiful combination spin (旋转). The butterflies in my stomach were back, working against me, making me feel so nervous. Then came the jump, a jump I had been doing since I was 10 years old! It didn’t work out the way I had hoped. I fell, and I kept falling. By the time I was done, my dress was wet and I was seven seconds behind my music, so I finished skating to silence. It was the most embarrassing moment of my life. The silence continued as I skated toward the exit. Everyone in the arena (场地) was looking at me but trying not to look at me. What am I doing here? I thought. Your Olympic dream has come to an end. As I walked upstairs to join my dad, I heard the oohs and aahs of the audience. I wanted to go home, but Dad said it was poor sportsmanship to leave before the results were posted. So, we waited. Sure enough, not only did I not win a medal, I ranked last. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　The next morning, I didn’t get up at 5:30 for my skating practice. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　Daddy’s words convinced me this was what I truly loved. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ (请参考素材7,素材1,素材13,主题素材3,主题素材6,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) Saturday　练续写最新好题 读后续写　玛雅的太空梦 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Once in a remote village, there lived a teenage girl, named Maya. She had a dream—to become an astronaut and explore the vastness of space. However, many doubted her dream because they thought it was unrealistic for someone with their poor background. In this village, there was no one daring to have this dream which was beyond the wildest dream. However, Maya was not defeated by the doubt. She dedicated herself to her studies. She bought many volumes of books on astronomy from the faraway libraries. In the beginning, her parents just let go of her crazy passion, but gradually her efforts amazed them. With their support, she even tried to find opportunities online to attend science camps, and sought guidance from mentors (导师). Maya’s passion for space grew stronger with each passing day, fueling her determination to overcome any difficulties in her path. As Maya approached her final year of high school, an opportunity arose—a famous scholarship that offered a chance to study astrophysics (天体物理学) at a famous university. Maya knew that this scholarship could be her ticket to achieving her dreams. The scholarship selection process was strict, testing candidates’ knowledge, skills, and talent. Maya poured countless hours into preparation, expanding her knowledge and improving her abilities. When the day of the scholarship interview arrived, Maya faced a group of professors and experts in the field. Nervously, she answered their questions and shared her passion for space exploration. Weeks turned into months as Maya awaited the scholarship results. Doubts and anxieties stuck in her mind, but she reminded herself of the importance of perseverance. She continued to believe in herself and her abilities, refusing to let setbacks define her journey. Finally, the day of the scholarship announcement arrived. Maya’s heart raced as the names were called one by one. As the last name echoed in the room, Maya’s heart sank—it wasn’t hers. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　Disappointment washed over her, but she refused to let it stop her dreams. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　Moved by Maya’s determination, the astronaut became her mentor, guiding her on a new journey. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ (请参考素材7,素材2,素材5,主题素材3,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 默写 7 　 先背诵P058素材7必背佳句,再默写 A组 1.She was pale and thin, and her ________________________________________(眼睛里流露出哀伤). 2.As he looked at Katherine, ________________________________________(满眼忧伤). 3.________________________________________他脸上掠过悲伤的神色。 4.________________________________________她的眼神很是悲伤。 5.________________________________________他露出一丝苦笑。 6.________________________________________他的声音中流露出了深切的悲伤。 7.______________________________ (我喉头一紧) at the sadness in his voice. 8.There was clearly nothing __________ (leave) to do but drop herself onto the shabby little couch and __________ (weep). 9.She was numb __________ grief as she watched him go. She cried the __________ (bitter) tears of her life. 10.I felt like I __________ (float) in an ocean of sadness, and words could not express my sorrow. 11.________________________________________ (悲伤如潮水一般涌来). He __________ (sink) onto the chair, crying his eyes out. B组 12.The good mood left me and I ______________________________ (陷入沮丧之中). 13.____________________ (她的心猛地一沉) as a troubling thought crept into her mind. 14.Everywhere he went, he carried his __________ (unhappy) with him __________ a black cloud. 15.Seeing her so upset really ______________________________ (他感到很难受/伤心). 16.It makes my heart ache to see her ________________________________________(难过地倒在地上). 17.________________________________________ (富兰克林的心都凉了) when Mr.Bragg said he wanted to come back for a second visit. 18.There were sad hearts at his house that night. He felt ________________________________________ (心如刀割). 19.A wave of sadness __________ (well) up inside her. Tears were beginning to gather in her eyes. 20.An air of sadness could __________ (sense) ten meters away. 21.An air of sorrow and __________ (depress) settled over the crowd. 22.It was __________ (freeze) and foggy, the ground was soaking, and our thin dresses and cloaks were not enough __________ (keep) us warm. Cold and __________ (hunger), I looked at the miserable garden and __________ (wonder) about my future here. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $