Week 1 比赛表演&高兴篇（Word练习）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 Monday　跟着名著学续写 仿效再背诵 ①She was skipping beside the long wall of the secret garden ②She felt very pleased and excited ③she hopped and sang too ④Mary’s heart was beating fast and her hands were shaking Tuesday　黄金素材巧背练 练能生巧 　 Ⅰ.1.clapped her hands in delight 2.An excited crowd of people/An excited crowd 3.The cheerful voice continued 4.Excitement was shining/sparkling/twinkling in her eyes./There was a sparkle of excitement in her eyes. Ⅱ.1.(1)When the host announced that she won the prize, she was very excited/thrilled. (2)①When the host announced that she won the prize, she was excited/thrilled beyond description. ②When the host announced that she won the prize, tears of excitement welled up in her eyes. ③When the host announced that she won the prize, her face lit up and her eyes shone/twinkled/sparkled with excitement. ④When the host announced that she won the prize, her heart was pounding/thumping with wild excitement. 2.(1)When she saw the strawberries, her face glowed with happiness/joy/pleasure/delight. (2)When she saw the strawberries, she wept tears of joy./When she saw the strawberries, tears of joy/happiness flowed/streamed/rolled down her cheeks. (3)When she saw the strawberries, a wave of happiness came over/swept over/took hold of/seized her. Ⅲ.She stood by the window, joyfully and patiently watching. Golden sunlight danced in her long hair and the children’s laughter floated in the air. She stared at the end of the road, hoping her close friend would come earlier. It seemed as if she had been standing there for a century. Suddenly a rush of happiness and excitement seized/took hold of/swept over/came over her at the sight of a familiar figure. Her heart leaped with joy, and a wide smile lit up her face. She ran to her friend and threw herself into her friend’s arms. Tears of joy/happiness/excitement welled up in their eyes as they hugged tightly together. Wednesday　续写句式多维练 练能生巧 　 Ⅰ.1.tears; welled up 2.Guilt and worry; flooded 3.confidence; failed 4.my throat; tightened; my knees Ⅱ.1.When the old man returned to his hometown after so many years, tears of excitement welled up in his eyes. 2.Loneliness and grief flooded over him in waves when he drove by the bridge. 3.She wanted to hold out, but her courage failed her. 4.At the sight of the angry polar bear, we felt so scared that our hearts pounded/thumped and our knees felt weak. Ⅲ.①my voice trembled with nervousness ②my confidence soared ③their applause and cheers echoing in the hall ④the unexpected discouragement can be a blessing in disguise if we have a belief in ourselves and never give up our dreams Thursday　巧学续写微技能 微技能4 1.my teacher’s proud laughter and my classmates’ thunderous applause 2.my mind travelled back to the days 3.laughed even harder 4.choked 5.had faded; chapter of a new life 6.applied myself to creating Revere’s horse 7.where my journey as a writer had begun Version 2 　　A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I won first prize! And I was the only winner whose native language wasn’t English! Half shocked and half disbelieving, I, red⁃cheeked, was greeted by my teacher’s proud laughter and my classmates’ thunderous applause. As I was standing onstage holding my trophy among fellow prize winners, my mind travelled back to the days when I applied myself to creating Revere’s horse, the days of fully immersing myself in the pure joy of writing. I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. Admiring my trophy and certificate, he laughed even harder and gave me a thumbs⁃up, “Well done!” I choked that I owed him much for pushing me to enter the contest. He replied, “You owe me nothing. It was your own hard work and perseverance that paid off. Love writing?” Grinning, I found my previous dislike for writing had faded and that a chapter of a new life was unfolding before me. 　　结尾句还可以这样写: Grinning, I gratefully glanced at his office filled with his constant laughter. It seemed to hold the whispers of inspiration, inspiring me to keep writing, exploring, and dreaming. Nodding with a grin, I looked around his office, a place of growth and transformation, where my journey as a writer had begun. Version 3 　　A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I still remember it was a Monday morning in spring, when my teacher called me to his office, telling me that I had taken first place in the writing contest, and that I was the only winner whose native language wasn’t English. Dominated by an overwhelming sense of excitement and pride at his words, I simply stood there dumbfounded, and my feet, as if rooted to the spot, couldn’t move a bit. The next day, I was presented with my award and a certificate at the ceremony. I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. As I showed him my award and certificate, I could see the pride in his eyes. He congratulated me and gave me a warm hug. It was at that moment that a warm surge of streams washed through my body. The image of the horse emerged in my mind, encouraging me to continue writing. Indeed, I got a taste of victory and learned to pursue my dream with perseverance like the horse, whatever difficulties might have in store for me. 　　结尾句还可以这样写: Indeed, aside from a taste of victory, I gained something far more valuable, an appreciation of the essence of perseverance. Like the horse, I would persevere through whatever difficulty might lie ahead on the path to pursue my dreams. 原文续写语料积累 ①apply oneself ②have a shot at ③check out ④laugh out loud ⑤given way to the enjoyment of writing Friday　练续写最新好题 读后续写 　 基本要素 主要人物 I, Fatin, Mom, Miss Bibiena 原文情节线 “我”是一个印度女孩,在新的班级中没有人和“我”一起玩耍或与“我”一起做小组项目→班里聪明可爱的女孩Fatin似乎也在回避“我”→在妈妈的鼓励下, “我”报名参加自己擅长的演讲比赛,想以此证明自己,并获得同学们的认可。 主题 证明自己、友谊 续写情节 第一段 衔接①:衔接首句中的“我一有机会就练习演讲”,可写“我”怎么练习演讲。过渡句:“我”演讲时是什么状态? 观众是什么反应? 演讲是否大获成功? 衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句中的“有人叫我的名字”,协同原文中的“Mom was right”和妈妈鼓励“我”的话,可写“我”展示才能,拉近了和同学们之间的关系。 第二段 衔接③:衔接首句中的“我听到有人叫我的名字”,可写谁叫“我”的名字。(协同原文中提到的Fatin,应写是Fatin喊“我”)过渡句:Fatin为什么喊“我”? 她对“我”说了什么? “我”是什么反应? 结尾+主题:协同原文中的“in desperate need of close friends”和“see your excellence”,可写“我”收获Fatin的友谊,还有几个欣赏“我”的好朋友。 美文诵读 　　Until the competition day, I practised my speech whenever possible. I rehearsed in front of my family, and my mother always gave me the most encouraging feedback. Her belief in me pushed me to do my best. Then came the big day. As I stood confidently on the stage and presented my speech with full enthusiasm (满怀激情), the audience listened attentively. I could sense they were genuinely impressed. The moment my speech ended, the room erupted into applause. I couldn’t believe it; the whole school was clapping for me! Maybe my mom was right—showcasing my abilities (展示我的才能) brought me closer to my classmates. As I went off the stage, I heard someone call my name. Turning around, I found Fatin, the girl I admired, waving to me. She approached me and said in a cheerful voice (用欢快的声音说 ), “Hey, Sneha! Your speech is amazing!” I was speechless for a moment, but then I managed to stammer a “thank you”. Fatin’s compliment meant the world to me (对我很重要). From that day on, she and I became friends. Our shared interests and passions brought us even closer together, and I found myself surrounded by a group of friends who appreciated me for who I was. 佳句　As I stood confidently on the stage and presented my speech with full enthusiasm, the audience listened attentively. I could sense they were genuinely impressed. (长句+短句,描写了演讲过程) 原文续写语料积累　①cry one’s eyes out 大哭一场　②bring out the best in sb. 展现某人最好的一面/潜 Saturday　练续写最新好题 读后续写 　 基本要素 主要人物 I:自信、目标明确。Justin(好友/对手):作为“逆袭者”,反超“我”获胜。 原文情节线 跑道上的几个孩子在跑步,旁边的人群在呼喊加油→“我”自信起跑,妈妈在场外呐喊助威→“我”先后超越Justin和Sarah→“我”提前幻想夺冠场景,如教练颁发奖牌、父母庆祝→接近终点时,Justin突然加速反超→“我”错失冠军。 主题 体育精神、成长 续写情节 第一段 衔接①:衔接首句“我僵立在原地,看着奖牌被递到Justin手中”,(协同原文的tomato cheeks)可写Justin被授予奖牌时的激动。过渡句:通过对比描写(协同原文的wear that blue and white ribbon around my neck when we went out for ice cream),强化“我”的失落→(协同原文的that running in the park)跑步训练给“我”带来的腿部疼痛和(协同原文的I took the collection of caps off the hook on my wall, leaving it ready for my shiny new medal)想到卧室空荡荡的挂钩的痛苦→“我”难过得哭起来。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句“突然,一双有力的大手把我举到爸爸肩头”,可写“我”担心父母失望。 第二段 衔接③:衔接首句“突然,一双有力的大手把我举到爸爸肩头”,可写爸爸把“我”举高鼓励“我”。过渡句:妈妈肯定“我”跑得很快→父母共同引导,教会“我”懂得优雅失败的意义→“我”领悟比赛获胜的意义。尾句(结尾双关):(协同原文幻想场景——“佩戴绶带”去吃冰激凌庆祝)爸爸提议去吃冰激凌,同时(协同原文I heard Mom shouting, “Run, Sammy, run!”)描写妈妈大喊“Run, Sammy, run”,暗示不断奔跑的精神。 美文诵读 　　I stood there frozen as Justin was handed his medal. His tomato⁃red face glowed brighter than ever. The blue and white ribbon shone in the sunlight, exactly the way I pictured it sparkling when I wore it out for ice cream. How could he be the fastest? My legs burned from all the running in the park, yet here I was, empty⁃handed. The chant “run, run, run” now faded to a desperate whisper (越来越小,化作绝望的低语), “No, no, no.” I heard it in my chest and all the way down to the empty hook on my bedroom wall. Nothing would hang there now. This thought made my throat tight (这个念头让我喉咙发紧). Tears blurred my eyes as I stared at the ground, wishing it would swallow me whole. What if Mom and Dad were ashamed of me? Suddenly, strong hands lifted me onto Dad’s shoulders. “Congratulations to my champion!” he boomed. I was high above the crowd. My cheeks burnt (脸颊发烫). Didn’t they see that I lost? Mom reached up, rested her hand on (伸手放在) my ankle and then looked up. “You ran like lightning,” she beamed. “And lightning doesn’t quit,” Dad added. Noticing my sadness, Mom comforted, “Even if you think you have failed, fail best (尽力而为).” Their words floated around me, soft but firm. My breath steadied. Maybe winning wasn’t just ribbons. Maybe it was lungs screaming, legs pushing, eyes locked ahead (紧盯前方) not glancing sideways at (斜着眼看) Justin. Dad let me down (放我下来), asking, “Ice cream?” I blinked. Then I heard Mom exclaim, “Run, Sammy, run.” 佳句　Tears blurred my eyes as I stared at the ground, wishing it would swallow me whole. (分词短语作状语+拟人) 泪水模糊了双眼,我死死盯着地面,恨不得它把我吞进去。  原文续写语料积累　①smile from ear to ear 笑得合不拢嘴　②keep one’s eyes straight ahead 双眼直视前方　③see ... out of the corner of one’s eye 用眼角余光瞥见……　④leave sb. in the/one’s dust 把某人远远抛在后面;使其望尘莫及 ⑤“Run, run, run.” I was on fire, passing Sarah, leaving her in my dust. “跑,跑,跑。” 我火力全开,超过了莎拉,将她远远甩在身后。 ⑥Faster than Sarah, I came up behind Mikey, giving my legs that extra burst of energy to pass him by. (分词短语作状语) 我比莎拉更快,冲到迈基身后,双腿猛然发力超过了他。  ⑦There was Justin with his tomato cheeks running as fast as humanly possible, huffing and puffing like he was going to blow the house down. (比喻+夸张) 贾斯汀的红通通的脸颊映入眼帘,他正拼命狂奔,呼哧呼哧喘着粗气,仿佛要把房子吹倒似的。   学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 默写 1 　 先背诵P002素材1必背佳句,再默写 A组 1.____________________________________________________________他满脸喜悦。 2.He could hardly wait to share his trip, his face __________ (glow) with joy. 3.She felt on top of the world, and every freckle on her cheeks was ______________________________ (雀跃). 4.A smile lit up his face and his eyes were ______________________________ (闪烁着喜悦的光芒). 5.Ralph’s lips parted ____________________________________________________________(开心地笑了). 6.________________________________________ (眼里涌出喜悦的泪水) as they hugged tightly together. 7.“You’re safe!” Tom cried ____________________ (高兴地). 8.“Good morning,” a __________ (cheer) voice says. 9.________________________________________ 她激动得声音颤抖。 10.________________________________________ 我能听出她声音里的兴奋和喜悦。 11.“Aha! I catch you!” ____________________________________________________________(他的声音里带着一丝喜悦). 12.____________________________________________________________她有一种既兴奋又害怕的奇特感觉。 B组 13.________________________________________一种喜悦和幸福的感觉涌上他心头。 14.I’m ____________________ (心情舒畅) at the moment, just like the white clouds in the blue sky. 15.Patrick rushed to the door, his heart __________ (pound) with excitement. 16.He turned and __________ (skip) away, singing happily to himself. 17.She was overjoyed, humming and __________ (skip) like a bird. 18.Delighted, I ____________________ (高兴地跳了起来) and then danced into the supermarket. 19.Her hands ____________________________________________________________(激动得发抖) as she opened the box. 20.Stars appeared in the sky, ________________________________________ (高兴地向他们眨眼睛). 21.______________________________ (一片骚动) went through the crowd as he came on stage. 22.Flowers were waving in the breeze of the early spring.Birds were singing, ______________________________ (空气中满是欢声笑语), and everyone was in the best of moods. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ Week 1　比赛表演&高兴篇 Monday　跟着名著学续写 　 　　《秘密花园》是美国女作家弗朗西丝·霍奇森·伯内特创作的儿童文学作品。故事讲述了性情古怪孤僻的小女孩玛丽·伦罗克斯在父母双亡后,生活在姨父神秘阴沉的大房子里,一次神奇的经历使玛丽闯入禁闭已久且荒芜的花园。玛丽、农家小子迪肯和常年被关在阴暗房间里的病态少爷柯林找到了开启快乐的钥匙。 阅读下面的节选部分(选自牛津英语3 《秘密花园》),学习仿效文中利用动作、神态和环境等描写表现人物的开心、激动的手法。 　　Mary skipped all the way to the secret garden wall. And there was the robin (知更鸟)! He had followed her! Mary was very pleased.① “You showed me where the key was yesterday,”she laughed.②“I’ve got it in my pocket. So you ought to show me the door today!” The robin hopped on to an old climbing plant on the wall, and sang his most beautiful song.③ Suddenly the wind made the plant move, and Mary saw something under the dark green leaves. The thick, heavy plant was covering a door.④ Mary’s heart was beating fast and her hands were shaking as she pushed the leaves away and found the keyhole.⑤ She took the key out of her pocket, and it fitted the hole. Using both hands, she managed to unlock the door. Then she turned round to see if anyone was watching. But there was no one, so she pushed the door, which opened, slowly, for the first time in ten years. She walked quickly in and shut the door behind her.⑥ At last she was inside the secret garden! ①肢体动作描写+心理活动描写+情感形容词,表现出玛丽雀跃、欢快的心情 ②神态描写+对话描写,利用人物的“笑”,表现玛丽的开心、快乐 ③借助描写知更鸟欢快的动作和动听的歌声,烘托玛丽快乐、雀跃的心情 ④利用拟人的修辞手法描写风,侧面烘托玛丽的激动、快乐 ⑤利用“无灵”主语句,描写玛丽的心跳加速;描写“双手颤抖”,突出玛丽的激动和紧张 ⑥利用双连动词,再次烘托玛丽走进花园时的激动和紧张 仿效再背诵　尝试仿效上文中的描写方式补全短文,并背诵 　　①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她正在秘密花园的长长的围墙边蹦蹦跳跳), when a most wonderful thing happened. She suddenly realized the robin was following her. ②　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她感到非常高兴、非常激动) by this, and cried out, “You like me, don’t you? And I like you too!” As he hopped along beside her, ③　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (她也一样跳着唱着) to show him that she was his friend. Just then he stopped where a dog had dug a hole in the ground. As Mary looked at the hole, something caught her eye. ④　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (玛丽的心跳加快,双手在颤抖) as she put her hand in and pulled it out. It was a key. A long, rusty key.   Tuesday　黄金素材巧背练/默写 素材1　喜悦、快乐、兴奋、激动 必背好词 名词/动词 joy, happiness, delight, pleasure, excitement, thrill 形容词/副词 happy, cheerful, delighted, pleased, joyful, merry, overjoyed, excited, thrilled, happily, joyfully, merrily, excitedly face/eye/ tear ①face/cheeks (be) flushed with excitement激动得满脸/双颊通红　②one’s face breaks into a wide grin笑逐颜开　③face/eyes light up喜形于色/两眼一亮　④eyes sparkle/twinkle/shine with joy眼里洋溢着喜悦　⑤beam/glow with pleasure喜不自胜　⑥weep tears of joy喜极而泣 heart ①feel a burst/surge/thrill/rush/wave of excitement感到一阵激动　②joy wells up inside sb.心头涌上喜悦　③be filled with/full of joy满心欢喜　④pound/thump with excitement激动得心怦怦直跳 ⑤be wild with joy/delight/happiness欣喜若狂　⑥be over the moon欣喜若狂 hand ①clap one’s hands in delight高兴地拍手 ②hands tremble with excitement激动得手发抖 foot dance/jump for/with joy雀跃/高兴地跳起来 必背佳句　先背诵再完成《6分钟素材默写》默写1 Ⅰ.用面部和眼睛+情感词汇描写喜悦、兴奋(喜形于色、眉开眼笑、流下喜悦/激动的泪水) 1.Joy was written all over his face. 他满脸喜悦。 2.He could hardly wait to share his trip, his face glowing with joy. 他迫不及待地讲述起他的旅程,脸上洋溢着喜悦的光。 3.She felt on top of the world, and every freckle on her cheeks was dancing with joy.她高兴坏了,脸上的每一个雀斑都雀跃起来。 4.A smile lit up his face and his eyes were shining/twinkling/sparkling with great joy. 他喜形于色,双眸闪烁着喜悦的光芒。 5.Ralph’s lips parted in a delighted smile. 拉尔夫咧开嘴,开心地笑了。 6.Tears of joy welled up in their eyes as they hugged tightly together. 他们紧紧拥抱在一起,眼里涌出喜悦的泪水。 Ⅱ.声音里的喜悦、兴奋(欢快的声音、激动得声音颤抖) 7.“You’re safe!” Tom cried in delight.“你安全啦!” 汤姆高兴地大声说道。 8.“Good morning,” a cheerful voice says. “早上好。”一个欢快的声音说。 9.Her voice trembled with excitement. 她激动得声音颤抖。 10.I could hear the excitement and joy in her voice. 我能听出她声音里的兴奋和喜悦。 11.“Aha! I catch you!” a trace of joy can be noticed in his voice. “啊哈!我抓住你了!”他的声音里带着一丝喜悦。 Ⅲ.用心情、情绪等描写喜悦、兴奋(感到喜悦/激动、激动得心怦怦跳) 12.She felt a strange mixture of excitement and fear. 她有一种既兴奋又害怕的奇特感觉。 13.A sense of joy and happiness swept/flooded over him. 一种喜悦和幸福的感觉涌上他心头。 14.I’m in a good mood at the moment, just like the white clouds in the blue sky. (明喻) 我此刻心情舒畅,就像蓝天里的白云那样自在。 15.Patrick rushed to the door, his heart pounding/thumping with excitement. 帕特里克冲到门口,他的心激动得怦怦直跳。 Ⅳ.用肢体动作等描写喜悦、激动(雀跃、蹦跳、手舞足蹈、激动得发抖) 16.He turned and skipped away, singing happily to himself. 他转身蹦蹦跳跳地走了,高兴地哼着歌。 17.She was overjoyed, humming and skipping like a bird.(明喻) 她开心得像小鸟一样哼唱跳跃。 18.Delighted, I gave a jump in the air and then danced into the supermarket. 我高兴得跳了起来,然后雀跃地进了超市。 19.Her hands trembled with excitement as she opened the box.她激动地用颤抖的双手打开了盒子。 Ⅴ.融情于景/场景描写 20.Stars appeared in the sky, twinkling their eyes at them with delight/joy. (拟人) 天上繁星点点,高兴地向他们眨眼睛。 21.A ripple of excitement went through the crowd as he came on stage. 他走上舞台的时候,人群一片骚动。 22.Flowers were waving in the breeze of the early spring.Birds were singing, the air was filled with laughter, and everyone was in the best of moods. (综合场景) 花儿在早春的微风中摇曳。鸟儿在歌唱,空气中满是欢声笑语,人人心情愉悦。 练能生巧 Ⅰ.利用并仿效素材补全以下各句,并背诵 1.曼迪笑了,高兴地拍起手来。 Mandy laughed and __________________________________________________. 2.激动的人群聚集在她周围。 __________________________________________________ gathered around her. 3.那个欢快的声音继续说道:“我会永远和你在一起。” 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, “I will be with you always.”   4.她兴奋得两眼发亮。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Ⅱ.按要求完成以下各题 1.当主持人宣布她获奖时,她非常激动。 (1)先尝试概括描述,将意思表达清楚。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ (2)在概括描述的基础上增加细节描述,注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。 ①__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ (无以言表,添加介词短语) ②__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________(热泪盈眶,神态描写+情感名词) ③__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________(喜形于色,双眸发亮,神态描写+情感名词) ④__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________(心怦怦直跳,“无灵”主语句) 2.请用一句话续写描写妈妈看到草莓时的喜悦之情。 George ran to his mother joyfully and offered her all the wild strawberries. (1)__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ (脸上洋溢着幸福) (2)__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ (喜极而泣) (3)__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ (一阵喜悦,“无灵”主语句) Ⅲ.续写微作文 请根据所给情节,尝试续写一个等待和老友重逢及终于等到老友的情节。侧重人物高兴和激动的情感细节描写(词数80个左右) She stood by the window, joyfully and patiently watching. __________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ Wednesday　续写句式多维练 　巧用 “无灵”主语句 (一) 运用“无灵”主语句,能突出人物的心理、情感,使续写语言更加生动形象。 高分句式1　(a burst/wave/sense of +)情感名词+seize等“有灵”动词+sb. (+like ...)　某人感到(一阵)……(像……) 用于该句式的“有灵”动词(短语)有seize/take hold of (抓住;攫住), defeat (击垮), sweep/flood/wash over (袭来), creep upon (慢慢产生), fail (使失望;有负于)等。 ①Suffering and despair defeated me, and I fell sobbing on the doorstep.痛苦和绝望击垮了我,我倒在门阶上哭泣。(《简·爱》) ②Mary felt a wave of anger sweep over her.玛丽感到一阵愤怒。(《秘密花园》) 高分句式2　身体部位/音容笑貌类名词+brighten等“有灵”动词 用于该句式的名词有face, eye, heart, hand, finger, laughter, smile, tear, voice等;动词(短语)有brighten/light up (照亮), well up (涌出), spread/flash across (浮现), cloud over (显得阴沉)等。 ①My fingers shook with anger, so that I could not go on sewing.我气得手指发抖,没法继续缝了。(《简·爱》) ②I was relieved when a bright, sweet voice interrupted us.一个清亮甜美的声音打断了我们,我松了一口气。(《简·爱》) 练能生巧 Ⅰ.根据汉语和提示用“无灵”主语或“有灵”动词填空, 并背诵 1.他一看到熟悉的字迹,便泪如泉涌。 The moment he saw the familiar handwriting, 　　　　(主语) 　　　　(动词短语) in his eyes.  2.内疚和担忧一阵阵涌上她的心头。 　　　　　　　　 (主语) 　　　　(动词) over her in waves.  3.她在比赛前突然失去了信心。 Before the competition her 　　　　(主语) suddenly 　　　　(动词) her.  4.看到那头可怕的狼,我吓得喉咙发紧,两腿发软。 At the sight of the frightening wolf, I felt so scared that 　　　　　　(主语) 　　　　(动词) and 　　　　　　(主语) felt weak.   Ⅱ.对Ⅰ中各句进行一对一仿写,并背诵 1.当老人多年后回到家乡时,他激动得泪如泉涌。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ 2.他开车驶过那座桥时,阵阵孤独感与悲伤涌上心头。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ 3.她想坚持,却鼓不起勇气。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ 4.看着那头发怒的北极熊,我们吓得心脏狂跳,两腿发软。 __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Ⅲ.微续写 根据汉语提示利用“无灵”主语句补全下面的“表演”场景描写+主题升华,并诵读背诵 Finally came the big moment. Taking a deep breath, I stepped onto the stage, enveloped in the glow of the lights. At first, ①　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (我的声音因紧张而发抖), but as the song progressed, ②　　　　　　　　　　　 (我信心大增,soar). I poured my emotions into the performance, letting my voice carry my feelings into the air. The crowd watched in awe, ③　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (他们的掌声和欢呼声在大厅里回荡). Facing the overwhelming response, I realized that I had conquered my fears. Yes, ④　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 (如果我们相信自己,永不放弃梦想,意想不到的挫折也会成为转机).   Thursday　巧学续写微技能 好题探索　作文比赛　(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 第一段很重要,暗含重要线索 　　When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did. →不爱写作,语言不通,拒绝参赛 (思考:把要写的内容演出来;“我”的性格, Titanic的协同?) So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply:“Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.”Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try. →态度过渡:勉强答应参赛(思考:老师喜欢“我”的作品?是因为什么?其他人是否喜欢?) 选定Paul Revere’s horse为视角写作(思考:马的目的地Lexington是否可暗喻为“我”比赛的终点) 　　I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice. (评价性形容词,用对比强调反差和创意的独特) What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them. →“我”沉迷写“马”,与它共情(“我”就如这匹马,疲惫、自我怀疑,却不断前行) When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said,“Great. Now, write it again.”I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care. →态度反转,painful→enjoyable,以写为乐, 不在乎比赛结果(思考:真的不在乎吗?) 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. (请参考素材1,素材12,主题素材6,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 理6要素 ①Who I, my social studies teacher ②When When I was in middle school ③Where in middle school ④What Though coming from Brazil, I entered a writing contest and applied myself to writing. ⑤Problem 如何克服自我怀疑,付诸努力,获得写作的乐趣 ⑥Theme 努力、持之以恒、克服困难 可协同的“重复”的写作手法 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“the news”:是否有参加颁奖典礼的消息(协同第二段首句中的“the award presentation”)? ◆过渡句1　“我”是什么反应?老师和同学们是什么反应?→如需发言,如何准备获奖感言?“我”发言时是否会提到“马”的写作创意?→同学们是什么反应?老师是什么反应?颁奖人如何夸赞“我”的写作创意?“我”是什么反应?“我”想到了什么?(反复塑造“马”的日子) ◆衔接2　尾句衔接第二段首句中的“went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation”:是否看到老师参加颁奖典礼?为什么打算去老师办公室? Para. 2　I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. ◆衔接3　衔接首句中的“来到老师的办公室”:“我”进老师办公室前听到了什么?(是笑声?或是朗读“我”的作品的声音?) ◆过渡句2　和老师的互动:老师看到“我”的奖杯是什么反应?→老师说了什么?→“我”是什么反应?“我”说了什么?“我”的感受是什么? ◆结尾+主题　与原文首段中的“I did not love writing”形成闭环:“我”由不喜欢写作到热爱写作的历程,犹如奔马坚持前行(升华主旨);协同原文中的Lexington, 以暗喻写开始(embark on)下一段奔向“列克星顿”的写作之旅(高级升华)。 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.1 My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language.→“我”的人设 段一可协同描写“我”是唯一一个母语不是英语的获奖者;或“我”用略带巴西口音的英语(a slight Brazilian accent)发表获奖感言,获得全场的掌声 Para.1 No one laughed harder than he did. Para.5 he read it, laughed out loud, and said→老师的人设:大笑;语言的协同 段一可协同描写老师听“我”发表获奖感言时或得知“我”获奖后的反应(none laughed harder than he did) 段二可协同描写他的大笑(be greeted with his loud laughter/he laughed even harder) 情节的协同 Para.2 “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.”Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try. Para.5 Great. Now, write it again.→老师的鼓励、鞭策 段二可描写老师说“我”的作品受大家的喜爱;“我”感激老师激励“我”参加写作比赛和对“我”的不断鼓励;老师再次鼓励“我”继续写作 Para.5 the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing→态度的转变,“无灵”主语句 段二可描写“我”告诉老师“我”爱上了写作: my previous dislike for writing gave way to a strong passion for keeping writing 物的协同 “我”参赛作品中的“马” 段一可描写“我”想起努力创作“马”的那些日子 段二尾句可描写“我”化身为“马”,踏上新的“列克星顿”之旅 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.大量短句。如原文第四段用4个问句询问马的感受, 继而用比喻回答设问,描写“我”与马的状态相似:有过疲惫、疑虑和想要放弃的时候;接着继续利用短句描写具体细节: worked, checked, correct, read。2.重复手法。如原文第五段通过 “wrote it again, and again and again”强调“我”不断地重复写作的过程,增加了文章的节奏感。3.强调反差。如原文第三段中的“Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.”,“Not a brilliant idea, but funny”形成对比,说明创意很有趣,继而用unlikely强调创意的独特。 续写第一段(主要情节:得知获奖　场景1 收到获奖消息　场景2 既惊且喜　场景3 领奖) 场景2　既惊且喜(个人的反应,他人的反应) 1.我既震惊又欣喜,红着脸,听到老师骄傲的大笑声和同学们雷鸣般的掌声。 Half stunned and half overjoyed, I, flushed, was greeted by 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   场景3　领奖(肢体动作、心理描写) 2.当我在台上拿着奖杯和其他获奖者并肩而立时,我的思绪回到了我专心创作“里维尔的马”的那些日子,那些完全沉浸于写作的纯粹乐趣中的日子。 As I was standing onstage holding my trophy among fellow prize winners, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　when I applied myself to creating Revere’s horse, the days of fully immersing myself in the pure joy of writing.   续写第二段(场景4 老师高兴　场景5 感谢老师、老师回应　场景6 老师鼓励、升华) 场景4　老师高兴(动作、神态描写,协同原文的老师标志性的laughed) 3.他端详着我的奖杯和证书,笑得更欢了,对我竖起大拇指:“棒!” Admiring my trophy and certificate, he 　　　　　　　　　　　　and gave me a thumbs-up, “Brilliant!”   场景5　感谢老师、老师回应(协同原文第二段) 4.我哽咽着说我很感激他鼓励我参加比赛。 I 　　　　that I owed him much for pushing me to enter the contest.   吸睛结尾句 总结式 5.我咧嘴笑了,发现我以前对写作的厌恶消失了,新生活的篇章正在我面前展开。 Grinning, I found my previous dislike for writing 　　　　　　　, and that a 　　　　　　　　　　was unfolding before me.  6.我的思绪回到了我全身心创作“里维尔的马”的日子,回到了我老师的办公室,那里仿佛承载着激励的低语。 My mind travelled back to the days when I 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, to my teacher’s office seemingly holding the whispers of inspiration.  画面定格式 7.我环顾了一下这个办公室,这是一个让我成长和转变的地方,我的作家之旅开始的地方。 I looked around the office, a place of growth and transformation, ________________________________________. A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I won first prize! And I was the only winner whose mother tongue wasn't English! Half stunned and half overjoyed, I, flushed, was greeted by teacher's proud laughter and my classmates' thunderous applause. Later at the award presentation, I stood onstage holding my trophy and certificate, my heart hammering hard. My mind travelled back to the days when I applied myself to creating Paul Revere's horse, to my teacher's office seemingly holding the whispers of inspiration. I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. Admiring my trophy and certificate, he laughed even harder and gave me a thumbs-up, “Brilliant!See? People love your story as I do.”I choked that I owed him much for pushing me to enter the contest. He replied, “You owe me nothing. You have applied yourself and you have done it.”He added quickly, “Just keep writing.”I nodded. And nodded. I found myself becoming Paul Revere's horse again, tired yet always persistent, speeding for a whole new journey to my next “Lexington”. 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　　　 努力;专心致志　　　　　②　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 尝试……  ③　　　　　　　　　 查看;观察 ④　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 大笑  ⑤When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. (“无灵”主语句)  当我写完时,获胜的想法已被写作带来的快乐所取代。 Friday　练续写最新好题 读后续写　演讲比赛 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 With new faces everywhere, the time in Grade 1 was really tough for me. Since I was an Indian girl, nobody wanted to talk to me. Every spare minute was spent alone, and no classmates would group with me for projects. Feeling lonely and sad, I was in desperate need of close friends, with whom I hoped to share my happiness and sorrow. A girl named Fatin, who was cute, clever and talented, appealed to me deeply. However, she seemed to be avoiding me as well. Being only six years old, I didn’t understand why people treated me like that. I opened up to my mother about all this, almost crying my eyes out. Mom smiled, patting me on the shoulder and comforting me until I calmed down. She looked into my eyes and encouraged me, “Honey, don’t worry. They’re just not familiar with you. Try to bring out the best in you. They’ll befriend you as long as they see your excellence.” At that time, I didn’t believe her, but Mom was right. One day, my teacher, Miss Bibiena, announced that there was to be a speech competition. My heart pounded wildly. I really enjoyed participating in speech competitions. Actually, I was quite good at them. The only problem was that the whole school would be watching me and I knew none of my audience. However, I was determined to do it. I gathered all my courage, marched up to the teacher and said, “Miss Bibiena, I want to join in the speech competition.” She stared at me. I started to feel uncomfortable, but then a gentle smile spread over her face. She handed me an application form. The next day, I submitted my form to Miss Bibiena. Taking the form, she said encouragingly to me, “As a new student, you are courageous. Do your best, Sneha!” Rarely did Miss Bibiena praise anyone. On my way to class, I smiled at her remark, which lifted up my spirits that day. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　Until the competition day, I practised my speech whenever possible. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　As I went off the stage, I heard someone call my name. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ (请参考素材1,素材3,主题素材6,主题素材3,主题素材1,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) Saturday　练续写最新好题 读后续写　跑步比赛 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The crowd roared as I took off from the starting line in The Big Race. Through the cheers, I heard Mom shouting, “Run, Sammy, run!” I knew without looking that she was smiling from ear to ear and clapping her hands for me. I kept my eyes straight ahead running as fast as I could. “Run, run, run,” I chanted to myself in my mind as I passed my friend Justin. I saw Justin’s red face out of the corner of my eye and wondered if my own face was that red too. “Run, run, run.” I was on fire, passing Sarah, leaving her in my dust. The coach was waiting for me at the finish line,holding the medal, for the fastest runner in kindergarten. I would wear that blue and white ribbon around my neck when we went out for ice cream to celebrate and then hang it in my room. Last night I took the collection of caps off the hook on my wall, leaving it ready for my shiny new medal. I couldn’t wait to see it every day when I woke up. Dad was there in the crowd also and would pick me up and put me on his shoulders to carry around. “My son!” He would tell the other fathers, “My son won the race!” I was going to win! Faster than Sarah, I came up behind Mikey, giving my legs that extra burst of energy to pass him by. The winner, Sammy! All that running in the park was worth it! Just as I heard the roar of the crowd welcoming me to the finish line, I saw a blur out of the corner of my eye. What? There was Justin with his tomato cheeks running as fast as humanly possible, huffing and puffing like he was going to blow the house down. And then he was in front of me. I was behind the tomato face Justin. Crossing the finish line, I heard the voice over the loudspeaker boom, “Congratulations to the winner, Justin!” Congratulations to Justin? Congratulations to Justin. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　I stood there frozen as Justin was handed his medal. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ 　　Suddenly, strong hands lifted me onto Dad’s shoulders. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ (请参考素材1,素材3,素材13,主题素材2,主题素材6,主题素材3,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $