Week 15 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，围绕“人与动物（一）”主题，以续写题“兄弟俩因狗生隙”为载体，构建学习支架，包括原文六要素梳理、续写微技能指导（读情线、思情节、伏笔协同、语言特点）、续写示例及语料积累，共22页内容。 资料特色突出，创新采用“321”“CARE”原则指导情节构思，通过伏笔协同表格衔接原文与续写，融合非谓语动词、动作链等语言特点提升表达，培养学生思维品质（共情分析）和语言能力（句式练习），如借Toby互动破冰的场景设计。能帮助学生掌握续写逻辑与表达，为教师提供系统的同步教学方案，尤其适合高三备考或高一高二基础训练。

Week 15 人与动物(一) Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 好题探索　兄弟俩因狗生隙　(2025·全国一卷) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.② T here was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) ball of fire.⑨ Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.③ My plan was working out just fine.① Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room.⑤ Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors. It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue. A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually:“Not a chance.”Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice.⑦ Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.⑧ Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first.⑥ However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.④ 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　I realized it was me who was at fault. With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. (请参考素材1,素材8,素材13,主题素材9,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 理6要素 ①Who I, my brother, my wife, Toby ②When in the early summer→a few days later→two months later ③Where in our new house ④What My wife and I hosted a small gathering. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) ⑤Problem “我”不想让狗进屋vs弟弟不想带湿狗回家或感到被排斥;弟弟需要爱犬Toby的陪伴vs“我”的安全顾虑 ⑥Theme 兄弟情谊、理解、共情与宽恕、人与动物 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　I realized it was me who was at fault. ◆衔接1　衔接首句“我意识到错在自己”:“我”在内心反问自己什么?“我”感觉如何? ◆过渡句1　妻子给“我”什么建议?她说了什么(如建议“我”带上biscuits去弟弟家)? ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句“我带着妻子做的饼干,来到弟弟家门前”:“我”接受妻子的建议,带着饼干出发。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) Para. 2　With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“我带着妻子做的饼干,来到弟弟家门前”:弟弟打开门后看到“我”是什么反应?他是什么表情? ◆过渡句2　“我”说了什么?Toby是否欢迎“我”(描写狗的动作)?→“我”做了什么?→弟弟是否同意“我”进门?→“我”向弟弟道歉,弟弟接受道歉。 ◆结尾+主题　兄弟俩聊天,和好如初。主题可以为饼干成为兄弟间新的共同的回忆,曾经的裂痕被笑声与Toby的吠叫填满。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.2 I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside→“我”固执(坚持不让Toby进屋) Para.6 I resisted, thinking he should call first→以自我为中心(认为弟弟应先联系自己) 段一可协同描写“我”反思 段二可描写“我”主动道歉 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) Para.6 He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away ... Toby was his constant companion ... →因失去妻子而依赖Toby 段二可描写弟弟看到“我”和狗的互动后态度软化并接受“我”的道歉 Para.6 My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother...→妻子是温和的调解者(建议联系弟弟) 段一可描写妻子再次建议“我”联系弟弟 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 情节的协同 Para.2 I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside Para.4 I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house 段一可写“我”后悔没让Toby进屋 段二可写“我”向弟弟道歉 Para.6 Two months passed. 段一可写兄弟俩两个月没联系 Para.5 His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually:“Not a chance.”→弟弟的话:不可能 段二可协同描写弟弟看到“我”时眼中的表情还是“Not a chance” 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 物的协同 Para.6 Toby was his constant companion→Toby是弟弟的情感依赖 Para.1 She had prepared lots of snacks和第二段首句中的biscuits→食物象征善意与破冰 段二可描写Toby成为兄弟俩和好的催化剂 妻子烤的饼干也可作为和解媒介 主题的协同 通过描写“我”从排斥Toby到接纳,从缺乏共情到换位思考,“我”道歉,弟弟接受,体现理解与包容 结尾可描写兄弟俩和狗三者相处的温暖场景:It felt good to reconnect. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.简单句(原文①)、并列句(原文②)与复合句(原文③④)交替使用。2.非谓语动词描写Toby的动作(原文⑤)和人物心理活动(原文⑥)。3. 直接心理描写(原文⑦⑧)。4.比喻与夸张的修辞手法(原文⑨):比喻Toby充满活力,夸大其威胁性。 续写第一段(场景1 反思错在哪　场景2 妻子的安慰和建议　场景3 带着饼干出发) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 场景2　妻子的安慰和建议 1.妻子见我满面愁容,便劝道:“你得把这件事处理好。何不现在带上我刚烤的饼干去看看他?” __________________________________________________ 场景3　带着饼干出发 2.我怀着忐忑又期待的心情拿起饼干向他家走去。(形容词短语作状语) 　　　　　　　　　　　　　, I picked up the biscuits and headed to his house.   Noticing the worry on my face, my wife urged, “You need to make this right. Why not visit him now with those biscuits I just baked?” __________________________________________________ Half hopeful and half nervous 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 续写第二段(场景4 开门时弟弟的反应　场景5 借Toby的亲近破冰　场景6 “我”道歉,关系缓和) 场景5　借Toby的亲近破冰 3.托比摇着尾巴扑来,前爪搭在我肩上。(独立主格) Toby bounded forward, 　　　　　　　　, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   4.我弯腰摸摸它的头,拿出一块饼干。它温顺地叼住。 (三连动作链) 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　. Toby gently took it in his mouth.  tail wagging his front paws resting on my shoulders I bent down, stroked his head, and took out a biscuit 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 场景6　“我”道歉,关系缓和 5.他的唇角掠过一丝微笑,接过了饼干盒。(“无灵”主语句+时间状语从句) __________________________________________________ 满分结尾句 画面定格式 6.我们坐着聊天时,Toby卧在我们脚边,重聚的感觉真好。 __________________________________________________ A faint smile crossed his lips as he took the biscuit box. As we sat chatting, Toby lay at our feet. It felt good to reconnect. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) I realized it was me who was at fault. What if I had allowed my brother to bring Toby inside during the gathering? What if I had been moreunderstanding? Then my brother wouldn't have left with Toby in anger. Over two months had passed with no word from him. Noticing the worry on my face, my wife urged, “You need to make this right. Why not visit him now with those biscuits I just baked?” Her words touched me, and I swallowed my pride. Half hopeful and half nervous,I picked up the biscuits and headed to his house. With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) He opened it, and I read “Not a chance” in his first glance. “Can we talk? ” I asked gently. Toby bounded forward, tail wagging, his front paws resting on my shoulders. I bent down, stroked his head, and took out a biscuit. Toby gently took it in his mouth. My brother's face softened and he motioned me inside. I apologized for my behavior at the gathering, admitting I could have handled that better. A faint smile crossed his lips as he took the biscuit box. As we sat chatting, Toby lay at our feet. It felt good to reconnect. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) 原文续写语料积累 ①count 　　　　依赖,依靠,指望(某人做某事);确信(某事会发生)  ②knock 　　　　打倒(或击倒、撞倒)　　 ③run 　　　　　　　　　　来回跑  ④come as 　　　　surprise 出乎意料 ⑤put 　　　　in sb.’s shoes 设身处地  on over back and forth a oneself 第 ‹#› 页 Week 15　人与动物(一) $