Week 14 Thursday 巧学续写微技能（课件PPT）-高中英语提分写作周周赢读后续写（高中通用）

这是一份高中英语同步教学课件，围绕“自然探索 & 环境描写”主题展开续写教学，包含海岛探险阅读材料、续写任务及“理6要素”“微技能1-4”等学习支架，提供范文及语料积累，共23页。 资料特色突出，以“海岛探险”为情境，通过“伏笔协同”表格等创新设计，引导学生分析原文线索与续写细节，融合复合句、非谓语等语言知识提升语言能力，培养逻辑思维与自救意识，范文及语料积累助力学习策略优化。能帮助学生掌握续写技巧，为教师提供清晰教学路径。

Week 14 自然探索&环境描写篇 Thursday　巧学续写微技能 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 好题探索　海岛探险 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I was born and grew up in the north of Scotland, which was not far from the sea.① When I was little, I enjoyed the seaside scenery very much.⑤ I often sat on the rock by the sea and watched the view of the sea. I was fond of playing with the sand on the beach and chased the waves with my elder sister, Alastair. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 Across the beach there was a tidal (潮汐的) island, which means that when the tide goes out, you can walk to it, but when the tide comes in again, you can’t get to it.② Mum and Dad never let us go there. They told us that it was dangerous. However, the tidal island was full of mystery to me. I said to myself,“There must be some fascinating scenery worth exploring. How I wish I had a chance to land on it!” On a chilly cold day in October, while my parents were away, my sister was determined to take me to the beach, where we would have a good time.③ I wanted to build sand castles. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 When we arrived at the beach, the tide was out.⑥ We ran on the beach back and forth and enjoyed ourselves very much. We made several sand castles of different shapes. Feeling a little tired, I sat on the beach for a break.⑦ I saw the tidal island opposite, which looked very nice in the autumn sunshine.④ “Let’s go to explore the tidal island, Alastair,”I said to my sister.⑧ “That’s a good idea. But Mum and Dad said we couldn’t. Maybe we won’t return safely!”Alastair said. “Don’t worry! We’ll try to return before the tide comes in again,”I begged 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 Alastair.⑨ Finally she agreed. We returned home and brought some peanut butter sandwiches and a bottle of milk with us. 注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 　　Then we set off for the tidal island. The tide came in and covered the beach and the water was too deep and cold for me. (请参考素材4,素材8,素材14,主题素材12,高分句式1-55,附录二-三) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 理6要素 ①Who I, Alastair, my parents ②When on a day in October ③Where on a tidal island ④What an exploration to a tidal island 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 ⑤Problem 因涨潮无法找到回沙滩的路 ⑥Theme 探险、自救意识、姐妹之情 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 微技能1　读原文和首句　理2情线 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 微技能2　思续写情节　“以旧带新”2原则(“321”原则——3衔接、2过渡、1主题;“CARE”原则——coherence, action, response, emotion) Para. 1　Then we set off for the tidal island. ◆衔接1　衔接首句中的“我们出发去潮汐岛”:“我”和姐姐所看到的景色、所感。 ◆过渡句1　“我们”是否在岛上享受野餐?→是否有其他想要探索的地方? ◆衔接2　尾句衔接段二首句中的“潮水来了,淹没了海滩”:准备回家时却找不到回海滩的路了。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 Para. 2　The tide came in and covered the beach and the water was too deep and cold for me. ◆衔接3　衔接首句“潮水来了,淹没了海滩,海水对我来说又深又冷”:“我”是否害怕? ◆过渡句2　面对危险,作为姐姐, Alastair会有什么样的反应?“我”有什么反应?可适当体现“我们”面对危险时的积极心态和自救意识。 ◆结尾+主题　父母得知“我们”的经历后的反应,对“我们”的教育。主题以“我们”从中得到的教训为宜。 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 微技能3　思伏笔巧协同　原续更融洽 捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈细节并合理协同,以使续写情节围绕主题,且在逻辑、内容上更符合原文基调。 可协同处 原文伏笔(线索) 续写部分协同设置 人设的协同 Para.1 I often sat on the rock by the sea and watched the view of the sea.→“我”喜欢看海景 段二尾句可写“我”坐在岩石上遥望岛屿,回忆探索岛屿的经历 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 情节的协同 Para.6 But Mum and Dad ... safely!→Alastair的谨慎 段二可写Alastair带“我”安全回家 Para.2 However, the tidal island was full of mystery to me. 段一可描写“我”和姐姐在岛上看到了什么神秘的东西 Para.2 There must be some fascinating scenery worth exploring. 段一可描写“我”和姐姐在岛上看到的景色 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 Para.2 when the tide comes in again, you can’t get to it 段二可描述涨潮时姐妹俩的反应和应对办法 Para.2 Mum and Dad never let us go there. They told us that it was dangerous. 段二可写父母知道“我们”的经历后对“我们”的教育及“我们”从中得到的教训 物的协同 some peanut butter sandwiches and a bottle of milk 段一可描写“我”和姐姐在岛上吃三明治、喝牛奶的细节 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 微技能4　协同原文语言特点　写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道) 原文语言特点　1.复合句:定语从句(原文①②③④)、时间状语从句(原文⑤⑥)描写故事情节。2.非谓语动词(原文⑦)描写人物情感。3.人物对话,用said, begged (原文⑧⑨)引入人物直接引语。 续写第一段(场景1 被美景迷住　场景2 探索城堡　场景3 天黑潮涨寻不到岸) 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 场景1　被美景迷住(时间状语从句过渡) 1.我们一踏上小岛,就被周围的一切迷住了:清澈的水,蔚蓝的天空,海鸥的歌声。 The moment we landed on the island, __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________. 场景2　探索城堡 2.我们冲进一座废弃的城堡,渴望探索各种各样的奥秘。(具体动作) __________________________________, eager to explore various mysteries. we were fascinated by everything around, the clear water, the blue sky and the singing of seagulls We rushed to an abandoned castle 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 场景3　天黑潮涨寻不到岸(时间状语从句过渡) 3.当我们意识到天已经黑了而且很冷时,我们向海滩飞奔。(具体动作) When we realized it had been dark and cold, __________________________. 续写第二段(场景4 惊慌哭泣姐姐安慰　场景5 姐姐背“我”涉浪上岸　场景6 父母担忧警告) 场景4　惊慌哭泣姐姐安慰 4.“冷静下来!快爬到我背上来。”Alastair大声鼓励我。 we darted to the beach 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 “Calm down! Climb on my back quickly,” __________________________________________________. 场景5　姐姐背“我”涉浪上岸 5.她背着我拼命蹚过海浪,回到陆地。 She struggled through the waves and 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　.   6.我们虽然又怕又累,却庆幸自己平安归来。 (1)Though 　　　　　　　　　　　　　, we congratulated ourselves on returning safe and sound.  Alastair encouraged me in a loud voice returned to the land with me on her back we were frightened and tired 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 (2)　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　, we congratulated ourselves on returning safe and sound. (倒装句)  吸睛结尾句 感悟式 7.这次经历给我们上了一课,我们应该三思而后行,永远不要冒险。 The experience taught us a lesson that __________________________________________________. 首尾呼应式 Frightened and tired though we were we should look before we leap 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 8.我经常坐在海边的岩石上,看着潮汐岛,回想起那天的探险。 __________________________________________________, recalling the exploration that day. I often sat on the rock by the sea and looked at the tidal island 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 Then we set off for the tidal island. We excitedly ran across the beach to the island. The moment we landed on the island, we were fascinated by everything around, the clear water, the blue sky and the singing of seagulls. We rushed to an abandoned castle, eager to explore various mysteries. But disappointingly, it was only full of rubbish. Tired, we sat on a big rock, enjoying milk and sandwiches. When we realized it had been dark and cold, we darted to the beach. But we couldn't find it! 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 The tide came in and covered the beach and the water was too deep and cold for me. Scared, I cried in the cold water. “Calm down! Climb on my back quickly,” Alastair encouraged me in a loud voice. She struggled through the waves and returned to the land with me on her back. Frightened and tired though we were, we congratulated ourselves on returning safe and sound. Learning what had happened, our parents went pale and warned us of the danger again. The experience taught us a lesson that we should look before we leap and never take risks. 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 原文续写语料积累 ①　　　　　　　　　 来回地　 ②　　　　　　　　　　　　　 在秋日的阳光中  back and forth in the autumn sunshine 第 ‹#› 页 Week 14　自然探索&环境描写篇 $