2027高考英语读后续写·病文升格讲义·全国通用版

该高中英语读后续写专项讲义紧扣高考核心要求，围绕情节衔接自然、发展合理、语言生动及上下文连贯等考点，以写作指导为框架，原创语篇升格为载体，通过考点梳理、方法提炼、病段分析及升格示范等环节，帮助学生构建读后续写的系统思维与表达路径。 资料以“学生病段→升格示范”为特色，聚焦动词升级、化抽象为画面及景情理收尾，创新采用“问题诊断-示范引领-清单巩固”教学模式，有效提升学生语言表达的精准性与思维品质的深刻性。配套表达升级清单和自查清单，助力学生在有限时间内突破难点，为教师把控复习节奏、提升教学效率提供实用指导。

2027 高考英语读后续写·病文升格讲义 · 全国通用版 2027 高考英语读后续写 病文升格讲义 · 全国通用版 原创语篇 · 学生病段 → 升格 · 表达升级清单 适用：高三一轮 / 二轮 · 读后续写专项突破　|　可直接打印分发 特色：每篇配“学生病段 → 升格示范”，聚焦动词升级、 化抽象为画面、景情理收尾，看清平淡续写怎么一步步变高分。 —— 一线教师读后续写备课讲义 —— 第一部分　读后续写写作指导（精华版） 一、读后续写是什么、怎么评分 读后续写：给你一段故事和两段的首句，要求顺着故事续写两段（合计约 150 词），做到情节合理、语言生动、首尾呼应、主题积极。阅卷主要看四点：与原文及段首句的衔接是否自然、情节是否合理且有起伏、语言是否丰富准确、上下文是否连贯。 二、两段结构怎么搭 第一段：承接第一句，把情节推进到一个小高潮：先写人物的行动，再写随之而来的反应。 第二段：承接第二句，给出结果或转折，并把情感、感悟收住，做到首尾呼应。 三、升格的 4 个发力点 1. 动词升级：把 walk / look / say / run 换成更具体、有画面的动作（dash, glance, murmur, freeze）。 1. 展示而非告知（show, don't tell）：别写 he was happy / nervous，用动作、神态、身体反应去写（手发抖、眼睛湿了、心跳如鼓）。 1. 加五感与细节：写出看到、听到、触到的具体画面，让场景立起来，而不是一句话带过。 1. 景情理交融的收尾：结尾用一处景物 + 一句感悟把情绪轻轻收住，不要直接喊主题。 四、必须守住的硬规则 1. 时态：与原文保持一致，通常用一般过去时； 1. 人称：原文用第几人称，续写就用第几人称； 1. 衔接：多用 as / when / the moment / to one's surprise / before long 把句子连起来； 1. 不要照抄原文句子；段首句已给出、不计入词数，但必须顺着它往下写； 1. 字数：两段合计 150 词左右，分配均衡。 一句话：续写比的不是难词，而是“把情绪写成画面”。同样的情节，谁的动词更准、细节更活、结尾收得更稳，谁就赢。 第二部分　5 篇原创语篇 · 病段升格精讲 用法：先读原文情境和段首句，自己在脑子里过一遍怎么写；再看“学生病段”和批注，找出平淡在哪；最后对照“升格示范”，把好词好句和画面感记下来。 第 1 篇　The Lost Wallet　（诚信 · 意外的善意） 一、原文情境（Story） It was a cold winter evening. Tom, a fifteen-year-old boy, was walking home from school when he noticed a brown wallet lying on the snowy ground. He picked it up and looked inside. There was a thick stack of money, an ID card and a photo of a smiling old couple. The name on the card was Mr. Green, who lived on Pine Street nearby. Tom's family was poor, and the money could buy the new bike he had dreamed of for months. He stood there for a long time, his heart beating fast. Finally, he made up his mind and walked toward Pine Street. 二、段首句（Paragraph Openers） Paragraph 1: Tom knocked at the door of Mr. Green's house. Paragraph 2: A week later, a special gift arrived at Tom's home. 三、学生病段（平淡在哪） 【学生病段】 (Para 1) Tom knocked at the door of Mr. Green's house. An old man opened the door. Tom gave him the wallet. The old man was very happy. He said thank you to Tom. He wanted to give Tom some money but Tom said no. Then Tom went home. He felt happy because he did a good thing. (Para 2) A week later, a special gift arrived at Tom's home. It was a new bike. There was a letter from Mr. Green. He said Tom was a good boy. Tom was very excited. He thanked Mr. Green. Tom was very happy. He learned that being honest is good. 老师批注： 1. 动词太平：knocked, gave, said, went, felt 全是最基础的词，没有画面。 1. 全程在“告诉”不在“展示”：very happy / very excited 直接报情绪，读者没感觉；把情绪写进动作和神态里。 1. 细节缺失：开门那一刻老人的样子、Tom 递钱包时的犹豫、看到自行车那一瞬间的反应，全没写。 1. 衔接生硬：句子像清单一句一句蹦，缺少 as / when / the moment 这类连接词。 1. 结尾说教：being honest is good 直接喊主题，没把感悟融进画面（景情理）。 四、升格示范（Upgraded） 【升格示范】 (Para 1) Tom knocked at the door of Mr. Green's house. The door opened slowly, and a grey-haired man looked at him with tired eyes. With trembling hands, Tom held out the wallet. “I think this is yours, sir.” For a moment the old man froze, then his eyes grew wet. He counted the money carefully and pressed a few notes into Tom's palm, but the boy gently pushed them back and shook his head. As Tom walked home through the falling snow, his empty pockets felt strangely light, and a warm smile spread across his face. (Para 2) A week later, a special gift arrived at Tom's home. In the yard stood a shining new bike, a red ribbon tied to its handlebar. A note fluttered in the wind: “For an honest young man — the richest boy I have ever met.” Tom's hands shook as he read the words again and again. He thought of that snowy evening, of the choice he had almost not made, and his eyes blurred. Sometimes, he finally understood, what we give away comes back to us in ways we never expect. 五、表达亮点（值得偷师） · with trembling hands　双手颤抖地 · his eyes grew wet　他眼眶湿润了 · pressed a few notes into his palm　把几张钞票塞进他手心 · a warm smile spread across his face　一抹温暖的笑容浮上脸庞 · his eyes blurred　他视线模糊了 第 2 篇　The Speech Contest　（克服怯场 · 成长） 一、原文情境（Story） Mia had always been afraid of speaking in public. Her voice would shake and her face would turn red whenever everyone looked at her. This year, however, her teacher encouraged her to join the school speech contest. For weeks Mia practiced her speech in front of the mirror every night, though deep inside she was still terrified. Finally the big day came. Sitting backstage, she could hear the loud applause for the speaker before her, and her heart pounded like a drum. Then she heard the host call her name. 二、段首句（Paragraph Openers） Paragraph 1: With shaking legs, Mia stepped onto the stage. Paragraph 2: When the result was announced, Mia could hardly believe her ears. 三、学生病段（平淡在哪） 【学生病段】 (Para 1) With shaking legs, Mia stepped onto the stage. She was very nervous. She looked at the people. There were many people. She started her speech. At first her voice was small. But later she became better. She finished her speech. Everyone clapped for her. (Para 2) When the result was announced, Mia could hardly believe her ears. She won the first prize. She was very happy and excited. Her teacher and classmates were happy too. Mia thought practice is very important. She was not afraid of speaking now. 老师批注： 1. very nervous / very happy and excited 又是直接报情绪；紧张可以写成手心出汗、灯光刺眼、台下变成一片模糊。 1. 动词单调：looked, started, finished, clapped——换成更有张力的词。 1. 情节没起伏：从“声音小”到“变好”一句带过，缺那个让她稳住的“转折瞬间”。 1. 结尾又是 telling：practice is very important 直接说道理，不如让一个动作或眼神替她说。 1. 衔接弱：句子各自为政，缺 as / the moment / to her surprise。 四、升格示范（Upgraded） 【升格示范】 (Para 1) With shaking legs, Mia stepped onto the stage. The bright lights blinded her, and the faces below blurred into a sea of shadows. Her throat went dry as she opened her mouth, and the first words came out almost in a whisper. Then, in the front row, she caught sight of her teacher nodding gently and smiling. The moment steadied her racing heart. Taking a deep breath, she lifted her chin and let her voice ring out, clear and strong. When she spoke the last line, the whole hall fell silent — and then burst into thunderous applause. (Para 2) When the result was announced, Mia could hardly believe her ears. “First prize goes to Mia!” For a second she stood frozen, then tears she could not hold back rolled down her cheeks. Her classmates rushed up and lifted her into the air, while her teacher gave her a proud thumbs-up from afar. Holding the shining trophy against her chest, Mia looked out at the crowd she had once feared. She realized that courage was not the absence of fear, but the choice to speak in spite of it. 五、表达亮点（值得偷师） · the bright lights blinded her　刺眼的灯光让她睁不开眼 · blurred into a sea of shadows　模糊成一片影子的海洋 · her throat went dry　她喉咙发干 · the moment steadied her racing heart　那一刻让她狂跳的心稳了下来 · burst into thunderous applause　爆发出雷鸣般的掌声 第 3 篇　Help in the Snowstorm　（助人 · 温暖） 一、原文情境（Story） On a freezing winter night, the Carter family was driving home after a long trip. Snow fell heavily and the road was almost empty. Suddenly, in the headlights, they saw an old man standing beside a broken-down car, waving his arms desperately. He looked pale and was shivering in the cold wind. Mr. Carter slowed down. “Should we stop?” he asked. It was late, the children were tired, and stopping in such weather could be dangerous. But looking at the helpless old man, Mr. Carter pulled over to the side of the road. 二、段首句（Paragraph Openers） Paragraph 1: Mr. Carter rolled down the window and asked the old man what had happened. Paragraph 2: Months later, the Carters received an unexpected phone call. 三、学生病段（平淡在哪） 【学生病段】 (Para 1) Mr. Carter rolled down the window and asked the old man what had happened. The old man said his car was broken. He was very cold. The Carters let him sit in their car. They turned on the heater and gave him some hot water. The old man felt warm. He said thank you many times. Then they called for help. (Para 2) Months later, the Carters received an unexpected phone call. It was from the old man. He invited them to his home. They went there. There was a big dinner. The old man thanked them again. Everyone was happy. The Carters were glad they helped him. Helping others is a good thing. 老师批注： 1. 老人冻僵的样子、坐进车里那一刻的细节没写，全靠 very cold / felt warm 报告。 1. 动词太弱：said, let, gave, went——缺乏画面感。 1. 第二段把“团圆 / 感谢”一笔流水账带过，没有一个动人的具体瞬间。 1. 结尾 Helping others is a good thing 直接喊主题，建议用画面收尾（景情理）。 1. 句子像清单，缺过渡。 四、升格示范（Upgraded） 【升格示范】 (Para 1) Mr. Carter rolled down the window and asked the old man what had happened. Through chattering teeth, the old man explained that his car had died in the storm. Without a second thought, the family helped him into the warm back seat and wrapped him in a thick blanket. Mrs. Carter handed him a cup of steaming tea, and slowly the colour returned to his frozen cheeks. While they waited for the rescue truck, the children shared their snacks, and the old man's grateful eyes shone in the dim light. The cold night no longer felt so cold. (Para 2) Months later, the Carters received an unexpected phone call. It was the old man, his voice warm and trembling, inviting them to a spring dinner at his home. When they arrived, the table was covered with home-cooked dishes, and on the wall hung a framed photo of that snowy night. “You didn't just save a stranger,” the old man said, raising his glass, “you reminded me that kindness still drives down every road.” Outside, the first flowers of spring were blooming, and the whole room felt full of light. 五、表达亮点（值得偷师） · through chattering teeth　牙齿打着颤地 · wrapped him in a thick blanket　给他裹上厚毛毯 · the colour returned to his frozen cheeks　他冻僵的脸颊渐渐有了血色 · his grateful eyes shone　他感激的眼睛闪着光 · the cold night no longer felt so cold　寒冷的夜不再那么冷了 第 4 篇　The Injured Bird　（善良 · 学会放手） 一、原文情境（Story） One sunny morning, Lily and her younger brother Sam were playing in the garden when they heard a weak chirping under the big maple tree. There, on the grass, lay a little bird with a hurt wing, unable to fly. Its tiny body trembled with every breath. “We have to help it!” cried Sam. Their mother brought a small box and some soft cloth, and together they made a warm little home for the bird. For days, the children fed it, kept it safe and watched over it carefully, hoping it would get well again. 二、段首句（Paragraph Openers） Paragraph 1: One morning, the children noticed that the bird's wing had healed. Paragraph 2: Standing in the garden, they slowly opened the box. 三、学生病段（平淡在哪） 【学生病段】 (Para 1) One morning, the children noticed that the bird's wing had healed. They were very happy. The bird could move its wing now. It looked stronger. Lily and Sam were excited. They wanted the bird to fly again. Their mother said they should let it go. The children agreed. But they were a little sad. (Para 2) Standing in the garden, they slowly opened the box. The bird flew out. It flew into the sky. It was free now. Lily and Sam waved goodbye. They were happy and sad. They learned that loving something means letting it go. It was a good day. 老师批注： 1. very happy / excited / happy and sad 全在报情绪，没把那种又喜又舍的复杂心情写出来。 1. 鸟飞走的那一瞬间是全文高潮，却只用 flew out / flew into the sky 草草带过，太可惜。 1. 动词、画面都偏空，缺少天空、阳光、翅膀这些可以借景抒情的细节。 1. 结尾道理直接说出来了，建议让画面替你说（景情理交融）。 1. 句子短而碎，缺连接。 四、升格示范（Upgraded） 【升格示范】 (Para 1) One morning, the children noticed that the bird's wing had healed. It hopped eagerly around the box and flapped its wings, as if begging for the open sky. Lily's face lit up, yet a strange ache tugged at her heart. “It's time,” their mother said softly, resting a hand on her shoulder. Sam bit his lip and nodded. They knew that the little life in their care no longer belonged to a box — it belonged to the wind and the clouds. (Para 2) Standing in the garden, they slowly opened the box. For a moment the bird paused on the edge, turning its bright eyes toward the children as if to say goodbye. Then, with a sudden burst of energy, it shot into the morning air, its wings flashing golden in the sunlight. Higher and higher it climbed, until it became a tiny dot against the blue. Lily wiped her eyes and smiled. Some kinds of love, she understood at last, are measured not by holding on, but by the courage to let go. 五、表达亮点（值得偷师） · flapped its wings as if begging for the open sky　扇动翅膀，仿佛在乞求天空 · a strange ache tugged at her heart　一阵奇怪的酸楚揪着她的心 · its wings flashing golden in the sunlight　翅膀在阳光下闪着金光 · became a tiny dot against the blue　化作蓝天里的一个小点 · the courage to let go　放手的勇气 第 5 篇　The Hidden Box　（亲情 · 误解与和解） 一、原文情境（Story） Jack and his father had not really talked for months. Ever since Jack decided to study art instead of science, his father had gone quiet, and Jack believed the old man disapproved of his dream. One rainy afternoon, while looking for an umbrella in the storeroom, Jack discovered a dusty cardboard box hidden behind some old tools. Curious, he opened it. Inside were dozens of his own drawings — every picture he had thrown away over the years — carefully kept, smoothed flat and arranged by date. At the bottom lay an old sketchbook that did not belong to him. 二、段首句（Paragraph Openers） Paragraph 1: Jack opened the old sketchbook with trembling hands. Paragraph 2: That evening, Jack walked quietly into his father's room. 三、学生病段（平淡在哪） 【学生病段】 (Para 1) Jack opened the old sketchbook with trembling hands. Inside were many drawings. They were his father's drawings. His father liked art when he was young. Jack was very surprised. He did not know this before. He understood his father now. He felt sorry. (Para 2) That evening, Jack walked quietly into his father's room. His father was reading. Jack said sorry to him. He said he loved him. His father was moved. They hugged. They talked for a long time. Now they understood each other. Jack was very happy. Family is the most important thing. 老师批注： 1. 翻开父亲画本那一刻的震撼，被 very surprised 一句吞掉了；画上有什么、父亲的字迹、落款，都能写。 1. felt sorry / was moved / very happy 又是直接报情绪。 1. 第二段父子和解是情感高潮，却像走流程：said sorry, hugged, talked——缺一个戳心的细节或一句台词。 1. 结尾喊口号 Family is the most important thing。 1. 动词、衔接都偏单薄。 四、升格示范（Upgraded） 【升格示范】 (Para 1) Jack opened the old sketchbook with trembling hands. Page after page revealed delicate pencil drawings — mountains, rivers, and a young woman who looked just like his late grandmother. In the corner of each was a signature he knew too well: his father's. So the silent man who seemed to live only for numbers had once chased the very dream Jack was chasing now. On the last page, a faded line of handwriting read: “Dreams I gave up — may my son finish them for me.” Jack's vision blurred, and the storeroom suddenly felt very small. (Para 2) That evening, Jack walked quietly into his father's room. The old man sat by the lamp, his glasses sliding down his nose. Jack placed the box gently on the desk. For a long moment, neither of them spoke. Then his father reached out and rested a rough, warm hand on the drawings. “I only ever wanted you to be braver than I was,” he murmured, his voice cracking. Jack knelt beside him, and the wall that had stood between them for months melted away. Outside, the rain had stopped, and through the window a soft moon was rising. 五、表达亮点（值得偷师） · page after page revealed　一页页翻过，显露出 · a signature he knew too well　一个他再熟悉不过的签名 · his voice cracking　他的声音哽咽了 · the wall between them melted away　他们之间的墙消融了 · a soft moon was rising　一轮柔和的月亮正升起 第三部分　读后续写表达升级清单（背了就能用） 把下面这些“情绪→画面”的词块背熟，写续写时随手就能替换掉平淡的 happy / sad / nervous。 紧张 / 害怕 her heart pounded like a drum 心如擂鼓；her throat went dry 喉咙发干；her hands trembled 双手发抖；a chill ran down his spine 脊背发凉；he froze on the spot 他僵在原地 高兴 / 激动 his face lit up 他脸上一亮；a warm smile spread across her face 暖意漫上脸庞；his heart leapt with joy 他心头一喜；he could hardly believe his ears 他几乎不敢相信；tears of joy rolled down 喜悦的泪水滚落 难过 / 感动 his vision blurred 视线模糊；a lump rose in his throat 喉头一紧；her eyes grew wet 眼眶湿润；his voice cracked 声音哽咽；an ache tugged at her heart 心头一酸 有力的动作（替换 walk/look/say） dashed 冲；glanced 瞥；murmured 低语；burst into 突然……起来；reached out 伸手；knelt down 跪下 景物收尾（借景抒情） the sun broke through the clouds 阳光穿透云层；a soft moon was rising 一轮柔月升起；the first flowers of spring bloomed 早春的花开了；the cold night no longer felt so cold 寒夜不再那么冷 第四部分　读后续写自查清单 写完两段，对照下面逐项打勾，每项都做到，续写就稳在高分段了。 ☐ 续写顺着段首句和原文情节走了吗？ ☐ 情节合理、积极向上、有起伏吗？ ☐ 用动作 / 神态 / 细节“展示”了情绪，而不是只说 he was happy 吗？ ☐ 动词换成更具体的词了吗？句式有变化吗？ ☐ 时态、人称和原文一致吗（一般用过去时）？ ☐ 两段是否衔接？结尾有没有景情理的情感收束？ ☐ 两段合计 150 词左右、分配均衡吗？ ☐ 有没有照抄原文句子？ 记住：情节顺、情绪活、结尾稳。把每一次平淡都改成画面，续写自然就上去了。加油！ 第 页 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $