读后续写专题讲评-被嫌弃的小狗舍己救人 课件 -2026届高三英语三轮复习专项

该高中英语高考复习课件聚焦“读后续写”专题，依据高考评价体系梳理了情节逻辑构建、情感递进表达、前后细节呼应三大核心考点，通过“十句五定法”逐句规划，明确伏笔设置、主题升华等高频考查方向，形成系统的答题思路框架。 课件亮点在于“范文精析+错误警示+技巧建模”的备考模式，如以“偏见被善意打破”案例为例，运用“动作描写代替心理描写”“情感弧线层次设计”等方法，培养学生思维品质与语言能力，助力掌握情节发展与主题表达技巧，教师可据此实施精准教学，提升复习效率。

读后续写专题讲评 Cooper- 偏见被善意打破 高中英语读写结合教学 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Cooper was six years old when we found him. He jumped at sudden noises and slept in tight circles like he was trying to disappear into himself. But when he finally wagged his tail at us for the first time, warming up after days of cautious distance, it felt like a genuine miracle. Then we met our neighbor, Vanessa. The first time she met Cooper, he barked once. Just once. “Could you please keep that thing quiet?” she snapped. “Some of us work at home, you know.” I apologized quickly, pulling Cooper back toward our yard. But she just frowned and said “I don’t like big dogs. They’re unpredictable and dangerous.” When the mailman complimented Cooper one morning, telling me what a beautiful boy he was, Vanessa actually yelled across the street from her driveway. “Don’t touch him! You’ll smell like wet carpet for days!” I tried to be kind despite everything. I baked a batch of chocolate chip cookies and brought them to Vanessa. But Vanessa didn’t like that. She declined taking the cookies with a polite but cold tone, “That won’t be necessary, but thank you.” One Friday, I was walking Cooper after my shift, when I spotted Vanessa across the street. Her face was buried in her phone. Then I suddenly heard brakes screaming. A delivery truck was backing out of a home’s driveway at a very dangerous speed. Cooper broke free of his leash and ran across the street like lightning, faster than I’d ever seen him move. In one powerful motion, he knocked Vanessa off the sidewalk and onto the grass. The truck missed her by inches. I saw how close it was. 续写要求：续写词数应为150左右； Paragraph 1:I ran over and asked Vanessa if she was okay. Paragraph 2:The next day, there was a knock at my door. 原文情节速览 4 3 3 5 1 Cooper挣脱绳子 把Vanessa撞开, 救了她一命! 我送饼干示好 Cooper是被虐待过的胆小 狗,后来对主人敞开心扉 Vanessa对夸狗的人喊: 别碰它,你会一身臭 2 关键反转 邻居Vanessa讨厌大狗, 说它们dangerous 高潮标记 关键伏笔:Vanessa说狗'dangerous'→结果恰恰是狗救了她的命 二、两段续写开头分析 第一段开头 第二段开头 The next day, there was a knock at my door. I ran over and asked Vanessa if she was okay. 情感弧线:惊恐→愧疚→感谢→亲近 Vanessa的反应? 谁来了? 她是否意识到被狗救了? 道歉?感谢? 很可能是Vanessa 她的态度有没有变化? 主题升华:偏见消除、善意回报 三、十句五定法·第一段逐句规划 作用 标签 第写 She lay on the grass, shaking violently, but managed to nod. Cooper sat quietly beside her, his tail wagging [紧接首句] 1 [展开动作] 2 slightly as if checking on her. Vanessa stared at the truck, then at Cooper,her face pale."That dog..hsed me,"she whispered. Her voice voice cracked. I helped her up, and she looked at me with tears [人物反应] 3 [情感递进] 含泪无言→为登门道歉铺垫 4 [为第二段铺垫] 5 in her eyes, saying nothing more. 十句五定法·第二段逐句规划 I opened the door to find Vanessa, holding a box of chocolate chip cookies - the same kind I had baked for her. Her face was red with embarrassment. 6 cookies呼应前文 6 Her face was red with embarrassment."I owe you and Cooper an apolic," she said."she said."I was so wrong." She knelt down and let Cooper sniff her hand. He licked her fingers, and she let out a small laugh. From that day on, Vanessa became Cooper's biggest fan, even bringing him treats and offering to walk him. I learned that kindness, even when rejected, has a way of coming back -sometimes on four legs. 7 8 9 10 升华金句 四、完整高分范文 ·Paragraph 1 I ran over and asked Vanessa if she was okay. She lay on the grass, shaking violently, but managed to nod. Cooper sat quietly beside her, his tail wagging slightly as if checking on her. Vanessa stared at the truck, then at Cooper, her face pale."That dog... he pushed me," she whispered. Her voice cracked."I said that those awful things about him, and he still saved me."I helped her up, and she looked at me with tears in her eyes, saying nothing more. 约80词 完整高分范文·Paragraph 2 The next day, there was a knock at my door. I opened it to find Vanessa, holding a box of chocolate chip cookies, the same kind I had baked for her. Her face was red with embarrassment."I owe you and Cooper an apology," she said. "I was so wrong." She knets down and let Coper sno sniff her said."I was so wrong." She knelt down and let Cooper sniff her hand. He licked her fingers, and she let out a small laugh. From that day on, Vanessa became Cooper's biggest fan, bringing him treats and even offering to walk him when I worked late. I learned that kindness, even when rejected, has a way of coming back — sometimes on four legs. 五、名师技巧点拨 技巧 说明 文中示例 pale,trembling→softening→ embarrassed smile →warm laugh 情感递进 从恐惧→惊讶→愧疚→感谢→亲近 cookies呼应我之前送的饼干; dangerous被saved反转 前后呼应 回扣前文细节 knelt down and patted 动作描写代替心理描写 用动作展示情绪 Cooper / let him sniff her hand That dog...he saved me/ I owe you an apology 对话推进 让人物说话,真实自然 升华金句 结尾一句话点题 kindness comes back on four legs 六、常见错误提醒 2 3 1 先惊恐→后知后觉 →愧疚 →初步感谢,有层次 #Vanessa 直接变成热情友好 忘记Cooper的存在 →它是主角之一 →情绪转变太突兀 2 2 3 #Vanessa只道歉,没有具体 行动 →缺乏画面感 加上「拿饼干」 「蹲下来让狗闻手」 等细节 每段都要写到 Cooper的反应 (摇尾巴、舔手等) 用具体意象 #主题升华太俗「我们要善待动物」 七、课后小练习 情境1:如果Vanessa第二天没有来敲门, 而是「我」主动去找她,会怎样? 情境2:如果Cooper在救人的过程中受了 伤,故事会如何发展? 写好之后,对照十句五定法检查结构是否完整 偏见被善意打破,善意终有回响 Kindness, even when rejected, has a way of coming back sometimes on four legs. 一 善意,即使被拒绝,也终会以某种方式回来--有时,以四条腿的形式。 读后续写:让人物情感真实地流动 $