读后续写专题讲评-Grumpy-Old-Mr-Roberts 课件-2026届高三英语三轮复习专项

该高中英语高考复习课件聚焦“读后续写”专题，依据高考评价体系梳理了情节逻辑构建、人物情感递进、主题升华表达三大核心考点，通过真题案例分析“逻辑自洽”“前后呼应”等高频考查维度，构建“五步情节梳理+十句五定法”的答题思路体系，体现备考针对性与实用性。 课件亮点在于“真题情境建模+核心素养融合”，如以老人与邻居和解故事为载体，运用“动作代心理”技巧解析人物态度转变过程，培养学生语言表达与思维品质。设置“易错点警示”（如忽略伏笔、转变突兀）和“高分金句模板”，帮助学生掌握情节构思与主题升华技巧，教师可据此开展精准训练，提升复习效率。

读后续写专题讲评 Grumpy Old Mr. Roberts 高中英语读写结合教学 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。 Looking out of the window of our new house, I was impressed with the colorful leaves that had dropped onto our yard from the neighbor’s tree. Then, I noticed an old gentleman raking in his yard. Feeling energized by the coolness of the fall, I came outside with my son Sam and started to rake leaves in our yard. Just then, I saw the old man leave his house and get into his car. I waved happily at him, smiling, while he simply gave me an icy look before turning his back. “That’s unfriendly,” Sam said. Then two boys stopped by, introducing themselves as our neighbors. They helped us rake our leaves, making a large pile in our yard. While we were taking a rest, they warned us about “Grumpy Old Mr. Roberts”. They told us they were walking to the school bus one day, and, on a whim, they jumped into the leaves that Grumpy Old Mr. Roberts had raked into a sweet mountain next to the bus pickup. The old man had hidden dog shit in the leaves. “I guess he doesn’t want anyone to jump into his leaves,” I said. Rolling their eyes, they said, “He doesn’t want anyone in his life.” After they left, I wondered how I would feel if I was old and alone. Sam and I decided to befriend Grumpy Old Mr. Roberts. Carrying cookies, we went to visit him. We knocked twice and put smiles on our faces. “What do you want?” he asked, as if we were selling him something. We introduced ourselves and offered him the cookies. But he refused and closed his door. A few days later, it was time to do more raking. The neighbor’s tree had dropped so many leaves that it took us long to finish our yard, but I wanted our pile to be bigger so the kids could play for more fun. So I walked to Grumpy Old Mr. Roberts’ door, asking, “May we rake your yard?” He looked quite surprised but said, “I suppose so, but I will not be paying you anything.” Para 1: I assured him we wouldn’t ask for money. ___________________ Para 2: I was amazed to see Grumpy Old Mr. Roberts pretending to swim in the leaves with the boys. ______________________ 先读懂原文:谁是主角?发生了什么? 人物关系 核心冲突 善意 碰壁 Grumpy Old Mr. Roberts 坏脾气的独居 老人 两个男孩 邻居小孩, 曾因跳进老 人的树叶堆 而被老人用 狗屎报复。 我 → 新搬来的邻 居,有一个 儿子Sam 转机 一个坏脾气的老人,一群不放弃的邻居 情节梳理(五步走) 续写起点 转折 我保证不要钱 发展 我请求帮老人 耙树叶,老人 同意但不付钱 发展 我和Sam送饼干被拒 (作用:善意碰壁) (作用: 态度松动) 两个男孩警告老人 曾在树叶里藏狗屎 (作用:伏笔) 开端 我向老人挥手,老人冷眼相待 (作用:展现冷漠) 关键细节--必须读懂 2 3 1 我的真实目的 老人的雷区 逻辑结论 I wanted our pile to be bigger so th e kids could play for more fun. 他曾在树叶堆 里藏狗屎报复 帮老人耙树叶≠ 让孩子在他院子 玩 正确做法:把树 叶运到自己院子 我想扩大自己院 子的树叶堆,让孩 子们玩得更开心 极度反感别人 碰他的树叶 二、情节构思:让转变合理又有温度 第一段要完成的任务 3 5 2 3 孩子们在自己院子老人从旁观到被 的树叶堆里玩耍 为第二段"老人假 装游泳"做铺垫 紧接"不要钱" 开始帮老人耙树叶 把老人院子的树 叶运到自己院子 吸引,态度软化 观望 观看 第二段要完成的任务 2 1 具体描写老人躺在 树叶里"游泳" 孩子们欢呼、 揭示老人内心: 不是脾气坏 故事结局 +主题升华 泼树叶 只是孤独 三、十句五定法·第一段逐句规划 序号 作用标签 作用标签 英文续写内容 [紧接首句] 1 "We just want to help,"I smiled, and he stepped aside. Sam, the two boys, and I raked every corner of his yard into a huge pile. [展开动作] 2 Then we carried the leaves across to our yard, adding them to our own pile until it was enormous 【关键逻辑】 （运树叶） 运树叶→自己院子 3 Mr. Roberts watched from his porch, saying nothing,but he didn't look away. The boys jumped into our new mountain of leaves, laughing wildly, and I noticed Mr. Roberts take a few steps toward us. [情感递进] [为第二段铺垫] 老人走近→铺垫 5 十句五定法·第二段逐句规划 There he was - lying on his back in the middle of our leaf pile, [紧接首句] waving his arms and legs like a clumsy swimmer. The boys cheered and dove in next to him, showering him with leaves. He didn't shout--he laughed. [展开场景] For the first time, I saw the loneliness behind his grumpy mask. [内心揭示] From that day on, he would wave first when he saw us, and our leaf pile grew bigger every fall. [故事结局] [主题升华] I learned that sometimes the best way to reach someone is to bring their leaves — and their loneliness — into your own yard. 四、完整高分范文(背诵版) Paragraph 1 Paragraph 2 I assured him we wouldn't ask for money,."We just want to help,"I smiled, and he stepped aside. Sam, the two two boys, and I raked every corner of his yard into a into a huge pile.Then we carried the leaves across to our yard, adding them to our own pile until it was enormous. Mr. Roberts watched from his porch, saying nothing,but he didn't look away,The boys jumpe med into our new mountain of leaves, Iaughing wildly, and I noticed Mr. Roberts take a few steps toward us. I was amazed to see Grumpy Old Mr.Roberts pretending to swim in the leaves with the boys. There he was- lying on his back in the middle of our leaf pile, waving his arms and legs like a clumsy The boys cheered and dove in next to him, showering him with leaves. He didn't shout -he laughed. For the first time,I saw the loneliness behind his grumpy mask, From that day on,he would wave first when he saw us, and our leaf pile grew bigger every fall. II that sometimes the best way to reach someone is to bring their leaves -and their loneliness- into your own yard. 约175词,符合150词左右要求 五、名师技巧点拨 技巧 逻辑自洽 说明 文中示例 先把树叶运到自己院子,再让孩子们玩; 老人不喊叫反而笑 尊重人物性格和前文伏笔 情感递进 态度转变要有层次 老人从「看着」→[走近]→[躺在树叶里」→[笑」 用具体动作展示内心 stepped aside / watched /took a few steps/laughed 动作代心理 用具体动作代替心理 前后呼应 回扣前文关键词 前文「狗屎][grumpy]→后文[lonely][wave first] 升华金句 用比喻或双关收尾 bring their leaves-and their loneliness- into your own yard 六、常见错误与修改(避开这些坑) #We raked his yard #升华写成 "We carried the leaves to #老人突 然笑着说 Thank you "We should be kind to the elderly and the kids our yard." 太俗套 played in his leaves. 忽略伏笔 转变太突兀 √用具体意象(树叶、 院子)双关→有深度 先watched→再took a few steps最后laughed 忽略老人反感别人 碰他树叶的伏笔 →有层次 没有人天生是刺猬, 他只是还没遇到愿意 把他的落叶带回家的人。 The best way to reach someone is to bring their leaves - and their loneliness-into your own yard. 读后续写:在给定的轨道上,跑出自己的精彩 $