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沪教版五四七下unit 6作文专练
A blog post about volunteer experience
题目一:社区清洁志愿活动
题目:
假设你上周末参加了社区组织的清洁志愿活动。请你在你的博客上写一篇文章,记录这次经历。内容包括:
1. 活动的时间、地点和参加人员;
2. 你具体做了哪些事情(至少2件);
3. 你的感受和收获(学到了什么、想对大家说什么)。
教师思路精讲
一、题目整体分析
本题为博客文章,属于应用文中的网络日志类。博客文章的特点是:有标题、正文自然亲切、可以用第一人称、结尾可署名或日期。初一学生写博客的核心是:语言要像在和朋友分享经历一样自然,内容要真实具体,感受要发自内心。志愿活动是学生常见的实践内容,容易写出真情实感。
二、写作要点分析
第一段:介绍活动基本信息
写出活动时间(上周六上午)、地点(社区公园或街道)、参加人员(我和其他志愿者)。例如:“Last Saturday morning, I joined a community cleaning activity. About twenty volunteers, including students and adults, took part in it. We met at the community center at 9 a.m.” 信息要清楚,让读者了解活动背景。
第二段:具体做了哪些事情
至少写出2件具体的事。例如:“First, I picked up rubbish on the grass and near the flower beds. I put plastic bottles and snack bags into the rubbish bin. Second, I helped wipe the public benches and the notice board. Some volunteers also cleaned the signs and planted flowers.” 细节越多,文章越生动。
第三段:感受和收获
写出你的感受:累但开心、看到社区变干净了很有成就感、以后会继续参加等。例如:“I felt tired but very happy. When I looked back at the clean park, I felt proud of what we did. I learned that even a small act can make a big difference. I hope more people will join us and keep our community beautiful.” 结尾可以加上署名和日期。
三、语言与格式提醒
博客文章不需要像书信那样有称呼和结束语,可以直接写正文。标题写在最上方。用过去时描述已发生的事情。可以用“First, Second, Finally”来连接。结尾可以用“——Li Hua”或“Posted by Li Hua”。
重要句型与词组
· Last weekend, I had a meaningful volunteer experience.
· I joined a community cleaning activity on Saturday morning.
· We met at... and started to work at...
· First, I picked up rubbish around the park.
· Second, I helped clean the benches and signs.
· It was hard work, but I was very happy to help.
· Seeing the clean park gave me a sense of achievement.
· I learned that everyone can help make the world better.
· I will join more volunteer activities in the future.
· volunteer experience, pick up rubbish, community, a sense of achievement
高分范文
My First Volunteer Experience – Community Cleaning
Last Saturday morning, I joined a community cleaning activity. About twenty volunteers, including students, parents and some elderly people, took part in it. We met at the community center at 9 a.m. The weather was sunny and perfect for outdoor work.
We started right away. First, I picked up rubbish on the grass and near the flower beds. There were many plastic bottles, snack bags and cigarette butts. I put them all into big rubbish bags. Second, I helped wipe the public benches and the notice board. Some volunteers cleaned the signs, while others planted new flowers in the garden. We worked for two hours without a break.
I felt tired but very happy at the end. When I looked back at the clean park, I felt so proud of what we did. I learned that even small acts like picking up rubbish can make a big difference. Our community becomes a better place because of people who care. I hope more young people will join volunteer activities. Let’s work together to keep our neighborhood beautiful!
—— Li Hua
April 20th
题目二:动物收容所志愿活动
题目:
假设你周末去了一家动物收容所(animal shelter)做志愿者。请在你的博客上写一篇文章,分享这次经历。内容包括:
1. 你为什么会去动物收容所,以及那里的基本情况;
2. 你在那里具体做了哪些事情(至少2件);
3. 你的感受和收获,以及你想对读者说的话。
教师思路精讲
一、题目整体分析
本题为博客文章,主题是动物收容所志愿活动。与清洁活动不同,动物收容所的志愿活动更能唤起学生的爱心和同情心。初一学生写这篇博客的核心是:写出与动物互动的温暖细节,表达对流浪动物的关爱,并传递“帮助弱小”的价值观。语言要温暖、有感染力。
二、写作要点分析
第一段:介绍去收容所的原因和基本情况
写出你为什么想去(如喜欢动物、听说那里需要帮助)。再简单介绍收容所:有多少只动物、环境如何。例如:“I love animals, so I decided to spend my Sunday at an animal shelter. The shelter had about 30 dogs and 20 cats. Some of them were sick or lost.”
第二段:具体做了哪些事情
至少写出2件具体的事。例如:“First, I helped clean the dogs’ cages. I swept the floor and put fresh water in their bowls. Then, I took the dogs out for a walk in the yard. They were so excited to run and play. Finally, I fed the cats and gently brushed their fur.” 细节要温暖、有画面感。
第三段:感受和收获
写出你的感受:心疼流浪动物、为能帮助它们感到开心、希望更多人领养等。例如:“I felt sad when I saw some animals looking lonely, but I was happy to give them love and care. I learned that animals need us just like we need them. I hope more people will adopt pets instead of buying them. If you cannot adopt, you can always volunteer.” 结尾鼓励读者行动起来。
三、语言与格式提醒
博客文章标题要吸引人。用过去时描述活动内容。可以加入自己的内心感受,让文章更真实。结尾用“——Your name”署名。
重要句型与词组
· Last Sunday, I had an unforgettable volunteer experience at an animal shelter.
· I love animals, so I wanted to do something to help them.
· The shelter had many dogs and cats waiting for a home.
· First, I cleaned the cages and gave them fresh water.
· Then I took them out for a walk and played with them.
· Some of them were shy, but after a while, they came to me.
· Seeing their happy tails made me feel warm inside.
· I learned that every small act of kindness matters.
· If you love animals, please consider volunteering or adopting.
· animal shelter, stray animals, clean cages, take for a walk, adopt
高分范文
A Day at the Animal Shelter – My Volunteer Story
Last Sunday, I spent the whole afternoon volunteering at an animal shelter. I love animals, especially dogs and cats. When I heard that the shelter needed helping hands, I decided to go. The shelter was a clean but simple place. It had about 30 dogs and 15 cats. Some of them looked sad, waiting for someone to love them.
I did many things there. First, I helped clean the dogs’ cages. I swept the floor and put fresh water and food in their bowls. Then I took three dogs out for a walk in the small yard. They were so happy to run and sniff around. One little brown dog kept jumping up to lick my hand. After that, I went to the cat room. I gently brushed their fur and played with a string with them. Some cats were shy, but slowly they came close to me.
I felt both sad and happy. I was sad because so many lovely animals had no home. But I was also happy because I could give them some love and care for a few hours. I learned that we don’t need to do big things to help. Small acts like playing with a lonely dog or cleaning a cage mean a lot to them. If you love animals, please think about volunteering at a shelter. Or better, adopt a pet and give it a forever home. Every animal deserves to be loved.
—— Li Hua
May 10th
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