新仁爱版八下 Unit10 单元作文训练【趣味课堂】英语新教材仁爱科普版八年级下册

新仁爱版八下 Unit 10 World in the Cloud 单元作文训练 Reading for Writing Online learning experiences Activity 3 Draw a chart about your online learning experiences, and then draft your essay. The phrases and sentence patterns may help you. Useful phrase Useful sentence pattern start a new journey explore online courses be amazed by ... connect with ... His life changed after ... What’s more, ... Besides, ... The internet opens the door to ... 一、Pre - writing（写前准备） 1. 明确任务：围绕自己的网络学习经历展开写作，按学习方式分类（在线课程、信息获取、交流沟通）描述自己如何利用互联网学习，体现合理使用互联网的意识。 2. 细节梳理：制作细节分类图表，从网络学习、获取信息、交流沟通等维度，梳理自己的网络学习活动细节，为写作积累素材。 Aspect 方面 Details 细节 Online Learning 网络学习 take online English courses on weekends; watch science videos; read e-books in e-library Information 获取信息 search for facts about animals; read news about environmental protection; learn about latest space discoveries Communication 交流沟通 ask teachers questions via WeChat; join online English corner; chat with pen pals from other countries Feeling & Lesson 感受与启示 The internet opens the door to a new world; learn to use it properly; not waste time on unimportant things 二、While - writing（写作过程） Step 1：审题 · 主题：描述自己的网络学习经历 + 如何合理使用互联网。 · 时态：一般现在时。 · 人称：第一人称 I / my。 · 要点布局： 4. 开头：交代自己的身份、如何开始利用互联网学习。 4. 中间：描述在网上学习的多种方式（课程、信息获取、交流等）。 4. 结尾：互联网对学习带来的帮助、自己的收获以及合理使用互联网的认识。 Step 2：列提纲 · Title（标题）：My Online Learning Experiences · Beginning（开头）I am a middle school student. My life changed after I started using the internet to help with my study. · Body（主体）： Online learning: take online courses, watch science videos, read e-books Information: search for facts, read news, learn about space discoveries Communication: ask teachers questions, join English corner, chat with pen pals · End（结尾）：The internet opens the door to a new world. I learn to use it properly. Step 3：拟稿 依据提纲，填充内容。 写开头段 (Introduction) - 1 min • 核心任务：介绍自己，点明线上学习带来的变化。 • 模板句型： a. I am a Grade 8 student. My life changed after I started using the internet for study. b. Like Feiyang, I also have a new journey of study on the internet. 开头段示范： I am a middle school student. My life changed after I started using the internet to help with my study. 写中间段 (Body) - 5 mins • 核心任务: 分点描述线上学习、获取信息、交流三方面的经历, 使用连接词。 • 模板句型： a. First, I explore online learning in many ways. I often... b. What’s more, the internet helps me get lots of useful information. I can... c. Besides, I use the internet to communicate with others. I... 中间段示范： First, I explore online learning in many ways. I take online English courses every weekend and watch science videos to learn more about nature. What’s more, the internet helps me get lots of useful information. I search for facts about animals for my biology projects and read news about environmental protection. Besides, I use the internet to communicate with others. I ask my teachers questions via WeChat and join an online English corner to practice speaking. 写结尾段 (Conclusion) - 2 mins • 核心任务：总结全文，点明互联网的意义。 • 模板句型： a. The internet opens the door to a new world for me too. b. I believe the internet is a great helper if we use it properly. 结尾段示范： The internet opens the door to a new world for me too. It helps me learn more and connect with more people. I know I should use it in a proper way to make my study better. Step 4：（示例） My Online Learning Experiences I am a middle school student. My life changed after I started using the internet to help with my study. First, I explore online learning in many ways. I take online English courses every weekend and watch science videos to learn more about nature. I also read e-books in the school library app when I don’t have my paper books with me. What’s more, the internet helps me get lots of useful information. I search for facts about animals for my biology projects and read news about environmental protection. Sometimes, I even learn about the latest space discoveries online. Besides, I use the internet to communicate with others. I ask my teachers questions via WeChat when I’m stuck on homework, and I join an online English corner to practice speaking with students from other cities. I even have a pen pal from Canada, and we chat online about our school life. The internet opens the door to a new world for me too. It helps me learn more and connect with more people. I know I should use it in a proper way to make my study better. 三、Post - writing（写后完善） 1. 评价标准（满分 15 分） 内容（6 分）： - 6-5分：完整涵盖网络学习、获取信息、交流沟通等方面，内容详细、贴合主题。 - 4-3分：包含主要要点，但细节欠缺。 - 2-0分：要点缺失多，或偏离主题。 语言（5 分）： - 5-4分：语法正确，词汇、短语运用恰当，句子多样，表达流畅。 - 3-2分：有少量语法错误，词汇短语基本表意，句子结构较单一。 - 1-0分：语法错误多，词汇误用频繁，句子混乱。 结构（2 分）： - 2-1.5分：开头结尾合理，主体层次清晰，过渡自然。 - 1.4-1分：结构基本完整，但衔接生硬，层次不突出。 - 0.9-0分：结构混乱。 书写（2 分）： - 2-1.5分：书写工整，卷面整洁，无涂改，格式规范。 - 1.4-1分：书写较工整，有少量涂改，基本不影响辨认。 - 0.9-0分：书写潦草，涂改多，难以辨认。 2. 作文打分示例（以文中最终稿为例 ） - 内容：完整涵盖背景、行动、感悟，得6分。 - 语言：语法正确，运用丰富短语句式，得5分。 - 结构：开头点题，主体分明，结尾有力，得2分。 - 书写：假设工整整洁，得2分。 单元作文・写作方法指导 —— 如何运用“细节分类”的思维技巧写好一篇英语作文 本单元的写作主题是互联网。正如我们所知，互联网已经广泛地运用于我们的工作、学习和生活。本单元以读促写部分，作者运用“细节分类”的思维技巧，从三个方面（网上学习、了解信息科技、沟通交流）介绍中学生飞阳如何利用互联网提升学习，让文章既有条理又内容丰富。下面我们具体学习如何运用细节分类的思维技巧来写英语作文。 1. 分解主题 把互联网的用途分为几个大的方面，例如： - 学习 (Online Learning) - 获取信息 (Getting Information) - 交流沟通 (Communication) 2. 为每个部分添加细节 以“学习”为例，我们可以细分为具体的活动： - 学习 (Learning) - 参加在线课程 (Take online courses) - 在电子图书馆阅读 (Read in the e-library) - 加入学习小组 (Join online study groups) 3. 用细节分类的思维技巧构建一篇作文 - 开头 (Introduction)：说明网络的重要性以及它如何改变了你的学习。 The internet is changing the world. My life changed after I started using it to study. - 主体 (Body)：分类介绍你如何利用网络。 First, I explore online learning. I take online English courses and read e-books. What's more, the internet helps me get useful information. I can find answers to my questions and learn about the latest science news. Besides, I use the internet to communicate with others. I ask my teachers questions on WeChat and chat with my pen pals. - 结尾 (Conclusion)：总结全文，升华主题。 In short, the internet opens the door to a new world for me. However, I must use it wisely and properly to make my life easier and more colorful. 4. 避免常见错误 - 细节与主题无关 - 细节过于笼统 - 细节堆砌无重点 - 细节之间无过渡 综上所述，细节分类的思维技巧能让我们写作思路更清晰，内容更充实，观点更明确。 写作典例指导 以“网络学习经历”为例 请你根据以下提示，写一篇关于自己网络学习经历的短文。 要求： 1. 短文应包含标题。   2. 开头介绍自己如何使用网络学习。   3. 中间部分按类别介绍网络学习的活动(如：在线课程、电子阅读、信息搜索、交流沟通等)。   4. 结尾总结网络带来的收获和感受。   5. 正确运用所学词汇和句型。   参考词汇：   - explore online courses   - e-library   - be amazed by   - find answers to questions   - communicate with   - connect with   - open the door to   _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 审主题：网络学习经历 审体裁：记叙文 审时态：一般现在时 审人称：第一人称 I / my 思路导引 段落 内容规划 示例表述方向 开头 介绍自己如何使用网络学习 Now I often study on the Internet. I use my phone to learn new things and search for information. 中间 1. 在线课程 First, I explore online courses. I can learn English and science anytime. 2. 电子阅读 Second, I read books in the e-library. It's free and convenient. 3. 信息搜索 Third, I find answers to my study questions online. I'm amazed by how much I can learn. 4. 交流沟通 Besides, I communicate with my classmates online. We discuss problems and share ideas. I also connect with students from other places. 结尾 总结收获和感受 Studying online opens the door to a new world. It makes my study easier and more fun. I enjoy it very much. 词句积累 词汇 在线课程：explore online courses, take online English courses, watch science videos, learn...anytime 电子阅读：e-library, read e-books, free and convenient, school library app 信息搜索：search for information, find answers to questions, be amazed by, learn about the latest news 交流沟通：communicate with, connect with, discuss problems, share ideas, via WeChat, online English corner, pen pal 句子 ・开头句：Now I often study on the Internet. / My life changed after I started using the internet to help with my study. ・中间句：First, I explore online courses. / Second, I read books in the e-library. / Third, I find answers to my study questions online. / Besides, I communicate with my classmates online. ・结尾句：Studying online opens the door to a new world. / It makes my study easier and more fun. / I know I should use it in a proper way. 佳作展示 My Experience of Studying on the Internet Now I often study on the Internet. I use my phone to learn new things and search for information. First, I explore online courses. I can learn English and science anytime. Second, I read books in the e-library. It's free and convenient. Third, I find answers to my study questions online. I'm amazed by how much I can learn. Besides, I communicate with my classmates online. We discuss problems and share ideas. I also connect with students from other places. Studying online opens the door to a new world. It makes my study easier and more fun. I enjoy it very much. 名师点评 1. 结构清晰：文章按照“开头介绍 → 在线课程 → 电子阅读 → 信息搜索 → 交流沟通 → 结尾总结”的顺序展开，逻辑性强，层次分明。 1. 内容充实：完整涵盖了题目要求的要点（在线课程、电子阅读、信息搜索、交流沟通），并使用了“free and convenient”、“discuss problems and share ideas”等词对要点进行了合理拓展。 1. 语言表达： - 时态运用准确：全文以一般现在时为主，符合描述习惯性行为的要求。 - 句式丰富：运用了 First, Second, Third, Besides 等连接词，使文章更连贯。 - 亮点词汇：运用了“explore online courses”、“e-library”、“be amazed by”、“communicate with”、“connect with”、“open the door to”等亮点短语，提升了文章档次。 写作训练（以“合理使用互联网”短文为例） 以How to Use the Internet Wisely为题，根据本单元所学内容，写一篇80词左右的短文。 要点： 1. 互联网很有用，可帮助学习、查找信息、上网课； 2. 过度使用有害健康、影响学习； 3. 合理使用：控制时间、保护个人信息、不回复不良信息、求助家长和老师。 要求：语句通顺，语法正确，覆盖所有要点。 ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 一、话题词汇储备 -互联网用途类：search for useful information, take online courses, learn new skills, make study easier -过度使用危害类：be bad for health, hurt eyes, fall behind others, waste time -合理使用类：use the Internet wisely, control online time, protect personal information, don’t reply to bad messages, ask parents or teachers for help -感受建议类：It’s important to..., We should..., First/Second/Third 二、佳句仿写 1. 【原句参考】 The Internet is very useful for us students. （互联网对我们学生非常有用。） → 仿写：互联网对我们学习新技能非常有帮助。[The Internet is very helpful for us to learn new skills.] 2. 【原句参考】 We can use it to search for useful information. （我们可以用它来搜索有用的信息。） → 仿写：我们可以用它来和世界各地的朋友交流。[We can use it to communicate with friends around the world.] 3. 【原句参考】 But too much online time is bad for our health and study. （但是过多的上网时间对我们的健康和学习有害。） → 仿写：但是玩太多电脑游戏对我们的眼睛有害。[But playing too many computer games is bad for our eyes.] 4. 【原句参考】 It hurts our eyes and makes us fall behind others. （它伤害我们的眼睛，让我们落后于他人。） → 仿写：它浪费我们的时间，让我们感到疲惫。[It wastes our time and makes us feel tired.] 5. 【原句参考】 If we have problems, we can ask parents or teachers for help. （如果我们有问题，我们可以向父母或老师求助。） → 仿写：如果我们收到不良信息，我们可以向父母或老师求助。[If we get bad messages, we can ask parents or teachers for help.] 三、完整范文（示例 ） How to Use the Internet Wisely The Internet is very useful for us students. We can use it to search for useful information, take online courses and learn new skills. It makes our study easier. But too much online time is bad for our health and study. It hurts our eyes and makes us fall behind others. We should use the Internet wisely. First, control our online time. Second, protect our personal information. Third, don’t reply to bad messages. If we have problems, we can ask parents or teachers for help. In a word, the Internet itself is not good or bad. As long as we use it in a right and careful way, it can become a good helper for our study and life, and help us grow better. 四、名师点评 1. 结构清晰：文章按照“开头点明互联网的益处 → 中间论述过度使用的危害 → 结尾介绍合理使用的方法”的顺序展开，要点齐全，条理清晰。第一段总起，第二段转折论述危害，第三段用First/Second/Third分点介绍方法，逻辑严密。 1. 内容充实：准确涵盖了题目所给的三个要点（互联网的益处、过度使用的危害、合理使用的方法），并使用了“hurts our eyes”、“makes us fall behind”等词对要点进行了合理拓展。 1. 语言表达： -时态运用准确：全文以一般现在时为主，符合说明文要求。 - 句式丰富：运用了“but”连接的转折句、“if”引导的条件状语从句等。 - 亮点词汇：运用了“search for useful information”、“take online courses”、“is bad for”、“protect our personal information”等亮点短语，提升了文章档次。 1 / 14 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 新仁爱版八下 Unit 10 World in the Cloud 单元作文训练 Reading for Writing Online learning experiences Activity 3 Draw a chart about your online learning experiences, and then draft your essay. The phrases and sentence patterns may help you. Useful phrase Useful sentence pattern start a new journey explore online courses be amazed by ... connect with ... His life changed after ... What’s more, ... Besides, ... The internet opens the door to ... 一、Pre - writing（写前准备） 1. 明确任务：围绕自己的网络学习经历展开写作，按学习方式分类（在线课程、信息获取、交流沟通）描述自己如何利用互联网学习，体现合理使用互联网的意识。 2. 细节梳理：制作细节分类图表，从网络学习、获取信息、交流沟通等维度，梳理自己的网络学习活动细节，为写作积累素材。 Aspect 方面 Details 细节 Online Learning 网络学习 take online English courses on weekends; watch science videos; read e-books in e-library Information 获取信息 search for facts about animals; read news about environmental protection; learn about latest space discoveries Communication 交流沟通 ask teachers questions via WeChat; join online English corner; chat with pen pals from other countries Feeling & Lesson 感受与启示 The internet opens the door to a new world; learn to use it properly; not waste time on unimportant things 二、While - writing（写作过程） Step 1：审题 · 主题：描述自己的网络学习经历 + 如何合理使用互联网。 · 时态：一般现在时。 · 人称：第一人称 I / my。 · 要点布局： 4. 开头：交代自己的身份、如何开始利用互联网学习。 4. 中间：描述在网上学习的多种方式（课程、信息获取、交流等）。 4. 结尾：互联网对学习带来的帮助、自己的收获以及合理使用互联网的认识。 Step 2：列提纲 · Title（标题）：My Online Learning Experiences · Beginning（开头）I am a middle school student. My life changed after I started using the internet to help with my study. · Body（主体）： Online learning: take online courses, watch science videos, read e-books Information: search for facts, read news, learn about space discoveries Communication: ask teachers questions, join English corner, chat with pen pals · End（结尾）：The internet opens the door to a new world. I learn to use it properly. Step 3：拟稿 依据提纲，填充内容。 写开头段 (Introduction) - 1 min • 核心任务：介绍自己，点明线上学习带来的变化。 • 模板句型： a. I am a Grade 8 student. My life changed after I started using the internet for study. b. Like Feiyang, I also have a new journey of study on the internet. 开头段示范： I am a middle school student. My life changed after I started using the internet to help with my study. 写中间段 (Body) - 5 mins • 核心任务: 分点描述线上学习、获取信息、交流三方面的经历, 使用连接词。 • 模板句型： a. First, I explore online learning in many ways. I often... b. What’s more, the internet helps me get lots of useful information. I can... c. Besides, I use the internet to communicate with others. I... 中间段示范： First, I explore online learning in many ways. I take online English courses every weekend and watch science videos to learn more about nature. What’s more, the internet helps me get lots of useful information. I search for facts about animals for my biology projects and read news about environmental protection. Besides, I use the internet to communicate with others. I ask my teachers questions via WeChat and join an online English corner to practice speaking. 写结尾段 (Conclusion) - 2 mins • 核心任务：总结全文，点明互联网的意义。 • 模板句型： a. The internet opens the door to a new world for me too. b. I believe the internet is a great helper if we use it properly. 结尾段示范： The internet opens the door to a new world for me too. It helps me learn more and connect with more people. I know I should use it in a proper way to make my study better. Step 4：（complete your essay） My Online Learning Experiences ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________单元作文・写作方法指导 —— 如何运用“细节分类”的思维技巧写好一篇英语作文 本单元的写作主题是互联网。正如我们所知，互联网已经广泛地运用于我们的工作、学习和生活。本单元以读促写部分，作者运用“细节分类”的思维技巧，从三个方面（网上学习、了解信息科技、沟通交流）介绍中学生飞阳如何利用互联网提升学习，让文章既有条理又内容丰富。下面我们具体学习如何运用细节分类的思维技巧来写英语作文。 1. 分解主题 把互联网的用途分为几个大的方面，例如： - 学习 (Online Learning) - 获取信息 (Getting Information) - 交流沟通 (Communication) 2. 为每个部分添加细节 以“学习”为例，我们可以细分为具体的活动： - 学习 (Learning) - 参加在线课程 (Take online courses) - 在电子图书馆阅读 (Read in the e-library) - 加入学习小组 (Join online study groups) 3. 用细节分类的思维技巧构建一篇作文 - 开头 (Introduction)：说明网络的重要性以及它如何改变了你的学习。 The internet is changing the world. My life changed after I started using it to study. - 主体 (Body)：分类介绍你如何利用网络。 First, I explore online learning. I take online English courses and read e-books. What's more, the internet helps me get useful information. I can find answers to my questions and learn about the latest science news. Besides, I use the internet to communicate with others. I ask my teachers questions on WeChat and chat with my pen pals. - 结尾 (Conclusion)：总结全文，升华主题。 In short, the internet opens the door to a new world for me. However, I must use it wisely and properly to make my life easier and more colorful. 4. 避免常见错误 - 细节与主题无关 - 细节过于笼统 - 细节堆砌无重点 - 细节之间无过渡 综上所述，细节分类的思维技巧能让我们写作思路更清晰，内容更充实，观点更明确。 写作典例指导 以“网络学习经历”为例 请你根据以下提示，写一篇关于自己网络学习经历的短文。 要求： 1. 短文应包含标题。   2. 开头介绍自己如何使用网络学习。   3. 中间部分按类别介绍网络学习的活动(如：在线课程、电子阅读、信息搜索、交流沟通等)。   4. 结尾总结网络带来的收获和感受。   5. 正确运用所学词汇和句型。   参考词汇：   - explore online courses   - e-library   - be amazed by   - find answers to questions   - communicate with   - connect with   - open the door to   _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 审主题：网络学习经历 审体裁：记叙文 审时态：一般现在时 审人称：第一人称 I / my 思路导引 段落 内容规划 示例表述方向 开头 介绍自己如何使用网络学习 Now I often study on the Internet. I use my phone to learn new things and search for information. 中间 1. 在线课程 First, I explore online courses. I can learn English and science anytime. 2. 电子阅读 Second, I read books in the e-library. It's free and convenient. 3. 信息搜索 Third, I find answers to my study questions online. I'm amazed by how much I can learn. 4. 交流沟通 Besides, I communicate with my classmates online. We discuss problems and share ideas. I also connect with students from other places. 结尾 总结收获和感受 Studying online opens the door to a new world. It makes my study easier and more fun. I enjoy it very much. 词句积累 词汇 在线课程：explore online courses, take online English courses, watch science videos, learn...anytime 电子阅读：e-library, read e-books, free and convenient, school library app 信息搜索：search for information, find answers to questions, be amazed by, learn about the latest news 交流沟通：communicate with, connect with, discuss problems, share ideas, via WeChat, online English corner, pen pal 句子 ・开头句：Now I often study on the Internet. / My life changed after I started using the internet to help with my study. ・中间句：First, I explore online courses. / Second, I read books in the e-library. / Third, I find answers to my study questions online. / Besides, I communicate with my classmates online. ・结尾句：Studying online opens the door to a new world. / It makes my study easier and more fun. / I know I should use it in a proper way. 写作训练（以“合理使用互联网”短文为例） 以How to Use the Internet Wisely为题，根据本单元所学内容，写一篇80词左右的短文。 要点： 1. 互联网很有用，可帮助学习、查找信息、上网课； 2. 过度使用有害健康、影响学习； 3. 合理使用：控制时间、保护个人信息、不回复不良信息、求助家长和老师。 要求：语句通顺，语法正确，覆盖所有要点。 ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 一、话题词汇储备 -互联网用途类：search for useful information, take online courses, learn new skills, make study easier -过度使用危害类：be bad for health, hurt eyes, fall behind others, waste time -合理使用类：use the Internet wisely, control online time, protect personal information, don’t reply to bad messages, ask parents or teachers for help -感受建议类：It’s important to..., We should..., First/Second/Third 二、佳句仿写 1. 【原句参考】 The Internet is very useful for us students. （互联网对我们学生非常有用。） → 仿写：互联网对我们学习新技能非常有帮助。 ______________________________________________________________________. 2. 【原句参考】 We can use it to search for useful information. （我们可以用它来搜索有用的信息。） → 仿写：我们可以用它来和世界各地的朋友交流。 ______________________________________________________________________. 3. 【原句参考】 But too much online time is bad for our health and study. （但是过多的上网时间对我们的健康和学习有害。） → 仿写：但是玩太多电脑游戏对我们的眼睛有害。 ______________________________________________________________________. 4. 【原句参考】 It hurts our eyes and makes us fall behind others. （它伤害我们的眼睛，让我们落后于他人。） → 仿写：它浪费我们的时间，让我们感到疲惫。 ______________________________________________________________________. 5. 【原句参考】 If we have problems, we can ask parents or teachers for help. （如果我们有问题，我们可以向父母或老师求助。） → 仿写：如果我们收到不良信息，我们可以向父母或老师求助。 ______________________________________________________________________. 1 / 14 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $