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Analyze the story:5Rs
1. Read for characters(人物)
2. Read for conflict / problems(冲突/问题)
3. Read for plot(情节)
4. Read for emotional changes(情感变化)
5. Read for theme(主题)
1. Action—Response原则 角色A的所作、所感,引起其他角色的反应:动作和情绪
2. Conflict—Solution原则
设置问题、冲突和对应的解决方案,要有曲折起伏
3. Negative—Positive原则
情感变化,积极正能量
五句指的是三个衔接句:
①第一段首句衔接句
②第一段结尾句
③第二段首句衔接句
④一个正向结局句
⑤一个文尾升华句不一定有
←由材料(尤其原文结尾)和第一段首句得出
←逆向思维,由第二段首句反推,且需要与第二段首句衔接
一框
←由第一段框架和第二段首句得出
二框
Para 1:Determined to clear the road, the girl bent down and began to push the heavy stone with all her might._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Para 2 : Curious and excited, she knelt down immediately._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
形容词作状语
既开心又激动
既难过又沮丧
既紧张又焦虑
既担心又害怕
既坚定又自信
既惊讶又感动
既生气又失望
既疲倦又饥饿
delighted and excited
sad and frustrated
nervous and anxious
worried and scared
determined and confident
surprised and touched
annoyed and disappointed
exhausted and hungry
adj.1 and adj.2 , sb. did sth. 怀着...和...的感情,某人做...
形容词作状语
adj.1 and adj.2 , sb. did sth. 怀着...和...的感情,某人做...
她走进房间,又累又伤心。
Exhausted and sad, she stepped into the room.
她又累又伤心,走进房间,想念着她的家人。
Exhausted and sad, she stepped into the room, missing her family.
句式再升级:adj.1 and adj.2 , sb. did sth, doing sth.
Para 1:Determined to clear the road, the girl bent down and began to push the heavy stone with all her might.
尽管疲惫不堪、浑身颤抖,她依旧没有放弃。
Exhausted and trembling, she didn't give up.
adj.1 and adj.2 , sb. did sth. 怀着...和...的感情,某人做...
Para 1:Determined to clear the road, the girl bent down and began to push the heavy stone with all her might. Exhausted and trembling, she didn't give up.
她找来一根粗树枝当作杠杆,帮助她将石头挪到了路边。
She found a thick branch as a lever, which helped her move the stone to the side of the road.
善用定语从句
a sense of/a wave of/a feeling of + 情绪名词 + welled up in one’s heart/within sb 一种……的感觉涌上某人的心头
一种温暖的感觉涌上她的心头。
A wave of warmth welled up in her heart.
情感描写——万能情感句
情感描写——万能情感句
句式变形1:sb. felt a great sense of +情绪名词+ welling up in one's heart and surging through sb.
某人感到一股强烈的......感觉在内心升腾、奔涌
她感到一股强烈的恐惧,在她心中升腾,奔涌。
She felt a great sense of horror welling up in her heart and surging through her.
情感描写——万能情感句
句式变形2:At that very moment, within one's heart was a feeling of+情绪名词A, mixed with overwhelming+情绪名词B, making sb....
(在那时,某人心里充满了A和难以抑制的B,使得某人....)
在那时,我的心里充满了感激和难以抑制的兴奋,让我都说不出话来。
At that very moment, within my heart was a feeling of gratitude, mixed with overwhelming excitement, making me unable to utter any word.
Para 1:Determined to clear the road, the girl bent down and began to push the heavy stone with all her might. Exhausted and trembling, she didn't give up. She found a thick branch as a lever, which helped her move the stone to the side of the road.
她成功挪开石头的那一刻,一股自豪感涌上心头。
When she made it, a sense of pride welled up in her heart.
The moment she made it, a sense of pride welled up in her heart.
情感描写——万能情感句
with + 宾语 + 宾语补足语
(形容词、副词、介词短语
doing、done、to do)
(名词/代词)
With复合结构
泪水顺着脸颊滑落,她走开了。
With tears rolling down her face, she walked away.
Para 1:Determined to clear the road, the girl bent down and began to push the heavy stone with all her might. Exhausted and trembling, she didn't give up. She found a thick branch as a lever, which helped her move the stone to the side of the road.The moment she made it, a sense of pride welled up in her heart.
汗水顺着脸颊滑落,她后退几步,欣赏着自己的劳动成果。
With sweat rolling down her cheeks, she stepped back to appreciate her fruits of labor.
with + 宾语 + 宾语补足语
(形容词、副词、介词短语
doing、done、to do)
(名词/代词)
With复合结构
It was at that moment that sb. realized that.....
直到那时某人才意识到...
强调句型
直到那时他才意识自己的行为是不道德的。
It was at that moment that he realized that his behaviour was immoral.
Para 1:Determined to clear the road, the girl bent down and began to push the heavy stone with all her might. Exhausted and trembling, she didn't give up. She found a thick branch as a lever, which helped her move the stone to the side of the road.The moment she made it, a sense of pride welled up in her heart. With sweat rolling down her cheeks, she stepped back to appreciate her fruits of labor.
就在那一刻,她发现石头原来的位置下方藏着东西。
It was at that moment that she realized there was something under the original spot of the stone.
It was at that moment that sb. realized that.....
直到那时某人才意识到...
强调句型
Para 1:Determined to clear the road, the girl bent down and began to push the heavy stone with all her might. Exhausted and trembling, she didn't give up. She found a thick branch as a lever, which helped her move the stone to the side of the road.The moment she made it, a sense of pride welled up in her heart. With sweat rolling down her cheeks, she stepped back to appreciate her fruits of labor.It was at that moment that she realized there was something under the original spot of the stone.
Para 2 : Curious and excited, she knelt down immediately.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Para 2 : Curious and excited, she knelt down immediately.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
就在这时,一直藏在树后的国王走了出来。他面带温和的笑容宣布,这枚金币属于搬走石头的人。
Just then, the king who hid behind the tree came out. He announced with a warm smile that the gold coin belonged to the person who had moved the stone.
善用定语从句
Doing A ,主语+谓语 B.
句式提升:非谓语结构
主语+谓语 A , doing B.
就在这时,一直藏在树后的国王走了出来。他面带温和的笑容宣布,这枚金币属于搬走石头的人。
Just then, the king who hid behind the tree came out. He announced with a warm smile that the gold coin belonged to the person who had moved the stone.
就在这时,一直藏在树后的国王走了出来,面带温和的笑容宣布,这枚金币属于搬走石头的人。
Just then, the king who hid behind the tree came out, announcing with a warm smile that the gold coin belonged to the person who had moved the stone.
Para 2 : Curious and excited, she knelt down immediately. Just then, the king who had been hiding behind the tree came out. He announced with a warm smile that the gold coin belonged to the person who had moved the stone.
为自己的冷漠感到羞愧,路人们不断地称赞这位善良的女孩。
Feeling ashamed of their coldness and indifference, passers-by praised the girl constantly.
句式提升:非谓语结构
Doing A ,主语+谓语 B.
主语+谓语 A , doing B.
Para 2 : Curious and excited, she knelt down immediately. Just then, the king who had been hiding behind the tree came out. He announced with a warm smile that the gold coin belonged to the person who had moved the stone. Feeling ashamed of their coldness and indifference, passers-by praised the girl constantly.
受到众人的表扬,女孩温柔地笑了,鼓舞着越来越多的人彼此帮助。
Praised by all the passers-by, the girl smiled softly, inspiring more people to help each other.
句式提升:非谓语结构
句式再提升:Done A ,主语+谓语 B , doing C
Para 2 : Curious and excited, she knelt down immediately. Just then, the king who had been hiding behind the tree came out. He announced with a warm smile that the gold coin belonged to the person who had moved the stone. Feeling ashamed of their coldness and indifference, passers-by praised the girl constantly. Praised by all the passers-by, the girl smiled softly, inspiring more people to help each other.
只有那时,人们才意识到真正的回报并不是金币,而是彼此真诚的心。
Only then did people realize that the true reward lay not in gold coins, but in sincere hearts for one another.
句式提升:部分倒装
Para 1:Determined to clear the road, the girl bent down and began to push the heavy stone with all her might. Exhausted and trembling, she didn't give up. She found a thick branch as a lever, which helped her move the stone to the side of the road.The moment she made it, a sense of pride welled up in her heart. With sweat rolling down her cheeks, she stepped back to appreciate her fruits of labor.It was at that moment that she realized there was something under the original spot of the stone.
Para 2 : Curious and excited, she knelt down immediately. Just then, the king who hid behind the tree came out, announcing with a warm smile that the gold coin belonged to the person who had moved the stone. Feeling ashamed of their coldness and indifference, passers-by praised the girl constantly. Praised by all the passers-by, the girl smiled softly, inspiring more people to help each other. Only then did people realize that the true reward lay not in gold coins, but in sincere hearts for one another.
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