Unit 5 Section Ⅵ Writing-【新课程学案】2025-2026学年高中英语必修第三册配套课件PPT（外研版）

该高中英语课件聚焦叙事型日记写作，以“潜水经历”为主题，通过分析范文导入，从文体要素（时间、地点、起因等）到框架结构（开头背景、主体经过、结尾感悟），再到行文逻辑与亮点表达，构建阶梯式学习支架。 其亮点在于融合语言能力与思维品质培养，通过范文解析“欲扬先抑”手法、明喻修辞及4W+1H结构，提升学生叙事逻辑与表达生动性。提能训练和随堂练笔（如补全潜水日记）强化学习能力，帮助学生掌握写作技巧，教师可直接使用系统教学资源提升效率。

　Writing Section Ⅵ 写作项目——Writing about a diving experience 本单元的写作任务是写一篇日记，记录一次假想中的潜水经历。日记常以第一人称记叙一天生活中的所见、所闻、所做或所想的事情，分叙事型、议论型、描写型和抒情型。本单元侧重训练的是叙事型日记，行文时应注意交代清楚事件发生的时间、地点、起因、经过、结果以及相关的人物、作者的感悟等。 写作技法指导 (一)品参考范文 I couldn't believe that I succeeded in diving and swam with the seals for 10 minutes! I never thought I could start an adventure under the sea before, till my parents took me to the Farne Islands and tried diving there. We were offered two choices, either wreck diving — to see the wrecked ship Somali, or scenic diving — to have a good time with the grey seals.I chose the second one because it was less challenging and I love sea animals. Diving turned out to be much less difficult than I had imagined.I just put on the instruments and followed my instructor.I was a bit scared, but my instructor told me to take it easy.At first, I could only see nothing, but when my eyes gradually adjusted to the darkness, I could see deep blue waves moving up and down, and small fishes swimming.Soon we reached the spot, and I could breathe normally. It was such a wonderful world.Before realising it, I had been in the seaweed forest surrounded by the young seals.They were eager to get close to me and dance around me.I reached out my hand to touch one of them.All of a sudden, something big appeared on my right.I turned around and almost got astonished.It was a huge male seal.I was so scared fearing it would attack me.But it just touched me lightly with its body, as if it wanted to hug me.I put my hands on its back, trying to feel its smooth skin.The world here was so quiet that it felt that time had stopped. Finally, my instructor gestured for me to go up.When I reached the surface, I had to readjust to the sunlight.What had happened just now was like a dream. (二)根据参考范文，可总结出该类文体的框架结构 (三)由范文学写作 1．学行文逻辑 范文的第一段以简短的语言交代潜水的背景、时间、地点及人物，以引起读者的关注。第二至第四段为主体部分，给出两种潜水选择，及详细介绍第二种观光潜水的经历：所做、所看、所感。第五段为结尾部分，描述了观光潜水经历的感受。范文架构合理，有效运用了4W＋1H(When, Where, Who, What和How)。 2.学情节展开 第三、第四段首句均为该段主题。 (1)第三段首句中“turned out to be much less difficult than I had imagined”承接上文，先表达a bit scared，随后借助过渡词but笔锋一转，为下文情节的展开埋下了伏笔；从“could only see nothing”，到“could see deep blue waves moving up and down, and small fishes swimming”，再到“could breathe normally”，表明作者对这次潜水由胆怯到自信的转变。整段文字语意连贯，一气呵成，寥寥数笔既描述了完整的事件，又穿插了作者的内心活动。也为接下来第四段在海底的所观、所感做好铺垫。 (2)第四段首句中“such a wonderful world”是整段的核心，接下来悉数登场的the seaweed forest, the young seals, a huge male seal，作者都不惜笔墨，极尽渲染。在描写中，既有作者单向的感官描写，也有作者和海豹之间的互动，语言通顺流畅、生动有趣。 3．学亮点表达 (1)亮点词汇 ①第三段句首中“much less difficult”统领全段情感基调，之后的潜水过程也印证了作者最初的选择是正确的，尤其是尾句中normally与首句相互呼应。 ②第四段第五句中“All of a sudden”意为“突然地，出乎意料地”，为副词性短语，相当于Suddenly，用来修饰整个句子，表示这件事发生的迅速、突然且出乎预料。使得潜水经历跌宕起伏，避免平铺直叙。 (2)亮点句式 ①第一段前两句“I couldn't believe that I succeeded ...! I never thought I could ...”采用欲扬先抑的写作手法，使情节多变，波澜起伏，形成鲜明对比，给读者留下更深刻的印象；更重要的是使作者的思想感情抒发得更加酣畅、深沉。 ②第四段倒数第三句“But it just touched me lightly with its body, as if it wanted to hug me.”使用了明喻的修辞手法，能够更生动、更深刻地描述在水下与海豹的互动，增强语言的表现力。 [提能训练|完成句子] ①Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jenny, waiting for an explanation.Embarrassed, Jenny didn't say anything.______________, dead silence fell.Then came Miss Walker's voice. 每个人都目不转睛地盯着珍妮，等待解释。珍妮很尴尬，什么也没说。一片死寂突然降临。然后传来沃克小姐的声音。 All of a sudden ②Neil ___________________ the dog which seemed to be friendly could be so fierce. 尼尔简直不敢相信，这只看起来很友善的狗竟然如此凶猛。 ③Reading this book made me feel _________________________ ___________ and finally opened my eyes to the world! 阅读这本书仿佛将我从一个漫长的睡眠中唤醒，让我终于开始睁眼看世界！ could not believe that as if I'd been woken up from a long sleep 具体写作指导 How to write about an adventure experience ——如何写一篇冒险经历 第一步： 构思谋篇 Part 1 Introduction (a brief introduction of the adventure)． Part 2 Main body(detailed process, including actions and views)． Part 3 Conclusion (personal feelings and comment). 第二步：要点表达 第一部分　 初步介绍冒险经历 1．常用词汇 ①____ v．&n.　　　　　　 潜水 ②______ v. 上船(火车、飞机等) ③________ n. 护照 ④___________ n. 申请 ⑤_______ n. 行李箱 ⑥_____ vt. 打包；包装 dive board passport application suitcase pack ⑦_______ vt. 预订 ⑧flight n. _____ ⑨insurance n. _____ ⑩baggage/luggage n. _____ ⑪settle ___ 安顿下来 ⑫take ___ 起飞 ⑬check ___ 登记入住 ⑭leave ___ 动身前往 ⑮make a trip __ 去……旅行 reserve 航班 保险 行李 in off in for to 2.常用句式 ①Last week, I, together with some tourists, took part in an adventurous outdoor trip _______________________________. 上周末，我和一些游客参加了由当地旅行社组织的户外探险旅游活动。 ②I __________________ today with my classmates. 我和我的同学们今天出去野餐了。 organized by the local travel agency went out for a picnic ③Two of my friends and I ______________________ last weekend. 上周末我和我的两个朋友去爬泰山了。 ④On May 1, I together with my parents and some of my relatives _______________________ near my hometown. 5月1日，我和我的父母以及一些亲戚去我家乡附近的一片森林探险。 went climbing Mount Tai went to explore in a forest 第二部分　冒险的详细经历 1．常用词汇 ①________　　　　　　　 适应；调节 ②______________ 在……的帮助下 ③_____________ 被……吸引 ④______________________ 下定决心做某事 adjust to with the help of be attracted by be determined to do sth. ⑤____________________ 执行救援计划 ⑥a breath ___ sea air 呼吸一下海边的空气 ⑦turn ___ sb. 向某人求助 ⑧fit ___ 相适应；相融合 ⑨___ great panic 处于极度恐慌中 ⑩keep away _____ 远离；勿靠近 carry out a rescue plan of to in in from 2.常用句式 ①The mountain was ____________ we had to climb very carefully. 这座山如此陡峭，所以我们必须非常小心地爬。 ②This was ________________________ we took many photos. 这里的风景如此美丽，所以我们拍了很多照片。 ③After lunch we went swimming near the seaside _____________ ______________________________. 午饭后我们去海边游泳。大海是蓝色的，海滩是金色的。 so steep that such beautiful scenery that where the sea was blue and the beach was golden ④It's a beautiful island, whose scenery is breathtaking.We stood on the second floor of the boat,________________________. 那是一个美丽的岛屿，风景美得令人窒息。我们站在船的第二层，欣赏着大海的景色。 ⑤After that, we explored the virgin forest, experiencing the panic of getting lost and the excitement of __________________. 在那之后，我们深入原始森林探险，即经历了迷路时的恐慌又体验了找到出路的兴奋。 enjoying the view of the sea finding our way out 第三部分 　对冒险经历作出评价 1．常用词汇 ①__________ adj.　　　　 给人深刻印象的 ②________ adj. 壮丽的；辉煌的；极好的 ③_________ adj. 令人满意的 ④__________________________________________ 使某人印象深刻 impressive splendid satisfying leave a deep impression on sb./impress sb.deeply ⑤____________________ 成就感 ⑥overcome difficulties ________ ⑦appeal to ... ______________ ⑧have a good view of ________ ⑨safe and sound ________ ⑩broaden one's mind ________ a sense of achievement 克服困难 对……有吸引力 一览无余 安然无恙 拓宽思维 2．常用句式 ①I ____________________________ today. 我今天玩得很高兴。 ②____________ it broadened my horizons but it also has built up my body. 它不仅拓宽了我的视野，还锻炼了我的身体。 had a good time/enjoyed myself Not only has ③_____________________________, we felt very excited because we had experienced a real adventure. 虽然大家都很累，但我们都感觉很兴奋，因为我们经历了一次真正的冒险。 ④After this trip, we ______________________________ of protecting nature.这次旅行之后，我们更加意识到保护自然的重要性。 Although everyone was very tired are more aware of the importance 随堂针对练笔   假定你是李华，6月16日下午你和你的家人去三亚旅游，生平第一次潜水使你很激动。请你写一篇日记，记述潜水的经历，内容包括： 1．介绍潜水中的所见、所想； 2．说明潜水的感受。 注意：1.写作词数应为80左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 根据括号内的汉语提示补全作文： 16 June, Friday Sunny It was a day of pure magic. I ①_______________________ (去海底潜水) near Sanya with my family this afternoon. The first thing ②____________________ (我注意到的) was all the vivid colours surrounding me. It is the fantastic corals which were shaped like fans, plates, mushrooms, the branches of trees and the went diving under the sea that I became aware of horns of deer that impressed me most. And ③____________________ _____________________________________________ (各种各样小巧优雅的鱼在珊瑚里面和周围游来游去). However, some big creatures were ④____________________________________________________ (如此危险以至于我不被允许离它们太近)． From the experience, ⑤____________ (我意识到) the amazing underwater world is waiting for us to explore. all kinds of small and elegant fish were swimming in and around the corals so dangerous that I wasn't permitted to get too close to them I realize that 写作素材储备 冒险经历之露营遇熊 Tom supported himself upon a tree and observed his unexpected visitor. The bear was obviously a fighter, for the black of his coat had become brown with age. There was confidence in his small, twinkling eyes. Terrified as Tom was, he must save himself. He started running around the campfire, the bear chasing after him. He was close to desperation when the tent fell down onto the burning fire, with the bear trapped inside. He then witnessed the burning tent racing in the direction of the lake, disappearing. 汤姆靠在一棵树上观察这位不速之客。这只熊显然是一个斗士，因为它黑色的皮毛随着年龄的增长已经变成了棕色。他那双闪闪发光的小眼睛里充满了自信。汤姆虽然吓坏了，但他必须自救。他开始绕着篝火跑，熊在后面追着他。就在他快要绝望的时候，帐篷倒在了熊熊燃烧的篝火上，熊被困在里面。然后，他目睹了燃烧的帐篷向湖的方向飞奔而去，消失了。 课时跟踪检测 一、写作专项训练 Ⅰ.完成句子(共4空，8分) 1．During the trip, we first explored the mysteries of the ancient city Loulan,_______________________________.在旅途中，我们首先探索了古城楼兰的奥秘，极大地满足了我们的好奇心。 which greatly satisfied our curiosity 2．Not only did the adventurous trip ________________________ _________________________ of travelling, but it also provided us a sense of achievement.这次探险旅行带给我们的不仅是一次体验探险刺激的机会，而且还有成就感。 3．I ________________ this unforgettable experience and realize that _______________ wins us the respect from others. 我从这次难忘的经历中受益匪浅，我意识到正是诚实为我们赢得了别人的尊重。 provide us the opportunity to experience the excitement benefit a lot from it is honesty that Ⅱ.应用文写作(15分) 假定你是李华，请你写一篇英文日记，讲述你上周日参加学校组织的去中山公园秋游的经历。 要点如下： 1．活动目的；　2.活动介绍；　3.你的感受。 注意：1.写作词数应为80左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考范文： 8 October, Sunday Sunny To help students relax, our school organized an autumn outing to Zhongshan Park today. At 8：10 am, my classmates and I met at our school gate and set off for Zhongshan Park. An hour later we got there. The scene there was of breathtaking beauty. We were free to walk around and enjoy the amazing scenery for a few hours. After lunch we were divided into groups, playing games, singing and dancing. At around 4 pm, we started to head back, tired but happy. This activity not only offered us a chance to get closer to nature, but also brought us closer to each other. Ⅲ.读后续写(15分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写一段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I was home with my two young kids, when my mind started to wander.I was reflecting on my past and couldn't help but think: Whatever happened to Kathy? Kathy lived in a tiny Canadian town and she became my pen pal when I was 13.As a girl growing up in New Zealand, I was curious to learn more about the world and Kathy's letters certainly showed me how different life could be in another country. When I was 18, the letters had petered out (逐渐减少) and we lost contact.I'd gone on to marry my husband, Paul, and start a family, but the more I thought about it, the more I missed news of Kathy's adventures.I decided to write to Kathy and knowing that her parents lived in such a small town, I addressed the letter to them and hoped for the best. Three weeks later, my heart leapt when I got an envelope postmarked from Canada.“I recognized your handwriting straightaway，” Kathy wrote to me.It turned out that, like me, she'd also married but due to health problems, she was unable to have children.Her job as a nurse kept her busy and she enjoyed helping others. Realizing how quickly life could change.I promised to keep writing to her no matter what.Her letters soon became a highlight for me, giving me the same excitement I'd felt as a 13-year-old. One day, when Paul was using the saw (锯子) to cut some wood, a splinter (尖细条) flew into the center of my right eye and I lost my sight permanently.Paul felt terrible and while it was a huge blow (打击) for me, I tried to carry on as best I could.Soon, I needed an artificial eye and received financial compensation (赔偿) as a result of the accident in our yard. One day, Paul advised “Gayel, you should use the money to do something for yourself.” “Maybe I should use it to meet Kathy，” I joked, thinking it would take a very long time and couldn't really happen.I expected Paul to be against it, but he was all for it.“That's exactly what you should do，” he insisted, knowing how much this friendship meant to me.I struggled so much inside that I tossed and turned at night.But I finally made up my mind to visit Kathy, a friend I knew well but hadn't seen for years. (上文提到作者回忆过去的时候，想起了自己儿时的朋友凯西，她们本来是笔友，结果慢慢失去了联系。经历了一次意外后，作者决心去找凯西，两人再次见面都很激动，并度过了一段难忘的时光。根据段首的句子可知续写的线索为：去找凯西→见到凯西→感动流泪→参观加拿大→作者感悟。要求逻辑通顺，情节合理。词数80左右。) So I left Paul and the kids to travel 30 hours to reach Kathy.______ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考范文： So I left Paul and the kids to travel 30 hours to reach Kathy.Of course I was nervous.We'd poured our hearts out to one another for decades but had never actually met face to face.My nerves disappeared the moment I stepped off the plane and spotted Kathy with her mother, sisters and a good friend, all waiting for me.“I'm finally here！” I choked as we hugged each other in tears.For the next 10 days, Kathy showed me the sights of Canada.As we said goodbye, I knew this wouldn't be the last time we saw each other.At that moment, I realized that even though we were separated by thousands of miles, our friendship remained, and I believed we would meet again! 二、阅读拓展训练 阅读七选五 The Science of Risk-Seeking Sometimes we decide that a little unnecessary danger is worth it because when we weigh the risk and the reward, the risk seems worth taking. ___ Some of us enjoy activities that would surprise and scare the rest of us. Why? Experts say it may have to do with how our brains work. 1 The reason why any of us take any risks at all might have to do with early humans. Risk-takers were better at hunting, fighting, or exploring. ___ As the quality of risk-taking was passed from one generation to the next, humans ended up with a sense of adventure and a tolerance for risk. So why aren't we all jumping out of airplanes then? Well, even 200,000 years ago, too much risk-taking could get one killed. A few daring survived, though, along with a few stay-in-the-cave types. As a result, humans developed a range of character types that still exists today. So maybe you love car racing, or maybe you hate it. ___ 2 3 No matter where you are on the risk-seeking range, scientists say that your willingness to take risks increases during your teenage years. ___ To help you do that, your brain increases your hunger for new experiences. New experiences often mean taking some risks, so your brain raises your tolerance for risk as well. ___ For the risk-seekers, a part of the brain related to pleasure becomes active, while for the rest of us, a part of the brain related to fear becomes active. 4 5 As experts continue to study the science of risk-seeking, we'll continue to hit the mountains, the waves or the shallow end of the pool. A．It all depends on your character. B．Those are the risks you should jump to take. C．Being better at those things meant a greater chance of survival. D．Thus, these well-equipped people survived because they were the fittest. E．This is when you start to move away from your family and into the bigger world. F．However, we are not all using the same reference standard to weigh risks and rewards. G．New brain research suggests our brains work differently when we face a nervous situation. 语篇解读：本文是一篇议论文。生活中人们对冒险的态度各不相同，有些人热爱冒险，有些人却避而远之。专家说这是因为我们的大脑工作方式不同。另外，科学研究表明，这些表现也与人类的早期活动有关。 1．选F　空前说“因为当我们权衡风险和回报时，风险好像是值得的”，由“weigh the risk and the reward”可锁定F项中的“weigh risks and rewards”，F项意为“然而，我们并不是都用同样的参考标准来衡量风险和回报”，符合上下文语境，故选F项。 2．选C　空前句意为“爱冒险者更擅长打猎、打斗或探险”，C项中的“Being better at those things”， “those things”是指打猎、打斗或探险，故C项“更擅长那些事情意味着更大的生存机会”与上文衔接紧密，符合语境。 3．选A　空前两句句意为“结果，人类形成了今天仍然存在的各种各样的性格类型。所以，可能你热爱赛车，或者可能你讨厌它”，故选A项“这都取决于你的性格”。 4．选E　空前提到“科学家们说在青少年时期你冒险的意愿增加”，而E项中的“This is when”恰好是对“teenage years”的解释，符合语境。 5．选G　由空格后一句可断定G项“新的大脑研究表明，当我们面临紧张局势时，我们的大脑工作方式不同”符合语境。 3．选A　空前两句句意为“结果，人类形成了今天仍然存在的各种各样的性格类型。所以，可能你热爱赛车，或者可能你讨厌它”，故选A项“这都取决于你的性格”。 4．选E　空前提到“科学家们说在青少年时期你冒险的意愿增加”，而E项中的“This is when”恰好是对“teenage years”的解释，符合语境。 5．选G　由空格后一句可断定G项“新的大脑研究表明，当我们面临紧张局势时，我们的大脑工作方式不同”符合语境。 本课结束 更多精彩内容请登录：www.zghkt.cn $