Unit 4 Body language 读后续写同步写作 课件-2025-2026学年高中英语人教版选择性必修第一册

Unit 4 Body language 人教版2019选择性必修第一册 读后续写 读话题写作文高二上 Module 4 Learning objectives At the end of class, you will be able to： 1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由； 2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整； 3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。 1 2 3 技法点拨 佳句仿写 目 录 CONTENTS 写作实践 3 技 法 点 拨 ： 使续写更加形象生动 01 4 续写中的动作描写应该是一连串动作过程的展示, 尤其在展示人物个性化的动作时，如果我们蜻蜓点水、一笔带过，就很难突出人物形象，也很难给人以深刻的印象，而通过细节描写展现出动作的过程，表现力便会大增。 (1)Tom knelt down and patted the dog.汤姆跪下来拍了拍狗。 (2)The singer glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing.歌手瞥了一眼观众，深吸了一口气，开始唱歌。 (3)My mother gathered me in her arms and whispered to comfort me.我妈妈搂着我，小声安慰我。 (4)He pulled out the meat, aimed at the wolf and threw it straight to the animal.他拿出肉来，瞄准狼，直接向它扔过去。 Tip1:使用动作链，动作过程化 1. 使用非谓语动词 (1)The night falling, they put up a tent, singing and chatting together happily.夜幕降临，他们支起帐篷，一起开心地唱歌聊天。 (2)Sitting on the subway, the old man stared at his phone, knitting his brows.坐在地铁上，老人盯着他的手机，皱着眉头。 (3)I cupped my hand over the phone, whispcring that I meant no harm.我用手捂住电话，低声说我没有恶意。 (4) Widening his eyes in extreme horror, Sheldon fled away, screaming.“Mom, help!”谢尔顿极度恐惧地睁大了眼睛，跑开了，尖叫道：“妈妈，救命!” Tip2:形成动作面，动作情感化 2. 使用形容词作状语 IHe finally found his way into the forest, cxhausted but excited.他终于找到了进入森林的路，疲惫却很兴奋。 3.使用介词短语 She paced to her bedroom and dressed herself with the greatest care.她踱步来到自己的寝室，精心打扮了一番。 4.使用副词或从句。 (1)The class clapped warmly as Mr Lee presented me with the reward. Tip2:形成动作面，动作情感化 4. 使用副词或从句。 (1)The class clapped warmly as Mr Lee presented me with the reward.当李老师给我发奖时，全班同学热烈鼓掌。 (2)He encouraged me and argued that I should work on the project alone.他鼓励我并主张我独自完成该课题。 (3)I gathered my couragc, and sinccrely apologized to him for my misconduct.我鼓起勇气，为自己的不当行为向他真诚地道歉。 Tip2:形成动作面，动作情感化 佳 句 仿 写： 跟着课文学佳句 02 9 细节描写 1.她的父亲轻轻地、平静地吻了一下她的脸颊。 His father kissed her on the cheek gently and calmly. 3.双臂交叉放在胸前，我盯着门看，想知道她为什么没有出现。 With arms crossed in front of my chest, I stared at the door and wondered why she didn't turn up. 2.当我们和新主人握手时，我告诉他们，他们是多么幸运。 As we shook hands with the new owners， I told them how fortunate they were. 原： With their chins on their hands, they occupy themselves by staring out of the window or up at the ceiling. 原： In countries like France and Russia, people may kiss their friends on the cheek when they meet. 原： Elsewhere, people favour shaking hands, bowing from the waist, or nodding the head when they meet someone else. 细节描写 4.她很沮丧，什么也不想做，两眼哭得通红。 Depressed, she felt in no mood to do anything. Her eyes were red from weeping. 6.根据机票预订系统显示的需求，新增航班的数量每年都在变化。 The number of the added flights varies from year to year according to the demand shown by flight ticket booking systems. 5.令我印象最深的是，我一次英语考试不及格，我双手捂脸，尴尬而失望。 What impressed me most was that I failed in an English exam, hiding my face in the hands, awkward and disappointed. 原： Just like spoken language, body language varies from culture to culture. 原： However, if a student does not bother to brush her hair and her eyes are red from weeping. then I can infer that there are deeper issues at work. 原： They may also hide their faces in their hands like they are embarrassed or ashamed. 03 写作实践: 触类旁通 12 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I had been swimming competitively for five years and was ready to quit because I felt I was horrible at it. I was often the only African American at a swim competition. I kept receiving “Honorable Mentions”. Any athlete knows that you don’t want to have a bookshelf full of “Honorable Mentions”, which you get just because you showed up. One summer day, the day before a big swim meet, I decided to break the news to my grandma that I was quitting the swim team. When I told her of my desire to quit swimming, she looked me into my face, saying firmly but warmly: “Baby, remember these words:’ A quitter never wins and a winner never quits.’ Your grandfather didn’t raise losers or quitters. You go to that swim meet tomorrow, and you swim like you are a grandchild of mine, you hear?” I was too afraid to say anything but “Yes, ma’am.” The next day we arrived at the swim meet late, missing my group of swimmers in the 15/16 age group. My coach insisted I be allowed to swim with the older group. I knew she was including me in the race so our long drive would not be wasted, and she had no expectations whatsoever that I would come in anything but eighth place and only that because there were not nine lanes. As I was mounting(走上) the board, all the other girls looked at me. I quickly noticed that these girls were here to do one thing—beat me! All of a sudden my grandma’s words rang in my head:” Quitters never win and winners never quit. You swim like you are a grandchild of mine.Quitters never win and winners never quit....” “Yes, grandma, I will swim like I am a grandchild of yours.” I said to myself. 典例赏析 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Para1: SPLASH(扑通一声)! I was swimming harder than I’d ever swum before. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Para2: Just then, cheers and claps overwhelmed me. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 22 第一步：读透文本 15 1. 主题分析 选文以参加游泳比赛为背景，讲述了“我”准备退出已经参加了五年的游泳比赛，但奶奶让作者坚持下去。第二天去参赛时却错过了自己的15/16岁年龄组赛，不得不参加更大的年龄组的比赛，当“我”登上跳板时想起了奶奶的话……“遭遇打击”、“坚持不懈”和“所愿获奖”。 2. 情节梳理：故事要素 即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的 “5W1H”。 要素 内容 who I; my grandma; my coach; the other girls when one summer’s day, the day before a big swim meet where the swim meet why I missed my group of swimming in the 15/ 16 age group and had to swim with the older 17/18 age group. what I gathered courage to compete in the older 17/ 18 age group how ? 22 第二步：构建情节 18 What’s the genre of the passage? Narration（记叙文） Argumentation（议论文） Exposition（说明文） Read for the genre 1.两段首句定第一段 续写第一段的段首语“SPLASH!I swam harder than I had ever swum before（扑通一声!我游得比以前任何时候都努力).”以及第二段的首句“It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me（就在那时，欢呼声和掌声淹没了我），”可知，第一段应写“我”的比赛全程（全力以赴十心理活动）, 以及抵达终点（touched the wall)过程中的所做、所感。 情节可以为：开始领先(After the first flip turn, had a half-body length lead over the other girls)——对手加速(they sped up and narrowed the gap)、局面落后——感到疲惫(felt tired)、奶奶的话在耳边响起(the powerful words of my grandma echoed again in my ears)[照应前文]——自我突破(used every last bit of strength to swim)到终点(touched the wall) 焦急等结果(waiting anxiously)。 2.二段首句定第二段 根据续写第二段所给首句“It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me.”可知,第二段应写“我”所取得的成绩(at the top of the list)以及教练的反应(ranto me and hugged me tightly)以及“我”的反应,动作+情感和心理like a dream.weeping tears of joy, replaced the “Honorable Mentions” on my shelf （协同首段）], 最后升华主题厂“Yes. Grandma, you're right. Quitters never win and winners neverquit.”（协同前文提到的奶奶的这句话）]。 思路点拨 SPLASH! I swam harder than I had ever swum before. After the first flip turn, I was surprised to find that I had a half-body length lead over the other girls[情感形容词+动作]· However, they soon sped up and narrowed the gap.动作链]. Halfway through the racc, the girl to my left almost drew level with me, while I already began to feel tired. At that momcnt, the powerful words of my grandma echoed again in my ears（动词+介词短语]，“Quitters never win and winners never quit.” I willed my arms and legs to keep swimming and used every last bit of strength to swim the last 50 metersr动批链士其谘语动词]， I picked up the pace as I moved closer to the finish line 动作+状语从句and every muscle in my body ached. As soon as I looked up at the screen, waiting anxiously for the result 动作+非四语动词+副词]· It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me. I saw my time on the scrcen but could hardly believe it—mine was at the top of the list! My coach ran to me and hugged me tightly when I got out of the waterc动作链+副词+状语从句]· Narrow victory as it was, I did win my first real trophy that day. Everything felt like a dream as I stood on the winner's podium, weeping tears of joyt动词+非酒语动词，Back at homc, I delightedly replaced the “Honorable Mentions” on my shelf with the new trophyr动词+副词1.“Yes. Grandma, you're right. Quitters never win and winners never quit.” 佳作展现 At the end of the lesson, I am able to： 1 2 3 4 5 plan the layout of the story( the plot is natural, and the narrative is good) use appropriate words and sentences to express what I want to write an continuation writing properly. 自我评价 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a. m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 实战演练 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Para1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Para2: The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 注：【思路点拨】见书P63页。 实战演练 Thank you for your listening $