内容正文:
沪外教七下Unit1写作精讲
A Letter to My Future Self
适用水平:七年级下册
字数要求:60—100词
教材依据:Unit 1 书信写作 + will / be going to 语法 + 主题句写作
第一步:审(审题)
1. 审任务:给未来的自己写一封信,写清两点:① 你想成为什么样的人(简单梦想/目标);② 你打算怎么做(具体小计划),并在段首用清晰的主题句点明核心。
2. 审体裁:英文书信,格式要完整:日期 → 称呼 → 正文(含主题句) → 祝福语 → 署名。
3. 审人称:全文用第一人称(I, my, me),以“我”的视角来写。
4. 审时态:
· 一般现在时:描述现在的爱好、日常(如:I like drawing.)。
· 一般将来时(will / be going to):
· be going to:写已经想好的计划(如:I am going to practice every day.)。
· will:写决心、愿望(如:I will work hard.)。
5. 审技能:要学会写主题句(段落第一句,告诉读者这段要讲什么)。
第二步:列(列提纲)
书信三段式结构(观点—经历—感受)
第一段:开头(观点)
1. 格式:
· 日期:例 18 February, 2025
· 称呼:Dear future me,
2. 内容:
· 主题句:点明我的爱好 + 我的小梦想(必须放在段首)
· 简单补充:我为什么有这个梦想
第二段:正文(经历+计划)
1. 现状:我现在为这个爱好做的小事(如:我每天画画/我喜欢读英语故事)
2. 计划:
· 用 be going to 写1个具体小计划(如:I am going to take drawing lessons.)
· 用 will 写1句决心(如:I will never give up.)
第三段:结尾(感受)
1. 寄语:对未来自己的鼓励(如:希望你不忘初心)
2. 格式收尾:
· 祝福语:Best wishes,
· 署名:你的英文名/拼音
完整提纲示例(以“画家”梦想为例)
段落
详细要点
关键词
开头
1. 日期:18 February, 2025
2. 称呼:Dear future me
3. 主题句:我喜欢画画,梦想成为一名画家
drawing, painter, dream
正文
1. 现状:我每天都画画,喜欢画身边的事物 2. 计划1:我打算报绘画课
3. 计划2:我会每天练习
draw every day, take lessons, practice, never give up
结尾
1. 寄语:希望未来的你继续热爱画画
2. 祝福语:Best wishes
3. 署名:Li Hua
keep loving drawing
第三步:连(连句成篇)
用简单的连接词把要点连成通顺的句子,符合七下水平。
常用连接词(七下重点)
· 并列:and, also
· 因果:so
· 时间:every day, after school
连句示范
1. 要点:I like drawing. I want to be a painter.
→ 升级(主题句):I love drawing and I dream of being a painter.
2. 要点:I draw every day. I like drawing flowers and trees.
→ 升级:I draw every day after school. I like drawing beautiful flowers and trees around my home.
3. 要点:I will take lessons. I will practice hard. I want to succeed.
→ 升级:I am going to take drawing lessons on weekends. I will practice hard every day. I believe I can make my dream come true.
第四步:美(美化语言)
在保证语法正确的基础上,用简单的好词好句让文章更生动。
1. 词汇升级
普通词
升级词
例句
like
love / enjoy
I love drawing.
very much
a lot
I like drawing a lot.
study hard
practice hard / work hard
I will practice hard every day.
want to be
dream of being
I dream of being a painter.
happy
happy / proud
It makes me feel proud when others like my pictures.
2. 句型升级
· 基础句:I like drawing. I want to be a painter.
→ 高分句:I love drawing, so I dream of being a painter.
· 基础句:I will practice. I want to be good at it.
→ 高分句:I am going to practice hard so that I can draw better.
· 基础句:I hope you can do it.
→ 高分句:I hope you, my future self, will never give up.
3. 格式美化
· 日期:写 18 February, 2025,注意逗号。
· 标点:称呼 Dear future me, 和祝福语 Best wishes, 后要加逗号。
· 主题句:必须放在段落第一句,清晰点明你的梦想。
第五步:查(检查纠错)
写完后逐项检查,避免扣分:
1. 格式检查:
· 确认有日期、称呼、祝福语、署名
· 确认标点、大小写正确(句首、称呼首字母大写)
· 确认主题句在段首,清晰明了
2. 语法检查:
· 确认人称一致(全程用 I / my)
· 确认时态正确(现在时讲现在,将来时讲计划)
· 确认将来时结构:be going to + 动词原形 / will + 动词原形(不要加 ing)
· 确认名词单复数正确(如:pictures, lessons)
3. 内容检查:
· 确认字数在60—100词之间
· 确认要点齐全(爱好 + 梦想 + 计划 + 鼓励)
· 确认句子简单通顺,没有重复啰嗦
完整范文
18 February, 2025
Dear future me,
I love drawing and I dream of being a painter.
I draw every day after school. I like drawing flowers and trees in the park. It makes me happy when my friends say my pictures are nice. I am going to take drawing lessons on weekends. I will practice hard to make my dream come true.
I hope you, my future self, still love drawing and never give up. Keep going!
Best wishes,
Li Hua
中文对照
2025年2月18日
亲爱的未来的我:
我喜欢画画,梦想成为一名画家。
我每天放学后都画画,我喜欢画公园里的花和树。当我的朋友说我的画很好看时,我会很开心。我打算周末去上绘画课,我会努力练习实现我的梦想。
我希望未来的你,依然热爱画画,永不放弃。继续前进!
最好的祝愿,
李华
核心素材
好词
· 爱好类:love, enjoy, be good at, be interested in
· 梦想类:dream of being, want to be, make one's dream come true
· 努力类:practice hard, work hard, never give up, keep going
· 感受类:happy, proud, excited, bring me joy
好句
1. I love ... and I dream of being a ...
2. I ... every day / after school.
3. It makes me ... when ...
4. I am going to ... (on weekends / every day).
5. I will ... to make my dream come true.
6. I hope you, my future self, will ...
简单谚语(可选)
· No pain, no gain.(一分耕耘,一分收获)
· Where there is a will, there is a way.(有志者,事竟成)
学生填空练习版
[Date]
Dear future me,
I love ________ and I dream of being a ________.
I ________ every day / after school. I like ________. It makes me ________ when ________. I am going to ________. I will ________ to make my dream come true.
I hope you, my future self, will ________. Keep going!
Best wishes,
[Your Name]
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