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满分策略4 5个加修饰的对话公式 推动情节发展
如对话在前,注意基本公式为:①对话+sb.(代词)+“说”动词+修饰成分;②对话+“说”动词+sb. (名词)+修饰成分。为了简洁,以下公式中以基本公式代替①②,该基本公式中,名词还可以是a(n) ... voice。
公式1 基本公式①/②+声音描写[介词短语 (with+情感n.+in one’s voice或in a(n) ... voice)]
※在该公式中,对声音的描写还可以用独立主格: one’s voice+形容词/非谓语动词(短语)
背“I want you to listen carefully,” he said, his voice low and calm.
“我要你仔细听,”他用低沉平静的声音说。
仿“I never expected this,” he said, in a low, worried voice.
“我从来没有料到会是这样,”他用低沉而焦虑的声调说。
公式2 基本公式①/②+情感描写[形容词(短语)/情感副词/with/in+情感n.]
背“I’m not as good as you,” said Harry, very embarrassed.
“我不如你出色,”哈利非常难为情地说。
仿“Oh, yes,” said Mr. Dursley, his heart sinking horribly. “Yes, I quite agree.”
“哦,是的,”德思礼先生说着,感到心突然往下一沉。“不错,我也这么想。”
公式3 基本公式①/②+神态/表情描写[非谓语动词/with复合结构/独立主格]
背“Are you sure?” said my nurse, raising her eyebrows as I turned down pain medicine. (Educated)
当我拒用止痛药时,护士挑眉问道:“你确定吗?”
背“Oh.” She nodded and closed her eyes, her face relaxing. (Educated)
“噢。”她点点头闭上双眼,神情舒缓下来。
仿“No,” said Shawn, his eyes cold.
“不,”肖恩说道,眼神冰冷。
公式4 基本公式①/②+肢体动作描写(非谓语动词/with 复合结构/独立主格/时间状语从句)
背“The shark?” whispered Monty, edging a little closer to Sid.
“鲨鱼?”蒙蒂低声问道,朝西德又凑近了些。
背“Ready?” Harry asked the other two, his hand on the door handle. They nodded.
“准备好了吗?”哈利用手握住门把手,问另外两人。他们俩点了点头。
仿“It’s—all—my—fault!” he sobbed, his face in his hands.
“都——怪——我!”他用手捂着脸哭泣。
公式5 基本公式①/②+心理活动描写(think/wonder/believe/hope/wish+宾语从句或if only句式)
背“Me, too,” I said happily, thinking that Katy was beginning our old game again. (Chicken Soup for the Soul)
“我也是。”我开心地说道,心想凯蒂又要开始我们以前的游戏了。
背“Tom,” she cried, “help!” No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.
“汤姆,”她喊道,“救命!” 没人回应。 要是她没有把手机放在汤姆的包里就好了。
仿“Really?” I spoke out loud. I giggled. “Why not?” I sat back, smiled and wondered whether I’d have a uniform. (Chicken Soup for the Soul)
“当真?”我脱口而出,随即咯咯笑出声来,“有何不可?”往后一靠,笑着思忖自己会不会有套制服。
语料补充 不要总用said,30个常用的“说”能使续写增色
始终
begin开始说
continue接着说
add补充说
interrupt插嘴道
repeat重复说
conclude最后说
大叫
explode大发雷霆道
scream尖叫
shout大声说
thunder怒喝
yell大叫道
roar吼道
低声/
结巴
breathe轻声说
murmur低语
whisper小声说
sigh叹息说
stammer结巴着说
gasp喘着气问
笑哭
beam满面微笑地说
tease取笑道
joke开玩笑说
weep哭着说
sob抽噎着说
choke out哽咽着说
问答
ask问道
question询问道
demand查问
answer/reply/
respond答道
promise答应说
admit承认/坦白说
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