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满分策略2 8个动作描写公式 增强动感与画面感
第1组 使用动作链,营造画面感
描写动作时, 避免用一个笼统的动作,而是将动作分解为一连串连贯的动作(2~3个),形成动作链。
公式1 主语+did A, did B and did C/主语+did A, did B, did C (,) and did D
※连词and连接三个或三个以上连贯的动作,构成动作链,动词的时态应一致。
背He hurried out from behind the bar, rushed toward Harry and seized his hand, tears in his eyes.(Harry Potter)
他连忙从吧台后边出来朝哈利跑来,抓起他的手,激动得热泪盈眶。
仿He laced up his boots, stood up, and stormed away. (I Survived the Shark Attacks)
他系紧靴带,起身,愤然离去。
公式2 主语+did A+and+did B,非谓语动词C或非谓语动词A,主语did B and did C
※连词and连接两个或两个以上的动作。非谓语动词作状语,可置于句首或句尾。
背Putting his ladder against the wall, he climbed and peered over.(《秘密花园》)
他把梯子靠在墙上,爬上去往外看。
仿Taking another deep breath, I spotted a foothold about three feet away and slid my foot into it. (Chicken Soup for the Soul)
我又深吸一口气,瞥见约三英尺外的落脚点,随即伸脚探了进去。
公式3 主语+did A, 非谓语动词B+and+非谓语动词C
※连词and连接两个或三个非谓语动词,非谓语动词部分可置于句首或句尾。
背“I think we’ve lost him,” Harry panted, leaning against the cold wall and wiping his forehead. (Harry Potter)
“我想,我们已经把他甩掉了。”哈利喘着粗气说。他靠在冰冷的墙上,擦着额头上的汗。
仿“Here!” Sid yelled, jumping up and waving his hands. (I Survived the Shark Attacks)
“这儿!”西德跳起来挥舞着手臂喊道。
第2组 适当修饰,精准化描写动作
公式4 形容词/副词(短语)/介词短语,主语+did
※形容词(短语)在句中作状语,说明主语做某个动作时的原因、结果或状态。在描写动作时,可用swiftly、hesitantly、without a second thought、without delay/hesitation等修饰。
背Unable to stand, I collapsed onto a chair in my living room. (Chicken Soup for the Soul)
我站立不稳,跌坐在客厅的椅子上。
背Without thinking, I leaned down and gave her a hug. She hugged me tightly.(人教B3)
我俯身不假思索地拥抱了她。她紧紧搂住了我。
仿Without (uttering) a word, he picked up his bag and headed toward the door.
他一言不发,拿起包,朝门口走去。
公式5 主语+did, with+名词(如身体部位名词、情感名词或tears等)+非谓语动词/介词短语/形容词/副词
背I strode into my office with a bounce in my step and a smile on my face.(Educated)
我步履轻快地大步走进办公室,脸上洋溢着笑容。
背Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking.(2024·浙江高考1月)
很快,伊娃开始呼吸急促,心脏怦怦直跳,双腿也不住地颤抖。
仿With his heart in his mouth, Kevin grabbed Mrs. Hill’s home phone and called the police.(2025·浙江高考1月)
凯文的心提到了嗓子眼儿,他抓起希尔夫人的家用电话,拨通了警察局的号码。
公式6 主语+did, 独立主格[逻辑主语(如身体部位名词、情感名词或tears等)+非谓语动词/介词短语/形容词/副词短语]
背Noah looked up at me, his blue eyes huge, and with a priceless grin signed “friends” to me. (Chicken Soup for the Soul)
诺亚抬起头来望着我,蓝眼睛睁得大大的,带着灿烂无比的笑容对我用手语比出“朋友”。
背He leans forward, jaw set, eyes narrow, searching his son’s face for some sign of agreement. (Educated)
他身体前倾,下颌紧绷,双眼微眯,仔细端详儿子的面容,试图寻找一丝认同的迹象。
仿Gazing directly at me, Blackie slowly moved forward, his tail wagging.
Blackie盯着我,摇着尾巴慢慢向前移动。
公式7 as等引导的时间状语从句,主语+did或动作链
※利用时间状语从句可以起到过渡的作用,使情节发展更顺畅,动作描写更有节奏感。时间状语从句从属连词可以是as、 when、 while、 the instant、 the moment、 the minute、 immediately等。
背The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi in the rank without a second thought. (2024·新课标Ⅰ卷)
我一下飞机,就疯狂地跑过机场大楼,毫不犹豫地跳进了排在第一位的出租车。
仿When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. (2024·新课标Ⅰ卷)
就在我即将放弃之际,冈特掏出他的小手机,拨通了朋友的电话。
公式8 主语+did或动作链, as if/though+非谓语动词/形容词/介词短语或as if/though+虚拟语气
※as if/though从句如用虚拟语气,应注意be动词用were 不用was,与过去事实相反,用过去完成时。
背When I reached for her, she directly jumped into my arms as if to say, “Pick me!” (Chicken Soup for the Soul)
当我伸手够她时,她直接跳到我怀里,好像在说:“选我!”
背He stood up, rubbed his huge body against me, and licked my hand as if in gratitude. (Chicken Soup for the Soul)
他站起来,用巨大的身体蹭了蹭我,又舔了舔我的手,似在表达感激。
背He smiled down at me, and with one hand, as if the door were as light as a feather, he pushed it open for me. (Chicken Soup for the Soul)
他低头对我微笑,用一只手将仿佛轻如羽毛般的门为我推开了。
仿The mother gorilla lifted the boy’s arm, as if checking for signs of life. (Chicken Soup for the Soul)
母猩猩抬起了男孩的手臂,好像在检查是否有生命迹象。
情境练
利用所学公式和描写肢体动作的动词(短语)(produce、 press、 reach out、 stride、 slide、 slip、 wrap)补全下面的情境片段。
如约支付车费 The instant we met at the airport, ①I strode to him, reached out and wrapped my arms around him (我大步上前,伸手紧紧抱住他,动作链). When I released him, ②I slid my hand into the bag, produced a 10 bill, and pressed it into his hand (我伸手从包里掏出一张10欧元的钞票,塞到他手里,动作链). Surprisingly, ③he swiftly slipped the money back into my bag with a shake of his head (他摇了摇头,敏捷地把钱塞回我包中,动作+修饰语). “Call me and buy me a beer next time you are in Vienna,” he said, ④smiling broadly (咧嘴一笑,非谓语). I happily nodded. (2024·新课标Ⅰ卷)
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