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Tom was in high school for half a year, yet he still didn’t adapt (适应) to the new school life. He was unwilling to communicate with others. In class, he often felt lonely among his classmates, always lost in his own thoughts. As a result, he became increasingly unhappy and his learning performance began to get worse.
Mr. Smith, the headteacher, noticed his unhappiness. One Friday afternoon, the teacher walked to him and said, “Tom, I’ve noticed that you’ve been a bit down lately. Is there anything wrong? Are you willing to share your feelings with me?” Hesitating (犹豫) for a moment, Tom said in a low voice, “I just can’t fit in here. I miss my parents and old friends so much, and it seems that I have little in common with the classmates here.” They talked for a long time that afternoon.
The next Monday, it was time for the class to change seats as usual and the headteacher asked Jack, an outgoing and helpful boy, to sit next to Tom. Jack said cheerfully, “I’d like to make friends with you.” Tom was amazed by Jack’s friendly offer, but soon felt a wave of warmth flowing through his heart. Jack started a lively conversation at once, sharing his favorite hobbies and interesting experiences. Tom, who had been so lonely before, slowly found himself responding (回应) and opening up.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
In the following days, Jack invited Tom to join in different activities. ___________________________________
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With Jack’s company and encouragement, Tom began to change. ______________________________________
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一.文本分析
1.角色:
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2.视角:
第__________________________人称视角
3.时空线:
Tom升入高中半年,无法适应新生活,不愿与人交流、内心孤独,成绩下滑→ 班主任Smith先生发现其低落,主动沟通,Tom倾诉自己思念父母朋友、无法融入班级的烦恼→ 班主任安排外向热心的Jack与Tom同桌,Jack主动示好,Tom内心感到温暖,慢慢开始回应→ (续写)Jack邀请Tom参加各种活动,帮助Tom融入→ (续写)_____________________
4.文章线索
(1)“Tom的适应过程”是核心线索,这一线索对情节发展有何作用?如何推动人物情感变化及主题凸显?
(2)“Tom的前后转变”是关键情节,这一情节为何能强化“陪伴与善意”的主题?如何塑造Tom的人物形象?
(3)“Tom的孤独沉默”“Smith先生的主动关心”“Jack的热情示好”“Tom的慢慢回应”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“Tom彻底改变”做了怎样的铺垫?
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“难以适应—倾诉烦恼—获得陪伴—尝试融入—彻底改变”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
5.情节线
难以适应:Tom升入高中半年,始终无法适应新学校生活,不愿与人沟通,课堂上孤独走神,心情越来越差,学习成绩逐渐下滑→ 倾诉烦恼:班主任Smith先生发现Tom的低落,主动与其沟通,Tom犹豫后倾诉自己思念父母、怀念旧友,无法与新同学找到共同点的烦恼,两人畅谈了一下午→ 获得陪伴:下周一换座位,班主任安排外向热心的Jack与Tom同桌,Jack主动提出交朋友,Tom既惊讶又温暖,在Jack的带动下慢慢开始回应、敞开心扉→ 尝试融入:(续写)Jack邀请Tom参加各种活动,耐心陪伴Tom,帮助他熟悉新环境、认识新同学→ (续写)
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6.情感线
Tom:刚升入高中的孤独、迷茫、抵触→ 被班主任关心后的犹豫、倾诉后的释然→ 收到Jack善意后的惊讶、温暖→ 参加活动时的拘谨、慢慢放松→ 彻底改变后的开朗、自信、愉悦→ ______________________________
Smith先生:细心、负责、友善,善于观察学生的情绪变化,主动关心帮助有困难的学生,用耐心引导Tom倾诉,展现了教师的温暖→ ___________________________
Jack:外向、热心、真诚、乐于助人,主动接纳孤独的Tom,用热情和陪伴温暖Tom,耐心引导Tom敞开心扉,是Tom融入新生活、实现转变的重要助力,展现了友谊的力量。
7.文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
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8.句式示例
宾语从句:
同位语:
状语从句:
比喻:
9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:In the following days, Jack invited Tom to join in different activities.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感转折” 提问:Jack邀请Tom参加了哪些活动?Tom的反应是什么?这一过程展现了Tom怎样的性格特点?
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何为后文Tom彻底改变、主题升华做铺垫?Tom的慢慢放松有何核心作用?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “彻底转变、主题升华” 做铺垫:__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二段提示句:With Jack’s company and encouragement, Tom began to change.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感回升” 提问:Tom发生了哪些具体的改变?这些改变体现在哪些方面?Jack的陪伴与鼓励对Tom的改变有何影响?
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:结局如何呼应“陪伴与善意、成长与融入”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
主题:
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三、段落构思
第一段:In the following days, Jack invited Tom to join in different activities.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,列举Jack邀请Tom参加的具体活动;②刻画Tom从拘谨到慢慢放松、主动参与的神态、动作和心理变化;③为后文Tom彻底改变做铺垫。
续写:
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第二段:With Jack’s company and encouragement, Tom began to change.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,具体描写Tom在学习、交往上的改变;②刻画Tom与同学、老师的互动,凸显其开朗与自信;③点明结局,凸显陪伴与善意的力量,呼应主题。
续写:
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参考答案
一.文本分析
1.角色:
Tom,Smith先生,Jack
2.视角:
第三人称视角
3.时空线:
Tom升入高中半年,无法适应新生活,不愿与人交流、内心孤独,成绩下滑→ 班主任Smith先生发现其低落,主动沟通,Tom倾诉自己思念父母朋友、无法融入班级的烦恼→ 班主任安排外向热心的Jack与Tom同桌,Jack主动示好,Tom内心感到温暖,慢慢开始回应→ (续写)Jack邀请Tom参加各种活动,带着Tom参与班级讨论、课间游戏和课后社团活动,耐心陪伴Tom,帮助他熟悉新环境、认识新同学,Tom从拘谨慢慢变得放松→ (续写)Tom在Jack的陪伴鼓励下彻底改变,变得开朗自信,主动与同学交流、向老师请教,积极参与集体活动,不仅适应了高中生活,收获了真挚的友谊,学习成绩也逐步提升,真正融入了新的班级集体。
4.文章线索
(1)“Tom的适应过程”是核心线索,串联起“Tom难以适应—倾诉烦恼—获得陪伴—尝试融入—彻底改变”的完整情节链,是推动情节发展的关键。它触发了Tom的多次情感转折,让他从孤独迷茫变得逐渐敞开心扉,从抵触逃避变得主动融入;同时也串联起班主任的关心、Jack的陪伴等关键情节,让“陪伴与善意能照亮孤独、助力成长”的主题得以凸显,让情节更具连贯性,情感更具感染力。
(2)“Tom的前后转变”是关键情节,既展现了一个内向孤独的少年,在他人的关心与陪伴下,逐渐走出困境、实现自我成长的过程,也反衬出陪伴与善意的强大力量,让“陪伴暖人心、善意促成长”的主题具象化。这一情节塑造了Tom立体的人物形象——从内向敏感、孤独迷茫到开朗自信、乐于交流,展现了他内心对友谊、对归属感的渴望,让人物更真实、更具感染力,也让读者更能感受到关心与陪伴对青少年成长的重要意义。
(3)意义:“Tom的孤独沉默”交代了他无法适应新生活的状态,奠定了故事的情感基调,也反衬出后续转变的巨大反差;“Smith先生的主动关心”是Tom转变的起点,让Tom感受到被重视、被温暖,为他敞开心扉、接受Jack的陪伴做了铺垫;“Jack的热情示好”是Tom转变的关键推动力,打破了Tom的孤独壁垒,让他感受到友谊的温暖;“Tom的慢慢回应”是他转变的重要信号,体现了他内心的松动,为后续主动参与活动、彻底改变做了铺垫。铺垫:这些细节构建了“迷茫孤独—获得关心—感受温暖—尝试改变—彻底成长”的逻辑链,让Tom的情感变化和成长过程更自然,也让班主任的关心、Jack的陪伴更具合理性,为后续的主题升华奠定了情感基础。
(4)情节推进逻辑:以“Tom的情感变化和适应过程”为内在线索,以“班主任的关心、Jack的陪伴”为外在线索,遵循“Tom升入高中难以适应、孤独低落—班主任发现后主动沟通,Tom倾诉烦恼—班主任安排Jack与Tom同桌,Jack主动示好,Tom慢慢回应—Jack邀请Tom参加活动,Tom尝试融入—Tom在陪伴下彻底改变,适应生活、收获成长”的逻辑推进。主题脉络:凸显了“陪伴是治愈孤独的良药;善意与关心能助力青少年成长;友谊能打破隔阂,给予人自信与力量;面对新环境,勇敢敞开心扉,就能收获温暖与成长”的主题脉络。
5.情节线
难以适应:Tom升入高中半年,始终无法适应新学校生活,不愿与人沟通,课堂上孤独走神,心情越来越差,学习成绩逐渐下滑→ 倾诉烦恼:班主任Smith先生发现Tom的低落,主动与其沟通,Tom犹豫后倾诉自己思念父母、怀念旧友,无法与新同学找到共同点的烦恼,两人畅谈了一下午→ 获得陪伴:下周一换座位,班主任安排外向热心的Jack与Tom同桌,Jack主动提出交朋友,Tom既惊讶又温暖,在Jack的带动下慢慢开始回应、敞开心扉→ 尝试融入:(续写)Jack邀请Tom参加各种活动,带着Tom参与班级讨论、课间的篮球游戏和课后的绘画社团活动,耐心地引导Tom参与其中,鼓励Tom大胆表达自己的想法,Tom从一开始的拘谨躲闪,慢慢变得放松,甚至能主动参与交流→ (续写)彻底成长:Tom在Jack的陪伴和鼓励下彻底改变,主动与其他同学打招呼、交流心得,课堂上积极举手发言,主动向老师请教学习上的问题,积极参与班级和社团活动,不仅收获了更多的友谊,学习成绩也逐步提升,彻底适应了高中生活,真正融入了新的集体,变得开朗而自信。
6.情感线
Tom:刚升入高中的孤独、迷茫、抵触,对新环境充满陌生感,思念父母和旧友,内心封闭→ 被班主任关心后的犹豫、试探,倾诉烦恼后的释然与轻松→ 收到Jack善意后的惊讶、温暖,内心壁垒开始松动→ 参加活动时的拘谨、羞涩,慢慢放松后的愉悦→ 彻底改变后的开朗、自信、愉悦,感受到归属感和友谊的美好,对新生活充满期待。
Smith先生:对待学生细心负责,发现Tom低落时的担忧→ 主动与Tom沟通时的耐心、友善→ 得知Tom烦恼后的理解、共情→ 安排Jack与Tom同桌时的用心、智慧,始终关注Tom的转变,看到Tom成长后的欣慰,展现了教师的温情与责任。
Jack:主动与Tom交朋友时的真诚、热情→ 陪伴Tom时的耐心、细心,发现Tom拘谨时的包容→ 鼓励Tom参与活动时的真诚、热心→ 看到Tom逐渐改变、变得开朗后的开心、欣慰,始终真诚对待Tom,用友谊的力量温暖Tom,展现了纯粹而珍贵的青春友谊。
7.文章大意概括
中文:Tom升入高中半年,始终无法适应新的学校生活,他不愿与人沟通,内心充满孤独,思念父母和旧友,心情越来越低落,学习成绩也随之下滑。班主任Smith先生发现了他的异常,主动与他沟通,Tom倾诉了自己的烦恼。随后,班主任安排外向热心的Jack与Tom同桌,Jack主动提出与Tom交朋友,用热情和陪伴温暖了孤独的Tom,Tom慢慢敞开心扉、开始回应。之后,Jack邀请Tom参加各种活动,帮助Tom融入集体。在Jack的陪伴和鼓励下,Tom彻底改变,变得开朗自信,主动与人交流,积极参与集体活动,不仅适应了高中生活,收获了真挚的友谊,学习成绩也逐步提升,实现了自我成长。
英文:Tom had been in high school for half a year, but he still couldn’t adapt to the new school life. He was unwilling to communicate with others, felt lonely among his classmates, missed his parents and old friends deeply, and became more and more unhappy, which led to a decline in his academic performance. Mr. Smith, the headteacher, noticed his abnormality and took the initiative to talk to him. Tom poured out his troubles. Later, Mr. Smith arranged Jack, an outgoing and helpful boy, to sit next to Tom. Jack actively offered to make friends with Tom, warming the lonely Tom with his enthusiasm and company, and Tom slowly opened up and began to respond. In the following days, Jack invited Tom to join in various activities to help him integrate into the class. With Jack’s company and encouragement, Tom changed completely. He became cheerful and confident, took the initiative to communicate with others, participated actively in group activities, and finally adapted to high school life, gained sincere friendship, improved his academic performance and achieved self-growth.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:Mr. Smith asked Tom if he was willing to share his feelings with him.
同位语:Jack, an outgoing and helpful boy, said cheerfully that he’d like to make friends with Tom.
状语从句:When Tom talked with Mr. Smith, he felt a wave of warmth flowing through his heart.
比喻:Jack’s friendship was like a bright light, breaking through Tom’s loneliness and guiding him to integrate into the new life.
9.主题归类
陪伴与善意:陪伴是治愈孤独的良药,善意与关心能温暖人心,帮助身处困境的人走出迷茫;无论是教师的细心陪伴,还是朋友的真诚善意,都能给人力量,促使人成长。
成长与融入:面对新环境、新挑战,难免会感到孤独与迷茫,只要勇敢敞开心扉,接受他人的帮助,主动尝试融入,就能突破自我、实现成长;青少年的成长离不开他人的陪伴与引导,也需要自身的勇敢与努力。
师生情与友谊:真挚的师生情能给予学生温暖与鼓励,帮助学生解决成长中的烦恼;纯粹的友谊能打破隔阂、治愈孤独,陪伴彼此共同成长,是青春中最珍贵的财富。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:In the following days, Jack invited Tom to join in different activities.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感转折” 提问:Jack邀请Tom参加了哪些活动?Tom的反应是什么?这一过程展现了Tom怎样的性格特点?
答案:Jack邀请Tom参加了班级课间的篮球游戏、课后的绘画社团活动,还有班级小组讨论。起初,Tom十分拘谨,总是站在一旁默默观看,不敢主动参与;在Jack的耐心鼓励和热情带动下,他慢慢放下戒备,尝试加入游戏、参与讨论,甚至能主动分享自己的想法。这一过程展现了Tom内向敏感、渴望陪伴与认可,但内心善良、愿意尝试改变的性格特点——他并非拒绝融入,只是缺乏勇气和机会,Jack的陪伴让他逐渐克服了胆怯,展现出内心柔软、愿意成长的一面。
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何为后文Tom彻底改变、主题升华做铺垫?Tom的慢慢放松有何核心作用?
答案:第一段描写Jack邀请Tom参加各种活动,以及Tom从拘谨到慢慢放松、主动参与的转变,展现了Tom内心的松动和成长的开端,为后文Tom彻底变得开朗自信、主动融入集体做了铺垫,让Tom的彻底改变更具合理性和连贯性。Tom的慢慢放松是情节的重要过渡,它体现了Jack陪伴的意义,打破了Tom的孤独壁垒,让Tom感受到集体的温暖和友谊的美好,为后文他主动与人交流、积极参与活动奠定了情感基础;同时,也反衬出陪伴与善意的力量,为主题升华做好了铺垫。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “彻底转变、主题升华” 做铺垫:
答案:第一段中,Tom在Jack的邀请和鼓励下,从拘谨躲闪到慢慢参与活动、主动表达,已经实现了初步的转变,这为第二段他的彻底改变奠定了基础;同时,Tom在活动中感受到的温暖与认可,让他内心对友谊、对归属感的渴望进一步增强,成为他主动改变的内在动力。Jack的持续陪伴和鼓励,也让Tom逐渐建立起自信,克服了内心的胆怯,这些都为第二段Tom主动与同学交流、积极参与集体活动、彻底适应新生活提供了合理的情节支撑,让Tom的彻底成长更自然,也让“陪伴暖人心、善意促成长”的主题更具感染力,为主题升华奠定了坚实的情感与情节基础。
第二段提示句:With Jack’s company and encouragement, Tom began to change.
衔接句 1—— 对 “互动场景与情感回升” 提问:Tom发生了哪些具体的改变?这些改变体现在哪些方面?Jack的陪伴与鼓励对Tom的改变有何影响?
答案:Tom的具体改变体现在交往和学习两个方面:交往上,他不再沉默寡言,主动与同学们打招呼、交流日常和爱好,甚至能主动参与班级活动,结交了更多朋友;学习上,他不再走神懈怠,主动向老师和Jack请教难题,上课积极举手发言,学习态度变得认真,成绩也逐步提升。Jack的陪伴与鼓励是Tom改变的核心动力——Jack的真诚与热情治愈了Tom的孤独,让他感受到被认可、被接纳,帮助他建立起自信,克服了内心的胆怯,引导他勇敢敞开心扉,主动融入集体,最终实现了自我成长。
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:结局如何呼应“陪伴与善意、成长与融入”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
答案:结局以Tom彻底改变,变得开朗自信、适应新生活、收获友谊和成绩提升收尾,呼应了“陪伴与善意”的主题——Jack的陪伴和班主任的善意,治愈了Tom的孤独,助力他走出困境;也呼应了“成长与融入”的主题——Tom从无法适应、孤独迷茫,成长为主动融入、自信开朗,实现了自我突破。这一结局为故事画上了圆满的句号,让情节形成了“迷茫孤独—获得帮助—尝试改变—彻底成长”的闭环;同时,它将“个体的善意与陪伴”升华为“成长路上的温暖力量”,让主题更深刻、更具感染力,传递了“勇敢敞开心扉、珍惜陪伴与善意,就能收获成长与美好”的正向价值观。
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答案:陪伴是治愈孤独的良药,善意与关心能给予人温暖与力量,助力身处迷茫中的人走出困境、实现成长;青春路上,真挚的友谊和真诚的关心,能打破隔阂、建立自信,帮助我们勇敢适应新环境、突破自我;面对陌生与孤独,只要愿意敞开心扉,接受他人的帮助,主动尝试改变,就能收获友谊、实现成长,拥抱更美好的生活。
三、段落构思
第一段:In the following days, Jack invited Tom to join in different activities.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,列举Jack邀请Tom参加的具体活动;②刻画Tom从拘谨到慢慢放松、主动参与的神态、动作和心理变化;③为后文Tom彻底改变做铺垫。
续写:In the following days, Jack invited Tom to join in different activities. He took Tom to play basketball with classmates during breaks, invited him to the painting club after school, and asked him to join the group discussion in class. At first, Tom was very shy and stood aside silently, not daring to participate. With Jack’s patient encouragement and warm guidance, he gradually let go of his reserve, tried to play basketball with everyone, and even shared his painting works in the club. He slowly felt the warmth of the group and a sense of happiness he had never felt before, and his face began to show a bright smile.
第二段:With Jack’s company and encouragement, Tom began to change.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,具体描写Tom在学习、交往上的改变;②刻画Tom与同学、老师的互动,凸显其开朗与自信;③点明结局,凸显陪伴与善意的力量,呼应主题。
续写:With Jack’s company and encouragement, Tom began to change. He no longer kept silent in class, but took the initiative to raise his hand to answer questions and ask teachers for help when he met difficulties. After class, he would take the initiative to greet classmates and talk about his hobbies with them, making more good friends. His learning performance improved significantly, and he became more cheerful and confident. He finally adapted to the new school life and realized that as long as he opened his heart bravely, he could gain warmth and friendship, and the new campus would become his warm home.
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