易错17 书面表达（3大易错点+易错闯关练）（易错专练）（天津专用）2026高考英语二轮复习讲练测

易错17 书面表达（3大易错点+易错闯关练） 目录 第一部分 易错点剖析............................................................................................................1 易错典题 避错攻略 举一反三 易错01：语法错误................................................................................................................1 易错02：要点缺失，内容空泛............................................................................................7 易错03：逻辑松散，结构混乱...........................................................................................13 第二部分 易错点闯关..........................................................................................................20 易错01：语法错误 易错典题 【例】（2024·天津河东·二模）假如你是晨光中学的学生会主席李津，为了弘扬京剧艺术，根植中国文化，你们学校将在五月份邀请著名京剧艺术家进行专题讲座。你校外教Peter对中国京剧很感兴趣，请你写封邮件，邀请他来参加。内容包括： *写邮件的目的； *讲座的时间、地点； *讲座的具体内容。 典型错误表达​ The lecture will be hold on May, it is scheduled to last 2 hours, from 3 pm to 5 pm on the lecture hall. It mainly covered two parts: the importance of Peking Opera and how to appreciate it. What makes it appealing is the artist will show us how to perform Peking Opera, you are sure to enjoy it and can get many benefits from it. 正确表达范例​ The lecture will be held in May, which is scheduled to last 2 hours, from 3 pm to 5 pm in the lecture hall. It mainly covers two parts: the importance of Peking Opera and how to appreciate it. What makes it appealing is that the artist will show us how to perform Peking Opera. You are sure to enjoy it and benefit a lot from it. 【错因分析】 本段存在诸多语法错误，是天津高考英语书面表达中学生经常易犯的错误。 1. 介词错误：“on May”应该改为“in May”; “on the lecture hall” 应改为 “in the lecture hall”。（“on” 误用于表示地点） 2.逗号连接两个句子（逗号拼接）： 第一句： “The lecture will be hold in May, it is scheduled...” 两个独立句子用逗号连接，应改为句号或分号。 第三句： “...how to perform Peking Opera, you are sure to enjoy...” 同样为逗号拼接。 3.时态错误：“will be hold” 应改为 “will be held”。（被动语态错误） “covered” 应改为 “covers”。（讲座在将来，应用现在时或将来时描述内容） 4.中式表达：“can get many benefits from it” 是直译中文“能从中获得很多好处”，地道表达应为 “benefit a lot from it”。 避错攻略 【方法总结】 牢固掌握动词核心：确保全文时态统一、主谓一致，避免被动语态误用，这是写作语法的基石。 杜绝“中式英语”与结构错误：学会用英语思维表达，避免直译；并注意句子结构的完整性，切忌用逗号直接连接两个独立句子。 写作后专项检查：完成作文后，务必重点核查介词搭配、名词冠词以及句子连接，这是快速提分的关键步骤。 【干货必记】 1. 动词相关错误（最高频） 错误类型： 时态混乱：全文时态不一致 语态错误：主动/被动误用（如“will be hold”❌ → “will be held”✅） 主谓不一致：第三人称单数未加-s 非谓语误用：分词、不定式使用不当 纠正方法： 时态统一原则：记叙文常用一般过去时，说明文常用一般现在时 主谓一致口诀：“主语单三，动词加-s；主语复数，动词原形” 被动语态公式：be + 过去分词（注意be动词的时态变化） 2. 句子结构错误（最易失分） 错误类型： 逗号拼接：用逗号连接两个完整句子（最常见！） 错误示例：The lecture is interesting, you will like it. ❌ 正确修改：The lecture is interesting, and you will like it. ✅ 或改为：The lecture is interesting; you will like it. ✅ 句子片段：只有从句或无主谓结构 错误示例：Because the lecture is helpful. ❌（仅有原因状语从句） 正确修改：I recommend it because the lecture is helpful. ✅ 连词缺失/滥用：句子间缺乏逻辑连接 纠正方法： 句子完整性检查：每个句子必须有主语和谓语 逗号使用原则：逗号不能单独连接两个独立分句 连接词清单： 并列：and, but, or, so 递进：besides, moreover 因果：therefore, as a result 3. 介词搭配错误（最顽固） 错误类型： 地点介词混淆：in/on/at误用 错误示例：on the lecture hall ❌ → in the lecture hall ✅ 时间介词错误：at/in/on混淆 动词介词搭配错误：不同语言习惯差异 纠正方法： 地点介词记忆口诀： in → 大地方/范围内（in Beijing, in the room）on → 表面上/街道上（on the wall, on Main Street） at → 具体点（at the door, at 3 pm） 建立搭配本：专门记录常错介词搭配 be interested in（非to） benefit from（非of） perform in Peking Opera（非on） 4. 中式英语表达（最隐蔽） 错误类型： 字面直译中文习惯： 错误示例：learn knowledge ❌ → acquire knowledge ✅ 错误示例：get many benefits ❌ → benefit a lot ✅ 语序错误：将中文语序直接套用 纠正方法： “意译”而非“直译”：先想意思，再找地道表达 使用英英词典：查单词时看英文释义和例句 常见中式表达纠正表： 中式表达 地道表达 very like like...very much The price is suitable. The price is reasonable. My English has a big progress. My English has improved greatly. 举一反三 1.（2022·天津南开·二模）假设你是晨光中学高三学生李津，你的英国朋友Chris在中国学习中文已满两年， 即将回国。请你给他写一封e-mail，邀请他参加为他举办的欢送会，内容包括： （1） 祝贺他顺利通过考试，他的学习进步很大，为他骄傲； （2） 感谢他帮助你们学习英语； （3） 时间：星期六晚六点； 地点：你校餐厅二楼大厅。 参考词汇：欢送会 farewell party Dear Chris, Congratulations on your passing all the exams. ___________________________________________________ 典型错误表达​ "It was a pity that you must return back soon! So this Saturday evening a farewell party for you are going to be held at the second floor of the school dining hill. Could you come on 6:00 pm? My classmates and I sincerely hopes that you will come and see you at that time." 正确表达范例和解析 It’s a pity that you have to go back soon! So this Saturday evening, a farewell party for you will be held on the second floor of the school dining hill. Could you come at 6: 00 pm.? My classmates and I sincerely hope that you will come and see you then. 解释错误： “It was a pity” – 时态错误：用现在是即可表示“很可惜你要回去了”，不需要用过去时 “return back” – 中式表达：冗余，因为“return”已包含“back”。 “So this Saturday evening a farewell party for you are going to be held” – 主谓一致错误：“a farewell party”是单数，但动词“are”是复数，主谓不一致。 “at the second floor” – 介词错误：应该用“on the second floor”。 “Could you come on 6:00 pm?” – 介词错误：在几点钟应用at 不是on “My classmates and I sincerely hopes” – 主谓一致错误：主语“My classmates and I”是复数，但动词“hopes”是单数。 2.（25-26高二上·天津西青·月考）假定你是一名高校英语俱乐部成员，上周六你们英语俱乐部成员举行了一场义卖活动，要将义卖所得捐赠到贫困山区。请你就此活动用英语写一篇记叙文，内容包括： 1. 活动的时间和地点； 2. 义卖商品： 3. 你的感受。 典型错误表达​ Last Saturday, our English club has organized a charity sale at the school playground, which aim to raise funds for remote mountain areas. The event start at 9 a.m. and continued until the noon time. 正确表达范例和解析 Last Saturday, our English club organized a charity sale on the school playground, which aimed to raise funds for remote mountain areas. The event started at 9 a.m. and continued until noon. 错误分析： 介词错误：如“at the school playground”存在介词误用，应该用on 而不是at. 时态错误：有last Saturday句子应该用一般过去时，不可用现在完成时. 中式表达：如“the noon time”为中文直译的冗余表达. 主谓一致错误：定语从句中“which aim”主语为单数但动词误用为复数形式. 3.（24-25高二上·天津滨海新·期中）假设你是李华，你参加一个志愿者活动，回来以后感触良多。请你根据以下信息，写一篇经历和感受： 时间：7月12日—7月20日 对象：500位来自天津各中学的学生志愿者 工作：到养老院帮老人家做家务，陪他们聊天，为老人家表演节目 感受：获益良多，辛苦，但是值得 典型错误表达​ From July 12th to 20th, I together with other 499 students from different high schools in Tianjin, joined into an activity for working like volunteers at nursing home, our main job were to do houseworks for elderly, besides, we chat freely and happy with them and gave them our prepared show, it was a fantastic day. 正确表达范例和解析  From July 12th to 20th, I, together with the other 499 students from different high schools in Tianjin, joined in an activity to work as a volunteer in a nursing home. Our main job is to do housework for the elderly. Besides, we chatted freely and happily with them and gave them our prepared show. It was a fantastic day. 错误分析： 介词与搭配错误：如“joined into”（应为joined in）、“like volunteers”（应为as）、“at nursing home”（应为in a）。 逗号连粘错误：连续使用逗号连接多个独立完整句，造成典型的逗号粘连结构。 时态错误：如“chat”在描述过去事件时误用为一般现在时，与上下文过去时态不一致。 中式表达：如“houseworks”（不可数名词中式加s）、“happy”（误作副词）、“prepared show”（中文直译感强）。 主谓一致错误：如“our main job were”（主语单数误用复数动词）。 易错02：要点缺失，内容空泛 易错典题 【例】 （25-26高三上·天津·月考）以“My 180-Day Growth Journal”为题，选择二项你在高三坚持的习惯（如每日阅读、规律运动、志愿服务）。 1. 如何坚持这项习惯； 2. 这项习惯对你的影响和意义； 3. 你对其他同学的建议 内容缺失典型习作​ My 180-Day Growth Journal Over the past 180 days, I have kept two habits: reading and jogging. I did these things regularly. They have helped me a lot. I feel that my English has improved because of reading, and jogging makes me feel relaxed and energetic. These experiences are very meaningful to me. I hope my classmates can also develop good habits in their lives. It is really beneficial. 完整规范答案​ My 180-Day Growth Journal Over the past 180 days, I’ve consistently practiced daily reading and regular jogging. To stay on track, I set a fixed time each morning for reading English articles and ran for 20 minutes after dinner — no matter how busy I was. These habits transformed me: reading sharpened my focus and expanded my vocabulary, while jogging reduced stress and boosted my energy for study. More importantly, they taught me discipline and persistence. To fellow students: start small, be consistent, and remember — even 15 minutes a day can lead to remarkable growth over time. 【错因分析】 题目明确要求阐述三点： 如何坚持这项习惯；这项习惯对你的影响和意义；你对其他同学的建议。 习作分析：只是机械地复述了题干的要点框架，却没有向框架内填充任何有血有肉、具体可信的内容。它回答了“是什么”（我做了，有好处，建议你做），却完全缺失了“怎么做”和“为什么”这两个核心部分，具体分析如下： 第一要点（如何坚持）：严重缺失。 I did these things regularly.（仅用“regularly”一个词概括，没有任何具体方法、策略或遇到的挑战，内容完全空洞。） 第二要点（影响和意义）：模糊、笼统，缺乏细节支撑。 helped me a lot， my English has improved， feel relaxed and energetic， meaningful。（全部是概括性描述，像口号。如何提高？在哪方面进步？如何感受到的？均未说明，导致说服力弱。） 第三要点（建议）：过于空泛，缺乏操作性。 can also try to have good habits. It is really beneficial.（建议等同于“去做好事吧”，没有告诉同学任何“怎么做”的途径，价值很低。） 而且习作在语言表达过于简单，缺乏表现力，大量使用基础词汇（good, helpful, beneficial, do things），缺乏更精准、地道的表达（如范文中的 consistently, sharpened, boosted, discipline）。 避错攻略 【方法总结】 高考英语应用文内容缺失，核心解决思路：审题时圈画 “目的、对象、场景” 三维要素，套用 “开头引入 — 核心信息 — 结尾呼应” 结构；按 “5W1H” 逻辑补全细节（如时间、地点、要求），结合上海真题常考场景（通知、邀请、建议）储备模板化素材；写完用 “是否满足读者需求” 反向校验，避免信息断层，确保内容完整且贴合语境。 【干货必记】 一、 审题阶段：确保“要点全覆盖” 1.圈划分解法： 用笔明确圈出文体（email, speech, article）、对象（teacher, classmates）、核心任务（建议、道歉、倡议）。 将题目中关于“内容要点”的陈述（通常是1-2-3点）用数字标出来。确保自己清楚一共有几个必须回答的“问题”。 2.要点清单法： 在草稿纸上快速列出一个清单，将题目中的每个要点用自己的话转述成一个简短的中文或英文问题。 示例：题目说“1.介绍你坚持的习惯；2.说明如何坚持；3.该习惯对你的影响。” 清单：① What two habits? (Reading & Jogging) ② How did I stick to them? (Fixed time, specific actions) ③ How did they change me? (Skills, mindset, health) 二、 构思与拓展阶段：解决“内容空泛” 1.“三W”扩展法（针对每个要点）： 对于每一个列出的要点，强迫自己至少从以下三个维度中的一个进行拓展： What (具体是什么)：避免概括，给出细节。 空泛：I read books. 具体：I spent 20 minutes every morning reading China Daily or short stories. Why (原因/目的)：解释动机或行为背后的原因。 空泛：It was good for me. 具体：I did this to keep myself informed about current affairs and to learn authentic expressions. How (方式/结果)：描述过程或带来的具体改变。 空泛：My English improved. 具体：This consistent exposure significantly broadened my vocabulary and enhanced my reading speed. 2.“观点+支撑”公式： 每一个主体段的核心句（观点句）后面，必须紧跟1-2句支撑句。支撑句可以是： 举例 (For example, ...) 说理 (This is because...) 对比 (Before, I often felt...; but now, I find myself...) 联想个人经历法： 将题目与自己的真实生活体验挂钩。即使是虚构，也要具体化。比如谈“坚持运动”，可以具体到“在每周三和周五放学后，和好友去操场跑三圈”，这比“经常运动”要生动可信得多。 三、 语言执行与检查阶段 1.“准确优先，亮点点缀”原则： 首先保证语法正确、用词基本准确。在此前提下，每篇有意识地使用2-3个高级词汇或复杂句式（如非谓语动词、定语从句、倒装句），并将其用对、用准。 2.建立个人“闪光点”语料库： 按话题分类积累好词好句，特别是万能理由表达（如：broaden my horizons, cultivate perseverance, relieve academic pressure, enhance efficiency）。 举一反三 1.（2023·天津河西·三模）假设你是晨光中学高三学生李津，下周你校将与英国姊妹校线上“云”交流校园生活。高中三年即将结束，回顾丰富多彩的校园生活，哪一次校园活动给你留下了美好而深刻的印象呢?请你以“The Most Impressive School Activity”为题写一篇发言稿。 内容包括： 1.介绍活动过程; 2.分享个人感受。 内容缺失典型习作​ Hello, everyone! I’m Li Jin. Our school has many activities. I want to talk about one activity. It was the coming-of-age ceremony. This activity was very good. We did many things that day. Everyone was happy. The teachers gave speeches. We also wore special clothes. Then we finished the activity. I liked this activity very much. It was meaningful. It made me think a lot. I think it is important for students. That’s all. Thank you. 完整规范答案 Hello, everyone! I’m Li Jin, a senior three student from Chenguang high school. I’m more than delighted to communicate with the classmates from the sister school in Britain online about campus life. Looking back, I find the past days have witnessed plenty of memorable activities. And the one that impressed me most is the coming-of-age ceremony. The meaningful event was held on May 4th to honor the students who had turned 18. We gathered at the stadium, wearing traditional dresses. First, our principal sincerely extended his congratulations on us becoming grown-ups. And we reviewed our high school life together, which was full of happiness. Then followed the Confucian-style coming-of-age ceremonies —Ji Li (for girls) and Guan Li (for boys). Finally, we made a solemn vow to shoulder the responsibilities of an adult. Personally, this activity not only exposed us to traditional Chinese culture, but also motivated us to embrace the new identity and live up to our promise. We, 18-year-olds, should cherish our youth. That’s all. Thank you. 分析：要点严重缺失与模糊化 原要求1（介绍活动过程）：习作仅用“We did many things.”和“The teachers gave speeches.”等极度空泛的句子带过，完全缺失对活动时间、具体流程、核心环节（如誓言） 的任何具体描述。读者无法知晓活动究竟如何开展。 原要求2（分享个人感受）：习作用“I liked it.” “It was meaningful.” “It made me think a lot.”等套话堆砌，没有表达出任何具体、独特的个人感悟或思考，如对成人身份、责任或文化传统的理解，感受部分没有实质内容。 2.（2023·天津北辰·模拟预测）假设你是某国际学校的学生会主席李津，你校刚刚开展了走进社区的一系列文明实践活动。请你为校园广播站写一篇英文活动报道，内容包括： (1)介绍你们参加的活动(如照顾老人;宣传交通法规等)及其原因; (2)说明此项活动的意义; (3)简单介绍此项活动引起的反响。 内容缺失典型习作 Recently, our school organized some activities in the community. Students did different things there.We held these activities because they are important. Doing this is very meaningful for everyone. It can teach people something good.After the activities, many people saw them. People think these activities are nice. We feel happy about it. 完整规范答案 Our school has just launched a series of civilized practice activities into the community, which include taking care of the elderly and publicizing traffic laws and regulations and so on. The reason why we held these activities is that more elderly people need care and some uncivilized phenomena still exist. The significance is to raise people’s awareness of becoming a caring and civilized man. Through these activities, our activities have been covered by a variety of media outlets and aroused a strong response. More and more people who are willing to care about others and laws and regulations are called on to participate in them. 分析：1.要点严重缺失，信息模糊： 活动介绍缺失：仅提到“some activities”和“did different things”，完全没有具体说明是“照顾老人”还是“宣传交通法规”等任何一项活动。 原因解释缺失：用“because they are important”笼统带过，完全没有分析“老人需要关怀”或“不文明现象存在”等具体原因。 意义阐述缺失：用“meaningful”和“teach people something good”等空泛词汇，完全没有阐明“提升关怀与文明意识”这一核心意义。 2.内容极度空泛，缺乏细节支撑： 全文由“做了什么”、“很重要”、“有意义”、“反应好”等概括性句子堆砌而成，没有任何具体事实、数据、案例或细节描述。整篇文章如同一个空洞的提纲，没有填充任何实质性内容，无法让读者了解活动究竟如何、为何以及产生了何种影响。 3.（2022·天津·高考真题）假设你是晨光中学英语口语社的成员李津。为招募新成员，口语社请你用英语为社团纳新活动录制一段短视频。请按照以下提示，撰写视频的文字稿： (1)向同学们发出入社邀请； (2)介绍口语社的主要活动(如英语演讲比赛、观看英语电影等活动)； (3)分享本人入社以来的收获。 内容缺失典型习作 Hello, everyone. I am Li Jin from our school’s English club. I want to ask you to join our club. In our club, we do different activities. These activities are about English and are very interesting. You can learn a lot from them. I joined the club before. I think it is very useful. It has helped me improve a lot. Please come and join us. Thank you. 完整规范答案 Hello, everyone! I’m Li Jin, a member of the Spoken English Club of our school. I’m here to invite you to join us. This will be a good chance for all English lovers. The club offers various interesting activities. We can participate in English speech contests, watch classic English movies, sing English songs and attend inspiring lectures. All of them help to stimulate our interest in learning English and make our school life much more enjoyable. The club activities have benefited me a lot. I have not only improved my spoken English, but also made a lot of friends. Now, it’s your turn to join us. We are looking forward to having you in the club! 分析：1.要点缺失与信息模糊 邀请表述笼统：仅使用“I want to ask you to join”，缺乏号召力与吸引力，未说明社团适合谁或能提供什么独特机会。 活动介绍空泛：仅提及“do different activities”和“about English”，完全没有具体介绍任何一项活动（如演讲比赛、观影等），读者无法了解社团实际做什么。 个人收获空洞：用“very useful”和“helped me improve a lot”等模糊评价，完全没有具体说明在口语能力、交友或其他任何方面的实际收获。 2.内容空泛，缺乏支撑细节 全文由“有活动”、“活动有趣”、“对我有用”等极其概括的句子组成，没有任何具体事例、过程描述或个人体验的细节。作为一篇招募宣传稿，它未能提供任何实质性信息来说服或吸引潜在新成员。 易错03：逻辑松散，结构混乱 易错典题 【例】 （22-23高二上·天津·期末）假设你是晨光中学的学生李津，你校的学生社团在开展了为期一个学期的活动后圆满结束。现在，你将代表学校，与英国友好学校进行线上经验交流，请你写一篇发言稿，内容如下： 1. 简要介绍你所在的社团开展的相关活动（至少写出两点） 2. 谈谈你们开展该活动的收获和感想 3. 表达期望 Good morning, dear friends. My name is Li Jin. I feel honored to take this opportunity to share with you the experience of our student associations. Thanks for your listening and I’m looking forward to the experience you will share with us. 学生不规范作答 Good morning, dear friends. My name is Li Jin. I feel honored to take this opportunity to share with you the experience of our student associations. I think clubs are very useful. Many students like them. We did many activities. In the club, we feel happy. We wrote articles sometimes. We also performed dramas. My friends said it was fun. The English speech contest let us speak more. But it was also a little hard. I hope we can do better. So, I want to share this with you. I learned a lot. It improved my English. We had a good time. Thanks for your listening and I’m looking forward to the experience you will share with us. 规范答案 Good morning, dear friends. My name is Li Jin. I feel honored to take this opportunity to share with you the experience of our student associations. I’ve been in the English club for a whole term. First of all, we set up an English learning column where students can write articles, poems and so on. Excellent works are selected and displayed every month. In addition, we held an English speech contest. Not only did the students practice their spoken English, but they also improved their ability to express themselves. Finally, we also performed English dramas. It gave students more chances to understand the cultural customs of English-speaking countries and increase their interest in English culture. Many members said that they had benefited greatly from these activities. The activities improved their English and brought them a lot of fun. Personally, I think it’s a good idea to set up a club. I hope our club will become stronger and more mature. Thanks for your listening and I’m looking forward to the experience you will share with us. 【错因分析】 1.结构顺序混乱，要点穿插不当 发言稿未遵循“介绍活动 → 谈收获 → 表期望”的合理逻辑顺序。开头后直接跳入主观感受（“I think clubs are very useful”），随后才零散地提及活动，接着又插入希望（“I hope we can do better”），之后再次返回补充个人收获。这种来回跳跃的结构使听众难以抓住重点，信息流支离破碎。 2.段落与句子间缺乏逻辑连接，思维跳跃 段落内部和句子之间缺少有效的过渡词和逻辑纽带。例如，在“We wrote articles sometimes.”和“My friends said it was fun.”之间没有说明因果关系或递进关系，陈述显得孤立。从“But it was also a little hard.”突然转折到“I hope we can do better”，缺乏铺垫，思维跳跃生硬。 3.内容要点混杂，核心任务不突出 题目要求的三个核心要点被随意地混在一段或分散在多处。例如，“介绍活动”这一点被拆散在多个地方简单提及，且与“感想”和“期望”完全交织在一起，未能形成清晰的板块。这导致每个要点都未能得到充分、集中的展现，核心任务——清晰地分享经验——未能有效完成。 避错攻略 【方法总结】 在动笔前，必须明确：高考作文不是句子的堆砌，而是有目的、有层次的逻辑呈现。 每一部分都应服务于整体交际目的。避免逻辑混乱的秘诀在于 “先规划，后施工” 。通过列提纲搭建稳固的框架，通过主题句明确段落方向，通过连接词保证行文流畅。将这三点内化为写作习惯，你的作文就会告别“杂乱无章”，展现出清晰有力的逻辑之美，在天津高考中稳稳拿下结构分。 【干货必记】 确保段落内部逻辑紧密 1.“主题句 + 拓展句”模型 每段第一句必须是主题句，像路标一样告诉读者本段要说什么。 弱主题句：We did many activities. (过于空泛) 强主题句：The club organized two flagship activities that significantly boosted our language skills. 2.拓展句的三种逻辑关系（选择1-2种使用）： 解释说明 (Explain)：用更具体的细节阐释主题句。 For example, ... / Specifically, ... 列举原因或结果 (Reason/Result)：说明“为什么”或“带来什么”。 This is because... / As a result, ... / Therefore, ... 对比或让步 (Contrast/Concession)：使论述更全面、有深度。 However, ... / On the other hand, ... / Although it was challenging, ... 巧用连接词，缝合句子 逻辑关系 高级实用连接词 (替换and, but, so) 并列/递进 additionally, furthermore, moreover, besides, equally importantly 因果 therefore, consequently, as a result, thus, hence 转折 however, nevertheless, on the contrary, in contrast, whereas 举例 for instance, take... as an example, a case in point is... 总结 in conclusion, to summarize, all in all, in a nutshell 使用口诀：开头表明目的，分段论述要点，句间要有连接，结尾总结升华。 举一反三 1.（23-24高二下·天津·期末）假设你是晨光中学的李津，你校交换生Chris正在策划“Approaching Chinese Students”栏目，用短视频介绍中国学生校园生活，为此咨询你的意见。请你给他写一封邮件，推荐一个拍摄场景。内容包括： (1)推荐拍摄场景(如升旗仪式、午餐时间、社团活动、体育运动等); (2)陈述推荐理由; (3)表达祝愿。 参考词汇： 升旗仪式 flag-raising ceremony 社团活动 club activities 习作：Dear Chris, How are you? I am writing this email to you. I think your project is very good. I want to recommend a place for you to film. I recommend the school's club activities. I wish your project can be successful and I hope you are happy. There are many clubs in our school. Students like them. For example, some students like robots and some like music. It is very interesting. You can film these. It can show our life. Students can learn many things there. They are not only about study. They are also fun. Please let me know if you need help. I can help you. Yours, Li Jin 习作分析：1.结构顺序彻底混乱，核心功能错位 邮件本应遵循“推荐场景 → 阐述理由 → 表达祝愿”的基本逻辑顺序。但此习作在开头段末尾刚提出推荐“club activities”后，第二段突然跳至表达祝愿（“I wish your project...”），这严重打断了读者的预期，将应在结尾出现的功能提前。 之后，习作才用“There are many clubs...”另起一段来陈述推荐理由，使得文章主体（理由阐述）被硬生生割裂并后置，结构呈现“开头-祝愿-主体-结尾”的怪异顺序，逻辑链条完全断裂。 2.要点被随意拆散，内容支离破碎 推荐理由（第二个要点）本应集中、连贯地阐述。但此习作将其分散在混乱的段落中，且内容东一句西一句（“Students like them.” “It is very interesting.” “They are also fun.”），没有围绕一个清晰的核心论点（如展示学生多元发展或校园文化）进行组织，只是简单句的堆砌，缺乏深度和说服力。 范文：Dear Chris, I hope you are doing well. I hope you are doing well. I'm thrilled to hear about your project "Approaching Chinese Students" and believe it will offer unique insights into our daily lives. I would like to recommend capturing the vibrant atmosphere during our school's club activities. Club activities are a significant part of our campus life, where students can pursue their passions outside of academics. From calligraphy and traditional music to robotics and debate clubs, these activities showcase the diverse interests and talents of Chinese students. They not only provide a platform for personal growth but also foster a sense of community and teamwork. Filming these moments will give your audience a glimpse into how we balance learning with leisure and the richness of our extracurricular culture. I wish you all the best with your project and am confident that it will be a valuable addition to understanding Chinese student life. If you need any assistance or have further questions, please don't hesitate to ask. Yours, Li Jin 2.（23-24高二上·天津·月考）根据下面的提示，写一篇文章 假如你是你校野生动物保护协会会长李华，恰逢协会成立10周年，请你写一篇博文介绍这十年协会做出的成就，并在博文中广泛征集全校师生的建议，如何更好保护野生动物。 1.协会成立的初衷：培养观察和探索自然的能力，提高保护野生动物的意识。 2.协会在每年3月3日“World Wild life Day”都会在校内举办活动：张贴海报，播放宣传视频，举办讲座和知识竞赛等，受到欢迎和好评。 3.欢迎全校师生对协会如何更好保护野生动物提出建议。 I am Li Hua, President of our school’s Wildlife Conservation Association. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 习作：Hello, I am Li Hua. I write this post to tell you something. We feel proud. Many students like our association. I want your suggestions. Please tell us your ideas about protecting animals. We need to do better. Thank you. Our association was set up ten years ago. Its purpose was to make students observe nature and know about wildlife protection. We have done many good things. Every year on March 3, it is World Wildlife Day. We do activities at school. For example, we put up posters. We also have lectures and contests. People say these activities are good. They are welcomed. We have protected many kinds of animals in the past ten years. The number of some animals is increasing. This is a great achievement. So, please write to us and give your suggestions. We will read them all. 习作分析： 1.逻辑松散、结构混乱的简要分析 结构顺序混乱，功能错位：文章本应遵循“介绍背景与初衷 → 展示成就 → 征集建议”的合理逻辑。但此习作在简短开头后，突然插入征集建议和表达感谢的句子，随后才返回介绍协会的成立初衷，接着又跳跃到展示活动与成就，最后再次突兀地请求建议。这种“请求-背景-成就-请求”的循环结构，完全破坏了信息的自然流动和博文的宣导目的。 2.内容布局散乱，要点交织：本应集中、连贯阐述的“协会成就”被拆散，且与其它要点胡乱交织。例如，在应集中介绍年度活动的部分，突然插入“我们保护了许多动物、数量在增加”这一概括性成就，打断了关于“世界野生动物日”具体活动的描述节奏，导致两者都未能得到清晰、有力的展现。 范文：    I am Li Hua, President of our school’s Wildlife Conservation Association. The aim of setting up this association is to cultivate the students’ ability to observe and explore nature and improve the awareness of wildlife protection.       In the past 10 years, we have been paying much attention to protecting kinds of wild animals and witnessing the increasing number of the endangered animals. We all feel very proud of the surprising achievement. Every 3rd, March, we put up posters, broadcast short videos, hold lectures and knowledge contests to raise our awareness of protecting wild animals, which is welcomed and praised by teachers and students.       In order that we can do much better and have a better nature, I am more than eager to tell you that all teachers and students are welcome to put forward suggestions on how to better protect wild animals. Looking forward to receiving your letters. 3.（25-26高一上·天津蓟州·月考）** My New Life in Senior High ** 1.简单描述你进入高中后的新生活。 2.谈谈你遇到的一个主要挑战或发生的一个变化(如学习、交友、生活等方面)。 3.说明你是如何应对这个挑战或适应这个变化的。 _______________________________________________________________________________ 习作：My New Life in Senior High My life in senior high is busy. I meet new friends. My friends are nice. Sometimes we do homework together. My subjects are hard, this is a big challenge. I want to talk about the challenge. The challenge is about studying. For example, math homework is difficult. I have to think a lot. It made me worried before. I think it’s important to find a good way to study. I made a plan. I also joined a study group after school. We talk about questions. I feel better now. I am not worried anymore. I have more confidence. I also join club activities. Club activities are fun. They make school life colorful. I like them very much. My new life is busy but good. 习作分析： 1.结构顺序混乱，未遵循逻辑递进：文章本应按照“描述新生活 → 指出挑战 → 说明应对方法”的顺序展开。但此习作在首段简短提及“生活忙碌”和“认识新朋友”后，突然插入一句与挑战无关的细节（“Sometimes we do homework together”），随后才提及课业挑战，紧接着未加过渡便直接跳转到“想谈谈这个挑战”，开头部分显得杂乱无章。 2.内容要点随意穿插，主线模糊：在应集中论述“应对方法”的段落中，突然插入对社团活动及其感受的描述（“I also join club activities... I like them very much.”），这一内容本属于对“新生活”的初步描述，却被放置在结尾部分，打断了“挑战-应对”这一核心主线的完整性，使文章看起来东拉西扯，重点不突出。 范文：                                                My New Life in Senior High     Senior high has unfolded a busy yet colorful life, where I face more challenging courses, take part in lively club activities and get to know new classmates from various middle schools.     The main challenge I’ve met is the heavier academic load. Subjects like math demand deeper logical thinking, leaving me once stuck in finishing homework before deadlines.     To handle this, I created a detailed study schedule that splits tasks into manageable parts. I also joined a study group, gathering with peers to discuss tough problems after class. Little by little, I’ve caught up with the learning rhythm, feeling more prepared to embrace this new chapter. 1．（2022·天津·一模）假如你是晨光中学的学生李津，你校英文报向同学们约稿，讨论影响自身成长的因素。请你写一篇英语短文给报纸投稿。 内容提示： （1）陈述影响你成长的因素，如：家庭、学校、社会、朋友、书籍等（不少于两点）; （2）谈谈这些因素如何影响了你的成长（需举例说明）。 注意：词数不少于100；文章的开头已给出（不计入词数）。 The process of growing up is complex for every person, ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】One possible version: The process of growing up is complex for every person, for there are many influential factors in a person’s growth as well as the development of his personality. As for me, what has affected me most in both growth and personality are family and friends, the two equally important factors. My family became my first surroundings when I was born. Since it’s my most direct source of knowledge and experiences, what they say and what they do play a significant role in shaping my character. On the other hand, friends in some ways influence me more than my family does. Friends have many different opinions and personalities. Discussing with them builds up my personality. Frankly speaking, I get lots of valuable things from my friends. Family offers me warmth and care. Friends give me strength and horizons. Therefore, both of them are most influential in my growth. 【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生就“影响自身成长的因素”写一篇英语短文给报纸投稿。 【详解】1.词汇积累 复杂的：complex→complicated 影响：affect→have an influence on 在……起重要作用：play a significant role in→play a significant part in 建立：build up→set up 2.句式拓展 合并简单句 原句：On the other hand, friends in some ways influence me more than my family does. Friends have many different opinions and personalities. 拓展句：On the other hand, friends in some ways influence me more than my family does, because friends have many different opinions and personalities. 【点睛】【高分句型1】As for me, what has affected me most in both growth and personality are family and friends, the two equally important factors. (运用了what引导的主语从句) 【高分句型2】Since it’s my most direct source of knowledge and experiences, what they say and what they do play a significant role in shaping my character. (运用了Since引导的原因状语从句和what引导的主语从句) 2．（2022·天津河北·二模）假设你是晨光中学的李津。2022年北京冬奥会圆满结束了，苏翊鸣、谷爱凌等中国青少年选手表现优异，夺得多枚金牌。为号召同学们向优秀的同龄人学习，你校英语社团的微信公众号开展以“Growing up along with Olympic Champions”为主题的英语征文活动。现请你投稿，文章内容应包括： （1）奥运冠军的共同点（追求梦想，全力以赴，永不言弃等）； （2）如何做学习或生活中的“冠军”？ 注意： （1）词数不少于100词； （2）可适当加入细节，使内容充实、行文连贯； （3）题目和开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Growing up along with Olympic Champions Many teenage champions have stood out in the Beijing Winter Olympics. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Many teenage champions have stood out in the Beijing Winter Olympics. Their self-made accomplishments are an incredible source of inspiration for anyone who aspires to fulfillment in life. The stories coming out of the champions have much in common. First, they go all out to be excellent, which is the universal quality that will pay off in the long-term. Besides, faced with one failure after another, they never give up, taking every setback in stride. In the course of the pursuit of our dreams, we also need goal to keep us moving forward as well as the resilience to deal with tress and failure. A journey of 1,000 miles begins with one step. I have every ground to believe persistence and the longing for excellence will help us teenagers win through. 【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生为学校英语社团组织的以“Growing up along with Olympic Champions”为主题的英语征文活动投稿。 【详解】1.词汇积累 突出、杰出：stand out→excelent 放弃：give up→quit 处理：deal with→cope with 坚持：persistence→insistence 2.句式拓展 简单句变复合句 原句：Besides, faced with one failure after another, they never give up, taking every setback in stride. 拓展句：Besides, when they are faced with one failure after another, they never give up, taking every setback in stride. 【点睛】【高分句型1】Their self-made accomplishments are an incredible source of inspiration for anyone who aspires to fulfillment in life.（运用了who引导的定语从句） 【高分句型2】First, they go all out to be excellent, which is the universal quality that will pay off in the long-term. （运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句以及that引导的限制性定语从句） 3．（25-26高三上·天津·期末）假设你是晨光中学的李津，你校英语报正在举办题为 “Clubs: More Than Just Hobbies” 的征文活动。请你根据以下要点写一篇短文投稿： 1.简述你校社团活动的多样性。 2.描述你参加某个社团的一次具体经历。 3.谈谈社团活动对你的影响。 注意： 1. 词数不少于100； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】范文 Our school provides diverse clubs, from academic ones like the English Debating Club to creative groups such as the Drama and Music Clubs. They are not just for killing time, but crucial platforms for personal growth. The Drama Club brought me the most life-changing experience. When I played a lead role in the annual play, I faced difficulties in memorizing lines and stage fright. With my teammates’ support, we rehearsed diligently and improved together. The successful performance gave me immense confidence and a strong sense of achievement. This experience made me realize club activities are a journey of self-discovery. It improved my acting, public speaking and creativity, and taught me the profound meaning of teamwork and perseverance, qualities that will benefit my future life. 【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写一篇短文投稿，简述你校社团活动的多样性、描述你参加某个社团的一次具体经历以及谈谈社团活动对你的影响。 【详解】1.词汇积累 意识到：realize→be aware of 重要的：crucial→essential 提高：improve→promote 记忆：memorize→keep in mind 2.句式拓展 句型转换 原句：The successful performance gave me immense confidence and a strong sense of achievement. 拓展句：When the performance turned out to be a huge success, I gained immense confidence and a strong sense of achievement that I had never had before. 【点睛】【高分句型1】When I played a lead role in the annual play, I faced difficulties in memorizing lines and stage fright.（运用了when引导时间状语从句，动名词短语作宾语） 【高分句型2】It improved my acting, public speaking and creativity, and taught me the profound meaning of teamwork and perseverance, qualities that will benefit my future life.（运用了that引导限制性定语从句） 4．（24-25高三上·天津南开·期末）假设你是晨光中学学生李津。2024年10月26日，参加“汉语桥”活动的来自世界各地的百名中学生选手为深入体验中国校园文化，来到你校参观，请你为大赛微信公众号写一篇英文报道，介绍在你校开展此次活动的情况。内容包括： 1）活动的时间、地点及目的； 2）校园活动的具体安排（参观学生社团、进班听课等）； 3）活动的反响。 参考词汇：汉语桥Chinese Bridge—Chinese Proficiency Competition 注意：1.词数不少于100。 2.可适当加入细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯。 Chinese Bridge Coming to Our Campus ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】                                   Chinese Bridge Coming to Our Campus On October 26, 2024, our school, Chenguang High School, had the privilege of hosting 100 international students participating in the “Chinese Bridge” Chinese Proficiency Competition. The purpose of this event was to provide these students with an authentic experience of Chinese campus culture.   The day’s activities were well-organized, with participants first visiting various student clubs to understand and engage with the diverse interests of Chinese students. They also had the opportunity to attend classes, where they could see firsthand how Chinese education is delivered and interact with local students.   The event was met with enthusiastic responses from all involved. The international students expressed excitement and appreciation for the warm reception they received, and many of them shared that their understanding of Chinese culture was greatly enriched. Our students were equally excited to interact with peers from across the globe, fostering cultural exchange and building new friendships.   Overall, the visit was a great success, leaving lasting impressions and strengthening international ties. 【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。2024年10月26日，参加“汉语桥”活动的来自世界各地的百名中学生选手为深入体验中国校园文化，来到你校参观，请考生为大赛微信公众号写一篇英文报道，介绍在你校开展此次活动的情况。 【详解】1.词汇积累 参加：participate in→take part in 举行：hold→host 各种各样的：various→varieties of 机会：opportunity→chance 2.句式拓展 同义句 原句：Our students were equally excited to interact with peers from across the globe, fostering cultural exchange and building new friendships.   拓展句：Our students were equally excited to interact with peers from across the globe, which fostered cultural exchange and building new friendships.  . 【点睛】[高分句型1] They also had the opportunity to attend classes, where they could see firsthand how Chinese education is delivered and interact with local students. (运用了where引导的非限制性定语从句) [高分句型2] The international students expressed excitement and appreciation for the warm reception they received, and many of them shared that their understanding of Chinese culture was greatly enriched. (运用了that引导宾语从句) 5.（25-26高二上·天津·月考）9月份，我校学生在学校举行了为期两周的军训(military training)，请写一篇不少于100字的文章介绍这次军训中你印象深刻的事，向校报投稿。 要点如下：1.军训的目的 2.一件让你印象深刻的事情 3.你的感受 参考词汇(选择使用)：教官instructor；磨练毅力temper willpower；培养纪律性foster discipline；踢正步march in goose step An Unforgettable Moment in Military Training ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】    In September, our school held a two-week military training aimed at fostering discipline and tempering our willpower. Among all the experiences, one moment left a deep impression on me.     Practicing the goose step under the scorching sun was my most unforgettable moment. Our instructor demonstrated the movements repeatedly, yet our lines remained uneven. Just as frustration began to set in, he didn’t scold us. Instead, he patiently adjusted our postures one by one and encouraged us to sync our rhythms. After numerous attempts, we finally marched in perfect unison, feeling a surge of collective pride.     This training taught me that perseverance leads to growth. Though challenging, it strengthened my determination and taught me the value of teamwork. These are lessons I will carry forward in my future life. 【导语】本篇书面表达属于记叙文。要求考生介绍9月份学校为期两周的军训中印象深刻的一件事，向校报投稿，内容涵盖军训目的、印象深刻的事及个人感受。 【详解】1.词汇积累 旨在：aimed at → designed to 留下深刻印象：leave a deep impression on → make a strong impression on 酷热的：scorching → blazing 同步：sync → synchronize 2.句式拓展 同义句转换 原句：In September, our school held a two-week military training aimed at fostering discipline and tempering our willpower. 拓展句：In September, our school held a two-week military training which was designed to foster discipline and temper our willpower. 【点睛】【高分句型1】Practicing the goose step under the scorching sun was my most unforgettable moment. (运用了动名词短语作主语) 【高分句型2】This training taught me that perseverance leads to growth. (运用了that引导的宾语从句) 【高分句型3】These are lessons I will carry forward in my future life. (运用了省略that/ which的定语从句) 20 / 20 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 易错17 书面表达（3大易错点+易错闯关练） 目录 第一部分 易错点剖析............................................................................................................1 易错典题 避错攻略 举一反三 易错01：语法错误................................................................................................................1 易错02：要点缺失，内容空泛............................................................................................5 易错03：逻辑松散，结构混乱...........................................................................................10 第二部分 易错点闯关..........................................................................................................15 易错01：语法错误 易错典题 【例】（2024·天津河东·二模）假如你是晨光中学的学生会主席李津，为了弘扬京剧艺术，根植中国文化，你们学校将在五月份邀请著名京剧艺术家进行专题讲座。你校外教Peter对中国京剧很感兴趣，请你写封邮件，邀请他来参加。内容包括： *写邮件的目的； *讲座的时间、地点； *讲座的具体内容。 典型错误表达​ The lecture will be hold on May, it is scheduled to last 2 hours, from 3 pm to 5 pm on the lecture hall. It mainly covered two parts: the importance of Peking Opera and how to appreciate it. What makes it appealing is the artist will show us how to perform Peking Opera, you are sure to enjoy it and can get many benefits from it. 正确表达范例​ The lecture will be held in May, which is scheduled to last 2 hours, from 3 pm to 5 pm in the lecture hall. It mainly covers two parts: the importance of Peking Opera and how to appreciate it. What makes it appealing is that the artist will show us how to perform Peking Opera. You are sure to enjoy it and benefit a lot from it. 【错因分析】 本段存在诸多语法错误，是天津高考英语书面表达中学生经常易犯的错误。 1. 介词错误：“on May”应该改为“in May”; “on the lecture hall” 应改为 “in the lecture hall”。（“on” 误用于表示地点） 2.逗号连接两个句子（逗号拼接）： 第一句： “The lecture will be hold in May, it is scheduled...” 两个独立句子用逗号连接，应改为句号或分号。 第三句： “...how to perform Peking Opera, you are sure to enjoy...” 同样为逗号拼接。 3.时态错误：“will be hold” 应改为 “will be held”。（被动语态错误） “covered” 应改为 “covers”。（讲座在将来，应用现在时或将来时描述内容） 4.中式表达：“can get many benefits from it” 是直译中文“能从中获得很多好处”，地道表达应为 “benefit a lot from it”。 避错攻略 【方法总结】 牢固掌握动词核心：确保全文时态统一、主谓一致，避免被动语态误用，这是写作语法的基石。 杜绝“中式英语”与结构错误：学会用英语思维表达，避免直译；并注意句子结构的完整性，切忌用逗号直接连接两个独立句子。 写作后专项检查：完成作文后，务必重点核查介词搭配、名词冠词以及句子连接，这是快速提分的关键步骤。 【干货必记】 1. 动词相关错误（最高频） 错误类型： 时态混乱：全文时态不一致 语态错误：主动/被动误用（如“will be hold”❌ → “will be held”✅） 主谓不一致：第三人称单数未加-s 非谓语误用：分词、不定式使用不当 纠正方法： 时态统一原则：记叙文常用一般过去时，说明文常用一般现在时 主谓一致口诀：“主语单三，动词加-s；主语复数，动词原形” 被动语态公式：be + 过去分词（注意be动词的时态变化） 2. 句子结构错误（最易失分） 错误类型： 逗号拼接：用逗号连接两个完整句子（最常见！） 错误示例：The lecture is interesting, you will like it. ❌ 正确修改：The lecture is interesting, and you will like it. ✅ 或改为：The lecture is interesting; you will like it. ✅ 句子片段：只有从句或无主谓结构 错误示例：Because the lecture is helpful. ❌（仅有原因状语从句） 正确修改：I recommend it because the lecture is helpful. ✅ 连词缺失/滥用：句子间缺乏逻辑连接 纠正方法： 句子完整性检查：每个句子必须有主语和谓语 逗号使用原则：逗号不能单独连接两个独立分句 连接词清单： 并列：and, but, or, so 递进：besides, moreover 因果：therefore, as a result 3. 介词搭配错误（最顽固） 错误类型： 地点介词混淆：in/on/at误用 错误示例：on the lecture hall ❌ → in the lecture hall ✅ 时间介词错误：at/in/on混淆 动词介词搭配错误：不同语言习惯差异 纠正方法： 地点介词记忆口诀： in → 大地方/范围内（in Beijing, in the room）on → 表面上/街道上（on the wall, on Main Street） at → 具体点（at the door, at 3 pm） 建立搭配本：专门记录常错介词搭配 be interested in（非to） benefit from（非of） perform in Peking Opera（非on） 4. 中式英语表达（最隐蔽） 错误类型： 字面直译中文习惯： 错误示例：learn knowledge ❌ → acquire knowledge ✅ 错误示例：get many benefits ❌ → benefit a lot ✅ 语序错误：将中文语序直接套用 纠正方法： “意译”而非“直译”：先想意思，再找地道表达 使用英英词典：查单词时看英文释义和例句 常见中式表达纠正表： 中式表达 地道表达 very like like...very much The price is suitable. The price is reasonable. My English has a big progress. My English has improved greatly. 举一反三 1.（2022·天津南开·二模）假设你是晨光中学高三学生李津，你的英国朋友Chris在中国学习中文已满两年， 即将回国。请你给他写一封e-mail，邀请他参加为他举办的欢送会，内容包括： （1） 祝贺他顺利通过考试，他的学习进步很大，为他骄傲； （2） 感谢他帮助你们学习英语； （3） 时间：星期六晚六点； 地点：你校餐厅二楼大厅。 参考词汇：欢送会 farewell party Dear Chris, Congratulations on your passing all the exams. ___________________________________________________ 典型错误表达​ "It was a pity that you must return back soon! So this Saturday evening a farewell party for you are going to be held at the second floor of the school dining hill. Could you come on 6:00 pm? My classmates and I sincerely hopes that you will come and see you at that time." 2.（25-26高二上·天津西青·月考）假定你是一名高校英语俱乐部成员，上周六你们英语俱乐部成员举行了一场义卖活动，要将义卖所得捐赠到贫困山区。请你就此活动用英语写一篇记叙文，内容包括： 1. 活动的时间和地点； 2. 义卖商品： 3. 你的感受。 典型错误表达​ Last Saturday, our English club has organized a charity sale at the school playground, which aim to raise funds for remote mountain areas. The event start at 9 a.m. and continued until the noon time. 3.（24-25高二上·天津滨海新·期中）假设你是李华，你参加一个志愿者活动，回来以后感触良多。请你根据以下信息，写一篇经历和感受： 时间：7月12日—7月20日 对象：500位来自天津各中学的学生志愿者 工作：到养老院帮老人家做家务，陪他们聊天，为老人家表演节目 感受：获益良多，辛苦，但是值得 典型错误表达​ From July 12th to 20th, I together with other 499 students from different high schools in Tianjin, joined into an activity for working like volunteers at nursing home, our main job were to do houseworks for elderly, besides, we chat freely and happy with them and gave them our prepared show, it was a fantastic day. 易错02：要点缺失，内容空泛 易错典题 【例】 （25-26高三上·天津·月考）以“My 180-Day Growth Journal”为题，选择二项你在高三坚持的习惯（如每日阅读、规律运动、志愿服务）。 1. 如何坚持这项习惯； 2. 这项习惯对你的影响和意义； 3. 你对其他同学的建议 内容缺失典型习作​ My 180-Day Growth Journal Over the past 180 days, I have kept two habits: reading and jogging. I did these things regularly. They have helped me a lot. I feel that my English has improved because of reading, and jogging makes me feel relaxed and energetic. These experiences are very meaningful to me. I hope my classmates can also develop good habits in their lives. It is really beneficial. 完整规范答案​ My 180-Day Growth Journal Over the past 180 days, I’ve consistently practiced daily reading and regular jogging. To stay on track, I set a fixed time each morning for reading English articles and ran for 20 minutes after dinner — no matter how busy I was. These habits transformed me: reading sharpened my focus and expanded my vocabulary, while jogging reduced stress and boosted my energy for study. More importantly, they taught me discipline and persistence. To fellow students: start small, be consistent, and remember — even 15 minutes a day can lead to remarkable growth over time. 【错因分析】 题目明确要求阐述三点： 如何坚持这项习惯；这项习惯对你的影响和意义；你对其他同学的建议。 习作分析：只是机械地复述了题干的要点框架，却没有向框架内填充任何有血有肉、具体可信的内容。它回答了“是什么”（我做了，有好处，建议你做），却完全缺失了“怎么做”和“为什么”这两个核心部分，具体分析如下： 第一要点（如何坚持）：严重缺失。 I did these things regularly.（仅用“regularly”一个词概括，没有任何具体方法、策略或遇到的挑战，内容完全空洞。） 第二要点（影响和意义）：模糊、笼统，缺乏细节支撑。 helped me a lot， my English has improved， feel relaxed and energetic， meaningful。（全部是概括性描述，像口号。如何提高？在哪方面进步？如何感受到的？均未说明，导致说服力弱。） 第三要点（建议）：过于空泛，缺乏操作性。 can also try to have good habits. It is really beneficial.（建议等同于“去做好事吧”，没有告诉同学任何“怎么做”的途径，价值很低。） 而且习作在语言表达过于简单，缺乏表现力，大量使用基础词汇（good, helpful, beneficial, do things），缺乏更精准、地道的表达（如范文中的 consistently, sharpened, boosted, discipline）。 避错攻略 【方法总结】 高考英语应用文内容缺失，核心解决思路：审题时圈画 “目的、对象、场景” 三维要素，套用 “开头引入 — 核心信息 — 结尾呼应” 结构；按 “5W1H” 逻辑补全细节（如时间、地点、要求），结合上海真题常考场景（通知、邀请、建议）储备模板化素材；写完用 “是否满足读者需求” 反向校验，避免信息断层，确保内容完整且贴合语境。 【干货必记】 一、 审题阶段：确保“要点全覆盖” 1.圈划分解法： 用笔明确圈出文体（email, speech, article）、对象（teacher, classmates）、核心任务（建议、道歉、倡议）。 将题目中关于“内容要点”的陈述（通常是1-2-3点）用数字标出来。确保自己清楚一共有几个必须回答的“问题”。 2.要点清单法： 在草稿纸上快速列出一个清单，将题目中的每个要点用自己的话转述成一个简短的中文或英文问题。 示例：题目说“1.介绍你坚持的习惯；2.说明如何坚持；3.该习惯对你的影响。” 清单：① What two habits? (Reading & Jogging) ② How did I stick to them? (Fixed time, specific actions) ③ How did they change me? (Skills, mindset, health) 二、 构思与拓展阶段：解决“内容空泛” 1.“三W”扩展法（针对每个要点）： 对于每一个列出的要点，强迫自己至少从以下三个维度中的一个进行拓展： What (具体是什么)：避免概括，给出细节。 空泛：I read books. 具体：I spent 20 minutes every morning reading China Daily or short stories. Why (原因/目的)：解释动机或行为背后的原因。 空泛：It was good for me. 具体：I did this to keep myself informed about current affairs and to learn authentic expressions. How (方式/结果)：描述过程或带来的具体改变。 空泛：My English improved. 具体：This consistent exposure significantly broadened my vocabulary and enhanced my reading speed. 2.“观点+支撑”公式： 每一个主体段的核心句（观点句）后面，必须紧跟1-2句支撑句。支撑句可以是： 举例 (For example, ...) 说理 (This is because...) 对比 (Before, I often felt...; but now, I find myself...) 联想个人经历法： 将题目与自己的真实生活体验挂钩。即使是虚构，也要具体化。比如谈“坚持运动”，可以具体到“在每周三和周五放学后，和好友去操场跑三圈”，这比“经常运动”要生动可信得多。 三、 语言执行与检查阶段 1.“准确优先，亮点点缀”原则： 首先保证语法正确、用词基本准确。在此前提下，每篇有意识地使用2-3个高级词汇或复杂句式（如非谓语动词、定语从句、倒装句），并将其用对、用准。 2.建立个人“闪光点”语料库： 按话题分类积累好词好句，特别是万能理由表达（如：broaden my horizons, cultivate perseverance, relieve academic pressure, enhance efficiency）。 举一反三 1.（2023·天津河西·三模）假设你是晨光中学高三学生李津，下周你校将与英国姊妹校线上“云”交流校园生活。高中三年即将结束，回顾丰富多彩的校园生活，哪一次校园活动给你留下了美好而深刻的印象呢?请你以“The Most Impressive School Activity”为题写一篇发言稿。 内容包括： 1.介绍活动过程; 2.分享个人感受。 内容缺失典型习作​ Hello, everyone! I’m Li Jin. Our school has many activities. I want to talk about one activity. It was the coming-of-age ceremony. This activity was very good. We did many things that day. Everyone was happy. The teachers gave speeches. We also wore special clothes. Then we finished the activity. I liked this activity very much. It was meaningful. It made me think a lot. I think it is important for students. That’s all. Thank you. 2.（2023·天津北辰·模拟预测）假设你是某国际学校的学生会主席李津，你校刚刚开展了走进社区的一系列文明实践活动。请你为校园广播站写一篇英文活动报道，内容包括： (1)介绍你们参加的活动(如照顾老人;宣传交通法规等)及其原因; (2)说明此项活动的意义; (3)简单介绍此项活动引起的反响。 内容缺失典型习作 Recently, our school organized some activities in the community. Students did different things there.We held these activities because they are important. Doing this is very meaningful for everyone. It can teach people something good.After the activities, many people saw them. People think these activities are nice. We feel happy about it. 3.（2022·天津·高考真题）假设你是晨光中学英语口语社的成员李津。为招募新成员，口语社请你用英语为社团纳新活动录制一段短视频。请按照以下提示，撰写视频的文字稿： (1)向同学们发出入社邀请； (2)介绍口语社的主要活动(如英语演讲比赛、观看英语电影等活动)； (3)分享本人入社以来的收获。 内容缺失典型习作 Hello, everyone. I am Li Jin from our school’s English club. I want to ask you to join our club. In our club, we do different activities. These activities are about English and are very interesting. You can learn a lot from them. I joined the club before. I think it is very useful. It has helped me improve a lot. Please come and join us. Thank you. 易错03：逻辑松散，结构混乱 易错典题 【例】 （22-23高二上·天津·期末）假设你是晨光中学的学生李津，你校的学生社团在开展了为期一个学期的活动后圆满结束。现在，你将代表学校，与英国友好学校进行线上经验交流，请你写一篇发言稿，内容如下： 1. 简要介绍你所在的社团开展的相关活动（至少写出两点） 2. 谈谈你们开展该活动的收获和感想 3. 表达期望 Good morning, dear friends. My name is Li Jin. I feel honored to take this opportunity to share with you the experience of our student associations. Thanks for your listening and I’m looking forward to the experience you will share with us. 学生不规范作答 Good morning, dear friends. My name is Li Jin. I feel honored to take this opportunity to share with you the experience of our student associations. I think clubs are very useful. Many students like them. We did many activities. In the club, we feel happy. We wrote articles sometimes. We also performed dramas. My friends said it was fun. The English speech contest let us speak more. But it was also a little hard. I hope we can do better. So, I want to share this with you. I learned a lot. It improved my English. We had a good time. Thanks for your listening and I’m looking forward to the experience you will share with us. 规范答案 Good morning, dear friends. My name is Li Jin. I feel honored to take this opportunity to share with you the experience of our student associations. I’ve been in the English club for a whole term. First of all, we set up an English learning column where students can write articles, poems and so on. Excellent works are selected and displayed every month. In addition, we held an English speech contest. Not only did the students practice their spoken English, but they also improved their ability to express themselves. Finally, we also performed English dramas. It gave students more chances to understand the cultural customs of English-speaking countries and increase their interest in English culture. Many members said that they had benefited greatly from these activities. The activities improved their English and brought them a lot of fun. Personally, I think it’s a good idea to set up a club. I hope our club will become stronger and more mature. Thanks for your listening and I’m looking forward to the experience you will share with us. 【错因分析】 1.结构顺序混乱，要点穿插不当 发言稿未遵循“介绍活动 → 谈收获 → 表期望”的合理逻辑顺序。开头后直接跳入主观感受（“I think clubs are very useful”），随后才零散地提及活动，接着又插入希望（“I hope we can do better”），之后再次返回补充个人收获。这种来回跳跃的结构使听众难以抓住重点，信息流支离破碎。 2.段落与句子间缺乏逻辑连接，思维跳跃 段落内部和句子之间缺少有效的过渡词和逻辑纽带。例如，在“We wrote articles sometimes.”和“My friends said it was fun.”之间没有说明因果关系或递进关系，陈述显得孤立。从“But it was also a little hard.”突然转折到“I hope we can do better”，缺乏铺垫，思维跳跃生硬。 3.内容要点混杂，核心任务不突出 题目要求的三个核心要点被随意地混在一段或分散在多处。例如，“介绍活动”这一点被拆散在多个地方简单提及，且与“感想”和“期望”完全交织在一起，未能形成清晰的板块。这导致每个要点都未能得到充分、集中的展现，核心任务——清晰地分享经验——未能有效完成。 避错攻略 【方法总结】 在动笔前，必须明确：高考作文不是句子的堆砌，而是有目的、有层次的逻辑呈现。 每一部分都应服务于整体交际目的。避免逻辑混乱的秘诀在于 “先规划，后施工” 。通过列提纲搭建稳固的框架，通过主题句明确段落方向，通过连接词保证行文流畅。将这三点内化为写作习惯，你的作文就会告别“杂乱无章”，展现出清晰有力的逻辑之美，在天津高考中稳稳拿下结构分。 【干货必记】 确保段落内部逻辑紧密 1.“主题句 + 拓展句”模型 每段第一句必须是主题句，像路标一样告诉读者本段要说什么。 弱主题句：We did many activities. (过于空泛) 强主题句：The club organized two flagship activities that significantly boosted our language skills. 2.拓展句的三种逻辑关系（选择1-2种使用）： 解释说明 (Explain)：用更具体的细节阐释主题句。 For example, ... / Specifically, ... 列举原因或结果 (Reason/Result)：说明“为什么”或“带来什么”。 This is because... / As a result, ... / Therefore, ... 对比或让步 (Contrast/Concession)：使论述更全面、有深度。 However, ... / On the other hand, ... / Although it was challenging, ... 巧用连接词，缝合句子 逻辑关系 高级实用连接词 (替换and, but, so) 并列/递进 additionally, furthermore, moreover, besides, equally importantly 因果 therefore, consequently, as a result, thus, hence 转折 however, nevertheless, on the contrary, in contrast, whereas 举例 for instance, take... as an example, a case in point is... 总结 in conclusion, to summarize, all in all, in a nutshell 使用口诀：开头表明目的，分段论述要点，句间要有连接，结尾总结升华。 举一反三 1.（23-24高二下·天津·期末）假设你是晨光中学的李津，你校交换生Chris正在策划“Approaching Chinese Students”栏目，用短视频介绍中国学生校园生活，为此咨询你的意见。请你给他写一封邮件，推荐一个拍摄场景。内容包括： (1)推荐拍摄场景(如升旗仪式、午餐时间、社团活动、体育运动等); (2)陈述推荐理由; (3)表达祝愿。 参考词汇： 升旗仪式 flag-raising ceremony 社团活动 club activities 习作：Dear Chris, How are you? I am writing this email to you. I think your project is very good. I want to recommend a place for you to film. I recommend the school's club activities. I wish your project can be successful and I hope you are happy. There are many clubs in our school. Students like them. For example, some students like robots and some like music. It is very interesting. You can film these. It can show our life. Students can learn many things there. They are not only about study. They are also fun. Please let me know if you need help. I can help you. Yours, Li Jin 2.（23-24高二上·天津·月考）根据下面的提示，写一篇文章 假如你是你校野生动物保护协会会长李华，恰逢协会成立10周年，请你写一篇博文介绍这十年协会做出的成就，并在博文中广泛征集全校师生的建议，如何更好保护野生动物。 1.协会成立的初衷：培养观察和探索自然的能力，提高保护野生动物的意识。 2.协会在每年3月3日“World Wild life Day”都会在校内举办活动：张贴海报，播放宣传视频，举办讲座和知识竞赛等，受到欢迎和好评。 3.欢迎全校师生对协会如何更好保护野生动物提出建议。 I am Li Hua, President of our school’s Wildlife Conservation Association. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 习作：Hello, I am Li Hua. I write this post to tell you something. We feel proud. Many students like our association. I want your suggestions. Please tell us your ideas about protecting animals. We need to do better. Thank you. Our association was set up ten years ago. Its purpose was to make students observe nature and know about wildlife protection. We have done many good things. Every year on March 3, it is World Wildlife Day. We do activities at school. For example, we put up posters. We also have lectures and contests. People say these activities are good. They are welcomed. We have protected many kinds of animals in the past ten years. The number of some animals is increasing. This is a great achievement. So, please write to us and give your suggestions. We will read them all. 3.（25-26高一上·天津蓟州·月考）** My New Life in Senior High ** 1.简单描述你进入高中后的新生活。 2.谈谈你遇到的一个主要挑战或发生的一个变化(如学习、交友、生活等方面)。 3.说明你是如何应对这个挑战或适应这个变化的。 _______________________________________________________________________________ 习作：My New Life in Senior High My life in senior high is busy. I meet new friends. My friends are nice. Sometimes we do homework together. My subjects are hard, this is a big challenge. I want to talk about the challenge. The challenge is about studying. For example, math homework is difficult. I have to think a lot. It made me worried before. I think it’s important to find a good way to study. I made a plan. I also joined a study group after school. We talk about questions. I feel better now. I am not worried anymore. I have more confidence. I also join club activities. Club activities are fun. They make school life colorful. I like them very much. My new life is busy but good. 1．（2022·天津·一模）假如你是晨光中学的学生李津，你校英文报向同学们约稿，讨论影响自身成长的因素。请你写一篇英语短文给报纸投稿。 内容提示： （1）陈述影响你成长的因素，如：家庭、学校、社会、朋友、书籍等（不少于两点）; （2）谈谈这些因素如何影响了你的成长（需举例说明）。 注意：词数不少于100；文章的开头已给出（不计入词数）。 The process of growing up is complex for every person, ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2．（2022·天津河北·二模）假设你是晨光中学的李津。2022年北京冬奥会圆满结束了，苏翊鸣、谷爱凌等中国青少年选手表现优异，夺得多枚金牌。为号召同学们向优秀的同龄人学习，你校英语社团的微信公众号开展以“Growing up along with Olympic Champions”为主题的英语征文活动。现请你投稿，文章内容应包括： （1）奥运冠军的共同点（追求梦想，全力以赴，永不言弃等）； （2）如何做学习或生活中的“冠军”？ 注意： （1）词数不少于100词； （2）可适当加入细节，使内容充实、行文连贯； （3）题目和开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Growing up along with Olympic Champions Many teenage champions have stood out in the Beijing Winter Olympics. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3．（25-26高三上·天津·期末）假设你是晨光中学的李津，你校英语报正在举办题为 “Clubs: More Than Just Hobbies” 的征文活动。请你根据以下要点写一篇短文投稿： 1.简述你校社团活动的多样性。 2.描述你参加某个社团的一次具体经历。 3.谈谈社团活动对你的影响。 注意： 1. 词数不少于100； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4．（24-25高三上·天津南开·期末）假设你是晨光中学学生李津。2024年10月26日，参加“汉语桥”活动的来自世界各地的百名中学生选手为深入体验中国校园文化，来到你校参观，请你为大赛微信公众号写一篇英文报道，介绍在你校开展此次活动的情况。内容包括： 1）活动的时间、地点及目的； 2）校园活动的具体安排（参观学生社团、进班听课等）； 3）活动的反响。 参考词汇：汉语桥Chinese Bridge—Chinese Proficiency Competition 注意：1.词数不少于100。 2.可适当加入细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯。 Chinese Bridge Coming to Our Campus ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5.（25-26高二上·天津·月考）9月份，我校学生在学校举行了为期两周的军训(military training)，请写一篇不少于100字的文章介绍这次军训中你印象深刻的事，向校报投稿。 要点如下：1.军训的目的 2.一件让你印象深刻的事情 3.你的感受 参考词汇(选择使用)：教官instructor；磨练毅力temper willpower；培养纪律性foster discipline；踢正步march in goose step An Unforgettable Moment in Military Training ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 20 / 20 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $