UNIT 2 Period 5 Writing-（配套教参）【学霸笔记·同步精讲】2024-2025学年高中英语必修第三册（人教版）

本讲义聚焦高中英语写作核心知识点，涵盖应用文写作（寓言故事评论）与读后续写两大模块。通过句型仿写（如动词-ing作状语、neither...nor...结构）、动作链构建（动词联动、非谓语动词等）及情节分析（Q&A策略）等学习支架，帮助学生从基础句型运用过渡到篇章逻辑构建。 该资料特色鲜明，寓言评论结合《守株待兔》等中外寓言，助力学生理解文化内涵，培养文化意识。读后续写通过动作链和情节分析，提升语言表达的连贯性与逻辑性，发展思维品质。课中教师可依托仿写练习与范文引导教学，课后学生能借助实例回顾与强化训练，有效查漏补缺，提升写作能力。

Period 5　Writing 写作一　应用文写作——寓言故事的评论 请阅读下面这则寓言故事并谈谈自己的看法，写一篇关于这则寓言故事的评论。 A peacock (孔雀) was very unhappy with her ugly voice, so she spent most of her days complaining about it. “It is true that you cannot sing，” said the fox，“but look how beautiful you are！” “Oh, but what good is all this beauty，” cried the peacock，“with such an unpleasant voice！” “Listen，” said the fox，“each one owns something good: you have such beauty；the nightingale (夜莺) has her songs；and the owl (猫头鹰) has his eyes.Even if you had a sweet voice, you would still complain about another thing.Why can't you just be happy about what you have already got？” 注意：词数80左右。 1．这则寓言是关于一只抱怨自己的声音丑陋却忽视了自己真正的美丽的孔雀。 The fable is about a peacock who__complained__about__her__ugly__voice__and__ignored__her__true__beauty． 2．但是一只狐狸建议她应该满足于她所拥有的(东西)。 But a fox advised that she__be__content__with__what__she__owns． 3．我明白了我们青少年应该充分利用我们的优点，不要总是抱怨缺点。 I understand that we teenagers should__make__good__use__of__our__advantages,__stopping complaining about the shortcomings all the time. 4．如果孔雀意识到这一点，她就不会这么心烦意乱了。 Had the peacock realised this, she would__not__have__been__so__upset． 5．他经常抱怨他篮球打得不好，因为他不够高。 He often complains that he__can't__play__basketball__well because he is not tall enough. 6．他没意识到自己的优点也不知道我们多么钦佩他。 He isn't__aware__of__his__own__merits and doesn't know how__much__we__admire__him． 7．没有人能在各个方面都发展得很好，即使他/她是一个天才。 Nobody can develop very well in all aspects even__if__he/she__is__a__talent． 8．我们应该保持积极，珍惜我们所拥有的，而不是抱怨太多。 We should stay__positive__and__value__what__we__have instead of complaining too much. 9．【读教材原句】　(教材P20)He crashed into the stone, spilling the milk everywhere. 【记句式】　动词-ing形式作状语 【学仿写】　用动词-ing形式作状语改写句1 The__fable__is__about__a__peacock__who__complained__about__her__ugly__voice,__ignoring__her__true__beauty. 10．【读教材原句】　(教材P20)Neither she nor her friends thought about moving the stone out of the road. 【记句式】　“neither...nor...”意为“既不……也不……”　 【学仿写】　用“neither...nor...”改写句6 He__is__neither__aware__of__his__own__merits__nor__aware__of__how__much__we__admire__him. ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ One possible version： The fable is about a peacock who complained about her ugly voice, ignoring her true beauty. But a fox advised that she be content with what she owns. After reading it, I understand that we teenagers should make good use of our advantages, stopping complaining about the shortcomings all the time. Had the peacock realised this, she would not have been so upset. Many people make the same mistake. Take my friend Mike as an example. He often complains that he can't play basketball well because he is not tall enough. He is neither aware of his own merits nor aware of how much we admire him. In fact, nobody can develop very well in all aspects even if he/she is a talent. So we should stay positive and value what we have instead of complaining too much. 假定你最近又读了一遍中国古代寓言故事《守株待兔》(Waiting for Gains Without Pains)，并从中学到了很多生活哲理，你打算把这则寓言故事分享给你的外国朋友，希望他们能对中国文化有更多的了解并从中学到一些人生的道理。内容包括： 1．对故事的简要介绍； 2．你从中悟出的人生哲理； 3．对人们的勉励。 注意：词数80左右。 参考词汇：树桩(stump)；锄头(hoe)；讽刺(satirize) ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ One possible version： I read the fable titled “Waiting for Gains Without Pains” again recently. A young farmer wanted to eat good food every day, but he didn't like working. One day, while ploughing in his field, he saw a hare bump into a stump by accident and die. He had the chance to eat delicious meat of the hare. From that day on, he put down his hoe, waiting by the stump for a second hare to turn up, but no luck. The story satirizes those who would rather complain or just wait for luck than make efforts to obtain what they need. I think we shouldn't be that kind of people. It is working hard that is the most precious. 写作二　读后续写登峰篇——积木拼凑酷炫假肢，实现暖心之举 动作链指一系列相互关联、逻辑意义相连接的动作。动作按照一定的顺序或时间发生，较短的篇幅即可构成一个完整的场景或情节。 读后续写需要大量的动作描写。用动作链来展示人物动作，可以增强故事的连贯性和可读性。为了构建动作链，要更加关注句子结构。构建动作链的方法包括： 1．动词的联动 *She took the book off the shelf, opened it and began reading the story.　她把书从书架上拿下来，打开了它并开始读故事。 2．非谓语动词 *Sitting beneath the starry night sky around the camp fire, we talked and laughed. 在繁星点点的夜空下，我们围坐在篝火旁，有说有笑。 3．时间状语从句 *When the bell rang, he swiftly packed his bag, leaving the classroom in a hurry. 当铃声响起时，他迅速收拾好书包，匆匆离开了教室。 4．名词短语＋and＋陈述句 *One more look and he noticed flames shooting out from under the disabled vehicle. 又看了一眼，他注意到火焰从那辆报废的汽车下面喷出。 阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 [1]“Have you decided on your major？” my parents inquired. [2]“Bioengineering, of course.” I responded without the slightest hesitation. [3]I entered this world with Poland syndrome, a disease that prevented the formation of my right arm and pectoral muscles (胸肌). My parents, believing that playing with toy blocks could enhance my dexterity (灵巧), gifted me my first kit when I was five. Struggling to piece the components together, I crafted my first work—a car. As I got older, I grew obsessed with the mechanical toy blocks set, a more advanced range, and how to use it to build more delicate structures. By the age of nine, I had fashioned my first prosthetic arm (义肢) using the mechanical toy blocks set that perfectly accommodated my right arm. [4]This early creation sparked my drive for further exploration. Years later, I developed another prosthetic arm that I called the MK-1, which had fingers, a motor, a pressure sensor, a movable elbow joint, and a grabber capable of picking things up. [5]Before constructing it, I had already decided against traditional prosthetics. Not because they were ineffective, but because playing with toy blocks did significantly improve my dexterity, helping me adapt to my condition. However, a more frustrating reason was that prosthetics were too expensive. My parents and I had looked into getting one a few years earlier, only to be discouraged by the prohibitive price. So, I concluded that I might not need one because I was managing well without. Nevertheless, the joy of creating prosthetics with toy blocks remained. Every time my parents brought toy blocks to home, I quickly sat down, eagerly pieced the components together and enthusiastically made new prosthetics. [6]As the years passed, my creations evolved from MK-1 to the more advanced and comfortable MK-V. It featured a control unit that could send and receive orders from sensors on the arm to the motors, with cables that contract like muscles. [7]One day, a couple with their eight-year-old son, who lost both arms in an accident, visited my home after learning about my creations. Short of money, they couldn't afford well-functioning prosthetics. “Daniel，” the father earnestly asked, “we were wondering if you could possibly help build a set of prosthetics for our son.” 注意：续写词数应为150左右。 I knew it would be a challenging and demanding task, but I responded with a “yes”．____________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ I rushed to the boy's home and secured the prosthetics onto him.______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ 【Settings背景】 When&Where [7]One__day,__a couple with their eight-year-old son, who lost both arms in an accident, visited my__home after learning about my creations. 【Characters角色】 Who I;__my parents; a couple;__a boy of eight-year-old 【Plots情节】 What [3]I entered__this__world with Poland syndrome, a disease that prevented__the__formation__of my right arm and pectoral muscles. My parents, believing that playing with toy blocks could enhance my dexterity, gifted me my__first__kit when I was five. [3]By the age of nine, I had fashioned__my__first__prosthetic__arm using the mechanical toy blocks set that perfectly accommodated my right arm. [4]Years later, I developed__another__prosthetic__arm that I called the MK-1. [6]As the years passed, my creations evolved from MK-1 to the__more__advanced__and__comfortable MK-V. [7]“Daniel，” the father earnestly asked, “we were wondering if you could possibly help build__a__set__of__prosthetics for our son.” Why [7]Short__of__money,__they couldn't afford well-functioning prosthetics. 【Feelings情感】 How [3]As I got older, I grew__obsessed__with the mechanical toy blocks set, a more advanced range, and how to use it to build more delicate structures. [5]However, a more frustrating reason was that prosthetics were too expensive. My parents and I had looked into getting one a few years earlier, only to be__discouraged__by the prohibitive price. [5]Nevertheless, the__joy__of creating prosthetics with toy blocks remained. Theme (正能量原则) I created my prosthetic__arm using the mechanical toy blocks set. After a couple knew it, they asked me to help build a set of prosthetics for their son. It inspired me to major in bioengineering and devote myself to__prosthetic__innovation． 每段三个微情节(Q&A策略)：注重衔接和冲突解决原则 第一段段首句：I knew it would be a challenging and demanding task, but I responded with a “yes”． [Question 1]　What was the boy's reaction? [Answer]　He__lifted__his__head__and__his__eyes__glittered__with__a__spark__of__hope. [Question 2]　What did I do for the boy? [Answer]　I__comforted__him__and__started__to__build__the__prosthetics. [Question 3]　What was the result? [Answer]　I__successfully__created__the__prosthetics__and__enhanced__the__flexibility. 第二段段首句：I rushed to the boy's home and secured the prosthetics onto him. [Question 1]　Did the prosthetics suitable for the boy? [Answer]　Yes,__they__worked. [Question 2]　What did the boy do? [Answer]　He__hugged__his__parents__and__expressed__the__sincere__gratitude__to__me. [Question 3]　What decision did I make? [Answer]　__I__decided__to__major__in__bioengineering__and__devote__myself__to__prosthetic__innovation. 动作链构建公式：动词的联动；非谓语动词 1．我努力地把各个部件拼在一起，制作出了我的第一件作品——一辆汽车。 Struggling__to__piece__the__components__together,__I crafted my first work—a car.(非谓语动词构建动作链) 2．每次父母把积木带回家，我都赶紧坐下来，急切地把各个部件拼在一起，热情地制作新的义肢。 Every time my parents brought toy blocks to home, I quickly sat__down,__eagerly pieced the components together and enthusiastically made new prosthetics. (动词的联动构建动作链) 1．我走上前去，轻轻地拍了拍他的肩膀并给了他一个令人安心的微笑。 I walked__forward,__patted__him__on__the__shoulder gently and gave__him__a__reassuring__smile．(动词的联动构建动作链) 2．我们屏住呼吸，焦急地等待着结果——它们奏效了！ We held our breath, anxiously__waiting__for__the__result—they worked！(非谓语动词构建动作链) 1．随后的日子见证了我为此付出了多少努力。 The subsequent days witnessed__how__much__efforts I put into it. (无生命名词作主语) 2．几天变成几周，我的努力得到了回报。 Days__turning__into__weeks,__my hard work paid off. (独立主格结构) 3．男孩喜极而泣，冲到父母面前，给了他们最大的拥抱。 With__delightful__tears__running__down__his__face,__the boy rushed to his parents and gave them the biggest hugs. (with复合结构) 4．这家人对我表达了他们诚挚的感谢，说如果不是我的帮助，他们会遭受很多痛苦。 The family expressed their sincere gratitude to me, saying__if__it__had__not__been__for__my__help,__they__would__have__suffered__a__lot．(v.-ing形式作状语；虚拟语气) 5．我从来没有想过，我的仅仅是出于乐趣的创作有一天会产生如此深远的影响。 Never__had__I__imagined__that my creations, born out of mere fun, would someday make such a profound difference.(否定副词位于句首引起部分倒装) I knew it would be a challenging and demanding task, but I responded with a “yes”．______________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ I rushed to the boy's home and secured the prosthetics onto him.______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ One possible version： I knew it would be a challenging and demanding task, but I responded with a “yes”. The boy lifted his head with his once lifeless eyes now glittering with a spark of hope. I walked forward, patted him on the shoulder gently and gave him a reassuring smile. Without any delay, I began this tough task immediately. The subsequent days witnessed how much efforts I put into it. I carefully selected the toy blocks pieces that catered to the boy's interests and integrated practical components to enhance its flexibility. Days turning into weeks, my hard work paid off. The tailored prosthetics finally took shape. Looking at the perfect work, I couldn't contain my joy. I rushed to the boy's home and secured the prosthetics onto him. We held our breath, anxiously waiting for the result—they worked! The room erupted with cheers! With delightful tears running down his face, the boy rushed to his parents and gave them the biggest hugs. The family expressed their sincere gratitude to me, saying if it had not been for my help, they would have suffered a lot. The scene was truly inspiring. Never had I imagined that my creations, born out of mere fun, would someday make such a profound difference. It is on that day that I made up my mind to major in bioengineering and devote myself to prosthetic innovation. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $