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译林英语八上Unit2 写作专项
给校长的校园生活改进建议信
写作目标
结合本单元“School life”的核心主题,能用英语完成“给校长写建议信改进校园生活”的写作任务,达成以下目标:
1. 能使用正式、礼貌的书信语气(如“Dear...”, “Yours sincerely”);
2. 能清晰分点提出建议,并搭配合理理由支撑;
3. 能按“目的说明-分点建议-结尾期待”的书信结构,完整完成写作。
题目解析
体裁:建议信(应用文),需向校长正式、有条理地提出校园生活的改进建议;
人称:以第一人称(I)为主,客观陈述建议及理由;
时态:以一般现在时为主(描述校园现状),结合一般将来时(说明建议的效果);
核心要求:
内容:包含“写信目的”“2-3条具体建议+理由”“结尾期待”;
字数:80-100词,语言正式礼貌,用本单元核心表达(如“suggest that...”, “so that...”, “provide...”)。
典型例题
阳光中学邀请学生给校长写一封建议信,提出改进校园生活的具体建议。请你以学生的身份,写一封题为“A Suggestion Letter to Improve School Life”的信,包含以下要点:
1. 说明写信的目的;
2. 提出2-3条改进校园生活的建议,并说明理由;
3. 表达对建议被采纳的期待。
思路点拨
1. 开头(目的说明):直接点明写信意图——向校长提校园生活的改进建议,用礼貌的书信开头;
2. 主体(分点建议):分2-3点列出具体建议,每点补充理由(说明建议能解决的问题/带来的好处);
3. 结尾(期待收尾):简洁表达希望建议能帮助改善校园生活的愿望,用礼貌的书信结尾。
写作模板(逐段拆解)
第一段:开头(约20词)
必写要素:称呼 + 写信目的
基础句式:Dear [校长称呼], I am writing to make some suggestions on how to improve our school life.
示例:Dear Mr Zhang, I am writing to make some suggestions on how to improve parts of our school life.
第二段:主体(约50词)
必写要素:分点建议 + 理由
基础句式:
① First, I suggest that [建议1], so [理由1].
② Second, we should [建议2] because [理由2].
示例:First, I suggest that our school provides more ping-pong tables, so more students can play during breaks. Second, we should add more library books because reading helps open our minds.
第三段:结尾(约20词)
必写要素:期待 + 书信结尾
基础句式:I hope my suggestions help improve our school life. Yours sincerely, [你的姓名]
示例:I hope my suggestions help improve our school life. Yours sincerely, Wang Xinyue
范文
英文
Dear Mr Li,
I am writing to share some practical suggestions to make our school life more enjoyable and meaningful.
First, I suggest that our school should set up more after-school clubs like painting and drama. Many students have such hobbies, and these clubs will help us develop our skills outside class. Second, it’s necessary to improve our school cafeteria—adding more healthy and delicious food choices will make us eat better and have more energy for study. Besides, we need more benches in the campus garden so that we can chat with friends or read books comfortably.
I truly hope you will consider my suggestions. Thank you for your time!
Yours sincerely,
Chen Yu
中文翻译
亲爱的李校长:
我写这封信是为了分享一些切实的建议,让我们的校园生活更愉快、更有意义。
首先,我建议学校设立更多课后俱乐部,比如绘画社和戏剧社。很多同学有这样的爱好,这些俱乐部能帮助我们在课堂之外发展技能。其次,有必要改善学校食堂——增加更多健康美味的食物选择,能让我们吃得更好,也能有更多精力投入学习。此外,校园花园里需要添置更多长椅,这样我们就能舒适地和朋友聊天或看书了。
我真诚地希望您能考虑我的建议,感谢您抽出时间阅读!
此致
敬礼
陈宇
素材积累
短语
make suggestions on... — 对……提建议
during breaks — 在课间
open one’s minds — 开阔某人的思维
search online — 在线搜索
provide sth. for sb. — 为某人提供某物
set up after-school clubs — 设立课后俱乐部
school cafeteria — 学校食堂
have more energy for study — 有更多精力学习
基础句型(仿写参考)
基础句型
仿写句子
I am writing to make suggestions on...
I am writing to make suggestions on our school sports facilities.
I suggest that... so...
I suggest that we build a small football field so we can practice regularly.
We should... because...
We should have monthly book fairs because they can arouse our interest in reading.
It’s necessary to... — 有必要……
It’s necessary to update the classroom projectors because clear images help us learn better.
好句集锦
1. More outdoor activity areas will let us get close to nature and relax after long classes.(更多户外活动区域能让我们亲近自然,在长时间上课后放松身心。)
2. Adding a student suggestion box will make our voices heard and make school life more suitable for us.(增设学生意见箱能让我们的声音被听到,让校园生活更贴合我们的需求。)
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