内容正文:
九下沪外版
【写作专版】
E版满分范文及模板
写作专版
【E版满分范文】介绍一部喜欢的电影(电
影名称/类型情节/感受)
写作提分攻略+范文深度解析·沪外版九下
满分范文
Hello,everyone.My name is Li Ming.My favorite movie is Zootopia.It is an exciting cartoon
Zootopia tells a story about a rabbit named Judy who wants to be a police officer.The plot is inter-
esting and the setting takes place in a modern city where animals live together.The main character
Judy is brave and never gives up her dream,even when others doubt her.The soundtrack is also very
wonderful
I was deeply touched by Judy's determination.The storyline teaches us that we should never give up
our dreams,no matter how difficult they seem.I learned a lesson from this meaningful movie:believe
in yourself and work hard for what you want.
I strongly recommend Zootopia to all my friends.It is not only an exciting cartoon but also a movie
that can inspire everyone.
【满分范文逐段解析】
第一段(基础介绍):
开篇用HIello,everyone自然引出话题;
核心句型:ly favorite movie is../It is an..简洁明了介绍电影名称和类型;
使用exciting cartoon精准描述电影属性,吸引读者兴趣。
第二段(情节分析):
用tells a story about..…who wants to.…清晰介绍主角和目标;
多维度评价:plot(刷情)、setting(背景)、main character(角色)、soundtrack(配乐):
角色描写深刻:brave/never gives up突出主角品质,even when others doubt her增强戏刷冲
突。
第三段(观影感受):
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【写作专版】
E版满分范文及模板
I was deeply touched by.…自然过渡到情感体验;
提炼电影主题:never give up our dreams传递积极价值观:
个人收获明确:I learned a lesson.:具体说明成长启示。
第四段(推荐总结:
用I strongly recommend..强化推荐力度:
双重价值强调:not only..but also.结构突出娱乐性和教育意义:
结尾inspire everyone升华主题,呼应前文。
满分范文模板
Hello,everyone.My name is 1.
My favorite movie is 2.
It is an 3.
(电影类型:exciting cartoon,.interesting comedy,.moving drama)
4
(电影名称)tells a story about5.
(主要角色:a rabbit named,Judy,a boy named
Tom)who wants to 6.
(角色目标:be a police officer,travel around the world).The plot is
7.
(剧情评价:interesting,exciting,touching)and the setting takes place in8,
(故事
a modern city where animals live together,a small village in the mountains).The main character
9.
(主要角色)is10.
(角色性格:brave,.kind,clever)andnever 11.
(角
色行为:gives up his/her dream,loses hope),even when others 12.
(他人态度:doubt
him/her,laugh at him/her).The soundtrack is also very 13.
(soundtrack评价:wonderful,
moving,exciting).
I was deeply touched by 14.
(角色/情节:Judy's determination,.the friendship between
them).The storyline teaches us that we should 15.
(电影主题:never give up our dreams,
cherish our friends),no matter 16.
(条件:how difficult they seem,what happens).Ilearned
a lesson from this meaningful movie:17.
(学到的道理:believe in yourself and work hard
for what you want,be kind to others)
I strongly recommend 18.
(电影名称)to all my friends.It is not only an19,
(电
影类型:exciting cartoon,interesting comedy)but also a movie that can20,
(电影作用:
inspire everyone,make us think).
【模板填写指南】
2
九下沪外版
【写作专版】
E版满分范文及模板
1.你的姓名(如:LiMing/Wang Fang)
2.电影名称(如:Zootopia/The Lion King)
3.电影类型(如:exciting cartoon/moving dama)
4.电影名称(与2一致)
5.主要角色(如:a rabbit named Judy/a young lion named Simba)
6.角色目标(如:become a police officer/reclaim his kingdom)
7.剧情评价(如:interesting/exciting)
8.故事背景(如:a modern animal city/the African savanna)
9.主要角色(与5一致)
l0.角色性格(如:brave/kind-hearted)
11.角色行为(如:gives up his dream/stops trying)
12.他人态度(如:doubt him/support her)
l3.配乐评价(如:wonderful/emotional)
l4.感动点(如:the character's courage/the friendship theme)
15.电影主题(如:follow your dreams/the power of family)
16.条件状语(如:how hard it is./what others say)
17.学到的道理(如:always be yourself/help others in need)
18.电影名称(与2一致)
19.电影类型(与3一致)
20.电影价值(如:teach important lessons/bring people joy)
填写示例:
1.Li Ming 2.Zootopia 3.exciting cartoon 4.Zootopia
5.a rabbit named Judy 6.be a police officer 7.interesting
8.a modern city where animals live together 9.Judy 10.brave
11.gives up her dream 12.doubt her 13.wonderful
3
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【写作专版】
E版满分范文及模板
14.Judy's determination 15.never give up our dreams
16.how difficult they seem 17.believe in yourself
18.Zootopia 19.exciting cartoon 20.inspire everyone
高分亮点总结
结构亮点:四段式(介绍→情节→感受→推荐),逻辑清晰层层递进
词汇亮点:精准使用电影术语(plot/setting/soundtrack)和情感词汇(touched/inspire)
句型亮点:灵活运用定语从句(who wants to.、让步状语从句(even when.…)
内容亮点:从情节描述自然过渡到人生启示,体现深度思考
衔接亮点:使用The storyline teaches us..I learned a lesson.等自然过渡句
写作小贴士·电影类写作要点
名称规范:电影名用斜体(Zootopia)或首字母大写(Zootopia)
时态统一:情节描述用一般现在时,个人感受用一般过去时
避免剧透:简要概括核心情节,不透露关键结局
情感真实:用I was deeply touched.等真实表达感受
推荐技巧:用not only.but also.强调电影双重价值