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写作提分攻略+范文深度解析·译林牛津版初三
满分范文
Hello,everyone.My name is Li Ming.Among all the art forms,I prefer music because it is both moving
and inspiring
Music is a wonderful art form.It can be classical or modern,and each type has its own charm.Classical
music is inspiring;it helps me focus on my study when I feel distracted.Modern music is often
powerful and expressive,which makes me want to dance when I am happy.
Ilove listening to music every day.When I am sad,music can make me happy like a good friend staying
with me.When I am tired,it helps me relax and forget all worries.I also enjoy singing along with the
music,which makes me feel creative and alive.
Music is not just a kind of art for me,but also an important part of my life.It teaches me to feel emotions
deeply and brings me endless joy.I will always be interested in music and appreciate its beauty forever.
【满分范文逐段解析】
第一段(引入主题):
开篇用HelIo,everyone自然引出话题:
核心句型:I prefer..because it is both…and.清晰表达偏好及原因:
形容词选择noving和inspiring体现艺术形式的双重价值。
第二段(分类描述):
用It can be.or.展示艺术形式的多样性;
通过对比classical和modern类型,展示不同场景下的作用:
动词短语focus on my study/want to dance具体化艺术形式的影响。
第三段(个人体验):
用When I am.结构连接情绪与音乐作用,逻辑流畅:
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比喻手法like a good friend增强情感表达;
动词singing along with体现主动参与,深化主题。
第四段(升华主题):
用not just...but also.强调艺术的多重意义;
结尾appreciate its beauty forever呼应开头,形成情感闭环。
满分范文模板
Hello,.everyone.My name is1.一(你的名字).Among all the art forms,I prefer2.一(艺术形式:
music,painting,dancing)because it is both3.(形容词l:moving,.colorful,energetic)and4.(形
容词2:inspiring,creative,exciting)
5._(艺术形式)is a wonderful art form.It can be6._(类型l:classical,traditional,,modern)or7.
一(类型2:modem,westem,.folk),and each type has its own charm.8._(类型1)9._(艺术形式)
is10._(特点l:inspiring,peaceful,elegant)):it helps me11,_(作用1:focus on my study,relax,
feel calm)when I feel12._(场景1:distracted,.stressed,tired).13._(类型2)14.一(艺术形式)
is often15._(特点2:powerful,.lively,expressive),which makes me want to16._(作用2:dance,
sing,create)when I am17._(场景2:happy,excited,energetic)).
I love18.-(动词:listening to,creating,.practicing)19.一(艺术形式)every day..When I am20.
(情绪l:sad,upset,.lonely),21.一(艺术形式)can make me22.一(感受l:happy,calm,comforted)
like a good friend staying with me.When I am 23.(2:tired,bored,anxious),it helps me 24.
(感受2:relax,forget worries,,feel alive).I also enjoy25._(相关活动:singing along with,drawing,
performing)26.一(艺术形式),which makes me feel27.一(体验:creative,.alive,satisfied)
28._(艺术形式)is not just a kind of art for me,but also an important part of my life..It teaches me to
29,(收获l:feel emotions deeply,.appreciate beauty,express myself)and brings me30,一(收获
2:endless joy,peace,confidence).I will always be interested in 31.()and appreciate its
beauty forever.
【模板填写指南】
1.
你的姓名(如:LiMing/Wang Fang)
2.喜爱的艺术形式(如:music/painting/dancing)
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3.描述艺术形式的形容词1(如:moving/beautiful/energetic)
4.描述艺术形式的形容词2(如:inspiring/creative/exciting)
5.填写艺术形式(与2一致)
6.艺术形式的类别1(如:classical/traditional)
7.艺术形式的类别2(如:modern/folk)
8.填写类别1(与6一致)
9.填写艺术形式(与2一致)
l0.类别1的特点(如:inspiring/peaceful)
11.类别1的作用(如:focus on study/relax)
12.适用场景(如:distracted/stressed)
13.填写类别2(与7一致)
14.填写艺术形式(与2一致)
15.类别2的特点(如:powerful/lively)
16.类别2的作用(如:dance/create)
17.适用场景(如:happy/excited)
l8.日常活动动词(如:listening to/practicing)
19.填写艺术形式(与2一致)
20.负面情绪(如:sad/lonely)
21.填写艺术形式(与2一致)
22.情绪改善效果(如:happy/comforted)
23.另一负面情绪(如:tired/anxious)
24.放松效果(如:relax/feel alive)
25.互动活动(如:singing along with/performing)
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26.填写艺术形式(与2一致)
27.活动体验(如:creative/satisfied)
28.填写艺术形式(与2一致)
29.深层收获(如:feel emotions deeply/express myself)
30.情感收获(如:endless joy/confidence)
31.填写艺术形式(与2一致)
填写示例:
1.Li Ming 2.painting 3.colorful 4.creative 5.Painting
6.traditional 7.modern 8.Traditional 9.painting 10.elegant
11.feel calm
12.stressed 13.Modern 14.painting 15.expressive
16.create 17.energetic 18.creating 19.paintings 20.upset
21.Painting
22.calm 23.bored 24.feel alive 25.drawing
26.pictures
27.satisfied 28.Painting
29.appreciate beauty 30.peace 31.it
高分亮点总结
结构亮点:四段式框架(引入→分类→体验→升华),逻辑递进清晰
词汇亮点:精准使用艺术类形容词(inspiring/expressive/.creative)和动词短语(singing along
with)
句型亮点:灵活运用并列结构(both.and.)、时间状语从句(When.)和定语从句(which..)
情感表达:通过具体场景(study/dance)和比喻(like a good friend)增强感染力
主题升华:结尾段将艺术形式提升到人生层面,深化立意
写作小贴士·艺术类作文要点
选材技巧:选择熟悉艺术形式,便于细节描写
分类描写:至少描述2种类型/风格,展现广度
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情感绑定:每个艺术特点需关联具体情感体验
动词升级:避免重复使用like,改用enjoy/appreciate/be passionate about
避免泛化:用具体活动(如singing along with)替代泛泛而谈
文化元素:适当加入艺术形式的文化背景(如classical music的欧洲传统)
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