Unit 6 运用 5W1H 要素写一篇完整的小故事-2025-2026学年九年级全一册英语满分范文及模板（北师大版）

九年级全一册北师大版 【写作专版】 E版满分范文及模板 写作专版 【E版满分模板】运用5W1H要素写小故 事 写作提分攻略+范文深度解析·北师大版九年级全一册 满分范文 A Kind Deed Last weekend,on a sunny morning,a young girl named Lily walked near the river in the park.She saw an old man sitting on a bench,looking worried.Lily went over and asked with a smile “Grandpa,are you okay?”The old man said,“Ican't find my way home because I was lost.” Lily decided to give a hand.She carefully asked for his address and called the police.While waiting,she shared her snacks with the old man.Thirty minutes later,the police car arrived.The old man was very thankful and said,"You're such a kind girl!"Lily felt happy to help. By working together,Lily and the police helped the old man go home safely.It was a great day for her! 【满分范文要素解析】 5WIH要素运用： When(时间)：Last weekend,,on a sunny morning Where(地点)：near the river in the park Who(人物：Lily(young girl),old man,.police What(事件)：Helped lost old man find home Why(原因)：The old man was lost and couldn't find his way home How(方式)：Asked address→called police→shared snacks→police arrived 结构亮点：清晰的三段式结构（背景引入→行动过程→结果感受） 语言亮点：使用直接引语增强真实感(“Grandpa,are you okay?”),动作描写具体(went over//asked with a smile) 情感表达：通过情绪描写(looking worried/very thankful/felt happy)深化主题 九年级全一册北师大版 【写作专版】 E版满分范文及模板 满分范文模板 A Kind Deed Last weekend,.ona1.一（天气）morning,a2.一（人物身份）named3.-(人物名字) walked near the4.(地点)in the park.He/She saw an5,_(人物身份)sitting on a bench,looking6. (情绪).7.一（人物名字）went over and asked with a smile,“8.三（称呼），are you okay?”The9. 一（人物身份）said,“Ican’t10.一（遇到的困难）because I was11.一（原因）.” 12.一（人物名字）decided to give a hand.He/She carefully13.一（行动1）and14.一（行动2）.While waiting,he/she15.一（额外帮助）.16.一（时间）later,17.一（帮助者）arrived.The18.一（人物身 份)was very thankful and said,,“You're such a19.一（品质）20._（称呼）！”21.一（人物名字）felt happy to help. By working together,22.一（人物名字）and the23._(帮助者)helped the24.一（人物身份）25. (结果).It was a great day for him/herl 【模板填写指南】 1.天气形容词（如：sunny/rainy/windy) 2.主要人物身份（如：student/teacher/doctor) 3.主要人物姓名（如：Lily/Tom/David) 4.具体地点（如：lake/library/playgr ound) 5.需要帮助者身份（如：old man/lost child/disabled woman) 6.情绪状态（如：worried/sad/confused) 7.主要人物姓名（与3一致） 8.对帮助对象的称呼（如：Grandpa/Madam/Sir) 9。需要帮助者身份（与5一致） l0.具体困难（如：find my way home/locate my parents) 11.困难原因（如：lost/new here/blind) 12.主要人物姓名（与3一致） l3.第一行动（如：asked for details/comforted him) l4.第二行动（如：called the police/contacted his family) 2 九年级全一册北师大版 【写作专版】 E版满分范文及模板 15.额外帮助（如：shared food/gave water/stayed with) 16.时间间隔（如：Ten minutes/An hour/Soon) l7.援助者身份（如：police/security guard/teacher) 18.需要帮助者身份（与5一致） 19.人物品质（如：kind/helpful/thoughtful) 20.对帮助对象的称呼（与8一致） 21.主要人物姓名（与3一致） 22.援助者身份（与17一致） 23.需要帮助者身份（与5一致) 24.最终结果（如：find his home/reunite with family) 填写示例： 1.rainy 2.student 3.Emma 4.bus stop 5.lost child 6.crying 7.Emma 8.Little boy 9.child 10.find my parents 11.separated 12.Emma 13.asked his name 14.called security 15.gave him candy 16.Fifteen minutes 17.security officer 18.child 19.smart 20.sister 21.Emma 22.Emma 23.officer 24.child 25.reunite with his parents 5W1H要素提分要点 When时间要素：精确时间(Last Saturday at3pm)或相对时间(After school) Where地点要素：具体场景(near the school gate/in the community park) WMho人物要素：身份+姓名(a cleaner named.Wang),保持人物一致性 What事件要素：核心动作(helped carry heavy bags/returned lost wallet) Why原因要素：自然铺垫(because he fell down/as her bag was broken) How方式要素：分步描写(First..Then.Finally..),包含动作和对话 3 九年级全一册北师大版 【写作专版】 E版满分范文及模板 情感升华：结尾添加个人感受(I learned./It made me realize.) 写作小贴士·故事创作指南 时态统一：故事类写作全程使用一般过去时(walked/saw/asked) 直接引语：用双引号添加1-2句对话，增强故事真实感 细节描写：在行动部分添加具体细节(carefully asked/warmly smiled) 逻辑连接：使用连接词(After that/However/Finally)使故事流畅 要素检查：完成后对照5W1H清单，确保所有要素完整 首尾呼应：结尾点题(It was a meaningful day/Helping others brings joy)