内容正文:
七下北师大版
【动物保护专版】
E版满分范文及模板
动物保护
【版满分模板】描述喜爱的动物,提出动
物保护小倡议
写作提分攻略+范文深度解析·北师大版七下
满分范文
Hello,everyone.Myname is Li Ming.My favorite animal is the panda.It has a round body and black
and white fur.It looks very cute and lovely.
Pandas live in the bamboo forests of China.They are herbivores and eat bamboo every day.They are
gentle animals and often sleep during the day.
But pandas are endangered animals now.Their natural habitat is getting smaller.We should protect
them.We can plant more bamboo to make good homes for them.We should also stop hunting and
keep them safe
I love pandas.Let's work together to protect these beautiful animals
【满分范文逐段解析】
第一段(动物介绍):
开篇用HelIo,everyone..自然引入主题;
核心句型:y favorite animal is./Ithas../It looks..,清晰描述动物特征:
形容词使用:cute and lovely生动传达情感。
第二段(习性描述):
准确使用栖息地词汇:bamboo forests of China;
食性表达:herbivores and eat bamboo符合学科术语:
行为描写:gentle animals and often sleep体现动物特性。
第三段(保护倡议):
转折词But自然引出问题;
现状描述:endangered animals/habitat getting smaller准确专业;
保护措施:plant more bamboo/stop hunting具体可行。
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七下北师大版
【动物保护专版】
E版满分范文及模板
第四段(情感呼吁):
情感表达:Ilove pandas强化主题:
呼吁行动:Let's work together增强感染力。
满分范文模板
Hello,everyone.My name is_.My favorite animal is_.It has_and.It looks very_
_live in_.They are_and eat_every day.They are_and often-during the day.
But_are endangered animals now.Their natural habitat is getting smaller.We should protect them.We
can-to make good homes for them.We should also_
I love_.Let's work together to protect these beautiful animals.
【模板填写指南】
1.你的姓名(如:LiMing/Wang Fang)
2.动物名称(如:panda/tiger/elephant)
3.身体特征(如:a round body/long neck/strong legs)
4.毛发特征(如:black and white fur/yellow feathers/thick skin)
5.外貌形容词(如:cute/strong/beautiful)
6.动物名称(与2一致)
7.栖,息地(如:bamboo forests/African grasslands/deep ocean)
8.食性(如:herbivores/carnivores/omnivores)
9.食物(如:bamboo/meat/fish)
l0.性格特征(如:gentle/friendly/smat)
Il.行为习惯(如:sleep during the day/un very fast/swim well)
12.动物名称(与2一致)
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七下北师大版
【动物保护专版】
E版满分范文及模板
l3.保护措施1(如:plant more bamboo/build nature reserves/reduce pollution)
l4.保护措施2(如:stop hunting/protect forests/avoid plastic use)
15.动物名称(与2一致)
填写示例:
1.Zhang Wei 2.elephant 3.big ears 4.gray skin 5.strong
6.Elephants 7.African grasslands 8.herbivores 9.plants and fruits
10.intelligent animals 11.swim in rivers 12.Elephants
13.protect their habitats 14.stop ivory trade 15.elephants
高分亮点总结
结构清晰:四段式(引入→特征一→问题一倡议),逻辑严密:
术语准确:正确使用herbivores,.habitat,.endangered等学科词汇;
情感表达:通过cute,lovely,beautiful等词传递保护意识;
倡议具体:保护措施plant bamboo,stop hunting切实可行:
时态统一:全程使用一般现在时,符合说明文规范。
写作小贴士·动物保护专题
特征描写:用has/lives/eats描述动物,搭配具体名词(fur/bamboo/forest):
濒危表达:使用endangered/protect/habitat等规范术语:
倡议句式:Ve should.We can../Let's.增强说服力:
情感升华:结尾用Ilove.…beautiful animals唤起共鸣:
避免错误:动物名称首字母不大写(除专名如Asian elephant)。
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