内容正文:
初一上册鲁教版(五四制)
【寒假专版】
E版满分范文及模板
寒假专版
【E版满分模板】介绍最好的朋友(姓
名/年龄外貌性格〉
写作提分攻略+范文深度解析·鲁教版(五四制)初一上册
满分范文
Hello,everyone.My name is Li Ming.I have a best friend.His name is Wang Jun.
Wang Jun is 13 years old.He is tall and strong.He has short curly hair and a round face.He always
wears a pair of black glasses.He looks very handsome.
Wang Jun is a friendly and funny boy.He is good to everyone and often tells us interesting stories.He
is also hard-working.He always gets good grades in exams.He likes playing basketball,and we often
play it together after school.
I like my friend very much.We are best friends forever.
【满分范文逐段解析】
第一段(基础介绍):
开篇用Helo,everyone..自然引出话题:
核心句型:ly name is./I have a best friend..His name is.,清晰介绍自己和朋友:
使用best friend强调友谊深度,情感真挚。
第二段(外貌描写):
用Heis./He has..结构描述外貌特征,逻辑清晰;
核心词汇:tall and strong/short curly hair/round face/black glasses,形象生动:
结尾He looks very handsome..总结外貌,自然过渡。
第三段(性格与品质):
性格描写:friendly and funny并举例说明(tells interesting stories):
品质突出:had-working和gets good grades展示优点;
共同活动:playing basketball together体现友谊互动。
初一上册鲁教版(五四制)
【寒假专版】
E版满分范文及模板
第四段(情感表达):
直接抒情:I like my friend very much..情感真挚:
结尾升华:best friends forever强调友谊长久,呼应开头。
满分范文模板(我的好朋友)
Hello,everyone.My name is 1..I have a good friend.His/Her name is 2.
3.is 4.years old.He/She is 5..He/She has 6.and 7..He/She always wears 8.
.He/She looks very9.—
10.is a 11.boy/girl.He/She likes 12..He/She is also very 13..When I 14.,he/she
always 15..We often 16.on weekends.
I like my friend very much.We are good friends forever.
【模板填写指南】
1.你的姓名(如:LiMing/Zhang Hua)
2.朋友的姓名(如:Wang Jun/Li Xia)
3.填写朋友的姓名(与2一致)
4.朋友的年龄(如:twelve/thirteen)
5.朋友的身材(如:tall and strong/of medium height)
6.朋友的头发(如:short curly hair/long straight hair)
7.朋友的脸型/眼睛(如:a round face/two big eyes)
8.朋友的穿戴(如:a pair of black glasses/aredhat)
9.外貌评价(如:handsome/beautiful/cute)
10.填写朋友的姓名(与2一致)
Il.性格形容词(如:friendly and funny/kind and helpful)
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初一上册鲁教版(五四制)
【寒假专版】
E版满分范文及模板
l2.朋友的爱好(如:playing basketball/reading books)
13.优秀品质(如:hard-working/outgoing)
14.你的困难场景(如:have trouble with English/feel sad)
l5.朋友的帮助行为(如:helps me/cheers me up)
16.共同活动(如:play basketball./go to the park)
填写示例:
1.Li Ming 2.Wang Jun 3.Wang Jun 4.thirteen 5.tall and strong
6.short curly hair 7.a round face 8.a pair of black glasses 9.handsome
10.Wang Jun 11.friendly and funny 12.playing basketball
13.hard-working 14.have trouble with my English 15.helps me 16.play basketball
高分亮点总结
结构清晰:四段式(介绍→外貌→性格品质→情感),逻辑连贯
细节丰富:外貌描写具体(发型/脸型/穿戴),性格有实例支撑
词汇精准:使用初一核心词汇(curly/friendly/hard-working/handsome)
句型多样:交替使用Heis.He has.He likes..等基础句型
情感真挚:结尾best friends forever自然升华主题
时态统一:全文使用一般现在时,语法规范
写作小贴士·避坑+提分
外貌描写顺序:从整体到局部(身材→发型→脸型→穿戴)
性格+事例:每个性格后补充具体行为(如funny-→tells stories)
避免重复:用代词He/She替代朋友姓名,保持流畅
时态一致:描述朋友特征时全程使用一般现在时
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初一上册鲁教版(五四制)
【寒假专版】
E版满分范文及模板
首尾呼应:开头best friend和结尾forever形成情感闭环
单词拼写:注意易错词(glasses/curly/friendly)的拼写检查
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