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阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In the middle of February, a cold wind filled the air, telling stories of the power of winter. Young Bridger Peabody, with his messy hair and big curious eyes, was being cared for by his great-grandmother, Sharon Lewis. Her house, full of warmth, old photos. and quiet memories, became their safe place while Bridger’s family was at the hospital with his sister.
Sharon, a strong and clever person, had always been like a bright light in Bridger’s life. But one evening, as the stars began to shine in the dark sky, a sudden slip outside her door changed everything. The ground was slippery, and she fell hard. her head hitting the cold and hard steps. Pain shot through her, and she found herself lying still on the frozen ground, unable to move. “Bridger,” she called out, her voice shaking but still strong. “I need your help.”
The little boy, who had been quietly playing in the living room, ran to her side. His heart pounded fast when he saw his great-grandmother on the ground. He felt scared and unsure. Bridger had only recently recovered from a long illness, and running too much still made him dizzy. And ever since he was little, he’d been terrified of the dark.
“Can you get my phone from the car, honey?” Sharon asked gently, trusting him completely. Bridger nodded, even though his small hands were trembling. He took a deep breath and whispered to himself, “Don’t be scared. Don’t be scared.” Like a song, the words helped him stay brave.
The video from the backyard camera later showed his courage — a tiny shape moving through the cold, dark night, his voice just a small sound in the stillness.
Each step he took was a brave fight against his fear, but Bridger didn’t stop. He reached the car, his fingers searching quickly for the phone. His face lit up when he found it. Holding it tightly, he ran back toward the house. “I got it!” he shouted, his voice full of pride, hope and love.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Sharon, now holding the phone, called for an ambulance.
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As the helpers from the ambulance carefully attended to Sharon, Bridger’s family rushed home.
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一、文本分析
1.角色:
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2.视角:第__________________________人称视角
3.时空线:
二月中旬的寒冷夜晚(布里杰由曾祖母莎伦照顾,家人在医院陪伴妹妹,莎伦家是两人的安全港湾)→ 傍晚时分(莎伦出门时因地滑摔倒,头部受伤无法动弹,向布里杰呼救)→ 客厅到门口(布里杰听到呼救赶来,看到曾祖母倒地既害怕又无措,自身刚病愈且怕黑)→ 曾祖母下达指令(让布里杰去车里拿手机,布里杰虽颤抖仍答应)→ 后院到汽车(布里杰克服恐惧与身体不适,在黑夜中跑向汽车找到手机,自豪地跑回)→ (续写)_____________________________(莎伦拿到手机呼叫救护车,布里杰守在身旁陪伴,展现担当)→ (续写)_____________________(救护车人员照料莎伦,布里杰家人赶回,众人肯定布里杰的勇敢,凸显亲情与勇气的力量)
4.文章线索
(1)“布里杰的恐惧与脆弱”与“对曾祖母的爱催生的勇气”构成核心矛盾,这一矛盾对情节发展有何作用?如何推动人物情感变化及主题凸显?
(2)“黑夜中取手机”是展现布里杰勇气的核心情节,这一情节为何能强化“勇气与亲情”的主题?如何让人物形象更丰满?
(3)“寒冷的夜晚环境”“莎伦摔倒受伤”“布里杰刚病愈怕黑”“独自取手机的坚持”“拿到手机的自豪”“呼叫救护车”“家人赶回”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“肯定勇气”做了怎样的铺垫?
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“安稳相伴—突发意外—内心挣扎—勇敢行动—等待救援—家人团聚”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
5.情节线
安稳相伴:二月中旬的寒夜,小布里杰由曾祖母莎伦照顾,家人在医院陪妹妹,莎伦家充满温暖,是两人的安全港湾→ 突发意外:傍晚星星升起时,莎伦在门外因地滑摔倒,头部撞击台阶,疼痛难忍无法动弹,向布里杰呼救→ 内心挣扎:布里杰从客厅跑来,看到曾祖母倒地心跳加速,既害怕又无措;他刚病愈跑多会头晕,且从小怕黑,内心充满恐惧→ 勇敢行动:莎伦温柔嘱托他去车里拿手机,布里杰虽双手颤抖仍点头,自我鼓励后冲进黑夜,克服恐惧与不适找到手机,自豪地跑回→ (续写)等待救援:莎伦拿到手机呼叫救护车,布里杰紧紧守在身旁,不时安慰曾祖母,用小小的身躯给予陪伴→ (续写)家人团聚:______________________________________________________________________
6.情感线
布里杰:被曾祖母照顾的安稳→ 看到曾祖母摔倒的恐惧、慌乱→ 接到嘱托时的犹豫、忐忑→ 自我鼓励后的坚定→ 黑夜中前行的紧张、煎熬→ 拿到手机的自豪、喜悦→ 守在曾祖母身边的担忧、温柔→ ______________________________
莎伦:照顾布里杰的温柔、坚定→ 摔倒后的痛苦、无助→ 嘱托布里杰时的信任、平静→ 等待救护车时的安心、欣慰→ ___________________________
家人:在医院照料妹妹的牵挂→ 得知意外后的焦急、匆忙→ 赶回后的心疼、感动。
7.文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
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8.句式示例
宾语从句:
同位语:
状语从句:
比喻:
9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:Sharon, now holding the phone, called for an ambulance.
衔接句 1—— 对 “呼叫救护车时的场景与布里杰的举动” 提问:莎伦呼叫救护车时会交代哪些信息?布里杰会做些什么来陪伴、安慰曾祖母?这些举动体现了他的什么品质?
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何引出“家人赶回”的情节?布里杰的陪伴对莎伦有何影响?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “家人团聚与夸赞勇敢” 做铺垫:__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二段提示句:As the helpers from the ambulance carefully attended to Sharon, Bridger’s family rushed home.
衔接句 1—— 对 “家人赶回后的反应与互动” 提问:家人赶回后看到场景会有哪些反应(焦急、心疼等)?会对布里杰和莎伦说些什么?
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:众人对布里杰的勇敢给予肯定,这一情节如何呼应“勇气与亲情”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
主题:
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三、段落构思
第一段:Sharon, now holding the phone, called for an ambulance.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写莎伦呼叫救护车时的状态(语气、措辞),交代地址与伤情;②刻画布里杰的陪伴举动(蹲在身旁、轻声安慰、保持温暖等),体现他的成长与温柔;③描写等待救护车时的氛围(寒冷与温情的对比),为第二段救护车抵达做铺垫。
续写:
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第二段:As the helpers from the ambulance carefully attended to Sharon, Bridger’s family rushed home.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写家人赶回的匆忙状态与看到场景后的反应(心疼、焦急);②通过对话交代家人知晓布里杰勇敢举动的过程,刻画家人对布里杰的夸赞与拥抱;③收尾凸显亲情的温暖与勇气的价值,呼应全文主题。
续写:
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参考答案
一、文本分析
1.角色:
布里杰:年幼的小男孩,头发凌乱、眼神好奇,刚从长期病痛中恢复,从小惧怕黑暗,性格本有些脆弱,但对曾祖母充满爱与依赖;在曾祖母遭遇意外时,被爱催生勇气,克服内心恐惧与身体不适完成使命,展现出超乎年龄的勇敢与担当。
莎伦:布里杰的曾祖母,坚强聪慧,如同布里杰生命中的光,温柔且充满力量;摔倒受伤后仍保持镇定,充分信任布里杰,是布里杰勇气的坚定支撑者,也因布里杰的陪伴而感到安心。
家人:牵挂孩子的亲人,在医院照料布里杰的妹妹,得知意外后焦急赶回,重视亲情,能及时肯定布里杰的勇敢,传递温暖与感动。
2.视角:第三人称视角
3.时空线:
二月中旬的寒冷夜晚(布里杰由曾祖母莎伦照顾,家人在医院陪伴妹妹,莎伦家是两人的安全港湾)→ 傍晚时分(莎伦出门时因地滑摔倒,头部受伤无法动弹,向布里杰呼救)→ 客厅到门口(布里杰听到呼救赶来,看到曾祖母倒地既害怕又无措,自身刚病愈且怕黑)→ 曾祖母下达指令(让布里杰去车里拿手机,布里杰虽颤抖仍答应)→ 后院到汽车(布里杰克服恐惧与身体不适,在黑夜中跑向汽车找到手机,自豪地跑回)→ (续写)门口台阶旁(莎伦拿到手机呼叫救护车,布里杰守在身旁陪伴安慰,展现担当)→ (续写)莎伦家门口(救护车人员照料莎伦,布里杰家人赶回,众人肯定布里杰的勇敢,凸显亲情与勇气的力量)
4.文章线索
(1)“布里杰的恐惧与脆弱”与“对曾祖母的爱催生的勇气”构成核心矛盾,这一矛盾对情节发展有何作用?如何推动人物情感变化及主题凸显?
答案:作用:这一核心矛盾是情节发展的核心驱动力,串联起“意外发生—内心挣扎—勇敢行动—陪伴守护—获得肯定”的完整情节链,制造强烈的情感张力,让读者持续关注布里杰能否突破自我、完成使命。推动情感变化:矛盾让布里杰的情绪从看到摔倒后的恐惧慌乱,到接到嘱托时的犹豫忐忑,再到自我鼓励后的坚定,最后到守护曾祖母时的温柔担当,形成完整的情感起伏,清晰展现其从脆弱到勇敢的成长轨迹。凸显主题:通过“恐惧”与“勇气”的对抗,突出“爱能战胜恐惧,催生无限勇气”的核心导向,让“勇气与亲情”的主题更具说服力与感染力。
(2)“黑夜中取手机”是展现布里杰勇气的核心情节,这一情节为何能强化“勇气与亲情”的主题?如何让人物形象更丰满?
答案:强化主题:“黑夜中取手机”聚焦布里杰的双重困境——身体未愈与惧怕黑暗,而支撑他突破困境的正是对曾祖母的爱与牵挂,将“勇气”与“亲情”紧密绑定,让勇气有了情感根基,说明真正的勇气源于深爱,从而深化“勇气与亲情”的主题。让人物形象更丰满:这一情节打破了“年幼孩子脆弱无能”的刻板印象,展现出布里杰在困境中自我鼓励、坚持不懈的品质;同时,他的恐惧与最终的勇敢形成对比,让人物更真实可感,既体现出孩子的天性,又凸显其因爱而生的担当,形象更立体鲜活。
(3)“寒冷的夜晚环境”“莎伦摔倒受伤”“布里杰刚病愈怕黑”“独自取手机的坚持”“拿到手机的自豪”“呼叫救护车”“家人赶回”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“肯定勇气”做了怎样的铺垫?
答案:意义:“寒冷的夜晚环境”渲染紧张氛围,反衬出亲情与勇气带来的温暖;“莎伦摔倒受伤”是情节的导火索,触发后续布里杰的勇敢行动;“布里杰刚病愈怕黑”加重其行动的难度,凸显勇气的可贵;“独自取手机的坚持”“拿到手机的自豪”展现布里杰的成长与担当,是情节的核心亮点;“呼叫救护车”衔接救援情节,让故事逻辑完整;“家人赶回”推动情节走向结局,为肯定布里杰的勇气提供场景与主体。铺垫:这些细节形成“困境出现—突破困境—完成使命—收获认可”的逻辑链,“寒冷环境”“身体与心理短板”让布里杰的勇敢行动更具分量,“拿到手机的自豪”“守护曾祖母的温柔”为家人后续的夸赞提供了具体依据,让“肯定勇气”的情节顺理成章,情感更真挚。
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“安稳相伴—突发意外—内心挣扎—勇敢行动—等待救援—家人团聚”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
答案:情节推进逻辑:以“寒夜突发意外”为核心线索,遵循“‘突发困境—面临挑战—突破自我—守护陪伴—亲情团聚’”的逻辑推进,从曾祖母摔倒的意外,到布里杰克服恐惧取手机,再到等待救援、家人赶回,层层递进展现布里杰的勇气成长与亲情的温暖,形成完整的故事闭环。主题脉络:凸显了“‘爱能催生勇气,勇气守护亲情,亲情传递温暖’”的主题脉络。从布里杰因爱克服恐惧,到用勇气守护受伤的曾祖母,再到家人赶回后用亲情包裹彼此,既展现了年幼者的担当,也传递出亲情是困境中最坚实依靠的价值观,让主题从“个人勇气成长”上升到“亲情共同体”的层面。
5.情节线
安稳相伴:二月中旬的寒夜,小布里杰由曾祖母莎伦照顾,家人在医院陪妹妹,莎伦家充满温暖,是两人的安全港湾→ 突发意外:傍晚星星升起时,莎伦在门外因地滑摔倒,头部撞击台阶,疼痛难忍无法动弹,向布里杰呼救→ 内心挣扎:布里杰从客厅跑来,看到曾祖母倒地心跳加速,既害怕又无措;他刚病愈跑多会头晕,且从小怕黑,内心充满恐惧→ 勇敢行动:莎伦温柔嘱托他去车里拿手机,布里杰虽双手颤抖仍点头,自我鼓励后冲进黑夜,克服恐惧与不适找到手机,自豪地跑回→ (续写)等待救援:莎伦拿到手机呼叫救护车,清晰告知地址与伤情,语气因有布里杰陪伴而逐渐平稳。布里杰蹲在她身边,用小手轻轻握住曾祖母的手,小声说着“没事的,救护车很快就来”,即便自己仍有些害怕,也努力安抚着莎伦。寒风吹过,他紧紧挨着曾祖母,用小小的身躯为她遮挡些许寒意。→ (续写)家人团聚:救护车人员悉心照料莎伦,为她检查伤情、处理伤口。此时布里杰的家人匆忙赶回,看到眼前的场景既心疼又焦急。莎伦轻声讲述了布里杰黑夜取手机的勇敢举动,家人纷纷围向布里杰,紧紧抱住他,不停地夸赞他是个勇敢的小男子汉。布里杰靠在家人怀里,脸上满是自豪,莎伦也在亲情与关怀中渐渐放下心来。
6.情感线
布里杰:被曾祖母照顾的安稳→ 看到曾祖母摔倒的恐惧、慌乱→ 接到嘱托时的犹豫、忐忑→ 自我鼓励后的坚定→ 黑夜中前行的紧张、煎熬→ 拿到手机的自豪、喜悦→ 守在曾祖母身边的担忧、温柔→ 被家人夸赞后的骄傲、温暖→ 感受到亲情包围的安心。
莎伦:照顾布里杰的温柔、坚定→ 摔倒后的痛苦、无助→ 嘱托布里杰时的信任、平静→ 等待救护车时的安心、欣慰→ 被照料时的放松→ 看到家人团聚后的释然、感动。
家人:在医院照料妹妹的牵挂→ 得知意外后的焦急、匆忙→ 赶回后的心疼、感动→ 夸赞布里杰时的骄傲、温柔。
7.文章大意概括
中文:二月中旬的寒夜,小布里杰由曾祖母莎伦照顾,家人则在医院陪伴他的妹妹,莎伦家是两人温暖的安全港湾。傍晚,莎伦在门外因地滑摔倒,头部受伤无法动弹,急忙向布里杰呼救。布里杰赶来后既恐惧又无措,他刚从重病中恢复,跑多了会头晕,还从小惧怕黑暗,但在莎伦的信任嘱托下,他克服内心恐惧与身体不适,冲进黑夜从车里取回手机。莎伦拿到手机后呼叫了救护车,布里杰守在身旁温柔陪伴、安慰。救护车人员赶来照料莎伦时,布里杰的家人也匆忙赶回,得知布里杰的勇敢举动后,纷纷夸赞他,亲情与感动围绕着众人,寒冷的夜晚因这份勇气与亲情变得格外温暖。
英文:On a cold February night, young Bridger Peabody was cared for by his great-grandmother Sharon Lewis while his family stayed at the hospital with his sister. Sharon’s warm house was their safe haven. That evening, Sharon slipped and fell outside, hitting her head and being unable to move. She called for Bridger’s help. Though scared, dizzy from a recent illness and terrified of the dark, Bridger mustered up courage after Sharon asked him to get her phone from the car. He braved the dark night, found the phone and ran back proudly. Sharon called for an ambulance, with Bridger staying by her side to comfort her. When ambulance workers attended to Sharon, Bridger’s family rushed home. After learning about Bridger’s bravery, they praised him warmly, filling the cold night with the warmth of family love and courage.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:She asked Bridger if he could get her phone from the car.
同位语:Young Bridger Peabody, a little boy who had just recovered from a long illness, bravely fetched the phone in the dark.(定语从句补充说明布里杰的身份,相当于同位语功能)
状语从句:Though he was scared and dizzy, Bridger didn’t give up halfway.(让步状语从句)
比喻:Bridger’s courage was like a little flame, warming the cold night and comforting Sharon’s heart.
9.主题归类
勇气与成长:爱能战胜内心恐惧,催生超乎年龄的担当,困境是成长的契机,能让人突破自我、变得勇敢。亲情与信任:亲情是困境中最坚实的依靠,长辈的信任能给予晚辈无限力量,彼此的陪伴与守护能传递温暖、驱散困境。温情与感动:平凡的意外中藏着真挚的情感,年幼者的勇敢、长辈的坚韧、家人的牵挂,共同构筑起温暖的情感共同体,展现人性的美好。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:Sharon, now holding the phone, called for an ambulance.
衔接句 1—— 对 “呼叫救护车时的场景与布里杰的举动” 提问:莎伦呼叫救护车时会交代哪些信息?布里杰会做些什么来陪伴、安慰曾祖母?这些举动体现了他的什么品质?
答案:莎伦呼叫救护车时会清晰交代家庭地址、自己摔倒受伤的部位(头部)、无法动弹的状况,以及身边有年幼的孩子陪伴。布里杰会蹲在曾祖母身边,紧紧握住她的手,用稚嫩的声音轻声安慰,告诉她救护车很快就到,还会努力为她遮挡寒风。这些举动体现了布里杰的温柔、懂事与担当,也展现出他对曾祖母深厚的爱。
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何引出“家人赶回”的情节?布里杰的陪伴对莎伦有何影响?
答案:第一段可通过莎伦呼叫救护车后,顺便联系家人告知意外,自然引出“家人赶回”的情节;也可通过等待救护车的时间差,为家人赶回预留合理空间。布里杰的陪伴让受伤的莎伦摆脱了孤独无助,感受到温暖与安心,缓解了她的疼痛与焦虑,也让她更加欣慰于布里杰的成长与勇敢。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “家人团聚与夸赞勇敢” 做铺垫:
答案:第一段通过刻画布里杰守在曾祖母身边的温柔与担当,展现了他勇敢行动后的持续成长,为第二段家人夸赞他提供了具体行为支撑;同时,莎伦的安心状态与对布里杰的认可,也能在家人赶回后,自然地向家人讲述布里杰的勇敢事迹,让家人的夸赞更具针对性与感染力,使两段情节在情感与逻辑上无缝衔接。
第二段提示句:As the helpers from the ambulance carefully attended to Sharon, Bridger’s family rushed home.
衔接句 1—— 对 “家人赶回后的反应与互动” 提问:家人赶回后看到场景会有哪些反应(焦急、心疼等)?会对布里杰和莎伦说些什么?
答案:家人赶回后,看到莎伦被救护车人员照料,会满脸焦急与心疼,急忙上前询问莎伦的伤情;看到一旁乖巧站立的布里杰,会先安抚孩子,再从莎伦口中得知真相。家人会紧紧抱住布里杰,夸赞他“你真勇敢,是曾祖母的小英雄”,也会对莎伦说“还好有布里杰,辛苦你了”,传递出担忧与关爱。
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:众人对布里杰的勇敢给予肯定,这一情节如何呼应“勇气与亲情”的核心主题?对故事结局有何作用?
答案:众人对布里杰的肯定,既是对他勇敢行为的认可,也凸显了亲情对勇敢的滋养与回馈,呼应了“爱催生勇气,勇气守护亲情”的核心主题;同时,家人的夸赞让布里杰感受到亲情的温暖,强化了“勇气能收获认可与爱”的导向。这一情节让故事结局充满温情,圆满收尾,也让“勇气与亲情”的主题更具感染力,引发读者共鸣。
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答案:爱与信任能唤醒内心的勇气,让弱小者在困境中突破自我、扛起担当;亲情是困境中最温暖的支撑,彼此的陪伴、守护与认可,能驱散寒冷与恐惧,传递无尽温暖;成长往往发生在直面挑战的瞬间,哪怕是年幼的孩子,也能在爱与责任的驱使下,展现出超乎年龄的勇敢与懂事。
三、段落构思
第一段:Sharon, now holding the phone, called for an ambulance.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写莎伦呼叫救护车时的状态(语气、措辞),交代地址与伤情;②刻画布里杰的陪伴举动(蹲在身旁、轻声安慰、保持温暖等),体现他的成长与温柔;③描写等待救护车时的氛围(寒冷与温情的对比),为第二段救护车抵达做铺垫。
续写:Sharon, now holding the phone, called for an ambulance. She clearly told the operator their address and her condition, her voice steady with Bridger by her side. The little boy squatted down, gently holding her cold hand with his small warm palms. “Don’t worry, Great-grandma,” he whispered softly, “the ambulance will come soon.” He leaned against her to block the cold wind, his eyes fixed on the road, waiting anxiously but bravely. Sharon looked at him, a warm smile spreading across her painful face.
第二段:As the helpers from the ambulance carefully attended to Sharon, Bridger’s family rushed home.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写家人赶回的匆忙状态与看到场景后的反应(心疼、焦急);②通过对话交代家人知晓布里杰勇敢举动的过程,刻画家人对布里杰的夸赞与拥抱;③收尾凸显亲情的温暖与勇气的价值,呼应全文主题。
续写:As the helpers from the ambulance carefully attended to Sharon, Bridger’s family rushed home. They looked anxious and rushed to Sharon’s side, asking about her injury repeatedly. After Sharon told them how Bridger bravely fetched the phone in the dark, his parents hugged him tightly. “You’re our brave little hero,” his mom said proudly. Bridger beamed, feeling the warmth of family love. The cold night was filled with tenderness, and this unforgettable experience became a precious lesson of courage and love for Bridger.
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