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My political career in the Student Union(SU)began by throwing frisbees (飞盘) on the campus lawn. I would throw a frisbee to someone I didn’t know and they would throw it to someone they didn’t know. Before long, we had built a community of people who met every day at lunch to throw frisbees.
Besides frisbees, the group decided to climb the mountain near our campus. When we reached the peak, it felt like we were at summer camp. We laughed, danced and told jokes.It was totally fun. While playing like little children in the cool mountain air, we all decided to do it again the following week. Our motto (座右铭) was “Bring a Friend” . We started out with a small group of hikers. But as the word spread, the number of participants increased.We made it a rule to climb the mountain every weekend. All of us were passionate about the fantastic experience, which we were looking forward to.
One day on campus, I decided to throw my frisbee to some strangers, run over and invite them to climb the mountain. Much to my surprise, a girl sitting in a wheelchair got hold of it. Her name was Grace. I asked her if she had ever been to the top of the mountain.She said she hadn’t. Holding the wheelchair tightly, she hung down her head in awkward silence. Then she told me that she had suffered from lung disease when she was young and depended on oxygen twenty-four hours a day. So, it was impossible for her to move without help. Fortunately, things got better.
With continuous efforts and treatment, she managed to live on her own with the assistance of the wheelchair: I told her that my friends and I would carry her if she were up for it. On hearing what I said, she refused without hesitation, adding that it would be a bother to carry her. But I tried my best to persuade her to come along with us by talking about the interesting experiences.
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Having thought for a while, Grace still refused my offer.
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On the downhilt path, Grace asked me why not run for the SU election.
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一、文本分析
1.角色:_______________________________________________________________________________
2.视角
第__________________________人称视角
3.时空线
校园草坪(“我”通过扔飞盘结识陌生人,建立每日午餐相聚的社群)→ 校园附近山顶(社群组织爬山,氛围欢乐,定下“带上朋友”座右铭,每周固定爬山)→ 校园某处(“我”扔飞盘邀请陌生人爬山,飞盘被轮椅上的格蕾丝接住)→ 校园现场(“我”得知格蕾丝因过往肺病依赖轮椅,邀请伙伴们抬她爬山,格蕾丝拒绝)→ (续写)_____________________________(格蕾丝沉思后仍拒绝,“我”不气馁,调整方式邀请,格蕾丝松口)→ (续写)_____________________(下山时格蕾丝提议“我”竞选学生会,“我”疑惑,格蕾丝阐明理由,“我”坚定目标)
4.文章线索
(1)“格蕾丝的自我封闭”与“‘我’的真诚邀约”构成核心矛盾,这一矛盾对情节发展有何作用?如何推动人物情感变化及主题凸显?
(2)“飞盘”是串联社群与善意的关键意象,这一意象为何能强化“包容与勇气”主题?如何让人物形象更丰满?
(3)“扔飞盘建社群”“爬山座右铭”“格蕾丝的轮椅与过往病史”“‘我’的反复邀约”这些细节有何意义?它们为后续“续写温情转折与学生会契机”做了怎样的铺垫?
(4)故事的情节推进逻辑是什么?从“建立社群—组织活动—偶遇格蕾丝—真诚邀约—转折同行—竞选提议”,情节发展背后凸显了怎样的主题脉络?
5.情节线
建立社群:“我”在校园草坪通过扔飞盘结识陌生人,逐渐形成每日午餐相聚扔飞盘的小社群→ 组织爬山:社群成员提议爬校园附近的山,山顶氛围欢乐,众人约定每周爬山,定下“带上朋友”的座右铭,参与人数逐渐增多→ 偶遇格蕾丝:“我”扔飞盘邀请陌生人爬山,飞盘被轮椅上的格蕾丝接住,“我”邀请她同行→ 得知隐情:格蕾丝告知“我”,她幼时患肺病,曾24小时依赖氧气,现靠轮椅生活,无法独立行动,直言爬山不可能→ 真诚邀约:“我”提出让伙伴们抬她爬山,格蕾丝当即拒绝,担心添麻烦,“我”极力劝说,讲述爬山的乐趣→ (续写)温情转折:格蕾丝沉思后仍拒绝,但“我”表示不勉强,可陪她在山脚下等候,伙伴们也纷纷邀约,格蕾丝被诚意打动,同意前往→ (续写)__________________________________________________________________________
6.情感线
“我”:搭建社群的热忱、快乐→ 邀请格蕾丝的真诚、主动→ 得知格蕾丝境遇的心疼、理解→ 被拒绝后的不气馁、坚持→ 劝说时的耐心、恳切→ ______________________________
格蕾丝:接住飞盘的意外、局促→ 谈及过往病史的自卑、落寞→ 拒绝邀约时的顾虑、不安→ 被反复劝说后的犹豫、动容→ ___________________________
社群伙伴:参与活动的热情、愉悦→ 面对格蕾丝的友善、包容→ 邀约格蕾丝时的真诚、热忱→ ___________________________
7.文章大意概括
中文:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
英文:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________8.句式示例
宾语从句:________________________________________________________________________
同位语:__________________________________________________________________________
状语从句:________________________________________________________________________
比喻:____________________________________________________________________________
9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:Having thought for a while, Grace still refused my offer.
衔接句 1—— 对 “‘我’与格蕾丝的互动” 提问:“我”面对格蕾丝的再次拒绝有何反应?是放弃还是调整方式?社群伙伴如何助攻?格蕾丝的态度如何逐渐松动?这些情节能为第二段“竞选提议”做何铺垫?
衔接句 2—— 对 “第一段的过渡意义” 提问:第一段如何呼应前文“‘我’善于凝聚社群”的特质?如何引出第二段“爬山同行”后的提议情节?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “续写竞选提议与主题升华” 做铺垫:__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二段提示句:On the downhill path, Grace asked me why not run for the SU election.
衔接句 1—— 对 “提议的缘由与互动” 提问:格蕾丝为何提议“我”竞选学生会?结合前文哪些细节阐述理由?“我”的反应如何?如何体现“我”的成长与转变?
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:这场对话最终如何收尾?结局如何呼应“包容、凝聚与勇气”的核心主题?这一结局对“我”与格蕾丝分别有何启示?
主题:__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
三、段落构思
第一段:Having thought for a while, Grace still refused my offer.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写格蕾丝拒绝时的神态与顾虑(担心拖累大家);②刻画“我”的反应(不气馁,提出折中方案);③加入社群伙伴的友善邀约,凸显群体温暖;④描写格蕾丝被诚意打动,最终松口同意同行,达成温情转折。
续写:________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二段:On the downhill path, Grace asked me why not run for the SU election.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写“我”的疑惑反应;②通过格蕾丝的话语,阐明提议理由(呼应“我”凝聚社群、包容他人的特质);③刻画“我”的感悟与决心,展现成长;④结尾可加入格蕾丝的期许,升华“善意与担当”的主题。
续写:________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
参考答案
一、文本分析
1.角色
“我”:热情开朗、善于凝聚他人的学生,以飞盘为纽带搭建社群,心怀善意,面对格蕾丝的拒绝不气馁,懂得换位思考,最终在格蕾丝的启发下树立竞选学生会的目标,兼具温度与担当。
格蕾丝:身残志坚、内心敏感细腻的女孩,因过往肺病依赖轮椅,内心自卑、顾虑较多,不愿给他人添麻烦,但能感知他人善意,善于发现他人闪光点,用提议传递对“我”的认可与鼓励。
社群伙伴:友善包容、热情爽朗的群体,积极参与社群活动,主动接纳格蕾丝,用真诚化解格蕾丝的不安,是温暖氛围的重要支撑。
2.视角
第一人称视角(“我”的视角),以“我”搭建社群、邀约格蕾丝、接受提议的经历为主线,真实展现从热忱搭建社群到心怀善意邀约,再到树立担当目标的心理变化,串联起群体温暖与个人成长,增强故事的代入感与感染力。
3.时空线
校园草坪(“我”通过扔飞盘结识陌生人,建立每日午餐相聚的社群)→ 校园附近山顶(社群组织爬山,氛围欢乐,定下“带上朋友”座右铭,每周固定爬山)→ 校园某处(“我”扔飞盘邀请陌生人爬山,飞盘被轮椅上的格蕾丝接住)→ 校园现场(“我”得知格蕾丝因过往肺病依赖轮椅,邀请伙伴们抬她爬山,格蕾丝拒绝)→ (续写)校园现场至山脚(格蕾丝沉思后仍拒绝,“我”提议陪她在山脚等候,伙伴们纷纷真诚邀约,格蕾丝被打动同意前往)→ (续写)下山途中(格蕾丝提议“我”竞选学生会,“我”疑惑,格蕾丝阐明理由,“我”深受启发,决心参选)
4.文章线索
(1)这一核心矛盾是情节发展的核心驱动力,串联起“邀约—拒绝—劝说—松动—同行”的情节链,制造情感张力。推动情感变化:让“我”的情绪从真诚邀约的热忱,转为被拒绝的失落,再到不气馁的坚持;让格蕾丝从自卑抗拒,转为犹豫动容,最终被温暖接纳,形成双向的情感递进。凸显主题:通过“拒绝与坚持”“封闭与包容”的对比,突出“善意能融化隔阂,包容能凝聚力量”的核心主题,让温暖与成长的情感更具深度。
(2)强化主题:“飞盘”作为社群的起点与善意的媒介,串联起陌生人间的联结、社群的搭建,以及“我”与格蕾丝的相遇,是“包容、联结”主题的具象化符号,让抽象的温暖与凝聚变得可感可触。让人物形象更丰满:“我”扔飞盘的动作体现热忱与主动,邀请格蕾丝的行为体现善意与包容;格蕾丝接住飞盘的意外,展现她内心对连接外界的渴望;飞盘见证了社群的形成与善意的传递,让人物形象更立体鲜活。
意义:“扔飞盘建社群”凸显“我”凝聚他人的特质,为后续格蕾丝提议“我”竞选学生会埋下伏笔;“爬山座右铭”体现社群的包容特质,为接纳格蕾丝做铺垫;“格蕾丝的轮椅与病史”解释她拒绝的根源,凸显“我”与伙伴们善意的珍贵;“‘我’的反复邀约”展现“我”的真诚与坚持,推动情节转折。铺垫:这些细节构建了“联结—包容—成长”的逻辑链,“我”的凝聚能力为竞选提议提供合理性,格蕾丝的接纳为双向启发做铺垫,让后续情节自然衔接、情感递进流畅。
情节推进逻辑:以“飞盘建社群”为起点,以“爬山活动”为载体,以“邀约格蕾丝”为转折,以“竞选提议”为结局,形成完整的情节闭环,层层递进展现“善意联结他人,包容催生担当”的核心内容。主题脉络:凸显“温暖可打破隔阂,成长藏于善意之中”的主题脉络,从搭建社群的热忱,到包容格蕾丝的善意,再到树立竞选目标的担当,传递出“每一份真诚的联结,都能催生成长与责任”的价值观。
5.情节线
建立社群:“我”在校园草坪通过扔飞盘结识陌生人,逐渐形成每日午餐相聚扔飞盘的小社群→ 组织爬山:社群成员提议爬校园附近的山,山顶氛围欢乐,众人约定每周爬山,定下“带上朋友”的座右铭,参与人数逐渐增多→ 偶遇格蕾丝:“我”扔飞盘邀请陌生人爬山,飞盘被轮椅上的格蕾丝接住,“我”邀请她同行→ 得知隐情:格蕾丝告知“我”,她幼时患肺病,曾24小时依赖氧气,现靠轮椅生活,无法独立行动,直言爬山不可能→ 真诚邀约:“我”提出让伙伴们抬她爬山,格蕾丝当即拒绝,担心添麻烦,“我”极力劝说,讲述爬山的乐趣→ (续写)温情转折:格蕾丝沉思后仍拒绝,语气带着愧疚,说不想拖累大家。我笑着表示不勉强,提议陪她在山脚下晒太阳,等伙伴们回来分享趣事。此时,同行的伙伴们也围过来,热情邀请她,说可以轮流推着轮椅陪她在平缓路段走走。格蕾丝望着大家真诚的笑脸,终于点头答应。→ (续写)竞选契机:爬山结束后,伙伴们轮流推着格蕾丝下山,途中格蕾丝突然轻声问“我”为何不竞选学生会。我愣住,坦言从未想过。格蕾丝笑着说,“我”能用飞盘凝聚陌生人,能耐心接纳她这样的人,懂得照顾他人感受,正是学生会需要的人。我深受启发,望着身边欢声笑语的伙伴们,坚定了参选的决心。
6.情感线
“我”:搭建社群的热忱、快乐→ 邀请格蕾丝的真诚、主动→ 得知格蕾丝境遇的心疼、理解→ 被拒绝后的不气馁、坚持→ 劝说时的耐心、恳切→ 格蕾丝同意后的欣喜、欣慰→ 听到竞选提议的惊讶、疑惑→ 领悟后的坚定、有担当。
格蕾丝:接住飞盘的意外、局促→ 谈及过往病史的自卑、落寞→ 拒绝邀约时的顾虑、不安→ 被反复劝说后的犹豫、动容→ 同意同行后的放松、温暖→ 提出提议时的真诚、笃定,逐渐打开心扉。
社群伙伴:参与活动的热情、愉悦→ 面对格蕾丝的友善、包容→ 邀约格蕾丝时的真诚、热忱→ 陪伴格蕾丝同行的细心、体贴,传递群体温暖。
7.文章大意概括
中文:“我”以扔飞盘为纽带,在校园搭建了一个温暖的社群,大家每日相聚,还约定每周爬校园附近的山,定下“带上朋友”的座右铭。一次,“我”扔飞盘邀请陌生人爬山,飞盘被轮椅上的格蕾丝接住。“我”得知格蕾丝因幼时肺病依赖轮椅,便邀请伙伴们抬她爬山,格蕾丝担心添麻烦当即拒绝。“我”没有气馁,耐心劝说,伙伴们也纷纷热情邀约,格蕾丝被众人的诚意打动,同意同行。下山时,格蕾丝提议“我”竞选学生会,称“我”善于凝聚他人、懂得包容,适合为学生服务。“我”深受启发,坚定了参选的决心,也明白了善意与包容能催生责任与成长。
英文:I built a warm community on campus by throwing frisbees. We met every day at lunch to play, and later decided to climb the mountain near campus every weekend, with the motto "Bring a Friend". One day, I threw a frisbee to invite strangers to climb the mountain, and it was caught by Grace, who was in a wheelchair. I learned that Grace relied on a wheelchair due to lung disease in her childhood, so I offered to let my friends carry her up. Grace refused, worrying about troubling others. I didn’t give up and persuaded her patiently, and my friends also invited her warmly. Touched by our sincerity, Grace agreed to come. On the downhill path, Grace suggested I run for the Student Union, saying I was good at uniting people and being inclusive, which was what the SU needed. Inspired deeply, I made up my mind to run, realizing that kindness and inclusiveness could breed responsibility and growth.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:I never thought that a simple frisbee could lead me to run for the Student Union.
同位语:Grace, a girl in a wheelchair with a brave heart, inspired me to take on more responsibility.
状语从句:Though Grace couldn’t climb the mountain like us, she felt the warmth of the community deeply.(让步状语从句)
比喻:The frisbee was like a bridge, connecting strangers’ hearts and bringing warmth to everyone.
9.主题归类
包容与善意:真诚的善意能打破隔阂,融化内心的自卑与不安,让每个人都感受到群体的温暖;包容差异、接纳不同,是构建和谐社群的核心,也是人性中最珍贵的特质。成长与担当:偶然的善意互动能催生成长,他人的认可与启发能让人找到自身价值与担当;善于凝聚他人、懂得换位思考的人,总能在传递温暖中收获自我成长。社群与联结:平凡的小事(如扔飞盘)能搭建起人与人之间的联结,社群的意义在于彼此陪伴、相互接纳,用温暖照亮彼此的时光。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:Having thought for a while, Grace still refused my offer.
衔接句 1答案:“我”没有因再次拒绝而失落,反而温和地表示理解,说不会勉强她,提议陪她在山脚下的长椅上等候,还会给她带回山顶的风景和趣事。此时同行的伙伴们也围过来,纷纷邀请格蕾丝,说可以轮流推着轮椅陪她在山脚平缓处散步,绝不会让她觉得被冷落。格蕾丝的态度逐渐松动,从最初的坚决拒绝,到眼神犹豫,再到被真诚打动,最终点头同意。这些情节展现了“我”与伙伴们的包容善意,呼应了前文“社群温暖”的特质,为第二段格蕾丝认可“我”、提议竞选做了铺垫。
衔接句 2答案:第一段通过“我”的换位思考与伙伴们的热情邀约,呼应前文“我”善于凝聚社群、传递温暖的特质,凸显社群的包容底色;同时,格蕾丝同意同行后,众人陪伴她的温馨场景,让格蕾丝切实感受到“我”的领导力与亲和力,为第二段她提出竞选提议提供了情感与逻辑支撑,形成“温暖互动—认可特质—提出提议”的情节递进。
过渡逻辑:第一段着重刻画格蕾丝从拒绝到接纳的情感转折,通过群体善意的传递,展现“我”凝聚他人、照顾他人感受的核心特质,为第二段格蕾丝的提议奠定情感与认知基础;同行的经历让格蕾丝更深入地了解“我”的优点,让后续的提议不突兀,同时也让“我”在温暖互动中更易接受启发,为主题升华做好铺垫。
第二段提示句:On the downhill path, Grace asked me why not run for the SU election.
衔接句 1答案:格蕾丝结合“我”用飞盘搭建社群、耐心劝说她同行、懂得照顾她情绪的细节,阐明提议理由——“我”有能力凝聚陌生人,能包容差异、尊重每个人的感受,懂得用温暖联结他人,这些都是学生会成员必备的品质。“我”最初十分惊讶,坦言从未有过参选想法,但在格蕾丝的话语中,逐渐意识到自身的价值,想起社群伙伴们的信任与陪伴,内心生出担当,最终坚定了参选的决心。细节上,格蕾丝的话语呼应前文“我”的行为,“我”的心理变化体现成长。
衔接句 2答案:这场对话以“我”坚定参选决心、格蕾丝露出欣慰笑容收尾,伙伴们也纷纷表示支持。结局呼应了“包容、善意与担当”的主题,展现了“善意传递带来双向成长”的核心内涵——格蕾丝在温暖中打开心扉,“我”在认可中找到担当。启示:“我”明白真诚与包容能凝聚力量,也懂得要将这份温暖传递给更多人;格蕾丝明白,接受善意也是一种勇气,而发现他人闪光点、给予鼓励,同样能传递力量。
主题:真诚的善意与包容能打破隔阂、凝聚力量,让社群充满温暖;他人的认可与启发能催生个人成长与担当,在传递温暖的过程中,每个人都能收获属于自己的成长;平凡的联结中藏着不凡的力量,懂得珍惜与传递善意,才能成为更有温度、有担当的人。
三、段落构思
第一段:Having thought for a while, Grace still refused my offer.
梳理第一段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写格蕾丝拒绝时的神态与顾虑(担心拖累大家);②刻画“我”的反应(不气馁,提出折中方案);③加入社群伙伴的友善邀约,凸显群体温暖;④描写格蕾丝被诚意打动,最终松口同意同行,达成温情转折。
续写:Having thought for a while, Grace still refused my offer. “I’m sorry, it’ll be too much trouble,” she said softly, her head hung low. I smiled and patted her shoulder gently, saying I totally understood. “We can wait for you at the foot of the mountain, and share stories when we come back,” I added. Just then, my friends gathered around, inviting her warmly. They said they could take turns pushing her wheelchair along the gentle path. Touched by our sincerity, Grace raised her head with tears in her eyes and nodded slowly.
第二段:On the downhill path, Grace asked me why not run for the SU election.
梳理第二段写作思路:①开篇承接提示句,描写“我”的疑惑反应;②通过格蕾丝的话语,阐明提议理由(呼应“我”凝聚社群、包容他人的特质);③刻画“我”的感悟与决心,展现成长;④结尾可加入格蕾丝的期许,升华“善意与担当”的主题。
续写:On the downhill path, Grace asked me why not run for the SU election. I was shocked, shaking my head and saying I’d never thought about it. “You can unite strangers with a frisbee and care about people like me,” Grace said sincerely. “The SU needs someone warm and inclusive like you.” Her words touched me deeply. Looking at my friends chatting happily beside us, I felt a sense of responsibility. I nodded firmly, telling her I’d give it a try. The frisbee that connected us had led me to a new goal—bringing more warmth to the campus.
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