Unit 5 Section Ⅳ Writing about a diving experience-【优学精讲】2024-2025学年高中英语必修第三册教用Word(外研版)

本高中英语讲义核心围绕“潜水经历写作”展开，通过“品教材范文—析写作手法—背出彩佳句”三步学习支架，系统梳理记叙文结构（引言-主体-结论）、语言技巧（否定词强调、被动语态、过渡词等），并结合写作任务的审题谋篇、要点陈述、句间衔接指导，辅以词汇积累、翻译练习及阅读、完形、续写等综合训练，构建从输入到输出的完整学习链。 该资料亮点在于以范文为载体，通过“品-析-背-练”一体化设计，助力学生提升语言能力（如运用so...that...句式表达感受），培养思维品质（通过审题谋篇构建写作逻辑），发展学习能力（佳句积累与词汇自主应用）。课中辅助教师高效教学，课后帮助学生巩固写作技巧、查漏补缺，强化综合语言运用能力。

Section Ⅳ　Writing about a diving experience Step 1　品教材范文 　　I couldn’t believe that I succeeded in diving and swam with the seals for 10 minutes！ I never thought I could start an adventure under the sea before， till my parents took me to the Farne Islands and tried diving there. 　　We were offered two choices， either wreck diving — to see the wrecked ship Somali， or scenic diving — to have a good time with the grey seals.I chose the second one because it was less challenging and I love sea animals. 　　Diving turned out to be much less difficult than I had imagined.I just put on the instruments and followed my instructor.I was a bit scared but my instructor told me to take it easy.At first， I could only see nothing， but when my eyes gradually adjusted to the darkness， I could see deep blue waves moving up and down， and small fishes swimming.Soon we reached the spot， and I could breathe normally. 　　It was such a wonderful world.Before realising it， I had been in the seaweed forest surrounded by the young seals.They were eager to get close to me and dance around me.I reached out my hands to touch one of them.All of a sudden， something big appeared on my right.I turned around and almost got astonished.It was a huge male seal.I was so scared fearing it would attack me.But it just touched me lightly with its body， as if it wanted to hug me.I put my hands on its back， trying to feel its smooth skin.The world here was so quiet that I felt that time had stopped. Finally， my instructor gestured for me to go up.When I reached the surface， I had to readjust to the sunlight.What had happened just now was like a dream. Step 2　析写作手法 学语言： 1.使用否定词couldn’t和never起到了强调的作用，表达出作者对自己海底潜水经历的出乎意料。 2.使用被动语态We were offered ...，使表达更加地道；连词either ...or ... 的使用使表达更加连贯。 3.at first， soon等过渡性词语的使用使故事的叙述更有逻辑。 4.介词短语all of a sudden写出了潜水时不可预知的事情发生的突然，很有画面感。 5.so ...that ...句式强调了当时作者的真实感受。 学结构： 1.Introduction： What I did. 2.Main body： The whole diving experience and what I saw. 3.Conclusion：What I felt. Step 3　背出彩佳句 常用的开头语 1.Sanya is really beautiful！ 三亚真美呀！ 2.The sky is as bright as sapphire， and there are patches of coconut forests， white sand and blue sea， which is unforgettable. 天空像蓝宝石一样透亮，还有成片的椰子林、洁白的沙滩和湛蓝的大海，令人难以忘怀。 3.Among them， the most unforgettable one is underwater diving.其中，最让我难忘的就是海底潜水。 主体部分常用表达 1.Wow！ How beautiful the ocean floor is！ 哇！海底真美呀！ 2.Schools of small fish swam past me， wagging their big tails.成群的小鱼摆动着大尾巴从我面前游过。 3.The fish was very strange， long and flat body， a pair of small bean eyes trickling round， gray and white body sparkling， a big， long tail wagging. 这小鱼长得非常奇怪，身子又长又扁，一双小豆豆眼滴溜滴溜圆，灰白相间的身体闪闪发光，一条大大的、长长的尾巴一摆一摆的。 4.In a moment they were gone. 不一会儿，它们便无影踪了。 常用的结束语 1.I asked my mother to let me dive next time. 我央求妈妈下次再让我来潜水。 2.My mother and I laughed together.What a wonderful diving experience！ 我和妈妈一起放声大笑。多么美好的一次潜水经历！ 　　假定你是李华，6月16日下午你和你的家人去三亚旅游，生平第一次潜水使你很激动。请你写一篇日记，记述潜水的经历，内容包括： 　　1.介绍潜水中的所见、所想； 　　2.说明潜水的感受。 注意：1.写作词数应为80左右； 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 一、审题谋篇，结构分明 明确体裁、话题 记叙文；第一次潜水 确定时态、人称 一般过去时；第一人称 布局文章结构 第一段：潜水的时间、地点、人物； 第二段：介绍潜水时的所见、所想； 第三段：说明潜水的感受 二、要点陈述，语言规范 1.这是特神奇的一天。 　It was a day of pure magic.　 2.今天下午我和我的家人去三亚附近的海中潜水。 　I went diving beneath the ocean near Sanya with my family this afternoon.　 3.我首先发现的是我周围所有鲜艳的色彩。 　The first thing I became aware of was all the vivid colours surrounding me.　 4.给我印象最深的是奇妙的珊瑚，它们的形状像扇子、盘子、蘑菇、树枝和鹿角。 　What impressed me most was the fantastic corals which were shaped like fans， plates， mushrooms， the branches of trees and the horns of deer.　 5.各种各样的雅观小鱼在珊瑚里面和周围游来游去。 　All kinds of small and elegant fish were swimming in and around the corals.　 6.不过，还有一些生物太危险，我是不被允许太靠近它们的，比如鲨鱼。 　However，some creatures such as sharks were very dangerous， so I wasn’t permitted to get too close to them.　 7.从这次经历中，我意识到惊人的水下世界正等待着我们去探索。 　From the experience， I realise that the amazing underwater world is waiting for us to explore.　 三、句间衔接，过渡自然 1.用强调句改写要点4。 　It is the fantastic corals which were shaped like fans，plates， mushrooms， the branches of trees and the horns of deer that impressed me most.　 2.用so ...that ...引导的结果状语从句改写要点6。 　However， some creatures such as sharks were so dangerous that I wasn’t permitted to get too close to them.　 四、检查誊写，卷面整洁 　16 June Sunday　 　　　It was a day of pure magic. I went diving beneath the ocean near Sanya with my family this afternoon.　 　　　The first thing I became aware of was all the vivid colours surrounding me.It is the fantastic corals which were shaped like fans， plates， mushrooms， the branches of trees and the horns of deer that impressed me most.And all kinds of small and elegant fish were swimming in and around the corals.However， some creatures such as sharks were so dangerous that I wasn’t permitted to get too close to them.　 　　　From the experience， I realise that the amazing underwater world is waiting for us to explore.　 心理描写 confirm v.证实，证明 thrill n.惊险，刺激 unaware adj.未觉察到的，未意识到的 fascinated adj.被迷住的，被吸引住的 astonish v.使吃惊，使惊讶→astonishment n.惊讶 动作描写 crowd n.人群 v.涌上心头；拥挤 attempt n.努力，尝试 failure n.失败 bleeding n.流血，失血→bleed v.流血，失血 injury n.伤，损害 permit v.允许，准许，许可 consume v.消耗 distinguish v.看清；认出 surround v.环绕，围绕 人物描写 charge n.主管，负责 captain n.船长 wrinkled adj.有皱褶的 一、翻译句子 1.被美丽的街灯迷住，Tin没有意识到即将到来的危险。 　Fascinated by the beautiful street lights，Tin was unaware of the approaching danger.　 2.一个醉酒的司机把他撞倒，使他受了重伤。 　A drunk driver knocked him down，making him badly injured.　 3.他的腿流血了。一群人开始围住他看发生了什么事。 　His legs bled.A crowd of people started to surround him to see what was happening.　 4.人群惊讶地张大了嘴注视着。 　The crowd watched in astonishment，open-mouthed.　 5.Mary目睹了事故的发生。就在那时，她学过的急救方法涌入了她的脑海。 　Mary witnessed the accident and it was then that the first-aid knowledge she learned crowded into her mind.　 6.为了止血，她用绷带包扎伤口。 　To stop bleeding，she covered the wound with a bandage.　 7.她及时的帮助对Tin的康复起到了作用。 　Her timely help made a difference to Tin’s recovery.　 8.这一事件使Mary坚定了将来成为医生的决心。 　The incident confirmed Mary in her decision to become a doctor in the future.　 二、连句成篇 　　　Fascinated by the beautiful street lights， Tin was unaware of the approaching danger.A drunk driver knocked him down，making him badly injured.His legs bled.A crowd of people started to surround him to see what was happening.The crowd watched in astonishment，open-mouthed.Mary witnessed the accident and it was then that the first-aid knowledge she learned crowded into her mind.To stop bleeding，she covered the wound with a bandage.Her timely help made a difference to Tin’s recovery.The incident confirmed Mary in her decision to become a doctor in the future.　 Ⅰ.阅读理解 　　The era known as the Age of Exploration， sometimes called the Age of Discovery， officially began in the early 15th century.The period is characterized as a time when Europeans began exploring the world by sea in search of new trading routes， wealth， and knowledge. 　　Many nations were looking for goods such as silver and gold， but one of the biggest reasons for exploration was the desire to find a new route for the spice and silk trades. 　　The first of the journeys associated with the Age of Discovery were conducted by the Portuguese.Portuguese explorers discovered the Madeira Islands in 1419 and the Azores in 1427.Over the coming decades， they would push farther south along the African coast， reaching the coast of present-day Senegal by the 1440s and the Cape of Good Hope by 1490.Less than a decade later， in 1498， Vasco da Gama would follow this route all the way to India. 　　While the Portuguese were opening new sea routes along Africa， the Spanish also dreamed of finding new trade routes to the Far East.Christopher Columbus， an Italian working for the Spanish monarch， made his first journey in 1492.Instead of reaching India， Columbus found the island of San Salvador in what is known today as the Bahamas.He also explored the island of Hispaniola， home of modern-day Haiti and the Dominican Republic. 　　Columbus would lead three more voyages to the Caribbean， exploring parts of Cuba and the Central American coast. 　　Columbus’ journeys opened the door for the Spanish conquest of the Americas.During the next century， men such as Hernan Cortes and Francisco Pizarro would reach Mexico and Peru. 　　The Age of Exploration ended in the early 17th century after technological advancements and increased knowledge of the world allowed Europeans to travel easily across the globe by sea.The Age of Exploration had a significant impact on geography.By travelling to different regions around the globe， explorers were able to learn more about areas such as Africa and the Americas and bring that knowledge back to Europe. 语篇解读：本文是一篇说明文。地理大发现时代又称“航海大时代”，是15世纪到17世纪欧洲船队在世界范围寻找新贸易航线的活动。 1.How long did the Age of Exploration last？（　　） A.About 100 years.　　 B.About 200 years. C.About 300 years.　 D.About 400 years. 解析：B　细节理解题。根据第一段和最后一段内容可知，地理大发现时代开始于15世纪初，结束于17世纪初，持续了大约200年。 2.Who was the first to reach Asia according to the text？（　　） A.Vasco da Gama. B.Christopher Columbus. C.Hernan Cortes. D.Francisco Pizarro. 解析：A　细节理解题。根据第三段内容可知，1498年，葡萄牙航海家Vasco da Gama首先到达印度，是第一位到达亚洲的航海家。 3.What do we learn about Christopher Columbus？（　　） A.He was working for his country. B.He had been to the African coast. C.Three voyages were made by him. D.The aim of his first voyage was Asia. 解析：D　推理判断题。根据第四至六段内容可知，Christopher Columbus是为西班牙君主工作的意大利人；他一生共进行了四次航海活动；他首次航行的目的地是印度，结果却到了巴哈马群岛的圣萨尔瓦多岛。 4.What’s the main idea of the last paragraph？（　　） A.The influence of the Age of Exploration. B.The problem with the Age of Exploration. C.How the Age of Exploration came to an end. D.How the Age of Exploration changed America. 解析：A　段落大意题。根据最后一段内容可知，本段主要介绍了地理大发现时代所带来的影响，并强调了对地理领域的影响。 Ⅱ.完形填空 　　Sophie signed up for the baseball game.She knew she could 　5　 Gramps to help her.After all， Gramps had been a professional player.　6　， training with Gramps turned out to be hard work.For the rest of the time before the match， Gramps 　7　 her all about the game.If Sophie ever had 　8　 about being good enough to play， she looked at Gramps and those doubts 　9　 disappeared. 　　However， when Sophie stepped up to the game for the first time， Gramps was 　10　 to be seen.There was no time to do anything but go ahead.Slam！ She swung the bat， and the ball was in the air 　11　 she even realized she had hit it.First base， second base， and then she 　12　 into third in a trail of dust.Her team jumped to their feet in 　13　.Now， Gramps was standing right behind the bench， 　14　 louder than anyone else. 　　“Where did you go？” asked Sophie， rushing up to him after the game.“I looked everywhere for you.I needed you！” “You only 　15　 you needed me，” said Gramps.“The 　16　 is， when you are in the game， you’re always on your own.Now you know you can do it， with or without me.” Sophie nodded.“You’re 　17　.I can do it on my own.” Then she smiled， “Any more 　18　 I need to learn？” “When it comes to baseball，” said Gramps， “you never 　19　 learning.” 语篇解读：本文是一篇记叙文。Sophie跟着爷爷进行棒球训练，在比赛时爷爷却找不到了，爷爷教给了Sophie一个教训，那就是比赛的时候只能靠自己。 5.A.depend on　　　　　　 B.watch over C.compare to　 D.adapt to 解析：A　根据下文的Gramps had been a professional player.可知，Sophie知道她可以依靠爷爷的帮助。 6.A.Besides　 B.However C.Instead　 D.Otherwise 解析：B　和爷爷一起训练是一项艰苦的工作，与上文形成转折。 7.A.forgave　 B.demanded C.taught　 D.affected 解析：C　根据下文her all about the game可知，爷爷教她所有关于比赛的知识。 8.A.ideas　 B.plans C.proposals　 D.doubts 解析：D　根据下文those doubts可知，Sophie曾经怀疑自己是否足够优秀。 9.A.gradually　 B.likely C.actually　 D.immediately 解析：D　爷爷在帮助她，质疑自己的她看看爷爷，这些怀疑立刻消失了。 10.A.somewhere　 B.anywhere C.nowhere　 D.everywhere 解析：C　根据最后一段的I looked everywhere for you.可知，当Sophie第一次上场时，爷爷却不见了踪影，也就是在任何地方都找不到爷爷。nowhere意为“任何地方都不”。 11.A.before　 B.after C.since　 D.though 解析：A　根据下文she even realized she had hit it可知，球在她意识到击球之前就飞到了空中。 12.A.looked　 B.slid C.crashed　 D.walked 解析：B　根据下文into third in a trail of dust可知，她到三垒的速度很快（所以扬起尘土），所以是快捷而悄声地进入三垒。 13.A.curiosity　 B.alarm C.shock　 D.excitement 解析：D　根据上文可知，她打上三垒，她的团队激动地跳了起来。 14.A.cheering　 B.protesting C.speaking　 D.requesting 解析：A　她打上三垒，大家都很开心，爷爷应该也很开心，比任何人都更大声地欢呼。 15.A.appreciated　 B.thought C.pretended　 D.understood 解析：B　根据下文可知，Sophie开场前找爷爷却没有找到，但在爷爷不在场的情况下她发挥地很好，所以爷爷认为Sophie“只是以为她需要自己”。 16.A.problem　 B.strategy C.fact　 D.solution 解析：C　爷爷不在场的情况下她发挥地很好，说明事实是，当她在比赛中，她总是靠自己。 17.A.anxious　 B.crazy C.responsible　 D.right 解析：D　根据上文you’re always on your own， Sophie nodded.和下文I can do it on my own.可知，Sophie认同爷爷，所以说“你是对的”。 18.A.lessons　 B.challenges C.attitudes　 D.goals 解析：A　根据I need to learn可知，此处表示“我还有什么课要学吗”。 19.A.promote　 B.exchange C.explore　 D.quit 解析：D　根据语境可知，爷爷建议她永远不能放弃学习。 Ⅲ.读后续写 　　阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　On a nearly winter afternoon， my dad and I decided to climb the Carpathian Mountains， about 4，500 feet high.My dad said it would be an easy three-hour trip in a natural habitat.I couldn’t wait.Having spent spring， summer， and early fall climbing the mountains， I felt confident I’d have no trouble in climbing it. 　　The hillside we started was rather sloping （陡峭的）.This side of the mountain was covered with a pine forest.The trees were incredibly high and thick； their knotted large roots cut the ground here and there， forming natural footsteps and making the climbing a little bit easier.The air was fresh and clean.After about 30 minutes of climbing， we heard the sound of a stream and rushed to it for a drink. 　　After about two hours of climbing， we found ourselves traveling over snow-covered ridge （山脊）.The road became harder and more dangerous.It seemed that my dad had made a mistake — the trip was not that easy as he described.Watching the steep and rocky climb ahead， I knew I was finished.My original confidence gave way to tiredness completely.My knees were in great pain and my legs were trembling， reaching the point where I couldn’t move them at all.The peak （山顶） seemed unreachable.To make matters worse， snowflakes were starting to fall and strong winds were gathering around me.I hopelessly stared at my dad.“Dad， let’s go back.I can’t move an inch，” I said tiredly with tears pooling in my eyes. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 　　“Just one small step at a time，” Dad encouraged me.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　Eventually， we made it to the peak.　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　 参考范文： 　　“Just one small step at a time，” Dad encouraged me. “We need to keep moving.” “I can’t.” I insisted.“You can.Just take one small step at a time.Keep your eyes focused on your feet and on me.” Dad held my hands tightly as he continued to encourage me.“Just one small step at a time，” Dad repeated as we climbed together.Some of my steps were so small that we hardly moved at all， but I believe in the power in his words. 　　Eventually， we made it to the peak. Standing on the peak， I saw a range of snow-capped hills beneath.A wave of immediate excitement welled up in my heart， howling winds also cheering for us.“We make it！” I shouted crazily， hugging my dad tightly， big tears rolling down my cheeks.Years have passed since that mountain climbing， but Dad’s words have continued to be a life reminder for me — “Just one small step at a time” will get me wherever I want to be. 8 / 8 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $