话题 4 给笔友回信介绍家乡雾霾情况及危害-2025-2026学年九年级英语写作范文集合（仁爱版）

初三仁爱版 【写作专版】 话题4：环境问题 环境问题 【话题4】给笔友回信介绍家乡雾霾情况及 危害 写作范文集合+逐段解析·仁爱版初三 范文赏析 【范文一】 Dear Tom, I was glad to receive your letter asking about my hometown.I'm sorry to tell you that smog has become a serious problem here recently. In the morning,we can hardly see the buildings far away.The sky is always grey and the air smells bad. Many people wear masks when they go out.My father even bought an air purifier for our home.Last week, our school had to stop outdoor activities because the smog was too thick. Smog is harmful to our health.My little sister has been coughing for days,and the doctor said it was caused by the bad air.Old people are advised to stay indoors as much as possible.I hope the government can take action to solve this problem soon. What's the air quality like in your city?I'm looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Ming 【范文一逐段解析】 开头段（问题引入）： 用I was glad to receive..,礼貌回应来信，smog has become a serious problem直接点明主题； recently强调问题的新近性。 现象描述段（具体表现）： 通过can hardly see../always grey/smells bad多感官描写雾霾；wear masks/air purifier展 示应对措施；stop outdoor activities用实例说明影响。 危害分析段（健康影响）： harmful to our health总领段落；has been coughing/caused by说明因果关系；advised to stay 初三仁爱版 【写作专版】 话题4：环境问题 indoors给出防护建议；take action to solve表达期望。 结尾段（互动提问)： 用What's.like in your.city?自然过渡，looking forward to your reply保持书信礼仪。 【范文二】 Dear Mary, Thanks for your letter.You asked about the environment in my hometown.To be honest,we're facing a big problem with smog these days. Smog usually happens in winter.When it comes,everything aroundlooks dirty.The sun can't shine through, and the streets are less crowded because people prefer to stay at home.Last month,several flights were canceled due to poor visibility caused by smog. The worst part is its effect on health.More and more people are getting respiratory illnesses.My grand- mother's asthma has gotten worse,and she has to go to the hospital regularly.Students like me often feel tired and can't concentrate in class. I really miss the clear sky and fresh air we used to have.I hope we can find a way to reduce pollution soon. Best wishes, Zhang Wei 【范文二逐段解析】 开头段（问题确认）： Thanks for your letter表达感谢，To be honest增强真实感；facing a big problem强调问题严 重性。 现象描述段（季节特征）： usually happens in winter说明时间规律；looks dirty/can't shine through视觉描写；flights were canceled用社会事件佐证影响。 危害分析段（健康后果）： The worst part突出核心问题；respiratory illnesses/asthma专业术语；feel tired/can'tcon centrate学生视角描述影响。 结尾段（情感表达)： I really miss.表达怀念，find a way to reduce提出期望，情感真挚。 高分亮点句型（可直接套用） 初三仁爱版 【写作专版】 话题4：环境问题 问题描述类： Smog has become a serious problem.We're facing a big problem with.../The air quality is getting worse. 现象描写类： We can hardly see.../The sky is always grey./Many people wear masks when... 影响说明类： Smog is harmful to our health./...has been coughing for days./...can't concentrate in class. 措施建议类： ...are advised to stay indoors./I hope the government can take action./We need to find a way to reduce pollution. 仿写练习（结合亮点句型） 请根据以下提示，仿写一篇给笔友的信（100词左右)： 提示：你的家乡近期出现严重雾霾，描述雾霾天的景象（能见度低、天空灰暗），说明对生活的影 响（学校停课、交通问题），谈谈对健康的危害（咳嗽、呼吸困难），最后表达改善环境的愿望。 仿写框架参考： Dear In your last letter,you asked about I have to tell you that has become a serious problem here. When smog comes, The sky and people Last week. because of the thick smog The worst thing is Many people I hope Best wishes, 常见错误修正（避坑指南） 词汇误用： 错误：The fog is very heavy.→正确：The smog is very thick.(smog特指污染雾霾) 错误：People put on masks.→正确：People wear masks..(固定搭配) 时态错误： 初三仁爱版 【写作专版】 话题4：环境问题 错误：My sister cough for days.→正确：My sister has been coughing for days.(持续动作) 表达冗余： 错误：The air pollution is caused by the smog.→正确：The smog causes air pollution..(简洁表 达) 核心写作要点 书信结构：称呼→感谢来信→问题描述→具体现象→健康影响→改善愿望→结尾祝福 内容要点：必须包含：雾霾现象描述、具体影响事例、健康危害说明、个人感受建议 语言亮点：使用感官描写(see/smell)、现在完成进行时(has been coughing)、被动语态(were canceled) 避坑提醒：区分smog/fog,正确使用现在完成时，避免中式直译（如”戴口罩'→wear masks) 4