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该高中英语高考复习讲义聚焦读后续写核心考点，围绕情节逻辑发展、人物情感描写及语言表达丰富性，按“范文解析-表达拓展-分层训练”架构梳理知识点，通过范文精讲、表达替换、真题演练等环节，帮助学生构建续写思维框架和高分表达体系。 讲义以“三个转变”策略为特色，结合AI情境设计真实互动场景，通过“犹豫+颤抖”动作链描写训练人物心理刻画，用“What sb truly needed was not A, but B”句式升华主题，培养学生语言能力与思维品质。设置基础到高分的分层练习，配合即时反馈，助力学生高效突破续写难点，为教师精准把控复习节奏提供实用指导。

第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 This time, Mira wasn’t asking the AI to polish her essays. Instead, she typed a question that had been pressing on her heart for weeks: “Why won’t Grandma eat properly?” It was early January. After finishing her exams, Mira had returned to her hometown to spend some quiet days with her grandmother. The old woman had once been a legend—she’d worked as a tailor（裁缝）, made dresses for half the village and saved enough to open her own shop. Time had taken its toll. Now her eyesight had dimmed, her fingers trembled, but she was still that legendary woman who lived on her own terms. Whenever someone ladled（用勺子舀）soup into her bowl, she would push it away, murmuring, “I don’t need it. Save it for yourselves.” Every meal played out the same way. It broke Mira’s heart. Actually, the family was doing well. There was plenty of food, plenty of love. So why did eating—a simple, everyday act—seem like a burden to her? She tried reasoning with her, but the more she talked, the more Grandma resisted. Until one day, in a moment of frustration, she blurted out, “Grandma, you make me so sad when you act like this.” The old woman froze, then sighed. “I’m over seventy. I won’t be around much longer. It doesn’t matter how I eat.” The words cut deep. Mira thought about taking her to a psychologist（心理医生）but knew she’d refuse. So she turned to an old companion, the AI. The response came quickly. Grandma was refusing food because she felt like she no longer had a place in the family. The AI offered suggestions: Help her feel secure and needed. 注意： （1）续写词数应为150左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Para 1: With AI’s assistance, Mira began her plan. Para 2：As meals became less of a battle, Mira decided to relight the sparkle in grandmother’s eyes. Para 1: With AI’s assistance, Mira began her plan.Instead of urging her grandmother to eat as before, she chose a gentler way and started asking for help. One quiet afternoon, she placed some vegetables on the table and said softly, “Grandma, could you teach me how to cut them the way you used to?” The old woman hesitated, her fingers trembling slightly above the knife, as if unsure whether she was still capable. After a short pause, she finally nodded. As she guided Mira’s hands patiently, Mira noticed her grandmother slowly pick up the spoon and take a small sip of soup herself. Though hesitant at first, she didn’t push it away this time. Meal by meal, resistance faded. The tight lines on her face softened, and the silence around the table was replaced by gentle conversation and a quiet warmth. Para 2：As meals became less of a battle, Mira decided to relight the sparkle in her grandmother’s eyes. One evening, she brought out a box of old fabrics and needles and asked her to teach her how to sew properly. Grandma’s eyes lit up instantly, and for a moment, she seemed younger. Sitting by the window, she explained every stitch with steady patience, just like she once did in her little shop years ago. As memories flowed, laughter replaced silence, and confidence slowly replaced doubt. Almost without noticing, she finished her meal beside her sewing tools. For the first time in weeks, she did so without being reminded. Watching this, something glistened in the corners of her eyes. She finally realized that what her grandmother truly needed was not food itself, but the feeling of being needed, respected, and valued. Paragraph 1 With AI’s assistance, Mira began her plan. Instead of urging her grandmother to eat as before, she chose a gentler way and started asking for help. 她不再像以前那样催促奶奶吃饭，而是选择了一种更温和的方式，开始寻求帮助。 One quiet afternoon, she placed some vegetables on the table and said softly, “Grandma, could you teach me how to cut them the way you used to?” 一个安静的下午，她把一些蔬菜放在桌上，轻声说道：“奶奶，您能教我怎么像您以前那样切菜吗？” The old woman hesitated, her fingers trembling slightly above the knife, as if unsure whether she was still capable. 老人迟疑了，手指在刀上方微微颤抖，仿佛不确定自己是否还有这个能力。 After a short pause, she finally nodded. 片刻停顿后，她终于点了点头。 As she guided Mira’s hands patiently, Mira noticed her grandmother slowly pick up the spoon and take a small sip of soup herself. 当她耐心地指导米拉的手法时，米拉注意到奶奶慢慢拿起了勺子，自己喝了一小口汤。 Though hesitant at first, she didn’t push it away this time. 虽然起初有些犹豫，但这次她没有把汤推开。 Meal by meal, resistance faded. 一顿饭接一顿饭，（奶奶的）抵触情绪逐渐消退了。 The tight lines on her face softened, and the silence around the table was replaced by gentle conversation and a quiet warmth. 她脸上紧绷的线条柔和了下来，餐桌旁的沉默被温柔的交谈和静谧的温情所取代。 Paragraph 2 As meals became less of a battle, Mira decided to relight the sparkle in her grandmother’s eyes. One evening, she brought out a box of old fabrics and needles and asked her to teach her how to sew properly. 一天晚上，她拿出一盒旧布料和针线，请奶奶教她如何正确地缝纫。 Grandma’s eyes lit up instantly, and for a moment, she seemed younger. 奶奶的眼睛瞬间亮了起来，在那一刻，她仿佛变年轻了。 Sitting by the window, she explained every stitch with steady patience, just like she once did in her little shop years ago. 坐在窗边，她以平稳的耐心解释着每一针每一线，就像多年前在她的小店里做的那样。 As memories flowed, laughter replaced silence, and confidence slowly replaced doubt. 随着回忆涌现，笑声取代了沉默，自信慢慢取代了自我怀疑。 Almost without noticing, she finished her meal beside her sewing tools. 几乎没有察觉地，她在缝纫工具旁吃完了饭。 For the first time in weeks, she did so without being reminded. 几周来第一次，她在没有人提醒的情况下做到了这一点。 Watching this, something glistened in the corners of her eyes. 看着这一幕，她的眼角闪烁着晶莹的泪光。 She finally realized that what her grandmother truly needed was not food itself, but the feeling of being needed, respected, and valued. 她终于明白，奶奶真正需要的不是食物本身，而是被需要、被尊重和被重视的感觉。 一、 范文深度分析 这篇文章之所以好，是因为它做到了“三个转变”： 策略转变 : 从 Para 1 的“逼迫进食”(urging) 转变为“示弱求助”(asking for help)。 关键句: "Instead of urging..., she chose a gentler way..." 动作转变 : 从“手抖”(trembling) 到“平稳”(steady)。 分析: 这是一个非常高级的对照描写。手抖代表不自信、衰老；手稳代表找回了专业技能和自我价值。 氛围转变 : 从“沉默对抗”到“欢声笑语”。 分析: 环境描写不仅烘托了气氛，也象征着人物关系的和解。 二、 重点表达拓展与替换 为了丰富写作词汇，我按功能分类，提供一些可以在类似语境下使用的高级替换表达： 1. 描写“消除隔阂/气氛缓和” 原文: Meal by meal, resistance faded. (抵触情绪逐渐消退) 拓展替换: The invisible wall between them began to crumble. (她们之间那道无形的墙开始崩塌。) The tension in the air melted away. (空气中的紧张气氛消融了。) Her defenses finally dropped. (她的心理防线终于放下了。) 2. 描写“眼睛有光/重获新生” (Regaining Vitality) 原文: Grandma’s eyes lit up instantly... she seemed younger. 拓展替换: A long-lost spark returned to her eyes. (久违的光芒回到了她的眼中。) Her face glowed with a newfound energy. (她的脸上焕发出新生的活力。) Life seemed to flow back into her weary body. (生命力似乎回到了她疲惫的身体里。) 3. 描写“感动/流泪” (Emotional Tears) 原文: Something glistened in the corners of her eyes. 拓展替换: Tears welled up in her eyes and blurred her vision. (泪水涌上眼眶，模糊了视线。) She blinked back tears of gratitude. (她眨眼忍住感激的泪水。) Overwhelmed with emotion, she could barely speak. (被情绪淹没，她几乎说不出话来。) 三、 系统整理丰富表达 一、Paragraph 1｜方式改变 → 情绪松动 1. “不再催促，而是换方式”的表达 ①Instead of pushing her to eat, Mira tried a softer approach.她没有再强迫奶奶吃饭，而是尝试了一种更温和的方式。 ②Rather than forcing the issue, she chose patience over pressure.她没有继续强行解决问题，而是选择了耐心而非施压。 ③（升级）She gave up constant urging and turned to a gentler, more thoughtful approach.她放弃了反复催促，转而采取了一种更温和、更体贴的方式。 ④（抽象总结型）She realized that persuasion was less powerful than respect.她意识到，说服远不如尊重更有力量。 2. “犹豫 + 颤抖”的动作链表达 ①She paused, her hand hovering over the knife, fingers shaking.她停顿了一下，手悬在刀上方，手指微微发抖。 ②A brief hesitation crossed her face as her trembling fingers froze in mid-air.短暂的犹豫掠过她的脸庞，颤抖的手指停在半空中。 ③She lingered for a moment, uncertainty written in her shaking hands.她迟疑了片刻，不安写满了她颤抖的双手。 非谓语 + 身体细节 = 情绪外化 3. “开始吃饭”的隐性情绪表达（Show, not tell） ①She lifted the spoon cautiously and tasted the soup for the first time.她小心翼翼地拿起勺子，第一次尝了一口汤。 ②With a hesitant motion, she brought the spoon to her lips.她带着犹豫的动作，把勺子送到嘴边。 ③After a long pause, she finally took a careful sip.长时间的停顿后，她终于小心地喝了一口。 4. Paragraph 1 结尾氛围句（高频可迁移） ①Warmth quietly returned to the once-silent table.温情悄然回到了曾经沉默的餐桌旁。 ②The heavy silence gave way to soft voices and shared smiles.沉重的沉默被轻声交谈和会心的微笑所取代。 ③A sense of peace slowly settled over the table.一种平静的氛围慢慢笼罩了餐桌。 二、Paragraph 2｜价值重建 → 情感升华 1. “眼睛亮了”的多样表达（必背） ①Grandma’s eyes lit up instantly.奶奶的眼睛瞬间亮了起来。 ②（升级）A sudden light flickered in her eyes.一道光芒在她的眼中闪现。 ③（高分）A familiar brightness returned to her gaze.一种熟悉的光彩重新回到了她的目光中。 2. “回忆涌现”的画面表达 ①Memories came flooding back, filling the room with laughter.回忆如潮水般涌来，笑声充满了整个房间。 ②As the past unfolded, the room grew lighter and warmer.随着往事被慢慢讲述，房间变得愈发轻松温暖。 ③With each memory shared, her confidence quietly returned.随着每一段回忆的分享，她的自信悄然回归。 3. “无提醒吃完饭”＝问题真正解决 ①She finished her meal naturally, without a single reminder.她很自然地吃完了饭，没有任何人提醒。 ②For once, eating no longer felt like a task.这一次，吃饭不再像一项任务。 ③The struggle over meals finally came to an end.围绕吃饭的挣扎终于画上了句号。 四、结尾升华句｜万能价值感主题 原句结构（必背） What sb truly needed was not A, but B. 某人真正需要的不是A，而是B。 可直接迁移的高分表达 ① 稳定型 What she needed was not food, but a sense of purpose. 她需要的不是食物，而是一种存在的意义。 ② 情感型 Being needed gave her more strength than any meal ever could. 被需要带给她的力量，胜过任何一顿饭。 ③ 抽象升华型（冲刺） Dignity, not food, was what truly sustained her. 真正支撑她的不是食物，而是尊严。 ④ 总结哲理型 To feel useful was the greatest comfort of all. 被需要的感觉，才是最大的安慰。 五、 结尾升华的多种句式 结尾是阅卷老师打分的关键点。原文用的是 She finally realized that... 这种平铺直叙的结构。针对高一学生，我们可以学习几种不同难度的“金句”，用来表达同一个主题：“老人需要的不仅是物质，更是精神上的被需要”。 Level 1: 强调句型 It was then that Mira realized love isn't just about care, but about giving them a sense of purpose. (就在那时，米拉意识到爱不仅仅是照顾，更是给予她们归属感。) Level 2: 倒装句 Not until seeing the smile on Grandma's face did Mira understand the true meaning of filial piety: making her feel useful again. (直到看到奶奶脸上的笑容，米拉才明白孝顺的真谛：让她再次感到自己有用。) Level 3: 谚语/隐喻风格 She understood that while food nourishes the body, being needed nourishes the soul. (她明白了，虽然食物滋养身体，但“被需要”滋养灵魂。) Level 4: 独立主格/分词作状语 Looking at her happy grandmother, Mira smiled through tears, the lesson carved into her heart: dignity is the best medicine for the elderly. (看着快乐的奶奶，米拉含泪微笑，这个教训铭刻在心：尊严是老人最好的良药。) 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $