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阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Lisa Sweeney is a 32-year-old mail carrier in Staten Island, New York. Four months ago, she noticed that something wasn’t right at one of the homes on her route. It was her quick action that made all the difference.
One afternoon in August, an old woman named Marie Boyer, who lived alone, fell at the foot of the stairs in her home. She was just lying unconscious(昏迷的)on the floor.
The next afternoon, her regular mail carrier, Lisa Sweeney, passed by and noticed something unusual. Though she and Marie hadn’t had much conversation over the years, Lisa knew her habits. She was surprised not to see Marie working in her garden, because she usually spent most afternoons there when the weather was fine.
I just had a feeling in my heart that Marie was inside. “Lisa recalls. She went straight round to the back of the house, thinking that the old woman might be in the kitchen, but she didn’t find anybody there. Puzzled, Lisa returned to the front of the house and knocked bard on the door. There was no answer. She thought that this was very strange, so she knocked on a neighbor’s door, but he’d been away on vacation and arrived home just a short time before so he didn’t know anything. Just then Lisa noted that Mane’s bottle of milk, which was delivered early in the morning, was still on the doorstep. It was a clear warning sign.
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“I must get in to see what’s happened.” Lisa said to herself.
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Lisa’s quick action not only saved a life but also started a friendship.
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一、文本分析
1.角色
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2.视角
第______人称视角
3.时空线
纽约斯塔滕岛(莉萨作为邮递员在投递路线上)--- 玛丽的住所附近(莉萨发现玛丽家异常:未在花园劳作)--- 玛丽家屋后(莉萨寻找无果)--- 玛丽家门前(莉萨敲门无应答,询问邻居得知邻居刚度假回来不知情)--- 玛丽家门前台阶(莉萨发现清晨送达的牛奶仍在,确认异常)--- (续写)______(第一段续写场景:玛丽家中/门前,莉萨设法进入)--- (续写)______(第二段续写场景:医院/玛丽家中,救助后场景)
4.文章线索
(1)“莉萨的细心观察”与“玛丽的危险处境”对情节发展有何作用?它如何成为推动后续救助情节的关键动力?
(2)“莉萨与玛丽此前有限的交集”与“莉萨主动救助的行为”有何内在关联?二者如何共同凸显相关主题?
(3)“玛丽的生活习惯”和“牛奶未取”等细节有何深层意义?它们如何为后续“莉萨确认异常、决心救助”的情节做铺垫?
(4)故事的核心冲突是什么?“莉萨的责任心与救助意愿”与“玛丽的昏迷危机、无法进入房屋”这条线索是如何逐步推进的?
5.情节线
32岁的莉萨是纽约斯塔滕岛的邮递员 --- 四个月前莉萨就察觉玛丽家有异常,她的快速行动带来了改变 --- 八月一天下午,独居老人玛丽在家中楼梯脚下摔倒昏迷 --- 次日下午,莉萨投递时发现玛丽未像往常一样在花园劳作(天气晴朗时玛丽通常下午在花园)--- 莉萨心生不安,前往玛丽家屋后寻找无果 --- 莉萨返回门前敲门无应答,询问邻居(刚度假回来不知情)--- 莉萨发现清晨送达的牛奶仍在台阶上,确认异常 --- (续写)____________________________ --- (续写)__________________________________________
6.情感线
莉萨:对投递工作的认真→ 对玛丽异常状况的警觉→ 寻找玛丽时的困惑→ 确认异常后的焦急→ 决心救助时的______→ 成功救助后的______→ 建立友谊后的______
玛丽:平时的独居状态→ 摔倒后的痛苦与无助→ 被救助时的______→ 与莉萨建立友谊后的______
7.文章大意概括
中文:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
英文:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
8.句式示例
宾语从句:________________________________________________________________
同位语:________________________________________________________________
状语从句:________________________________________________________________
比喻:________________________________________________________________
9.主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句:“I must get in to see what’s happened.” Lisa said to herself.
衔接句 1—— 对 “莉萨进入房屋的过程与结果” 提问:莉萨会通过什么方式进入房屋?进入后会发现什么?她接下来会优先做什么事?
衔接句 2—— 对 “莉萨与玛丽的互动(若玛丽仍有意识)” 提问:若玛丽尚有微弱意识,会有怎样的反应?这种反应能体现出什么?若玛丽完全昏迷,莉萨的救助动作会有哪些细节?
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “建立友谊” 做铺垫:________________________________________________________________
第二段提示句:Lisa’s quick action not only saved a life but also started a friendship.
衔接句 1—— 对 “救助后的后续发展与互动” 提问:玛丽康复后会如何对待莉萨?二人之间会有哪些具体的友好互动?这些互动能体现“友谊”的哪些特点?
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:这次经历会让莉萨和玛丽分别有怎样的感悟?如何呼应“责任心、善意与人际温暖”的主题?
主题:________________________________________________________________
三、段落构思
第一段:“I must get in to see what’s happened.” Lisa said to herself.
梳理第一段写作思路:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
续写:_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二段:Lisa’s quick action not only saved a life but also started a friendship.
梳理第二段写作思路:______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
续写:________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
参考答案
一、文本分析
1.角色
莉萨・斯威尼(Lisa Sweeney):32 岁的纽约斯塔滕岛邮递员,工作认真负责,观察力敏锐,心思细腻且富有同情心与行动力。能记住服务对象的生活习惯,发现异常后绝不退缩,果断采取救助行动,既挽救了生命,又收获了友谊,是平凡岗位上的暖心守护者。
玛丽・博耶(Marie Boyer):独居的年迈老人,生活规律,天气晴好时会在花园劳作。意外摔倒昏迷后陷入危险处境,被莉萨救助后心怀感恩,敞开心扉与莉萨建立深厚友谊,是善意与温暖的受益者。
邻居:故事中的次要角色,因外出度假对玛丽的状况一无所知,侧面烘托出莉萨及时发现异常的重要性,推动情节发展。
2.视角
第 三 人称视角(提示:以旁观者视角客观叙述莉萨救助玛丽的全过程,既能清晰展现莉萨的观察与行动细节,又能自然交代玛丽的处境,让读者直观感受到平凡人善意举动的力量,增强故事的真实性与感染力)
3.时空线
纽约斯塔滕岛(莉萨作为邮递员在投递路线上)--- 玛丽的住所附近(莉萨发现玛丽家异常:未在花园劳作)--- 玛丽家屋后(莉萨寻找无果)--- 玛丽家门前(莉萨敲门无应答,询问邻居得知邻居刚度假回来不知情)--- 玛丽家门前台阶(莉萨发现清晨送达的牛奶仍在,确认异常)--- (续写)玛丽家门前与屋内(第一段续写场景:莉萨设法进入,救助昏迷的玛丽)--- (续写)医院与玛丽家中(第二段续写场景:玛丽康复,二人建立深厚友谊)
4.文章线索
(1)“莉萨的细心观察” 与 “玛丽的危险处境” 对情节发展有何作用?它如何成为推动后续救助情节的关键动力?作用:二者构成 “发现危机” 与 “亟待救援” 的核心关联,是情节推进的核心逻辑。莉萨的细心观察让她捕捉到玛丽 “不在花园”“牛奶未取” 等异常信号,为后续 “决心破门救助” 提供合理动机;玛丽的危险处境则让莉萨的观察与行动更具紧迫性,凸显救助行为的价值。关键动力:正因为莉萨对玛丽生活习惯的细致留意,才能在第一时间察觉反常;而玛丽独居昏迷的危急状况,促使莉萨突破 “不擅自进入他人住宅” 的常规,果断采取行动,最终成功挽救生命。
(2)“莉萨与玛丽此前有限的交集” 与 “莉萨主动救助的行为” 有何内在关联?二者如何共同凸显相关主题?内在关联:莉萨与玛丽此前并无深交,但莉萨仍将服务对象的生活习惯记在心上,这份超越工作范畴的善意与细心,正是她主动救助的核心原因。有限的交集更能反衬出莉萨行为的可贵 —— 她的帮助并非源于深厚情谊,而是源于本心的善良与责任感。凸显主题:二者共同凸显 “平凡善意的力量”“陌生人之间的温暖守护” 等主题,说明善意无需建立在熟络关系之上,一个细心的举动、一次果断的援手,就能为他人带来生的希望。
(3)“玛丽的生活习惯” 和 “牛奶未取” 等细节有何深层意义?它们如何为后续 “莉萨确认异常、决心救助” 的情节做铺垫?深层意义:“玛丽晴好午后必在花园劳作” 的习惯,是莉萨判断异常的重要依据;“清晨送达的牛奶仍在台阶” 则是确认玛丽陷入危险的关键信号,这些细节体现了莉萨的细心,也暗示了玛丽独居无人照料的处境。铺垫作用:这些细节层层递进,从 “隐约觉得不对” 到 “确认情况危急”,让莉萨 “必须进入房屋查看” 的决定更具合理性,也让读者跟随莉萨的视角逐渐感受到紧张氛围,为后续破门救助的情节做好情绪与逻辑铺垫。
(4)故事的核心冲突是什么?“莉萨的责任心与救助意愿” 与 “玛丽的昏迷危机、无法进入房屋” 这条线索是如何逐步推进的?核心冲突:莉萨想要救助玛丽的迫切意愿,与 “无法进入房屋”“玛丽昏迷无人知晓” 的现实困境之间的矛盾;独居老人的生存危机与社会关怀缺失的隐性矛盾。推进过程:①铺垫:莉萨发现玛丽未在花园,心生警觉;②发展:莉萨寻找、敲门无果,询问邻居也无收获,困境初步显现;③激化:莉萨发现未取的牛奶,确认玛丽陷入危险,“无法进入房屋” 的矛盾升级,莉萨下定决心采取行动;④解决:莉萨设法进入房屋,救助玛丽,化解危机。
5.情节线
32 岁的莉萨是纽约斯塔滕岛的邮递员 --- 四个月前莉萨就察觉玛丽家有异常,她的快速行动带来了改变 --- 八月一天下午,独居老人玛丽在家中楼梯脚下摔倒昏迷 --- 次日下午,莉萨投递时发现玛丽未像往常一样在花园劳作(天气晴朗时玛丽通常下午在花园)--- 莉萨心生不安,前往玛丽家屋后寻找无果 --- 莉萨返回门前敲门无应答,询问邻居(刚度假回来不知情)--- 莉萨发现清晨送达的牛奶仍在台阶上,确认异常 --- (续写)莉萨果断采取行动破门而入,发现昏迷的玛丽,立刻拨打急救电话并实施简单急救 --- (续写)玛丽康复出院,莉萨常去探望,二人从陌生的邮递员与住户变成亲密的朋友
6.情感线
莉萨:对投递工作的认真→ 对玛丽异常状况的警觉→ 寻找玛丽时的困惑→ 确认异常后的焦急→ 决心救助时的 果断与坚定→ 成功救助后的 欣慰与释然→ 建立友谊后的 温暖与珍视
玛丽:平时的独居状态→ 摔倒后的痛苦与无助→ 被救助时的 虚弱与感激→ 与莉萨建立友谊后的 幸福与踏实
7.文章大意概括
中文:
32 岁的莉萨是纽约斯塔滕岛的一名邮递员。八月的一天下午,独居老人玛丽在家中楼梯脚下摔倒并陷入昏迷。次日下午,莉萨投递邮件时,发现玛丽并未像往常一样在花园劳作,心生警觉。她先后到玛丽家屋后、门前寻找,敲门无人应答,询问邻居也一无所获。直到发现清晨送达的牛奶仍放在台阶上,莉萨确认玛丽一定出事了,决心进入房屋一探究竟。她的及时行动不仅挽救了玛丽的生命,还让两人结下了深厚的友谊。
英文:
Lisa Sweeney is a 32-year-old mail carrier in Staten Island, New York. One afternoon in August, Marie Boyer, an elderly woman living alone, fell at the foot of the stairs in her home and lay unconscious on the floor. The next afternoon, when Lisa was delivering mail as usual, she noticed something unusual—Marie, who usually worked in her garden on fine afternoons, was nowhere to be seen. She felt worried and checked the back of Marie’s house, but found nobody. She knocked hard on the front door repeatedly, yet got no response. She then asked Marie’s neighbor, who had just come back from vacation and knew nothing about Marie’s situation. Just then, Lisa spotted that the bottle of milk delivered early that morning was still on the doorstep. She was certain that something must have happened to Marie and decided to get into the house to check. Her quick action not only saved Marie’s life but also brought the two a precious friendship.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:She thought that this was very strange, so she knocked on a neighbor’s door.
同位语:Lisa Sweeney is a 32-year-old mail carrier in Staten Island, New York, a woman with keen observation and a warm heart.
状语从句:Though she and Marie hadn’t had much conversation over the years, Lisa knew her habits.
比喻:Lisa’s timely help was like a beam of light in the dark, pulling Marie back from the edge of death.
9.主题归类
平凡岗位上的责任心能创造不凡的价值;陌生人之间的善意与援手,是照亮困境的温暖光芒;细微的观察与果断的行动,可能会挽救一条生命、缔结一段珍贵的友谊;关注独居老人的生活,传递社会温情。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:“I must get in to see what’s happened.” Lisa said to herself.
衔接句 1—— 对 “莉萨进入房屋的过程与结果” 提问:莉萨会通过什么方式进入房屋?进入后会发现什么?她接下来会优先做什么事?答案:莉萨会尝试寻找是否有未锁的窗户,或者向附近其他邻居求助帮忙破门;进入后会发现玛丽昏迷在楼梯脚下,腿部可能有明显摔伤痕迹;她会优先拨打急救电话,然后轻轻检查玛丽的呼吸和脉搏,用外套盖在玛丽身上保暖,等待救护车到来。
衔接句 2—— 对 “莉萨救助时的细节与心理” 提问:莉萨在救助过程中会有哪些具体动作?她的心理状态是怎样的?这些细节能体现她的什么品质?答案:莉萨会蹲在玛丽身边,轻声呼唤她的名字,同时保持冷静拨打急救电话,清晰告知地址和情况;她的内心会充满焦急,但又强迫自己镇定,确保救助措施准确;这些细节体现了她的沉着冷静、处事果断和对生命的敬畏。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “建立友谊” 做铺垫:答案:第一段中莉萨成功救助玛丽的行为,是二人友谊的起点。莉萨的善意与担当让玛丽心生感激,为后续玛丽康复后主动与莉萨亲近、莉萨乐于探望的情节奠定情感基础;同时,莉萨在救助过程中展现的细心与温暖,让二人从陌生的邮递员与住户,变成了有过生死交集的特殊关系,为友谊的建立提供了合理性。
第二段提示句:Lisa’s quick action not only saved a life but also started a friendship.
衔接句 1—— 对 “救助后的互动与友谊发展” 提问:玛丽康复后会如何感谢莉萨?二人之间会有哪些具体的友好互动?这些互动能体现 “友谊” 的什么特点?答案:玛丽康复后会亲手制作点心送给莉萨,邀请她到家中做客;二人会一起在花园劳作、聊天,莉萨会分享工作中的趣事,玛丽会讲述过去的经历;这些互动体现了友谊的温暖、平等与真挚,无关身份与年龄,只源于彼此的善意。
衔接句 2—— 对 “情节结局与主题升华” 提问:这次经历会对莉萨和玛丽的生活产生什么影响?如何呼应 “平凡善意的力量” 这一主题?答案:对莉萨而言,这次经历让她更深刻地认识到邮递员工作的意义,不仅是投递邮件,更是守护邻里的平安;对玛丽而言,她不再感到独居的孤单,生活因这份友谊变得充满色彩。这个结局呼应主题,说明平凡人的一次善意之举,既能改变他人的命运,也能丰富自己的生活,让温暖在人与人之间传递。
主题:平凡的岗位也能孕育伟大的善意,及时的援手不仅能挽救生命,更能缔结跨越年龄与身份的真挚友谊;陌生人之间的关爱,是点亮生活的温暖光芒。
三、段落构思
第一段:“I must get in to see what’s happened.” Lisa said to herself.
梳理第一段写作思路:① 刻画莉萨下定决心后的果断行动,比如尝试推开窗户、向路过的行人求助;② 描写进入房屋后发现玛丽的场景,突出环境的安静与玛丽的危急状况;③ 重点写莉萨的救助动作,如拨打急救电话、检查生命体征、保暖等,体现她的沉着;④ 以救护车赶到、玛丽被送往医院收尾,为第二段友谊的建立铺垫。
续写:
“I must get in to see what’s happened.” Lisa said to herself. She scanned the house quickly and noticed that the kitchen window was slightly ajar. With great effort, she pried the window open and climbed in carefully. The moment she stepped into the hallway, she spotted Marie lying motionless at the bottom of the stairs. Her heart sank. Lisa rushed over and gently checked Marie’s breath—faint but steady. She immediately dialed 911, her voice trembling slightly as she reported the address and Marie’s condition. Then she covered Marie with a nearby blanket and kept talking to her softly, hoping to keep her conscious until help arrived. Soon, the sound of an ambulance echoed in the distance, and Lisa felt a wave of relief wash over her.
第二段:Lisa’s quick action not only saved a life but also started a friendship.
梳理第二段写作思路:① 交代玛丽的康复情况,描写玛丽出院后与莉萨的第一次见面,突出玛丽的感激之情;② 列举二人日常互动的细节,如一起打理花园、分享美食等,展现友谊的温暖;③ 写二人的内心感悟,点明这次经历对彼此的影响;④ 升华主题,强调善意与守护的意义。
续写:
Lisa’s quick action not only saved a life but also started a friendship. A month later, Marie recovered and invited Lisa to her home for dinner. The old woman prepared Lisa’s favorite apple pie and thanked her repeatedly with tears in her eyes. Since then, Lisa often stopped by Marie’s house after work. They would chat while tending to the flowers in the garden, and Marie would tell Lisa stories about her youth. For Marie, Lisa was like the daughter she never had. For Lisa, Marie’s house was a warm harbor where she could find comfort and joy. Their story also spread around the neighborhood, reminding everyone that a little kindness and a pair of observant eyes can make a big difference.
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