人与人情感联系类读后续写-一张椅，一片湖，一张图，Emma与Theo的忘年交 讲义 -2024-2025学年高二英语作文复习专项

标黑加粗斜体（环境描写）可积累文本，绿色衔接点！！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单下划线（状从）；非谓语形式都会标注；其他重点，红色字体为重要单词B-eli-eve in daily accumulation!(注释)! () 江苏省盐城市2024-2025学年高二下学期期末统考英语试题 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Every Saturday morning, Emma walked to the lake near her house. It was a peaceful spot where the sunlight danced on the water and birds sang in the trees above. At the far end of the lake was an old wooden bench (长凳)(全部倒装句). Emma had made it her spot since moving to the neighborhood five years ago. Now in her early sixties(注意年龄), Emma had recently retired from teaching. Her days were slower and quieter. Sitting by the lake(非谓语动作短语做主语) brought her comfort and reminded her of the beauty in stillness. One spring morning, she noticed someone on “'her" bench - a teenage boy sat there, with earphones in, eyes fixed on the ground(独立主格). Emma paused, unsure(adj做主语补语) whether to approach. She walked slowly around the lake, hoping(现在分词做伴随动作) he might leave. But when she returned, he was still there. She sat at the edge of the bench, careful(adj做主语补语)not to interrupt him. The boy didn't respond. After a while, Emma spoke, “'It's a beautiful place, isn't it?" He said nothing at first. Then, without turning, he replied,“I guess.” From that Saturday on,the boy kept showing up. Emma adjusted. Sometimes they said nothing. Other times, she asked soft questions, and over the weeks, he gave short replies. His name was Theo. He was l6 and had just moved in with his grandparents after his parents separation. One day, without her asking, he said, “I come here because it's quiet. Everything else is just loud." Emma nodded, “The lake has always helped me think.” Their quiet company continued into summer. One day, he showed up with a sketchbook (写生簿) and drew the lake. Emma watched, amazed by his talent(过去分词做adj补语), “You're an artist," she said. “You should enter the art contest in the community(重要事件)." Theo gave a small smile. Then one hot Saturday, Emma didn't come. Days later, still no Emma. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Worried, Theo couldn't wait to know what had happened to Emma. Paragraph 2: Encouraged by Emma in hospital, Theo entered the contest. 江苏省盐城市2024-2025学年高二下学期期末统考英语试题 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Every Saturday morning, Emma walked to the lake near her house. it was a peaceful spot where the sunlight danced on the water and birds sang in the trees above. At the far end of the lake was an old wooden bench (长凳). Emma had made it her spot since moving to the neighborhood five years ago. Now in her early sixties, Emma had recently retired from teaching. fer days were slower and quieter. Sitting by the lake brought her comfort and reminded her of the beauty in stillness.One spring morning, she noticed someone on “'her" bench - a teenage boy sat there, with earphones in, eyes fixed on the ground. Emma paused, unsure whether to approach. She walked slowly around the lake, hoping he might leave. But when she returned, he was still there. She sat at the edge of the bench, careful not to interrupt him. The boy didn't respond. After a while.Emma spoke, “'It's a beautiful place, isn't it?" He said nothing at first. Then, without turning, he replied,“I guess.” From that Saturday on,the boy kept showing up. Emma adjusted. Sometimes they said nothing. Other times, she asked soft questions, and over the weeks, he gave short replies. His name was Theo. He was l6 and had just moved in with his grandparents after his parents separation. One day, without her asking, he said, “I come here because it's quiet. Everything else is just loud." Emma nodded, “The lake has always helped me think.” Their quiet company continued into summer. One day, he showed up with a sketchbook (写生簿) and drew the lake Emma watched, amazed by his talent, “You're an artist," she said. “You should enter the art contest in the community." Theo gave a small smile.Then one hot Saturday, Emma didn't come. Days later, still no Emma. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Worried, Theo couldn't wait to know what had happened to Emma. Paragraph 2: Encouraged by Emma in hospital, Theo entered the contest. 1. 文章分类与续写思路分析 文章类型：人与人情感关系类（陌生人之间的情感纽带） 续写构思方向： 主题：孤独与陪伴、代际互助、艺术治愈心灵。 布局： 第一段：解决悬念（Emma的缺席原因），强化Theo的担忧与行动。 第二段：升华主题（Emma的鼓励推动Theo成长），完成情感闭环。 框架提炼： 段落 内容要点 衔接原文的关键点 1 Theo主动寻找Emma，发现她生病住院 承接“Emma没来”的悬念，呼应前文她对Theo的关心 2 Theo参赛并获奖，回报Emma的善意 延续“艺术比赛”伏笔，体现双向情感支持 续写注意事项： 承接原文： 保留“安静陪伴”的基调，对话简短但情感深沉。 使用原文关键词（如“quiet”“lake”“sketchbook”）。 巧妙设计： 通过环境描写（如医院窗外的树影）呼应湖边的宁静。 用动作描写（如Theo握紧素描本）体现心理变化。 2. 故事山模式与原文分析 故事山模式： 开端：Emma习惯湖边独处。 发展：Theo闯入她的空间，建立沉默友谊。 高潮：Emma突然缺席，Theo担忧。 结局：Theo通过艺术行动回报Emma（续写部分）。 伏笔与冲突： 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 伏笔 Theo的素描本 “he showed up with a sketchbook” 冲突点 Theo的家庭问题 “after his parents’ separation” 隐含线索 湖边的宁静对两人的治愈作用 “The lake has always helped me think” 解决方案 艺术成为情感纽带 续写中通过比赛实现成长 3. 原文细节分析表格 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 Emma的孤独与善良 “her days were slower and quieter” 情感层次 Theo从封闭到短暂回应 “He said nothing at first. Then... ‘I guess.’” 关键情节点 Theo透露家庭背景 “had just moved in with his grandparents after his parents’ separation” 语言特色 简洁对话，留白感 “It’s a beautiful place, isn’t it?” → “I guess.” 心理描写 Emma的犹豫 “Emma paused, unsure whether to approach” 动作描写 Theo的回避姿态 “eyes fixed on the ground” 环境描写 湖的象征意义 “sunlight danced on the water” 隐含主题 安静中的相互救赎 “Everything else is just loud” vs “helped me think” 3. 动作、心理、环境描写英文例句 动作描写 1. He clutched the sketchbook tightly, his knuckles turning white. （他紧紧抓着素描本，指节发白。） 2. She shuffled slowly toward the bench, her steps hesitant. （她缓慢地挪向长凳，脚步犹豫。） 3. Theo’s fingers trembled as he flipped through the pages of his drawings. （Theo 的手指颤抖着翻动画页。） 4. Emma reached out a shaky hand to pat his shoulder gently. （Emma 伸出颤抖的手，轻轻拍了拍他的肩膀。） 5. He bolted out of the house, his heart pounding in his chest. （他冲出房子，心跳如雷。） 6. She sank into the chair, her shoulders slumping in exhaustion. （她瘫坐在椅子上，肩膀因疲惫而耷拉下来。） 7. The boy jerked his head up, startled by the sudden voice. （男孩猛地抬头，被突然的声音吓了一跳。） 8. Emma’s breath hitched as she recognized the familiar figure. （Emma 的呼吸一滞，认出了那个熟悉的身影。） 9. He scribbled furiously in his notebook, his pen scratching against the paper. （他疯狂地在笔记本上涂写，笔尖在纸上沙沙作响。） 10. She wrapped her arms around herself, as if seeking comfort. （她双臂环抱自己，似乎在寻求安慰。） 心理描写 1. A wave of unease washed over him as he realized Emma was missing. （当他意识到 Emma 不在时，一阵不安席卷了他。） 2. Doubt gnawed at him—had he done something wrong? （疑虑啃噬着他——他是不是做错了什么？） 3. Her heart swelled with warmth at his unexpected kindness. （她因他意外的善意而心头一暖。） 4. Fear coiled in his stomach like a snake, tightening with every passing minute. （恐惧如蛇般在他胃里盘绕，每一分钟都更加紧绷。） 5. A flicker of hope sparked inside her, small but persistent. （她心里闪过一丝希望，微弱但顽强。） 6. He wrestled with his thoughts, torn between speaking up and staying silent. （他在内心挣扎，是开口还是保持沉默。） 7. Loneliness settled over her like a heavy blanket, suffocating yet familiar. （孤独如厚重的毯子般笼罩着她，令人窒息却又熟悉。） 8. Regret twisted in his chest—why hadn’t he asked more about her? （后悔在他胸口翻搅——为什么他没多问问她的事？） 9. A strange mix of relief and guilt flooded her when she saw him. （看到他时，一种奇怪的释然和愧疚感涌上心头。） 10. His mind raced, trying to piece together what could have happened. （他的思绪飞速转动，试图拼凑出可能发生的事。） 环境描写 The lake shimmered under the golden hues of the setting sun. （湖水在夕阳的金色光芒下闪烁。） A crisp autumn breeze rustled the fallen leaves around the bench. （一阵清爽的秋风吹动长凳周围的落叶。） The hospital room smelled faintly of antiseptic and wilted flowers. （病房里飘着淡淡的消毒水和枯萎花朵的气味。） Shadows stretched long across the grass as evening approached. （夜幕降临，影子在草地上拉长。） The distant hum of traffic contrasted with the lake’s serene silence. （远处车辆的嘈杂声与湖边的宁静形成对比。） Moonlight spilled through the window, casting silvery patterns on the floor. （月光透过窗户洒落，在地板上投下银色的光斑。） The air was thick with the scent of rain, promising an approaching storm. （空气中弥漫着雨的气息，预示着一场风暴即将来临。） Birds chirped lazily in the trees, their songs blending into a soothing melody. （鸟儿在树上慵懒地鸣叫，歌声融合成舒缓的旋律。） The wooden bench creaked slightly under his weight as he sat down. （木制长凳在他坐下时微微吱呀作响。） The sterile white walls of the hospital made the room feel colder than it was. （医院纯白的墙壁让房间显得比实际更冷。） 4. 高级词汇替换 & 常见搭配分析 高级词汇替换（场景分类） 普通词汇 高级替换 适用场景 Sad Melancholic, Wistful 描写细腻的悲伤情绪 Happy Elated, Jubilant 强烈喜悦 Quiet Serene, Tranquil 宁静的环境 Look Gaze, Peer 更具体的“看” Walk Stroll, Trudge 不同方式的“走” 常见搭配 & 词法解析 "Eyes fixed on the ground"（盯着地面） 固定搭配：fix one’s eyes on 近义：stare at, gaze at 反义：look away "A wave of unease washed over him"（一阵不安席卷了他） 固定搭配：a wave of + emotion (e.g., relief, guilt, joy) 词法解析：wash over（情感袭来） "His knuckles turned white"（指节发白） 固定搭配：turn + color（表示情绪/生理反应） 近义：clench tightly "The lake shimmered under the sunlight"（湖水在阳光下闪烁） 固定搭配：shimmer/sparkle + under light 近义：glow, gleam "She wrapped her arms around herself"（她双臂环抱自己） 固定搭配：wrap arms around (self/others) 近义：hug oneself 可积累的语料（生词短语） Gnaw at (v.) – 啃噬，折磨 近义：torment, haunt 反义：soothe 例句: Guilt gnawed at him. The dog gnawed at the bone. Settle over (v.) – 笼罩 近义：descend upon, envelop 反义：lift 例句: Silence settled over the room. A fog settled over the lake. Hit a snag (v.) – 遇到阻碍 近义：encounter a problem 反义：proceed smoothly 例句: Their plans hit a snag. The project hit a snag due to funding. Cast a shadow (v.) – 投下阴影 近义：overshadow 反义：brighten 例句: The trees cast long shadows. His absence cast a shadow over the party. Flicker of hope (n.) – 一线希望 近义：glimmer of hope 反义：despair 例句: A flicker of hope remained. She clung to the flicker of hope. 5. Possible Versions(3) Version Special Paragraph 1: Worried, Theo couldn't wait to know what had happened to Emma. After pacing by the lake for hours, Theo decided to try the postman, who often greeted Emma on her morning walks. The man recalled seeing an ambulance outside her house days ago. That evening, Theo summoned the courage to ask at the community health center and finally learned she had been admitted after a mild stroke. The next day, holding a bouquet of wildflowers(现在分词短语做伴随动作)freshly picked by the lake(现在分词短语做后置定语), he nervously walked into her hospital room, his sketchbook tucked under his arm(独立主格刻画人物). Emma looked pale but smiled the moment their eyes met. “The lake missed you,” Theo whispered, placing the flowers on her bedside table(现在分词短语做伴随动作) Emma chuckled softly. When Theo showed her the sketch he had recently finished—a foggy morning on the lake—she grew quiet. “You’ve captured its soul,” she said at last. “Promise me you’ll share this. The community art contest closes in a week.” Her voice trembled, but her gaze was steady. Paragraph 2: Encouraged by Emma in hospital, Theo entered the contest. For nights, he refined the sketch, adding careful strokes under dim lamplight(现在分词做伴随动作). On the submission day, he stood in front of the gallery, hesitant but thinking of Emma’s words(adj和现在分词短语做主语补语). To his surprise, the sketch was awarded “Best Emotional Expression”, a special award that honored the story behind the art. His drawing—a quiet lake under dawn mist, with two faint silhouettes in the distance—was placed near the entrance of the gallery. A week later, Emma was well enough to visit. Leaning on a cane(现在分词做伴随动作), she stood before the framed artwork. “That’s us,” she said, her voice firm but warm(独立主格). They returned to the bench soon after. The air was crisp, and golden leaves swirled gently in the breeze. With the lake before them and shared silence between them, Theo realized this place no longer meant escape—it meant return, reflection, and quiet connection. And as the trees whispered above, neither felt alone. 语言亮点分析 类型 例句或短语 分析亮点 高阶结构 “holding a bouquet of wildflowers freshly picked…” 现在分词伴随动作 with结构 “with two faint silhouettes in the distance” “with + n. + doing/done”结构 独立主格 “the air was crisp, and golden leaves swirled…” 独立主格创造画面感 情绪描写 “her voice trembled, but her gaze was steady” 情绪递进 + 人物性格刻画 画面描写 “foggy morning on the lake” / “trees whispered above” 环境营造呼应情感主线 推荐语料积累 & 替换 描写词替换： pale → wan, ashen（形容病容） smile → beam, grin softly foggy → misty, hazy（增强画面质感） 高级短语积累： summon the courage to do sth. 勇敢地去做某事 tucked under one’s arm 抱在臂下 refine the sketch 打磨画作 a story behind the art 艺术背后的故事 no longer meant escape—it meant return 象征意象反转 Version 1 Paragraph 1 Worried, Theo couldn't wait to know what had happened to Emma. He walked to the small grocery store nearby and asked the cashier if she had seen Emma recently. The woman, pausing thoughtfully(现在分词做伴随动作), said Emma had had a fall and was now in hospital. The next morning, carrying a bunch of wildflowers(现在分词做伴随动作) picked near the lake(过去分词做adj短语), Theo hesitantly entered her room, his heart pounding(独立主格刻画人物). Emma's eyes lit up when she saw him. “For me?” she smiled. Theo nodded, offering the flowers and gently adding(现在分词做伴随动作), “I thought… maybe you missed the lake.” Then he held up his sketchbook. “Let’s sketch together?” Emma beamed. “Perfect idea. Also, have you heard about the community art contest? I think your lake deserves to be seen.” Her voice was soft, but firm. For the first time in a while, Theo felt his heart steady, like the calm surface of the water they both loved. Paragraph 2 Encouraged by Emma in hospital, Theo entered the contest. Day after day, he returned to the lake, sketching from different angles, observing(现在分词做伴随动作) how light touched the surface and how the bench stood still through all seasons. The final work—a delicate sketch showing the lake(现在分词短语做后置定语), with the wooden bench and a tiny figure sitting silently(with复合结构)—won second place. It was displayed in the center of the community hall, attracting(现在分词做伴随动作) admiring eyes. After Emma recovered, they returned to the bench together. Fall leaves drifted around them as the sky glowed gold. They didn’t speak much; there was no need. As the wind stirred the water and the leaves danced at their feet, Theo realized how far he had come—from silence, to expression. And with Emma beside him, the lake no longer seemed like a place to escape—it had become a place to return. Version 2 Paragraph 1 Worried, Theo couldn't wait to know what had happened to Emma. After circling the lake twice with no sign of her, he rushed to the grocery store and nervously asked about her. “She slipped on her porch,” the cashier explained, “She’s in the hospital now.” The next day, holding a handful of wildflowers(现在分词做后置定语) from their favorite spot, Theo walked into her room, fingers tightening around his sketchbook(独立主格). Seeing him(现在分词做伴随动作), Emma’s eyes sparkled. “You brought the lake with you,” she whispered. Theo smiled shyly. “I didn’t want you to miss it.” Then, as he opened the sketchbook, she leaned forward and whispered, “This should be shared. Enter the contest, Theo. Let others see what you see.” Her words echoed in his mind like ripples on water, each circle wider than the last(独立主格). He nodded slowly, as if something in him had finally found its direction. Paragraph 2 Encouraged by Emma in hospital, Theo entered the contest. For weeks, he poured his energy into a sketch that captured more than scenery—it captured memory(递进句式). He drew the lake at dusk, with the bench housing turning leaves(with复合结构), and a small figure quietly seated(独立主格). The moment it was displayed at the community center, people paused, drawn by its stillness(过去分词做方式状语). Theo was awarded second place, but what mattered more(主从) was Emma’s expression when she saw it. “You gave it soul,” she whispered. Later, they returned to the bench, golden leaves fluttering around them(现在分词做伴随动作). The lake reflected not just the sky, but all they’d been through. As wind played with the water, Theo felt an unexpected warmth—like being seen, like being home. And beside him, Emma simply smiled, as if knowing he no longer needed words. Version 3 Paragraph 1 Worried, Theo couldn't wait to know what had happened to Emma. He wandered restlessly through the streets before heading to the community center. The agent’s words hit like a stone: “She’s in hospital—took a bad fall.” The next day, wildflowers from the lake trembling in his grip(独立主格), Theo stood at Emma’s bedside. His presence surprised her, and her tired face brightened. “The lake missed you,” he said, offering both flowers and a shy smile(现在分词做伴随动作). He unfolded his sketchbook, revealing a half-finished scene of the lake under morning mist(现在分词做伴随动作). Emma studied it, then said softly, “Enter the contest. Show them this peace you’ve captured.” Her words planted something in him. For the first time, his art wasn’t about escaping the world—it was about expressing it.(递进句式) Paragraph 2 Encouraged by Emma in hospital, Theo entered the contest. His final piece bore the soul of the lake—reflections of trees, the gentle curve of the bench, and a quiet figure sitting(现在分词做后置定语) at one end(名词并列). The judges awarded him second place, yet the true reward was watching Emma’s reaction as she stood in front of it. “This is us,” she said, eyes misty(独立主格). When she had recovered, they returned to the lake. Autumn had settled in—leaves floated like golden letters on water(独立主格). They sat together, the past folded into the stillness(独立主格). And as the wind stirred the lake and scattered memories into the sky, the silence between them spoke of healing, of growth, and of two lives(并列递进) woven (过去分成短语做后置定语)together by a single bench and the lake. 加分语法点： 现在分词伴随结构：holding a bouquet / trembling in his grip with复合结构with the bench nestled under leaves 独立主格结构：leaves scattered, the lake mirroring the golden sky 强调句：It was her voice that gave him courage. 主语从句 / 宾语从句：What mattered more was her smile. 表达亮点与词组积累： 类型 词组表达 替换建议 情绪描写 eyes lit up / voice cracking / warmth flooded heart leapt / lips curled / joy welled up 动作描写 walked in awkwardly / offered shyly stepped in hesitantly / extended nervously 环境描写 golden sky / lake mirroring trees twilight glow / still water gleaming 高阶词替换 peaceful → tranquil / calm / serene sad → heavy-hearted / downcast 搭配表达 pour energy into / reflect memories bring to life / be drawn by silence 官方： Worried, Theo couldn't wait to know what had happened to Emma. He walked to the small grocery store nearby and asked the cashier if she had seen Emma recently. The woman told that Emma had a fall and was in hospital. Theo visited her the next day, awkwardly holding a bouquet of wildflowers from near the lake(现在分词做伴随动作). Emma's eyes lit up when she saw him. He held out the flowers toward her and said shyly. “I thought you might miss the lake so I brought my sketchbook too." She beamed and said, “Great! Your lake sketch should be seen by more people. Why not enter the art contest in our community?” Encouraged by Emma in hospital, Theo entered the contest. Theo eventually won the second place. The sketch of the lake, with the old wooden bench and a small figure seated at one end(with复合结构), was displayed at the community center. When Emma recovered, they returned to the bench together. Fall leaves had begun to scatter, and the lake mirrored the golden sky.(环境描写) They sat in silence, two different lives crossing at just the right moment(独立主格). And as the wind stirred the water and leaves danced at their feet, neither of them felt lonely anymore. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $