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该高中英语高考复习讲义紧扣读后续写核心考点，围绕情节衔接、情感刻画及语言运用，按“故事山结构”梳理探险类叙事的起始、冲突、解决、升华逻辑层次。通过题材类型分析、叙事结构拆解、范文点评及语言素材积累等环节，帮助学生构建从情节构思到主题升华的写作框架，提升实战能力。 讲义突出新课标思维品质与语言能力培养，创新采用“三维描写法”（动作、心理、环境）指导学生刻画人物成长，如通过对比不同范文的援救过程描写，引导学生掌握情感表达技巧。设置基础构思、语言优化、主题升华分层练习，配合即时反馈，助力教师精准把控复习节奏，有效提升学生应考能力。

标黑加粗斜体（环境描写）可积累文本，绿色衔接点！！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单下划线（状从）；非谓语形式都会标注；其他重点，红色字体为重要单词B-eli-eve in daily accumulation!(注释)! () 安徽省合肥一六八中学2025届高三最后一卷英语 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Jimmy and Tommy(主人公), good friends and adventure enthusiasts(同位语补充人物信息), decided to explore an unknown forest they had heard of from local legends. After weeks of planning and gathering supplies, they set off, excited yet slightly nervous(adj做主语补语，刻画人物心理). As they entered the forest, they were struck by its beauty and mystery.Tall, ancient trees formed a natural shelter, and sunlight created a dappled(斑驳的) pattern on the forest floor(环境描写). Birds chirped, and leaves rustled(沙沙作响)in the gentle breeze(环境描写). Jimmy and Tommy walked along a narrow path, amazed at(adj短语做主语补语)the colorful flowers and occasional small animals dashing through(现在分词做后置定语)the bushes. Deeper in the forest, they met an elderly hunter with a weather-beaten face(人物特点，后文借代可使用), carrying a rifle gun and a rabbit(现在分词做伴随动作). He looked at them with curiosity and“Young men," he said in a rough but kind voice, “where are you headed?" “We're exploring this forest," Jimmy replied excitedly. “We've heard so many stories about it. The hunter nodded slowly, “It's beautiful, but also dangerous. There are hidden dangers and animals that can harm you(伏笔信息). I suggest you turn back while you still can. But Jimmy and Tommy were too excited to follow the warning(冲突开始). They thanked him politely and continued on, confident in their abilities(adj短语做主语补语). As the day wore on, the forest became more challenging. The path disappeared, and they had to navigate(找路) through thick bushes. The air grew colder, and the forest sounds became strange and unsettling(环境描写). They realized they had underestimated the forest's complexity. Suddenly, Tommy slipped and fell into a deep hole, twisting his ankle(现在分词做结果状语). He cried out in pain, and Jimmy rushed to the edge. “Are you okay?" he asked anxiously. “I think I twisted my ankle," Tommy replied, “I can't climb out on my own.” Jimmy tried to help with a stick, but it was too short. They were lost, and Jimmy didn't know what to do next. Just then, the sound of footsteps could be heard in the distance(衔接下文). 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Jimmy looked up and saw the elderly hunter approaching them. Paragraph 2: The hunter suggested taking them to his cottage to rest for the night. 安徽省合肥一六八中学2025届高三最后一卷英语 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Jimmy and Tommy, good friends and adventure enthusiasts, decided to explore an unknown forest they had heard of from local legends, After weeks of planning and gathering supplies, they set off, excited yet slightly nervous. As they entered the forest, they were struck by its beauty and mystery.Tall, ancient trees formed a natural shelter, and sunlight created a dappled(斑驳的) pattern on the forest floor. Birds chirped, and leaves rustled(沙沙作响)in the gentle breeze. Jimmy and Tommy walked along a narrow path, amazed at the colorful flowers and occasional small animals dashing through the bushes. Deeper in the forest, they met an elderly hunter with a weather-beaten face, carrying a rifle gun and a rabbit, He looked at them with curiosity and“Young men," he said in a rough but kind voice, “where are you headed?" “We're exploring this forest," Jimmy replied excitedly. “We've heard so many stories about it. The hunter nodded slowly, “It's beautiful, but also dangerous. There are hidden dangers and animals that can harm you. I suggest you turn back while you still can. But Jimmy and Tommy were too excited to follow the warning. They thanked him politely and continued on, confident in their abilities. As the day wore on, the forest became more challenging. The path disappeared,and they had to navigate(找路) through thick bushes, The air grew colder, and the forest sounds became strange and unsettling. They realized they had underestimated the forest's complexity. Suddenly, Tommy slipped and fell into a deep hole, twisting his ankle. He cried out in pain, and Jimmy rushed to the edge. “Are you okay?" he asked anxiously. “I think I twisted my ankle," Tommy replied, “I can't climb out on my own. Jimmy tried to help with a stick, but it was too short, They were lost, and Jimmy didn't know what to do next. Just then, the sound of footsteps could be heard in the distance. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Jimmy looked up and saw the elderly hunter approaching them. Paragraph 2: The hunter suggested taking them to his cottage to rest for the night. 一、文章类型与续写构思分析 分析维度 内容说明 题材类型 【探险 + 意外受伤 + 陌生人援助】类叙事性读后续写（含友情主题、成长认知、对警告的反思） 叙事结构类型 故事山结构：起始——进入森林（平静）→ 遇猎人劝阻（伏笔）→ 探索深入+迷路+跌落（冲突/高潮）→ 猎人再现（解决）→ 情感升华（尾声） 写作重点 1. 情节衔接自然，承接“猎人出现” 2. 合理描写援救过程，体现情感（友情/感恩） 3. 语言突出心理与动作刻画，体现人物成长 4. 不得新增人物，仅可扩展背景或环境描写 构思建议 第一段聚焦猎人救助过程：如何发现他们、如何营救（绳子/木头/下井）+Jimmy的反应和内疚+Tommy受伤情形和情绪 -第二段聚焦木屋休息：交谈中理解猎人用意、反思鲁莽决定、两人感恩道别，为结尾升华情感 二、续写故事山结构与原文承接点分析 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 Jimmy富有责任感、冲动但忠诚；Tommy勇敢但略显脆弱；猎人外冷内热，经验丰富 Jimmy tried to help with a stick, but it was too short. He asked anxiously. 情感层次 好奇 → 兴奋 → 紧张 → 恐慌 → 感激 → 成长 “We're exploring this forest.” / “I can't climb out on my own.” 关键情节点 - 遇见猎人 - 不听劝继续深入 - Tommy跌落 - Jimmy束手无策 - 猎人及时出现 They thanked him politely and continued on... / Just then, the sound of footsteps could be heard 语言特色 - 大量自然描写烘托神秘氛围 - 对话推动情节 - 心理与动作并重描写 ...they were struck by its beauty and mystery / “It's beautiful, but also dangerous.” 关键词分析 explore, mysterious, dangerous, twisted his ankle, lost, couldn’t climb, rough but kind voice ...twisted his ankle / Jimmy rushed to the edge... 心理描写 Jimmy焦急、后悔、内疚；Tommy担心、痛苦 “Are you okay?” he asked anxiously. / “I can't climb out on my own.” 动作描写 Tommy跌落、Jimmy试图营救、猎人靠近救援 Jimmy tried to help with a stick... / the sound of footsteps could be heard 环境描写 森林深处荒芜、光线微弱、阴森——反衬情绪变化 The air grew colder, and the forest sounds became strange and unsettling. 隐含主题 冒险中成长、倾听他人经验、友情与信任、自然的不可控性 The hunter warned them… / They realized they had underestimated the forest... 情感转折 兴奋 → 迷失 → 恐慌 → 感恩 ...confident in their abilities → Jimmy didn't know what to do... 空间转换 森林浅部→深入→陷阱→猎人木屋 The path disappeared / He cried out in pain / cottage to rest 时间过渡 从白天进入傍晚、夜晚（环境转暗增强紧张感） As the day wore on... / Just then, the sound of footsteps... 三、续写应注意事项 （1）承接原文的要点 续写承接要点 要求说明 第一句段首 Jimmy looked up and saw the elderly hunter approaching them.→必须紧承Tommy跌落情节与声音伏笔 人物延续 只使用Jimmy、Tommy与猎人，不能新增人物（如“路人”“警犬”等） 情节延续 合理设计猎人如何帮助Jimmy救出Tommy，可写道具、绳索、体力援助等 情感延续 体现Jimmy的焦虑转为感激、自责；Tommy表达内疚/感动 语言风格统一 保持原文自然清新、略带紧张氛围，避免夸张或生硬转折 设置小反转或温情结尾 可通过猎人讲述经验或Jimmy的反思为结尾增添温度和教育意义 四、具体细节 元素类型 内容 伏笔 猎人曾警告森林危险 → 后续出现解决问题；“footsteps”暗示其回归 冲突点 Tom跌落深坑、受伤，Jimmy无能为力，陷入困境 隐含线索 猎人不是随意角色，有经验并可能在附近；“声音”说明有人接近 解决方案 猎人帮助营救Tommy+带往木屋过夜+交流后理解森林之险 3. 动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句及翻译 动作描写 1. He reached out a calloused hand and pulled Tommy up. （他伸出粗糙的手，把Tommy拉了上来。） 2. The hunter knelt beside Tommy, examining his swollen ankle. （猎人跪在Tommy身旁，检查他肿胀的脚踝。） 3. Jimmy fumbled with the rope, trying to lower it into the hole. （Jimmy笨拙地摆弄着绳子，试图把它放进洞里。） 4. Tommy winced in pain as he tried to put weight on his injured foot. （Tommy痛苦地皱起脸，试图把重量放在受伤的脚上。） 5. The hunter swiftly tied a makeshift splint around Tommy’s ankle. （猎人迅速在Tommy的脚踝上绑了一个临时夹板。） 6. Jimmy’s hands trembled as he gripped the branch for support. （Jimmy的手颤抖着，紧紧抓住树枝支撑自己。） 7. The old man motioned for them to follow him through the dense undergrowth. （老人示意他们跟着他穿过茂密的灌木丛。） 8. Tommy limped forward, leaning heavily on Jimmy’s shoulder. （Tommy一瘸一拐地向前走，重重地靠在Jimmy的肩膀上。） 9. The hunter scanned the surroundings, his sharp eyes missing nothing. （猎人扫视四周，锐利的眼睛没有错过任何细节。） 10. Jimmy let out a sigh of relief as they finally spotted the hunter’s cottage. （当他们终于看到猎人的小屋时，Jimmy松了一口气。） 心理描写 1. A wave of guilt washed over Jimmy—he should have listened to the hunter. （一阵内疚涌上Jimmy心头——他早该听猎人的话。） 2. Tommy’s heart pounded with fear as he realized they were truly lost. （Tommy的心因恐惧而狂跳，他意识到他们真的迷路了。） 3. Jimmy’s mind raced, desperately searching for a way out. （Jimmy的思绪飞速转动，拼命寻找出路。） 4. A flicker of hope ignited in Tommy’s chest when he heard the footsteps. （当Tommy听到脚步声时，一丝希望在他心中燃起。） 5. Regret gnawed at Jimmy—he had been too reckless. （懊悔啃噬着Jimmy——他太鲁莽了。） 6. Tommy clenched his fists, trying to suppress the pain. （Tommy握紧拳头，试图忍住疼痛。） 7. Jimmy’s stomach twisted with anxiety as darkness crept in. （随着夜幕降临，Jimmy的胃因焦虑而绞痛。） 8. A sense of dread settled over them as the forest grew eerily silent. （当森林变得诡异般寂静时，一种恐惧感笼罩了他们。） 9. Tommy bit his lip, fighting back tears of frustration. （Tommy咬着嘴唇，强忍住挫败的泪水。） 10. Jimmy’s earlier confidence had completely evaporated. （Jimmy先前的自信已经完全消失了。） 环境描写 The forest loomed around them, its shadows stretching like grasping fingers. （森林在他们周围若隐若现，阴影像抓握的手指一样延伸。） A cold mist curled between the trees, swallowing the last traces of daylight. （冰冷的雾气在树木间盘旋，吞噬了最后一丝日光。） The wind whispered through the leaves, carrying an unsettling rustle. （风在树叶间低语，带来一种令人不安的沙沙声。） The hunter’s cottage stood like a beacon of safety amidst the wilderness. （猎人的小屋像荒野中的安全灯塔一样矗立着。） The fire crackled in the hearth, casting flickering shadows on the walls. （炉火噼啪作响，在墙上投下摇曳的影子。） The path ahead was swallowed by darkness, making every step uncertain. （前方的路被黑暗吞噬，使每一步都充满不确定性。） The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and pine. （空气中弥漫着潮湿的泥土和松树的气味。） Moonlight filtered through the canopy, painting the ground in silver patches. （月光透过树冠洒落，在地面上投下银色的斑块。） The silence was so deep that even their breathing sounded loud. （寂静如此深沉，连他们的呼吸声都显得响亮。） The first stars blinked into view as night settled over the forest. （当夜幕降临森林时，第一批星星开始闪烁。） 4. 可积累的语料 高级替换词（场景分类） 普通词 高级替换词 适用场景 walked trudged / stumbled 疲惫或艰难行走 looked scanned / peered 仔细观察 said muttered / urged 不同语气说话 scared terrified / apprehensive 不同程度的恐惧 help assist / rescue 救援或协助 固定搭配（Collocations） 1. weather-beaten face（饱经风霜的脸） 2. twist one’s ankle（扭伤脚踝） 3. navigate through thick bushes（在茂密灌木丛中找路） 4. let out a sigh of relief（松了一口气） 5. settle over (a feeling)（某种感觉笼罩） dappled (adj.)（斑驳的） 近义词：speckled, mottled 反义词：uniform, solid 例句： Sunlight created a dappled pattern on the forest floor. The horse had a dappled gray coat. rustle (v.)（沙沙作响） 近义词：whisper, murmur 反义词：silence, stillness 例句： Leaves rustled in the gentle breeze. She rustled the papers nervously. weather-beaten (adj.)（饱经风霜的） 近义词：worn, rugged 反义词：youthful, smooth 例句： The old sailor had a weather-beaten face. The weather-beaten cabin stood strong against the storm. unsettling (adj.)（令人不安的） 近义词：disturbing, eerie 反义词：calming, soothing 例句： The forest sounds became strange and unsettling. His unsettling gaze made her nervous. makeshift (adj.)（临时的） 近义词：temporary, improvised 反义词：permanent, sturdy 例句： They built a makeshift shelter from branches. The hunter tied a makeshift splint around Tommy’s ankle. 6. Possible Versions(4) Version 1 Paragraph 1: Jimmy looked up and saw the elderly hunter approaching them. The sound of steady footsteps reassured Jimmy(无灵主语句), who had been panicking moments earlier. The hunter’s face softened as he saw Tommy in the hole. “Don’t worry,” he said calmly. He quickly took out a long rope from his bag, tied one end around a thick tree trunk, and lowered it into the hole(动作串描写). “Grab on tight,” he instructed. Tommy, hovering in pain, gripped the rope firmly while Jimmy helped to pull him up. After a few minutes of struggle, Tommy finally reached the edge, exhausted but safe(adj做补语). Jimmy’s face was filled with guilt and gratitude. “Thank you,” he muttered. The hunter examined Tommy’s ankle and shook his head, “It’s not broken, but you shouldn’t walk tonight.” As the sun dipped below the horizon, darkness quickly filled the forest(无灵主语句). Paragraph 2: The hunter suggested taking them to his cottage to rest for the night. Grateful and still trembling(adj短语做主语补语), the boys followed him along a narrow path lit(过去分词短语做后置定语)only by the hunter’s flashlight. The cottage was simple yet welcoming, with wooden walls and a faint scent of pine(with复合结构). Inside, the hunter wrapped Tommy’s ankle with care and handed them steaming bowls of stew. As they ate, he told tales of past dangers he had faced in the forest. Listening in silence(现在分词做伴随动作), Jimmy realized how naive they had been. “I didn’t take your warning seriously,” he admitted. The hunter smiled slightly, “That’s how we learn.” The next morning, sunlight streamed through the windows as the boys prepared to leave. They shook the hunter’s hand firmly, promising to explore more wisely(现在分词做伴随动作). The forest hadn’t just tested their courage—it had taught them humility and the wisdom of listening. 地道表达：grab on tight, examine one’s ankle, streaming through the windows, tested their courage 同义替换： · panic → feel desperate, be overwhelmed · exhausted → worn out, drained · naive → inexperienced, unprepared 情绪&动作亮点表达： · 情绪：guilt, relief, awe, humility, gratitude · 动作：gripped the rope, wrapped the ankle, handed bowls, shook hands firmly · 表达积累： be filled with guilt → feel deeply sorry in silence → quietly, wordlessly promise to do sth → make a vow to... Version 2 Paragraph 1: Jimmy looked up and saw the elderly hunter approaching them. Relief flooded Jimmy as the familiar figure stepped into view. “He’s hurt,” Jimmy explained anxiously, pointing at Tommy in the hole(现在分词做伴随动作). The hunter didn’t hesitate. He swung off his backpack and pulled out a coiled rope. With practiced ease, he secured it to a tree and tossed it down. “I’ll guide him. You pull,” he instructed. Working together(现在分词做伴随动作), they managed to get Tommy out safely. Tommy groaned as he touched the ground, and Jimmy supported him quickly. “We need shelter,” the hunter said firmly after checking the swelling ankle. The sky was darkening, and the forest had grown eerily quiet(环境描写). The boys nodded, realizing(现在分词做伴随动作) the forest wasn’t as friendly as it had seemed that morning. Paragraph 2: The hunter suggested taking them to his cottage to rest for the night. They moved slowly through the thickening darkness, Jimmy half-carrying Tommy(独立主格刻画人物). The hunter led the way, his lantern casting long shadows(独立主格). The warmth of the cabin was a welcome relief. Inside, Tommy was treated with a cold compress and rested on a blanket by the fire. Over dinner, they shared stories and laughter. Jimmy glanced at his friend, grateful(adj做补语) that they were safe and still together. “You’ve got each other’s backs,” the hunter commented. Jimmy smiled, “Always.” That night, as the fire crackled, the forest outside seemed distant and calm. They slept soundly, wrapped not just in blankets but in the comfort of companionship(过去分词做状态). In the morning, the boys walked away not only with a lesson in caution, but a deeper bond sealed by the night’s trial(过去分词做后置定语). 地道表达：relief flooded, coiled rope, eerie quiet, have each other’s backs 词汇替换与例句： · exhausted → weary, drained · quiet → hushed, eerie, still · friendly → welcoming, inviting 情绪&动作亮点表达： · 情绪：relief, comfort, gratitude, companionship · 动作：half-carrying, casting shadows, shared laughter, crackled fire 表达积累： a deeper bond → stronger friendship sealed by… → formed through… move slowly through darkness → navigate the shadows Version 3 Paragraph 1: Jimmy looked up and saw the elderly hunter approaching them. His weathered face showed concern(人物表情描写) as he assessed the situation. Without hesitation, he knelt beside the hole,taking out a thick rope(现在分词做伴随动作), his strong hands gripping the rope(独立主格刻画人物). "Hold still," he instructed Tommy, his voice steady(独立主格). With practiced ease, he secured the rope around a sturdy tree trunk and lowered it down. Tommy grasped it tightly, shaking(现在分词做状态描写) as he put weight on his injured ankle. The hunter pulled steadily, his muscles straining(独立主格刻画人物动作), until Tommy was safely back on solid ground. Jimmy exhaled sharply, his earlier worries replaced by quiet gratitude(独立主格刻画人物). The hunter glanced at the darkening sky and muttered, "Nightfall brings more dangers than twisted ankles." Paragraph 2: The hunter suggested taking them to his cottage to rest for the night. The boys nodded eagerly, their earlier panic gone(独立主格刻画人物). As they followed him through the shadowy trees, the forest seemed less mysterious and more frightening. The cottage, nestled in a small clearing(过去分词做后置定语), glowed warmly against the encroaching darkness(环境描写). Inside, the hunter lit the fire and handed Tommy a cloth-wrapped ice pack. "Learned this trick years ago," he said, his tone rough but kind(独立主格). Over a simple meal, he recounted close calls with wild animals and sudden storms, his stories punctuated by the crackling fire(独立主格刻画人物). By dawn, Jimmy and Tommy had traded their recklessness for respect—not just for the hunter, but for the forest’s untamed power(递进描写). Version 4 Paragraph 1: Jimmy looked up and saw the elderly hunter approaching them. Relief flooded through him(人物情绪描写) as the man’s familiar figure emerged from the undergrowth. The hunter’s sharp eyes immediately noticed Tommy’s predicament. "Told ya the forest don’t take kindly to strangers," he grumbled, yet his actions were gentle. He took out and looped a rope around a nearby branch, testing its strength before tossing the other end to Tommy(现在分词短语做伴随动作). "Pull yourself up slow-like," he advised. Tommy obeyed, gritting his teeth against the pain(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Jimmy standing aside(独立主格), praying(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Once freed(状从压缩), he slumped onto the mossy ground, while Jimmy stammered apologies. The hunter merely sighed. "It’s not safe here, following me." he remarked, eyeing the two scared boy. Paragraph 2: The hunter suggested taking them to his cottage to rest for the night. The boys, hesitant but grateful(adj短语做伴随动作), accepted the offer, trailing behind him in silence(现在分词做伴随动作). The cottage, though small, was a fortress against the forest’s whispers(环境描写). Inside, the hunter busied himself—boiling water, pressing some medicine to Tommy’s ankle, and steaming something to eat(现在分词做伴随动作，并列). "It is not the first time," he said, smiling(现在分词做伴随动作). As the firelight danced(无灵主语句), he spoke of lost hikers, each tale a mirror of their own recklessness(独立主格). When morning came, Jimmy and Tommy left with more than just mended injuries; they carried a lesson etched deep(过去分词做后置定语)— a new-found respect for nature and a more cautious mind in the future adventure. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $