【人与动物+克服困难类读后续写】逆袭剧本：病马变赛马，少女和她的白月光马子绝地翻盘 讲义 -2024-2025学年高二英语作文复习专项

该高中英语单元复习讲义通过故事山模式表格、情感线与事件线框架图系统构建读后续写知识体系，梳理家庭情感与励志类文本的分类特征、续写思路及关键冲突，并用对比表格呈现动作、心理描写的基础词与高级替换词，清晰呈现重难点及内在联系。 讲义亮点在于“情境化续写训练”，如提供“Madeline生病照料”段落的动作串描写例句（如“wiped sweat，massaged legs，murmured comfort”），结合高级替换词（如“run”替换为“gallop”）提升语言能力；通过情感线（担忧→希望→释然）分析培养思维品质。多个续写版本及官方参考支持分层学习，基础学生掌握框架，优秀学生深化表达，助力教师实施精准教学。

标黑加粗斜体（环境描写）可积累文本，绿色衔接点！！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单下划线（状从）；非谓语形式都会标注；其他重点，红色字体为重要单词B-eli-eve in daily accumulation!(注释)! () 黑龙江省哈尔滨市第三中学校2024-2025学年高二下学期6月月考英语 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Jasmine lived on a small farm with her parents and her sister Grace. They were poor and made a living by selling animals, but they treated the creatures very kindly. Jasmine was quite a help to her parents.She loved riding horses and caring for them. Of all the horses, Madeline was her favorite(注意 人称是马 而不是人). She was a white horse with beautiful locks of golden hair. She was the swiftest horse in the stable (马厩). Jasmine always dreamt of riding Madeline in a race and winning it.(交代故事的背景信息，人物及特点) Life had been harder for the poor family recently because the business had made losses. All they could do to support their daily life was to sell a horse. Jasmine was not at all happy with this idea. She thought about what to do for a long time, to see if she could come up with an alternative solution. One day, she saw an advertisement in the local newspaper for a horse race(重要契机). The winner of the race would get $1,000. She thought that she and Madeline could enter the race. She told Grace about her idea and Grace was also happy with it. They went to the race organizer and added Madeline's name to the list of horses running in the race. The organizer told them that the race was in eleven days’ time. The next day, during a routine check, the two girls noticed that Madeline seemed to have lost some color from her face. “She looks pale and unwell(冲突感),” Grace said, with a worried look.She began stroking her mane (鬃毛). “You're right, Grace. Go and call mother while I get Madeline some water," said Jasmine. Grace ran off to inform their mother. Meanwhile, Madeline was getting paler. Grace returned shortly with their mother, who phoned a vet immediately. The vet came quickly and after checking Madeline over, said that she was ill. The whole family was very worried as Madeline’s health continued to get worse. She could hardly eat anything. Madeline's situation broke Jasmine's heart. Her only wish was that Madeline would soon get better. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Whenever Jasmine had time, she went to check on Madeline and take care of her. Paragraph 2: On the day of the race, Jasmine headed to the race course with Madeline. 黑龙江省哈尔滨市第三中学校2024-2025学年高二下学期6月月考英语 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Jasmine lived on a small farm with her parents and her sister Grace. They were poor and made a living by selling animals, but they treated the creatures very kindly. Jasmine was quite a help to her parents.She loved riding horses and caring for them. Of all the horses, Madeline was her favorite. She was a white horse with beautiful locks of golden hair. She was the swiftest horse in the stable (马厩). Jasmine always dreamt of riding Madeline in a race and winning it. Life had been harder for the poor family recently because the business had made losses All they could do to support their daily life was to sell a horse. Jasmine was not at all happy with this idea. She thought about what to do for a long time, to see if she could come up with an alternative solution.One day, she saw an advertisement in the local newspaper for a horse race. The winner of the race would get $1,000. She thought that she and Madeline could enter the race. She told Grace about her idea and Grace was also happy with it. They went to the race organizer and added Madeline's name to the list of horses running in the race. The organizer told them that the race was in eleven days’ time. The next day, during a routine check, the two girls noticed that Madeline seemed to have lost some color from her face. “She looks pale and unwell,” Grace said, with a worried look.She began stroking her mane (鬃毛). ““You're right, Grace. Go and call mother while l get Madeline some water," said Jasmine. Grace ran off to inform their mother. Meanwhile.Madeline was getting paler, Grace returned shortly with their mother, who phoned a vet immediately. The vet came quickly and after checking Madeline over, said that she was ill. The whole family was very worried as Madeline’s health continued to get worse. She could hardly eat anything. Madeline's situation broke Jasmine's heart. Her only wish was that Madeline would soon get better. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Whenever Jasmine had time, she went to check on Madeline and take care of her. Paragraph 2: On the day of the race, Jasmine headed to the race course with Madeline. 1. 文章分类与续写思路分析 文章类型：家庭个人情感类（家庭困境+人与动物的情感）+ 励志类（克服困难、实现梦想）。 续写构思： 布局： 第一段（照顾马匹）：聚焦Jasmine的细心照料和情感投入，体现她的坚持与爱。 第二段（比赛日）：通过比赛结果（无论输赢）体现成长主题，如努力的价值或家庭团结。 框架提炼： 情感线：担忧→希望→紧张→释然/喜悦。 事件线：马生病→精心护理→康复参赛→比赛结果（可设计意外转折）。 实施要点： 延续原文的细腻心理描写和动作细节。 结局需呼应“贫困家庭通过努力改变命运”的隐含主题。 续写注意事项： 事项 具体内容 承接原文 需延续“Madeline生病”的冲突，衔接“11天后比赛”的时间线。 情感一致性 Jasmine的焦虑、希望需与原文“broke her heart”呼应。 伏笔利用 原文“$1,000奖金”是解决家庭困境的关键，续写需体现其重要性。 动作连贯性 保持“照顾马匹”的具体动作（如喂水、梳毛）与原文一致。 2. 故事山模式与原文分析 故事山模式： 开端：贫困家庭需卖马，Jasmine想通过比赛赚钱。 发展：Madeline生病，家庭陷入新危机。 高潮（续写部分）：Jasmine照顾马并参赛。 结局：比赛结果（成功/虽败犹荣）。 衔接点与关键分析： 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 Jasmine善良、坚韧，Grace支持姐姐。 “Jasmine was quite a help to her parents... She loved riding horses.” 情感层次 从担忧（马生病）到希望（比赛奖金）。 “Her only wish was that Madeline would soon get better.” 关键情节点 Madeline生病是转折，比赛是解决冲突的途径。 “The winner of the race would get $1,000.” 语言特色 简洁叙事+情感形容词（如“pale and unwell”）。 “She looks pale and unwell,” Grace said, with a worried look.” 心理描写 通过对话和动作间接体现心理。 “Madeline's situation broke Jasmine's heart.” 动作描写 具体动作推动情节（如检查马、打电话叫兽医）。 “Grace ran off to inform their mother... Jasmine got Madeline some water.” 环境描写 缺乏直接环境描写，可续写中添加（如比赛日的天气烘托紧张）。 无 隐含主题 爱与坚持能战胜困境。 全文对马的关爱与比赛动机。 伏笔/冲突 伏笔：比赛奖金；冲突：马的健康 vs. 家庭经济需求。 “All they could do... was to sell a horse.” 隐含线索 Madeline的“速度最快”可能为比赛反转铺垫。 “She was the swiftest horse in the stable.” 解决方案 通过比赛赢得奖金，避免卖马。 需在续写中明确体现是否成功。 3. 读后续写例句 & 高级替换词 动作描写 1. She gently stroked Madeline’s mane, whispering words of comfort. （她轻轻抚摸着玛德琳的鬃毛，低声安慰着。） 2. Madeline pricked up her ears at the sound of Jasmine’s voice. （玛德琳听到贾斯敏的声音，竖起了耳朵。） 3. Jasmine rushed to fetch a bucket of fresh water for the exhausted horse. （贾斯敏急忙去给疲惫的马打一桶清水。） 4. Grace knelt beside Madeline, checking her temperature with a worried frown. （格蕾丝跪在玛德琳旁边，皱着眉头检查它的体温。） 5. The vet carefully examined Madeline, running his hands along her legs. （兽医仔细检查玛德琳，用手顺着它的腿摸了一遍。） 6. Jasmine tightened the saddle straps, ensuring Madeline was secure. （贾斯敏紧了紧马鞍带，确保玛德琳稳稳当当。） 7. Madeline pawed the ground nervously before the race began. （比赛开始前，玛德琳紧张地刨着地面。） 8. Jasmine leaned forward, urging Madeline to go faster. （贾斯敏俯身向前，催促玛德琳加速。） 9. The crowd erupted in cheers as the horses thundered past. （马群疾驰而过时，人群爆发出欢呼声。） 10. Madeline stumbled slightly but quickly regained her footing. （玛德琳稍微踉跄了一下，但很快站稳了。） 心理描写 1. A wave of dread washed over Jasmine as she saw Madeline’s pale face. （看到玛德琳苍白的脸，贾斯敏心头涌上一阵恐惧。） 2. She bit her lip, trying to suppress her rising panic. （她咬着嘴唇，努力压制不断上升的恐慌。） 3. Hope flickered in her heart as Madeline took a small bite of hay. （玛德琳吃了一口干草，她心中燃起一丝希望。） 4. Jasmine’s stomach twisted with anxiety as the race day approached. （随着比赛日的临近，贾斯敏的胃因焦虑而揪紧。） 5. She forced a smile, not wanting Grace to see her fear. （她强挤出一个微笑，不想让格蕾丝看出她的害怕。） 6. A surge of determination coursed through her veins. （一股坚定的力量流遍她的全身。） 7. Her mind raced with thoughts of what could go wrong. （她的脑海里闪过各种可能出错的念头。） 8. Relief flooded her when Madeline finally stood steadily. （当玛德琳终于稳稳站立时，她如释重负。） 9. She clenched her fists, praying silently for success. （她握紧拳头，默默祈祷成功。） 10. A bittersweet feeling settled in her chest—joy for the win, sadness that the struggle was over. （一种苦乐参半的感觉在她心中沉淀——为胜利而喜悦，又因奋斗结束而感伤。） 环境描写 The morning sun cast a golden glow over the stable. （晨阳在马厩上洒下一片金光。） A cool breeze rustled the leaves, carrying the scent of hay. （凉风拂过树叶，带来干草的气息。） The racecourse stretched ahead, its track freshly raked. （赛道向前延伸，地面刚刚被耙平。） Dark clouds loomed overhead, threatening rain. （乌云压顶，预示着一场雨即将到来。） The crowd’s murmurs grew louder as the race time neared. （随着比赛时间临近，人群的窃窃私语声越来越大。） The stable smelled of leather, hay, and warm horseflesh. （马厩里弥漫着皮革、干草和马匹的气息。） Shadows danced along the fence as the sun dipped lower. （太阳西沉，栅栏上的影子摇曳不定。） The crisp morning air filled Jasmine’s lungs as she prepared for the race. （清晨凛冽的空气涌入贾斯敏的肺腑，她为比赛做准备。） The distant sound of hooves pounding the ground grew louder. （远处马蹄踏地的声音越来越响。） The finish line banner fluttered in the wind, waiting for the victor. （终点线的旗帜在风中飘扬，等待着胜利者。） 4. 高级替换词 & 固定搭配 (1) 高级替换词（按场景分类） 基础词 高级替换词 适用场景 happy overjoyed, elated, thrilled 胜利、惊喜 sad heartbroken, despondent, crestfallen 失败、担忧 run dash, sprint, gallop (马) 比赛、追逐 look gaze, peer, scan 观察、搜索 say whisper, murmur, exclaim 对话、情绪表达 固定搭配 & 词法解析 make a living by (doing sth.)（以…为生） 近义词：earn a living, support oneself 例句： They made a living by selling horses. She earns a living as a writer. come up with (an idea/solution)（想出办法） 近义词：devise, think of 例句： Jasmine tried to come up with a way to save Madeline. He finally devised a plan. lose color from one’s face（脸色苍白） 近义词：turn pale, go white 例句： Madeline lost color from her face, alarming Jasmine. She turned pale at the bad news. break one’s heart（使心碎） 近义词：devastate, crush 例句： Madeline’s illness broke Jasmine’s heart. The loss devastated the team. head to (a place)（前往某地） 近义词：go to, proceed to 例句： Jasmine headed to the racecourse with Madeline. They proceeded to the next checkpoint. 5. 可积累的语料（生词短语） 单词/短语 词性/意思 近义词 反义词 例句 swiftest adj. 最快的 fastest, quickest slowest Madeline was the swiftest horse in the stable. routine check n. 例行检查 regular inspection random check The girls did a routine check on Madeline. pale and unwell adj. 苍白且不适的 sickly, weak healthy, vibrant Madeline looked pale and unwell. stroke (one’s mane) v. 抚摸 pet, caress hit, strike Grace stroked Madeline’s mane gently. regain one’s footing v. 恢复平衡 recover, stabilize stumble, fall Madeline regained her footing quickly. 6. Possible Versions(3) Version 1: Paragraph 1: Whenever Jasmine had time, she went to check on Madeline and take care of her. Even when exhausted from farm work, Jasmine would tiptoe into the stable and sit beside her beloved horse. She carefully wiped Madeline’s sweat, massaged her legs, and murmured comfort(动作串描写) in a trembling voice. Although Madeline barely responded, Jasmine never gave up hope. As days passed, she noticed tiny signs of recovery—Madeline blinked more often, responded to sounds, and even tried to nibble at the hay(动词并列). Encouraged(过去分词做adj，做原因状语), Jasmine doubled her care, ensuring(现在分词做伴随动作)the stable was warm, food fresh, and water clean. Ten days later, when Madeline finally neighed softly and stood up on her own, Jasmine couldn’t hold back her tears. Her heart surged with gratitude and relief. They had made it together. Looking at the calendar(现在分词做伴随动作), Jasmine knew the race was just around the corner, and Madeline looked strong enough to try. Paragraph 2: On the day of the race, Jasmine headed to the race course with Madeline. Although nervous(状从压缩), she sat tall in the saddle, whispering(现在分词做伴随动作), "Just do your best." As the race began, Madeline hesitated for a second but soon found her rhythm. The other horses were faster at first, but Jasmine didn’t panic. Gradually, Madeline picked up speed, her hooves pounding the ground with renewed energy(独立主格刻画画面). As they approached the final bend, Jasmine leaned forward, encouraging her partner(现在分词做伴随动作). With a final burst of strength, Madeline surged ahead, her mane flying like a flag in the wind(独立主格). They crossed the finish line a nose ahead(细节感). Cheers erupted from the crowd(环境描写). Tears welled up in Jasmine's eyes as she hugged Madeline tightly. The prize money would save the farm, but more importantly, she had proven that love, patience, and determination(名词并列) could conquer anything. Version 2 Paragraph 1: Whenever Jasmine had time, she went to check on Madeline and take care of her. With a soft brush in hand and a hopeful smile, Jasmine would whisper to Madeline, "You're strong. We can do this." The horse, though weak(状从压缩), began to respond to Jasmine’s presence, occasionally flicking her tail or gently nudging her arm(现在分词做伴随动作). Day by day, Jasmine monitored her recovery, recording every slight improvement with delight(现在分词做伴随动作). Grace often helped, bringing in clean blankets and preparing herbal remedies(现在分词做伴随动作)advised by the vet(过去分词做后置定语). One afternoon, as Jasmine approached the stable, she found Madeline standing steadily, eyes bright and ears alert(独立主格). It was the moment she had prayed for. Filled with emotion(过去分词做方式状语), she hugged her horse and promised to give it her all. The race was still days away, but Jasmine's confidence grew stronger than ever, fueled by Madeline's resilience(过去分词做原因状语). Paragraph 2: On the day of the race, Jasmine headed to the race course with Madeline. Despite the early chill in the air, her heart was burning with anticipation. As the race started, Jasmine kept a steady pace, letting Madeline warm up gradually(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Halfway through, a competitor’s horse stumbled, giving them a chance to close the gap(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Jasmine whispered a cue, and Madeline responded instantly, accelerating with controlled power(现在分词短语做伴随动作). As they neared the finish line, Jasmine remembered all the moments of care, fear, and hope(名词并列)—they all pushed her forward along with her friend. With a final push, Madeline galloped ahead, and they won by a narrow margin. Standing under the sun(现在分词做伴随动作), Jasmine kissed her horse's forehead, her eyes moist(独立主格刻画人物). The victory wasn’t just about money—it was a tribute to their bond(递进描写). Version 3 Paragraph 1: Whenever Jasmine had time, she went to check on Madeline and take care of her. Each visit was filled with gentle affection and quiet perseverance. Jasmine would hum softly, clean Madeline’s stall, and mix warm water with apples(动作串并列) to coax her into eating. Though progress was slow, Jasmine refused to be discouraged. She remembered the joy of riding Madeline across the fields and held onto that memory like a beacon. Grace often stood at the door, watching in admiration(现在分词做伴随动作) as her sister poured her heart into every gesture. One evening, Madeline lifted her head and gave a soft snort, then stood up(动作并列) without assistance. Jasmine gasped in disbelief, then laughed through tears. They still had a chance. With careful preparation, they resumed light training over the next few days. By the time the race approached, Madeline was no longer the frail horse she had been. Paragraph 2: On the day of the race, Jasmine headed to the race course with Madeline. The track buzzed with excitement(环境描写), but Jasmine focused only on her horse. At the signal, Madeline burst forward with surprising agility. Though still cautious(状从压缩), Jasmine felt the strength beneath her, the steady rhythm of hooves hitting the ground(独立主格). Midway, they faced tough competition, yet Jasmine remained composed. "Trust her," she reminded herself. Nearing the final stretch(现在分词做伴随动作), Madeline surged forward, closing the distance with every stride(现在分词做伴随动作). The finish line loomed. Jasmine leaned in and urged her forward. With a final sprint, they edged ahead and crossed first. Jasmine clutched the reins and cried out in triumph. Madeline neighed in return, her eyes bright, her mane floating in the air(独立主格). The money didn’t matter at all when compared with what they achieved: they had overcome illness, fear, and doubt(名词并列)—together. 搭配与同义替换 原词 高级表达 同义表达 happy overjoyed, thrilled delighted, content tired exhausted, drained worn out, fatigued fast swiftly, rapidly quickly, at full speed strong sturdy, robust resilient, powerful 情绪与动作亮点词汇（短语） · throw arms around / hug tightly · blink back tears / well up with tears · surge with determination / burn with anticipation · nudge gently / flick tail / snort softly / stand steadily · gallop / surge forward / stumble / pull the reins 读后续写语料积累与联想表达 词语升级： weak → frail / feeble love → affection / bond think → reflect / ponder 联想词拓展： illness → recovery, resilience, hope race → speed, competition, determination stable → care, warmth, companionship 例句积累： She stood tall, not because she wasn’t afraid, but because she had no choice but to be brave. No reward was greater than the quiet neigh of a horse once thought lost. Even silence became comforting when shared in moments of struggle. Determination had carved a path through despair, one step at a time. 官方： Whenever Jasmine had time, she went to check on Madeline and take care of her: Despite her worsening health, Jasmine continued to give her medicines as the vet had instructed and stroked her mane affectionately to comfort her. Madeline seemed to be stroke by her love and showed signs of recovery after a week of attentive care. She started getting her strength back and was not pale anymore. The vet called again to check on Madeline. Much to Jasmine's relief and excitement, he declared in disbelief that the horse had recovered. The next four days witnessed their tireless training for the race.(无灵主语句) Gradually, they cooperated more smoothly and performed better and better. On the day of the race, Jasmine headed to the race course with Madeline. There were many horses there(场景描写), but apparently Madeline was the most eye-catching one, with her locks of golden hair. The whistle blown(独立主格), the race kicked off. Madeline dashed forward like an arrow.Jasmine held the reins tightly, the wind howling in her ears(独立主格). Occasionally, Jasmine whispered to Madeline to encourage her. Eventually, they became the first pair to reach the finish line, where her family stood cheering and applauding. So delighted was Jasmine that(倒装句) she couldn't help crying. With the prize money she had won, her family wouldn't need to sell a horse and Madeline became their hero. Whenever Jasmine had time, she went to check on Madeline and take cane of her: Every time Madeline refused to eat or drink, Jasmine would pat her on the back gently, stroke her mane tenderly and whisper words of encouragement softly in her ear(动作串并列). Perhaps touched by her master's affection(过去分词做原因状语), Madeline started to eat. Slowly, she regained her strength, her pale face turning rosy and her lifeless eyes becoming shiny(独立主格刻画状态). Ten days later, Madeline was in fine state again. Throwing her arms around the neck of her beloved horse(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Jasmine shed tears of joy. Mounting her horse(现在分词短语做伴随动作), she was sure they were ready for the race. On the day of the race, Jasmine headed to the race course with Madeline. When the whistle blew, all the horses darted forward. Considering(介词短语做原因状语)Madeline had just recovered from severe illness, Jasmine was cautious with speed and, therefore, they fell way behind. Abruptly, Madeline let out a gentle neigh as if asking Jasmine to speed up(状从省略). Aware of her intention,(adj短语做原因状语) Jasmine pulled the reins tightly and they began to tear at full speed. Shooting past one horse after another(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Madeline and Jasmine were eventually the first to reach the finish line. Holding the prize money(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Jasmine shouted with excitement and clasped Madeline's neck, seeing the prospect of a better life(现在分词短语做伴随动作). 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $