摘要:
该高中英语高考复习课件聚焦写作专题,依据高考评价体系梳理了词汇精确化、修饰语运用、动作链构建三大核心考查维度,通过近五年高考真题分析,明确了“词汇升级”占30%、“细节描写”占25%的高频考点分布,归纳出应用文和读后续写的典型提分题型。
课件亮点在于“策略精讲+即学即练+素养提升”的备考模式,如“笼统词变精确词”策略中,以“stammered”替换“said”为例,结合语境训练培养学生语言能力和思维品质。即学即练环节设计读后续写动作链训练,如“fumbled for the key, twisted the lock and pushed the door open”,帮助学生掌握细节描写技巧。教师可依托此课件开展分层教学,学生通过专项突破提升写作档次,实现高效冲刺。
内容正文:
写作专题
英 语
策略1——笼统词变精确词
策略1——笼统词变精确词
策略1——笼统词变精确词
策略1——笼统词变精确词
策略1——笼统词变精确词
根据语境,用精确词汇替换加黑笼统词汇
即学即练
策略1——笼统词变精确词
策略1——笼统词变精确词
策略2——添加修饰语使动作形象化
策略2——添加修饰语使动作形象化
策略2——添加修饰语使动作形象化
策略2——添加修饰语使动作形象化
添加修饰语,完成句子
即学即练
策略2——添加修饰语使动作形象化
策略3——运用动作链使动作过程化
策略3——运用动作链使动作过程化
发挥想象,运用动作链升级句子
即学即练
策略3——运用动作链使动作过程化
策略3——运用动作链使动作过程化
由读后续写评分原则可知,读后续写对词汇运用的丰富性、准确性都做出了明确的要求。因此,考试中除了要准确使用词汇外,也要注意所用词汇的丰富性,减少基础词汇的使用,培养使用复杂词汇的习惯,从而使文章内容更加生动、丰富,提升作文档次。
读后续写要求做到描写生动、优美,则必须优选词汇。比如考生在动作描写过程中常出现的一个问题是经常用通用词汇去代替具体词汇,而做不到精准描述。解决的方法就是学会使用具体词汇去代替通用词汇。例如关于说的动作:
嘟囔
whisper/mumble/grunt/murmur
结结巴巴地说
stutter/stumble/stammer
宣布
announce/declare
保证
promise/assure/guarantee
建议
offer/propose/suggest
其他的说
add补充说道;continue继续说道;retort反驳道; explain解释道;state陈述道;protest抗议道;sob哭诉道;agree同意地说;comfort安慰道;blurt out脱口而出;insist坚持说
①(2024·新高考Ⅰ卷)“Bad fortune! The machine doesn't work, either.” I murmured in anger.
“真倒霉!这台机器也不工作了。”我生气地嘟囔道。
②Struggling to his feet, Steve hugged his neighbor tightly, whispering“You save our lives! Thank you!”
史蒂夫挣扎着站起来,紧紧地拥抱着他的邻居,低声说:“你救了我们的命!谢谢!”
whispered
whistled
1.She looked at the painting for a long time, trying to understand its meaning.
→ She the painting for a long time, trying to understand its meaning.
2.He said something to his friend in a low voice so no one else could hear.
→ He something to his friend in a low voice so no one else could hear.
3.The wind blew through the trees, making the leaves rustle strongly.
→ The wind through the trees, making the leaves rustle strongly.
gazed at
effortless
4.“Oh yes, Daddy, you know I love you,” the little girl said softly, trying to escape from her father's eyes.
→“Oh yes, Daddy, you know I love you,” the little girl softly, trying to escape from her father's eyes.
5.Over the next two weeks, we competed with each other to practice these seemingly easy tasks singlehanded, from buttoning up the coats to taking notes.
→Over the next two weeks, we competed with each other to practice these seemingly tasks singlehanded, from buttoning up the coats to taking notes.
murmured
6.“You've got to check the mailbox every day,” said Molly quietly to Dad.He nodded, with a big smile.
→“You've got to check the mailbox every day,” said Molly quietly to Dad.He nodded, with a smile.
broad
除了精准选用表示动作的词语,还要给动词加上适当的修饰成分,使动作更加形象生动。适当的修饰语能细致地表达出动作发生的时间、幅度、速度、力度等,使人物形象更具活力,能更好地表现人物的鲜明个性与思想境界。动作描写中最常见的修饰成分就是状语,如副词、介词短语等。
副词
suddenly/immediately/instantly/rapidly/firmly/slowly/angrily/happily/excitedly
介词短语
with+情感名词
with delight/excitement/pleasure/happiness/joy/satisfaction/anger/
rage/patience/fear/terror/embarrassment/pride/caution/care/patience/certainty
in+名词
①in surprise/amazement/shock/sorrow
②in a high/low/sweet/loud/soft/weak voice
①(2024·新高考Ⅰ卷)After what seemed a century, he said in a reassuring tone, “Oh, that's fine! Wait a minute.”
好像过了一个世纪,他用安慰的口气说:“哦,没关系!等一下。”
②She didn't say a word, but smiled a watery smile and held my hand tightly.
她一言不发,只是淡然一笑,紧紧地握住了我的手。
with excitement
with joy
1.她满怀喜悦地打开了礼物,在发现里面的惊喜时,眼中闪烁着兴奋的光芒。
She opened the gift ,her eyes sparkling as she uncovered the surprise inside.
2.小男孩高兴地跑到他的母亲身边,他的笑声在公园里回荡。
The little boy ran to his mother , his laughter echoing through the park.
with delight
with caution
carefully
with anger
tightly
3.她惊奇地盯着那幅画,无法相信作品的细致程度。
She stared at the painting , unable to believe the level of detail.
4.他小心地走进了房间,仔细地打量着每一个角落来排除危险。
He walked into the room , observing every corner for any signs of danger.
5.他愤怒地砰的一声关上了门,脸涨得通红,拳头握得紧紧地。
He slammed the door , his face red and his fists clenched .
in amazement
记叙文中有不少动作描写是一连串动作过程的展示。尤其在展示人物个性的动作时,如果我们蜻蜓点水、一笔带过,就很难突出人物形象,也很难给人以深刻的印象。但若通过细节描写展现出动作的过程,文章的表现力便会大增。
He began counting some Euros.他开始数一些欧元。
→(2024·新高考Ⅰ卷)Without a word, he reached into his pocket, pulled out some Euros, and began counting.
他二话没说,把手伸进口袋,掏出一些欧元就开始数。
He reached for the doorknob, turned it slowly, and pushed
the door open with a creak.
1.She drank a glass of water.
→
2.He opened the door.
→
Feeling thirsty, she grabbed a glass, filled it with water,
and drank it quickly.
He slid into the driver's seat, inserted the key, and turned it to start the engine.
3.The boy picked up the ball.
→
4.He started the car.
→
The boy bent down, stretched out his hand, and carefully carefully picked up the ball from the ground.
The child tore off the wrapping paper, lifted the lid of
the box, and gasped in excitement at the gift inside.
5.She put on her coat.
→
6.The child opened the gift box.
→
She grabbed her coat from the hanger, slipped her arms
into the sleeves, and buttoned it up tightly.
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