读后续写微技能之动作描写 课件 2024届高考英语一轮复习

Skills for the description of actions 读后续写微技能 ——动作描写 Skills for the description of actions LOGO Teaching objectives 1.了解读后续写中动作描写的技巧。 2.学习动作分解方法并掌握动作链的几种常用句型。 3.运用所学的方法和语言知识，回归高考读后续写。 题 号 问题 原 因 办 法 体裁 主题思想 侧重点 2023新高考Ⅰ 我作为一个来自巴西的孩子，英语写作特别困难 英语是第二语言 老师的鼓励 记叙文 战胜 自我 动作描写 2022新高考Ⅰ 残疾的David因害怕别人嘲笑不敢参与越野赛 老师让他自己选择参加还是不参加 特教老师的 劝说 记叙文 战胜 自卑 动作描写 2021新高考Ⅰ 双胞胎做早餐把厨房弄得一团糟 给母亲惊喜,庆祝母亲节 … their father appeared 父亲助攻 记叙文 母亲节 惊喜 动作描写 2020新高考Ⅰ Bernard如何赚钱帮助养家 经济衰退 John had an idea: 做爆米花卖钱 记叙文 助人献 爱心 动作描写 读后续写高考真题 读后续写作为记叙文，其核心只有一个，那就是“人”。因此一切的笔墨，都是为了塑造人物形象，使人物更加饱满。想把我们的人物塑造得更饱满，就必须要有支撑他/她的各类描写，其中，动词是英语语言的主角，很多句子肯定都包含动作描写。但是我们在描写动作的时候往往会犯一个毛病，那就是太过于单一。那么该如何将动作构建得饱满? 要想把动作写得生动有画面感，其中的一个思路: 构造“_______________”。 前言 动作链 目录 方法一： A、B and C 结构 (强调动作的先后顺序） 方法二：合理扩展使用非谓语 构造动作链的方法 How to create action chains? 题材 使用一连串动作让画面动起来，形成动作链！ 方法：分解动作，构建画面。 分解动作就是将一个结果性的动作分解成更细致的连贯性的微动作，用细化动作的方式来延长过程，使这个动作结果过程化,使读者在阅读时脑海中自然而然地构建出电影般的画面，也让人物更立体。 思路：按照时间轴，把动作分解成饱满的动作链(描述一系列动作) 分解动作，构建画面 憨豆先生试图抄答案。 Example 1 Mr. Bean attempted to copy answers . 如何延长这句话： 分解动作，构造动作链 憨豆先生试图抄答案 他环顾四周 慢慢移动 发现别人认真写试卷 抄答案 During the exam, Mr. bean looked around, found everyone writing papers seriously, slowly moved towards his deskmate, and attempted to copy his answers. 在考试期间，憨豆先生环顾四周（look around），发现(find)每个人都在认真写试卷，然后他的身体慢慢地向他同桌移动 (move)，试图抄他的答案。 描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个主语做了两个以上动作，动作有先后，可用 : 主+谓1, 谓2 and 谓3 （动词时态要一致使用一般过去时） 动作1 动作2 动作3 动作4 动作分解后的画面： Example 2 Pang Min ate spicy strips. Action1 Action2 Action3 撕开包装 tear up the package 挤出一根 squeeze out one strip 大咬一口 take a big bite She tore up the package, squeezed out one strip, and took a big bite. 庞敏吃了辣条。如何分解动作？ ________________________________ ________________________________ Action1:_____________________ Action2:_____________________ Action3:_____________________ 主+谓1, 谓2 and 谓3 .(连动谓语：动作发生顺序有先后) “The deer ran away.” 如何分解？ 看了一眼 转身 开始跑开 The deer cast a look, turned around breath and then ran away. 方法二：合理扩展使用非谓语形式 Please describe the following picture. sat on the subway stared at his phone knit(皱眉) his brows/ frowned The old man sat on the subway, staring at his phone and knitting his brows. Sitting on the subway, the old man stared at his phone, knitting his brows. 同一对象同时发生不同动作，且表主动 句式1： 主+谓, doing sth.或者 doing sth. , 主＋谓，（doing） Practice My father hugged me tightly,encouraging me not to give up my dream . 句式1：主+谓, doing sth./ doing sth. , 主＋谓 父亲紧紧地抱着我，鼓励我不要放弃我的梦想。 排了三个小时的队伍, 他被告知票被卖完了。 动作1 动作2 主要动作-用谓语动词表示 次要动作-用非谓语动词表示（主动且先发生,用________________） having done Having queued for 3 hours, he was told that the tickets had been sold out. queue 动作有先后关系时; 句式2：—— Having done sth, 主+谓 句式2：Having done sth, 主+谓 Practice Having walked for quite a long time, he found himself lost. 走了很长一段时间，他发现自己迷路了。 _____________________________ _____________________________ 孩子感动哭了。 孩子被感动 ＋ 孩子哭了 The child was deeply moved by the story. The child began to weep. ________________ by the story, the child began to weep. 动作与主语逻辑关系为被动时 句式3：— Done sth., 主+谓，(doing) Deeply moved 翻译：被孩子们的举动感动，妈妈紧紧地抱着他们，说她好爱他们。(2021年新高考1卷) 句式3：— Done sth., 主+谓，(doing) 在老师的鼓励下，我下定决心努力学习，相信有志者事竟成。 ______________by the teacher, I made a determination to study hard, ___________that where there is a will, there is a way. Inspired/Encouraged believing Moved by what they did, Mom hugged them tightly， saying that she loved them so much. How to vivify your continuation writing? 构造动作链 Skill 1: 描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个主语做了两个以上动作，可用句式1: 主+谓1, 谓2 and 谓3 . Skill 2: 合理扩展使用非谓语结构 句式2：非谓语, 主+谓或者主+谓, 非谓语 句式3：动作有明显先后: Having done sth，主+谓 句式4： Done sth, 主+谓，(doing) Summary Applications in Tests Test for goals（2022新高考卷） We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. 1._______________________________________.(他只是低着头看着他的鞋子) 2._____________________________________________________________（知道他的焦虑后，我感到很难过，决定和他谈谈。）Turning to David, I smiled, “David, look, what a wonderful event!” “Yeah!” David smiled weakly. 3._____________________________________________（我拍了拍他的肩膀，轻声说道） “You never missed a single practice. You always finished every run. Do you want your efforts to end up in vain?” 4._______________________ _____________________________________(听到这些话，他抬起头，然后低声说)，“ but other kids will laugh at me. ” “David, follow your heart. Every determined person deserves the respect of others. You are the master of your own life.”5. _________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________(他听后深受鼓舞，擦干了眼泪笑了笑，接着一步一步艰难地向起跑线走去) 运用动作链技巧，把下面的语篇补充完整。 He just ducked his head ,staring at his shoes Having known about his anxiety, I felt sad, deciding to talk with him. Patting him on the shoulder, I said in a soft voice, Hearing these words , he raised his head and then whispered Deeply encouraged after hearing this, he wiped the tears off, smiled and then walked hard towards the starting line step by step. Homework:请运用所学技巧续写故事第二段： Para 2： I watched as David moved to the starting line with the other runners.He①____________________________________(转过头来看着我) and I② ___________________________________________________（我竖起大拇指向他示意，我为他感到骄傲） . He③______________________ ______________________________________________________（笑了笑，深吸一口气，准备比赛，眼里充满决心）. With a bang, every runner shot like an arrow. He ran with all his strength, in spite of his abnormal steps . Eventually,he finished the running. As David, the last one, made it to the finishing line.④___________________________________________________ ___________________(所有的人都被大卫深深地感动了，为他鼓掌) 1 $