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Mile after mile I went. I began to feel a certain satisfaction and the confidence that I was giving my all to this charity (慈善) ride. True, it was our town’s yearly fundraiser (筹款活动) — twenty miles on mostly flat river road — but to me it felt like the Tour de France. I had passed a handful of riders, and now I couldn’t see anyone ahead.
At the finish line, the volunteers cheered and looked at me with open mouths. “Nobody in your age group is back yet,” one of them said. “Looks like you just took the first place for the Moms and Dads’ group!”
Ryan had been right. He knew I could do it — and I did.
I am a forty-two-year-old kindergarten teacher whose usual exercise is going after five-year-old kids. My three teenagers belong to the local volunteer club. Last month my thirteen-year-old, Ryan, cornered me in the kitchen. “Mom, ride with us in the spring fundraiser. It’s not a race, just twenty miles, and you can go as slow as you want.” I burst out laughing, “What makes you think I could finish twenty miles on an old bike?”
He looked at me straight in the eye. “Because I know you can do it.”
I almost laughed again, but he was serious. I promised to think about it. My bike needed new tires, my knees needed new courage, and my schedule needed to change.
That evening Ryan worked out a plan: short rides after school, gradually reaching ten miles; and yes, his favorite advice — pack a sandwich in the bag just in case I get hungry.
The next morning I stood in front of my class singing our usual counting song. “Let’s try it faster — I know you can do it!” I called.
There it was again: I know you can do it. This time, I was thought into mind.
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(1)续写词数应为150个左右;
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Finally, I decided to prepare for riding in this charity ride.
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After the ride, I truly realized the power of the encouragement.
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一、文本分析
1.角色
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2.视角
第__________人称视角
3.时空线
骑行途中(“我”全力参与慈善骑行,逐渐领先)--- 终点线(志愿者告知“我”获父母组第一名)--- 回忆开端(追溯“我”的身份及骑行邀约由来)--- 家中厨房(Ryan邀请“我”参加春季筹款骑行,“我”表示怀疑)--- 家中(Ryan坚定鼓励“我”,“我”承诺考虑)--- Ryan制定训练计划 --- 幼儿园课堂(“我”鼓励学生时触发自我反思)---(续写)_____________________(“我”决定准备骑行并实施训练)---(续写)_______________________(“我”感悟鼓励的力量)
4.文章线索
(1)“我”在故事中面临的核心困境是什么?这些困境对“我”产生了怎样的影响?
(2)Ryan为什么坚信“我”能完成二十英里骑行?他采取了哪些具体行动支持“我”?
(3)幼儿园课堂上“我”对学生说的话,为什么会让“我”产生自我反思?这句话在故事中有什么特殊意义?
(4)“我”从“ burst out laughing ”到“ thought into mind ”,心理变化的关键转折点是什么?体现了“我”怎样的心态转变?
(5)故事的核心冲突是什么?贯穿全文的关键语句是什么?其作用是什么?
5.情节线
“我”全力参与慈善骑行并逐渐领先--- 抵达终点,志愿者告知“我”获父母组第一名,“我”感慨Ryan的鼓励奏效--- 回忆:“我”作为幼儿园教师缺乏骑行经验,Ryan邀请“我”参加筹款骑行--- “我”质疑自身能力,Ryan坚定表示“我知道你能做到”--- “我”承诺考虑,意识到需解决装备、勇气、时间三大问题--- Ryan制定循序渐进的训练计划并给出建议--- 幼儿园课堂“我”用类似话语鼓励学生,触发自我反思---(续写)_____________________---(续写)___________________________________
6.情感线
“我”:满足自信(骑行领先时)→ 释然欣慰(获第一名时)→ 怀疑不屑(被邀请时)→ 犹豫动摇(Ryan坚定鼓励后)→ 触动深思(课堂自我反思时)→ _________________(决定准备骑行时)→ _________________(训练过程中)→ _________________(感悟鼓励力量时)
Ryan:真诚坚定(邀请并鼓励“我”时)→ 细心周到(制定训练计划时)→ _________________(得知“我”决定参与时)→ _________________(“我”训练及骑行后)
志愿者:惊讶赞赏(“我”抵达终点时)
7.文章大意概括
中文:
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英文:
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________8.句式示例
宾语从句:
非谓语动词:
倒装句:
同位语:
状语从句:
夸张:
排比:
9.主题归类
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________二、情节构造
第一段提示句:Finally, I decided to prepare for riding in this charity ride.
请思考以下问题,梳理第一段情节思路:
衔接句 1—— 对“准备行动”提问:“我”会如何落实准备工作?会先解决装备问题还是训练问题?Ryan会如何配合“我”的准备?
___________________________________________________________________________衔接句 2—— 对“训练过程”提问:训练中“我”可能会遇到哪些困难(如体力不支、天气影响等)?“我”会如何克服?Ryan的鼓励会以什么形式出现?
___________________________________________________________________________过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的“感悟鼓励力量”做铺垫:
___________________________________________________________________________第二段提示句:After the ride, I truly realized the power of the encouragement.
请思考以下问题,梳理第二段情节思路:
衔接句 1—— 对“骑行后互动”提问:“我”会如何向Ryan分享骑行成果?Ryan的反应会是什么样的?两人之间会有怎样的对话呼应前文的鼓励?
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衔接句 2—— 对“感悟深化”提问:“我”会从这次经历中提炼出怎样的感悟?这种感悟会如何影响“我”今后的生活(如教学、亲子相处)?
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主题:
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三、段落构思
第一段:Finally, I decided to prepare for riding in this charity ride.
请按“准备启动→具体行动→训练挑战→坚持动力”的逻辑,梳理第一段写作思路:
思路:
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第一段续写: Finally, I decided to prepare for riding in this charity ride. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二段:After the ride, I truly realized the power of the encouragement.
请按“成果分享→亲子互动→感悟提炼→影响延伸”的逻辑,梳理第二段写作思路:
思路:
→①_____________________________________→②_____________________________________→③_____________________________________→④_____________________________________
第二段续写: After the ride, I truly realized the power of the encouragement. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
参考答案
一、文本分析
1.角色
“我”:42 岁幼儿园教师,日常运动仅为看管五岁孩童,缺乏长距离骑行经验,初期对慈善骑行持怀疑态度,受鼓励后逐渐建立信心,最终凭借坚持完成挑战,收获成长。Ryan:“我” 13 岁的儿子,属于当地志愿俱乐部,善于观察、有耐心且充满智慧,用坚定的鼓励和切实可行的计划推动母亲参与骑行,是母亲成功的重要支撑。终点志愿者:作为情节收尾的见证者,通过他们的惊讶反应和告知,凸显 “我” 骑行成果的意外性与显著性,侧面烘托鼓励的力量。
2.视角
第一人称视角
3.时空线
骑行途中(“我” 全力参与慈善骑行,逐渐领先)--- 终点线(志愿者告知 “我” 获父母组第一名)--- 回忆开端(追溯 “我” 的身份及骑行邀约由来)--- 家中厨房(Ryan 邀请 “我” 参加春季筹款骑行,“我” 表示怀疑)--- 家中(Ryan 坚定鼓励 “我”,“我” 承诺考虑)--- Ryan 制定训练计划 --- 幼儿园课堂(“我” 鼓励学生时触发自我反思)---(续写)家中 / 户外(“我” 决定准备骑行并实施训练)---(续写)家中 / 亲子相处场景(“我” 感悟鼓励的力量)
4.文章线索
(1)“我” 在故事中面临的核心困境是什么?这些困境对 “我” 产生了怎样的影响?核心困境:缺乏长距离骑行经验和相关体能储备,对自身完成二十英里骑行的能力严重怀疑;同时需解决自行车装备老化、时间协调等实际问题。影响:初期直接拒绝儿子的邀请,表现出明显的不自信;但在儿子的坚定鼓励和自我反思后,困境转化为动力,促使 “我” 主动克服困难,最终实现自我突破。
(2)Ryan 为什么坚信 “我” 能完成二十英里骑行?他采取了哪些具体行动支持 “我”?Ryan 坚信 “我” 能完成的原因:他看到了 “我” 作为教师对学生的鼓励与耐心,相信母亲具备坚持的品质;同时了解 “我” 只是缺乏尝试的勇气,而非能力不足。具体行动:主动向 “我” 发出骑行邀请,用坚定的态度打消 “我” 的自我怀疑;制定循序渐进的训练计划(课后短距离骑行,逐步提升至十英里);给出实用建议(背包里装三明治以防饥饿),全方位为 “我” 的骑行准备提供支持。
(3)幼儿园课堂上 “我” 对学生说的话,为什么会让 “我” 产生自我反思?这句话在故事中有什么特殊意义?产生自我反思的原因:“我” 对学生说的 “Let’s try it faster — I know you can do it!” 与儿子 Ryan 鼓励 “我” 的话 “Because I know you can do it.” 高度相似。作为教师,“我” 习惯用鼓励的话语激发学生的潜力,却在自己面临挑战时忘记了这份信念,这种反差让 “我” 陷入思考。特殊意义:这句话是故事的关键转折点,让 “我” 意识到鼓励的力量不仅适用于学生,也适用于自己;同时呼应了前文 Ryan 的鼓励,为 “我” 决定参与骑行提供了内在动力,推动情节进一步发展。
(4)“我” 从 “burst out laughing ” 到 “thought into mind ”,心理变化的关键转折点是什么?体现了 “我” 怎样的心态转变?关键转折点:Ryan 坚定真诚的态度和幼儿园课堂上 “我” 对学生的鼓励。Ryan 的认真让 “我” 无法忽视他的提议,而课堂上的自我反思则让 “我” 真正认可了 “相信自己能做到” 的信念。心态转变:从最初对自身能力的完全怀疑、对骑行邀请的不屑一顾,转变为对自身潜力的重新认知,逐渐产生尝试的勇气和动力,心态从消极抵触变为积极动摇,最终走向主动行动。
(5)故事的核心冲突是什么?贯穿全文的关键语句是什么?其作用是什么?核心冲突:“我” 内心的 “自我怀疑” 与 “他人(Ryan)鼓励 + 自我觉醒” 之间的冲突;“我” 缺乏骑行经验、体能不足的现实条件与完成二十英里慈善骑行的目标之间的冲突。关键语句:“I know you can do it.”作用:这句话是贯穿全文的情感线索和动力源泉,既体现了 Ryan 对母亲的信任与鼓励,也成为 “我” 自我激励的核心信念;推动了情节发展(从拒绝到考虑再到决定参与),深化了 “鼓励能激发潜力” 的主题。
5.情节线
“我” 全力参与慈善骑行并逐渐领先 --- 抵达终点,志愿者告知 “我” 获父母组第一名,“我” 感慨 Ryan 的鼓励奏效 --- 回忆:“我” 作为幼儿园教师缺乏骑行经验,Ryan 邀请 “我” 参加筹款骑行 --- “我” 质疑自身能力,Ryan 坚定表示 “我知道你能做到”--- “我” 承诺考虑,意识到需解决装备、勇气、时间三大问题 --- Ryan 制定循序渐进的训练计划并给出建议 --- 幼儿园课堂 “我” 用类似话语鼓励学生,触发自我反思 ---(续写)“我” 决定参与,更换自行车轮胎,按计划开展训练,克服体力等困难 ---(续写)骑行后 “我” 向 Ryan 分享成果,深刻感悟鼓励的力量,明白信任与坚持的重要性,这种感悟影响今后的生活与教学。
6.情感线
“我”:满足自信(骑行领先时)→ 释然欣慰(获第一名时)→ 怀疑不屑(被邀请时)→ 犹豫动摇(Ryan 坚定鼓励后)→ 触动深思(课堂自我反思时)→ 坚定决心(决定准备骑行时)→ 坚韧执着(训练过程中,克服困难时)→ 深刻动容(感悟鼓励力量时)Ryan:真诚坚定(邀请并鼓励 “我” 时)→ 细心周到(制定训练计划时)→ 欣喜期待(得知 “我” 决定参与时)→ 自豪骄傲(“我” 训练坚持及骑行获奖后)志愿者:惊讶赞赏(“我” 抵达终点时)
7.文章大意概括
中文:42 岁的幼儿园教师 “我” 日常缺乏长距离骑行经验,13 岁的儿子 Ryan 邀请 “我” 参加镇上一年一度的慈善筹款骑行(二十英里平路),“我” 起初因怀疑自身能力而拒绝。Ryan 以坚定的态度表示 “我知道你能做到”,并制定了循序渐进的训练计划。后来 “我” 在幼儿园课堂上用类似的话语鼓励学生时,触发了自我反思,决定接受挑战。在骑行中,“我” 全力冲刺,最终获得父母组第一名。这次经历让 “我” 深刻体会到鼓励的强大力量,也实现了自我突破。
英文:I am a 42-year-old kindergarten teacher who usually only gets exercise by chasing five-year-old kids. My 13-year-old son Ryan, a member of the local volunteer club, invited me to participate in the town’s annual charity fundraiser — a twenty-mile ride on mostly flat river road. I initially refused, doubting my ability to finish. Ryan insisted firmly, “Because I know you can do it,” and made a gradual training plan for me. Later, when I encouraged my students in class with similar words, I had a moment of self-reflection and decided to take on the challenge. During the ride, I gave it my all and finally won first place in the Moms and Dads’ group. This experience made me deeply realize the great power of encouragement and achieve self-breakthrough.
8.句式示例
宾语从句:Ryan told me that he believed I could finish the twenty-mile charity ride. / I didn’t know why he was so confident in my riding ability.
非谓语动词:Having passed a handful of riders, I felt a sense of satisfaction. / My three teenagers belong to the local volunteer club, volunteering their time regularly.
倒装句:Never had I thought I could win the first place in the charity ride. / Only after Ryan made the training plan did I start to believe in myself.
同位语:My thirteen-year-old son, Ryan, cornered me in the kitchen to talk about the charity ride. / The yearly fundraiser, a twenty-mile flat road ride, is a popular event in our town.
状语从句:When I heard Ryan’s invitation, I burst out laughing at the thought of riding twenty miles. / Although I lacked riding experience, I decided to try my best with Ryan’s encouragement.
夸张:To me, the twenty-mile ride felt like climbing a high mountain instead of a flat road. / I was so tired during the training that I thought my legs would fall off.
排比:Ryan’s encouragement gave me courage, his plan gave me direction, and his trust gave me strength. / During the ride, I felt tired, I felt determined, and finally, I felt proud of myself.
9.主题归类
鼓励的力量(展现他人的信任与鼓励能激发个人潜力,帮助突破自我局限);自我突破(讲述 “我” 从怀疑到坚持、从缺乏经验到完成挑战的成长过程);亲子温情(体现 Ryan 对母亲的信任与支持,以及亲子间相互影响、共同成长的美好情感)。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句:Finally, I decided to prepare for riding in this charity ride.
请思考以下问题,梳理第一段情节思路:衔接句 1—— 对 “准备行动” 提问:“我” 会如何落实准备工作?会先解决装备问题还是训练问题?Ryan 会如何配合 “我” 的准备?“我” 会先解决装备问题,给自行车更换新轮胎,确保骑行安全;再按照 Ryan 制定的计划开展训练。Ryan 会抽出课后时间陪 “我” 一起骑行,为 “我” 记录里程,在 “我” 疲惫时给予鼓励,提醒 “我” 补充能量。
衔接句 2—— 对 “训练过程” 提问:训练中 “我” 可能会遇到哪些困难(如体力不支、天气影响等)?“我” 会如何克服?Ryan 的鼓励会以什么形式出现?训练中 “我” 可能会遇到体力不支、腿部酸痛、下雨天影响骑行等困难。“我” 会根据身体状况调整骑行节奏,适当休息后继续坚持,雨天则选择室内简单热身或待雨停后补练。Ryan 的鼓励会以口头加油(如 “Mom, you’re doing great! Keep going!”)、分享小零食补充体力、在骑行路线终点等候等形式出现,让 “我” 感受到支持。
过渡逻辑:请说明第一段情节如何为第二段的 “感悟鼓励力量” 做铺垫:第一段详细描述 “我” 的准备过程和训练中的困难,以及 Ryan 始终如一的鼓励和支持,体现了鼓励在 “我” 坚持下去的过程中所起的关键作用;同时 “我” 通过训练逐渐提升能力、建立信心,最终成功完成骑行,这些经历为第二段 “我” 深刻感悟鼓励的力量提供了具体的事实依据,让感悟更具说服力和感染力。
第二段提示句:After the ride, I truly realized the power of the encouragement.
请思考以下问题,梳理第二段情节思路:衔接句 1—— 对 “骑行后互动” 提问:“我” 会如何向 Ryan 分享骑行成果?Ryan 的反应会是什么样的?两人之间会有怎样的对话呼应前文的鼓励?“我” 会兴奋地向 Ryan 展示获奖证书或纪念徽章,详细讲述骑行中的经历和冲过终点线的感受。Ryan 会感到非常自豪,兴奋地拥抱 “我”。两人会有呼应前文的对话,如 “我” 会说:“You were right — I really could do it!” Ryan 可能会回应:“I knew you could, Mom. Your perseverance is amazing!”
衔接句 2—— 对 “感悟深化” 提问:“我” 会从这次经历中提炼出怎样的感悟?这种感悟会如何影响 “我” 今后的生活(如教学、亲子相处)?“我” 的感悟:鼓励是一种强大的力量,它能让人突破自我局限,在看似不可能的挑战中坚持下去;信任与支持能给人无穷的勇气,无论是亲子之间还是师生之间,真诚的鼓励都能创造奇迹。对今后生活的影响:在教学中,“我” 会更加注重用鼓励的方式激发学生的潜力,耐心引导学生克服困难;在亲子相处中,“我” 会更加信任孩子,同时也会勇敢接受孩子的鼓励,尝试更多新事物,与孩子共同成长。
主题:真诚的鼓励与坚定的信任能够激发人内心深处的潜力,帮助人们突破自我局限,完成看似不可能的挑战;亲子之间的相互支持与信任,不仅能促成目标的实现,更能让彼此在成长中收获温暖与力量。
三、段落构思
第一段:Finally, I decided to prepare for riding in this charity ride.
请按 “准备启动→具体行动→训练挑战→坚持动力” 的逻辑,梳理第一段写作思路:思路:→①“我” 先给自行车更换新轮胎,整理骑行装备,正式启动准备工作→②按照 Ryan 的计划,每天课后进行短距离骑行,从 3 英里逐步增加到 10 英里→③训练中出现腿部酸痛、体力不支的情况,甚至遇到下雨天打乱计划,一度想放弃→④Ryan 全程陪伴,用 “我知道你能做到” 鼓励 “我”,帮 “我” 调整节奏,让 “我” 重新坚定坚持下去的决心。
第一段续写:Finally, I decided to prepare for riding in this charity ride. I first took my old bike to a repair shop to replace the tires, then sorted out a comfortable backpack and a water bottle. Following Ryan’s plan, I started with short rides after school — three miles on the first day, five the next. Soon, my knees ached and I felt exhausted halfway through. There were even rainy days that forced me to stay indoors, making me want to give up. But Ryan never gave up on me. He rode beside me when the weather was nice, cheering me on with “I know you can do it!” and prepared sandwiches for me to replenish energy. With his constant support, I gradually increased my distance to ten miles, feeling more confident than ever.
第二段:After the ride, I truly realized the power of the encouragement.
请按 “成果分享→亲子互动→感悟提炼→影响延伸” 的逻辑,梳理第二段写作思路:→①“我” 拿着获奖证书兴奋地回家,第一时间向 Ryan 分享获得父母组第一名的好消息→②Ryan 激动地拥抱 “我”,为 “我” 感到骄傲,两人重温之前的鼓励话语,氛围温馨→③“我” 向 Ryan 倾诉,若没有他的坚定鼓励,“我” 不可能完成挑战,深刻体会到鼓励的强大力量→④“我” 决定将这份鼓励的力量传递下去,在教学中更注重鼓励学生,在生活中勇敢尝试新事物,与孩子共同成长。
第二段续写:After the ride, I truly realized the power of the encouragement. I rushed home with the first-place certificate, my heart filled with excitement. When Ryan saw it, he jumped up and down, hugging me tightly: “I knew you could do it, Mom! You’re incredible!” I patted his head, saying, “It’s all because of you. Your encouragement kept me going when I wanted to quit.” That moment, I understood that a simple sentence of trust could give people endless courage. Later, in my class, I often shared this experience with my students, encouraging them to believe in themselves. And whenever Ryan faces challenges, I always say, “I know you can do it.” Encouragement, like a warm light, guides us to break through limits and grow together.
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