2025年广东省10月五校联考读后续写解析课件

该高中英语高考复习课件聚焦读后续写核心题型，依据高考评价体系梳理情节连贯、情感逻辑、主题升华三大考查维度，通过真题情节拆分与伏笔分析（如家庭矛盾中Ben的工作沉迷与爷爷的温情提醒），明确家庭亲情类主题及“冲突-转折-修复”常考框架，构建针对性备考体系。 课件亮点在于“框架构思+细节展开+范文精评”策略，运用“六字真经”（看听想讲做感）提升语言表达能力，结合范文解析情感转折（如Ben从僵住到反思的心理描写）与伏笔回扣（木狗象征亲情），培养思维品质与文化意识。设“关键句模板”和“易错点警示”（如情节脱节），助力学生掌握衔接技巧，教师可精准指导学情，高效提升备考效率。

爱疯大课堂高中英语资料——必练好题系列 AIFENG 更多高中英语资料，尽在爱疯大课堂英语公众号！ 爱疯大课堂版权所有，侵权必究!如需修改，请联系我们！ 2025年广东省五校联考 读后续写详解 精准备考，高效提分！ Grandpa Miller and six-year-old Timmy were always busy at their shared workbench. Under Grandpa’s gentle guidance, Timmy carefully polished a small wooden dog that they had made together for a long time, proud to be learning “real work” from Grandpa. 2025年广东省五校联考 精准备考，高效提分！ Their joy also spread around the big dinner table. Timmy kept talking to Grandpa. “Will the dog stand firmly, Grandpa?” “Sure! I sanded it SUPER smooth!” Grandpa responded gently. 2025年广东省五校联考 精准备考，高效提分！ Across the table sat Timmy’s father, Ben. He bent over his laptop, his eyebrows frowned. The joy of the grandfather and grandson seemed to escape him. “Quarterly reports are due tomorrow,” he replied to his wife Sarah absent-mindedly, who had just reminded him of the delicious potatoes. He grabbed a bite, his eyes sliding back to the laptop, blind to the warmth around him. When he reached for the bowl, intending to take a quick sip（抿）, his arm knocked it over. Some hot soup spilled（洒）onto the table. 2025年广东省五校联考 精准备考，高效提分！ “Be careful!” Sarah said softly. She grabbed a cloth and started to clean the spill quickly. Ben was wiping his laptop when some soup spilled on his trousers. “Oh, annoying! The harder I try to get this done quickly, the more things go wrong!” said he, getting angry. Astonished, little Timmy stopped talking at once. He stared at his father quietly, not knowing what to do. 2025年广东省五校联考 精准备考，高效提分！ Grandpa Miller watched what happened calmly and then spoke in his low voice — the same familiar tone that used to comfort Ben when he was small. “Easy there, son,” he said firmly, “The soup deserves your whole heart, so does the moment with all of us.” 2025年广东省五校联考 精准备考，高效提分！ Hearing the words, Ben froze. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2025年广东省五校联考 精准备考，高效提分！ After the dinner, Ben sat in front of the laptop again. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2025年广东省五校联考 精准备考，高效提分！ 第一步：通读全文，理清脉络 情节1： Timmy在爷爷的陪伴和指导下制作木狗，通过祖孙互动展现温馨的亲情氛围。 交代故事发生的时间、地点、人物、人物状态,奠定故事情感基础。 1. 读懂文章大意 Grandpa Miller and six-year-old Timmy were always busy at their shared workbench. Under Grandpa’s gentle guidance, Timmy carefully polished a small wooden dog that they had made together for a long time, proud to be learning “real work” from Grandpa. 先把文章读懂！ 拆分文章情节！ 搞清楚发生了什么 精准备考，高效提分！ 第一步：通读全文，理清脉络 Their joy also spread around the big dinner table. Timmy kept talking to Grandpa. “Will the dog stand firmly, Grandpa?” “Sure! I sanded it SUPER smooth!” Grandpa responded gently. 情节1： Timmy在爷爷的陪伴和指导下制作木狗，通过祖孙互动展现温馨的亲情氛围。 交代故事发生的时间、地点、人物、人物状态,奠定故事情感基础。 精准备考，高效提分！ 第一步：通读全文，理清脉络 Across the table sat Timmy’s father, Ben. He bent over his laptop, his eyebrows frowned. The joy of the grandfather and grandson seemed to escape him. “Quarterly reports are due tomorrow,” he replied to his wife Sarah absent-mindedly, who had just reminded him of the delicious potatoes. He grabbed a bite, his eyes sliding back to the laptop, blind to the warmth around him. When he reached for the bowl, intending to take a quick sip（抿）, his arm knocked it over. Some hot soup spilled（洒）onto the table. 情节2： 一家人围坐餐桌分享快乐时光，但Timmy的父亲Ben沉浸于工作，忽视家人陪伴。 通过“祖孙融洽”与“父子疏离”的对照，强调Ben忽视家庭，注重工作。 精准备考，高效提分！ 第一步：通读全文，理清脉络 “Be careful!” Sarah said softly. She grabbed a cloth and started to clean the spill quickly. Ben was wiping his laptop when some soup spilled on his trousers. “Oh, annoying! The harder I try to get this done quickly, the more things go wrong!” said he, getting angry. Astonished, little Timmy stopped talking at once. He stared at his father quietly, not knowing what to do. 情节3： Ben因工作压力心烦，还弄洒了汤，在餐桌上失控发火，让Timmy感到惊讶与不安。 引入故事冲突，父亲情绪爆发使家庭氛围骤然紧张，为后续爷爷的介入和情感转折提供契机。 精准备考，高效提分！ 第一步：通读全文，理清脉络 Grandpa Miller watched what happened calmly and then spoke in his low voice — the same familiar tone that used to comfort Ben when he was small. “Easy there, son,” he said firmly, “The soup deserves your whole heart, so does the moment with all of us.” 情节4： 看到紧张气氛，爷爷平静出声安抚，试图缓和局面并让Ben重新冷静下来。 情节转折，为后续父亲反思或情感回归提供契机，推动故事由冲突迈向缓和与修复。 精准备考，高效提分！ 第一步：通读全文，理清脉络 （1）主人公是谁（who）？在哪里（where）？ _______________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________ （2）经历了什么（what）？遇到了什么问题或矛盾（why）？ _______________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________ 1. 理清故事主线 主人公是一家三代人：爷爷Miller、父亲Ben和六岁的小男孩Timmy，故事发生在家中。 爷爷与Timmy共同制作木头小狗，其乐融融，但父亲Ben一直沉迷于工作，还因心烦意乱打翻了汤，情绪失控，让餐桌的欢乐气氛戛然而止。 搞清楚故事要素 精准备考，高效提分！ 第一步：通读全文，理清脉络 （3）故事出现了怎样的转折（how）？ _______________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________ （4）故事主题是什么？故事走向是什么？（可参考《爱疯大课堂读后续写晨读晚练一月通》第三部分：如何构思框架——框架梳理部分） _______________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________ 爷爷温柔但坚定地提醒Ben放慢脚步、用心感受当下——不仅是汤，更是与家人在一起的时刻，引导Ben意识到自己忽略了家人的陪伴。 人与社会——家庭亲情类。故事走向：→情感被悄然唤醒→向家人表达自己的情感→感悟亲情的力量 精准备考，高效提分！ 2. 梳理原文伏笔 原文伏笔/细节内容 我可以写什么？（续写方向） Ben沉迷工作，忽视家人的陪伴 从所给文章中，提取原文伏笔，并推理出可以在续写中再次提及的内容。 Ben意识到自己错过了与家人相处的时刻，主动道歉与改变 小Timmy受到父亲情绪影响，安静下来不知道如何应对 Timmy在Ben重新陪伴自己后重新露出笑容，亲子关系修复 爷爷的提醒“汤值得你用全心，也值得这个当下” Ben把心从工作拉回家庭，选择关掉电脑，回到家人身边 学会从文章中找答案！ 故事中的矛盾 解决矛盾 复杂的人物情感 深入表达人物情感 关键情节 情节呼应 回扣伏笔，会让续写内容与原文联系更紧密！不容易偏题！ 第二步：依据首句，构思框架 （1）续写第一段首句译文： _______________________________________________________________________ （2）续写第二段首句译文： _______________________________________________________________________ 1. 翻译两段首句 听到这话，本顿时僵住了。 晚餐过后，本又坐在了笔记本电脑前。 第二步：依据首句，构思框架 两段首句定一框，由两段首句可知，第一段主要写：（故事会怎样发展？） _________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________ 二框二首正能量，由第二段首句和预测的正能量结局可知，本段主要写：（故事应如何收尾？） _________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________ 2. 构思续写框架 在家人的提醒与关爱中，Ben意识到自己忽略了陪伴，向Timmy道歉并重新感受到家庭的温暖，虽心里仍挂念着工作，但已开始慢慢放下匆忙的脚步。 晚饭后，Ben原本想继续工作，却在看到木雕后意识到家人更重要，于是关闭电脑陪Timmy一起打磨作品，并在这段宁静温馨的相处中真正懂得陪伴与爱的重要性。 第一段首句内容要求我们写出：父亲的话会让Ben想到什么、做什么 第二段首句内容要求我们写出：Ben重新坐回电脑前，会做什么 第二段首句内容要求我们写出：Ben重新坐回电脑前，会做什么 本文主题是：家庭亲情，Ben会重新意识到家庭的重要性。我们需要思考，他会选择继续工作吗？ 第二步：依据首句，构思框架 （1）第一段首句后衔接句:（写的时候要注意：紧扣首句内容，加入人物感知，描述情境，推动情节向前推进） _________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________ （2）第一段结尾衔接句:（写的时候要注意：总结本段内容，设置转折或伏笔，顺势引出下文） _________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________ 3. 写好五个关键句 The spoon stopped in his hand as he looked up and finally saw the warm smiles around the table. Ben lowered his head, calming down slowly in the quiet warmth, but his laptop on the side of the table still pulled at his mind, waiting for him to return to it after dinner. “五句”定续写内容的框架 第二步：依据首句，构思框架 （3）第二段首句衔接句:（写的时候要注意：紧扣第二段首句，细化人物行为或心理，继续推动故事发展） _________________________________________________________________________ （4）第二段正向结局句:（写的时候要注意：清晰呈现结果或人物变化，总结全文） _________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________ 3. 写好五个关键句 But this time, he didn’t open it right away. Timmy nodded happily while Grandpa watched them quietly, his eyes full of relief and pride. 第二步：依据首句，构思框架 （5）主题升华句:（点明文章主题，提炼情感主旨） _________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________ 3. 写好五个关键句 In that warm moment, Ben understood that real success was not in numbers on a screen, but in the time shared with the people he loved. 精准备考，高效提分！ 第三步：六字真经，展开续写 构思本段可能出现的人物后，借助“六字真经——看听想讲做感”，设想人物会如何行动、如何思考，从而推动故事发展或引向结局。 精准备考，高效提分！ (sb.)Ben + 环顾餐桌，看见家人温暖的笑容（看）   + 回想起童年和父亲在工作台学做玩具的时光，愧疚和失落涌上心头（想、感） + 看到Timmy担心的表情后深吸一口气并开口道歉（看、做） (sb.)Timmy + 因Ben的道歉重新露出笑容（感） (sb.)Grandpa + 温和点头表示理解与支持（做） 续写第一段（人物会如何推动故事发展） (sb.)________+（看、听、想、讲、做、感） 第三步：六字真经，展开续写 前面我们定了故事的方向。 接下来需要往里面放更多细节，让故事更完整！ 精准备考，高效提分！ (sb.)Ben + 饭后重新坐回电脑前，却迟迟没有打开它（做） + 目光落在桌上的木制小狗上，触摸那只粗糙却满含心意的小木狗（看、做） + 意识到真正重要的不是工作，而是陪伴家人（想）   + 果断合上电脑走向工作台，微笑着询问Timmy是否可以一起继续打磨木狗，决定陪伴Timmy（做、讲） 续写第二段（人物会如何引导故事走向结局） (sb.)________+（看、听、想、讲、做、感） 第三步：六字真经，展开续写 前面我们定了故事的方向。 接下来需要往里面放更多细节，让故事更完整！ 精准备考，高效提分！ 参考范文 Hearing the words, Ben froze. The spoon stopped in his hand as he looked up and finally saw the warm smiles around the table. Grandpa’s voice reminded him of the old days when he was a little boy, learning to make toys with his father at the same workbench. A wave of guilt came to him — he realized how long it had been since he truly enjoyed dinner with his family. Seeing Timmy’s worried face, Ben took a deep breath and said softly, “Sorry, Timmy. I didn’t mean to be angry.” Timmy’s eyes lit up, and Grandpa nodded gently. Ben lowered his head, calming down slowly in the quiet warmth, but his laptop on the side of the table still pulled at his mind, waiting for him to return to it after dinner. 精准备考，高效提分！ After the dinner, Ben sat in front of the laptop again. But this time, he didn’t open it right away. His eyes fell on the small wooden dog on the desk. Its surface was a bit rough, but it was made with care and love. He touched it gently, and suddenly thought of what really mattered. The reports could wait, but his family couldn’t. Ben closed the laptop, walked to the workbench, and smiled at Timmy. “Can I help you polish it?” he asked. Timmy nodded happily while Grandpa watched them quietly, his eyes full of relief and pride. In that warm moment, Ben understood that real success was not in numbers on a screen, but in the time shared with the people he loved. 参考范文 精准备考，高效提分！ 范文点评 1. 人物情感转折自然，有一个完整的过程而不是硬转弯 Ben不是直接醒悟，而是从动作 → 回忆 → 感受 → 行为逐步推进。 “Grandpa’s voice reminded him of the old days when he was a little boy...” 先“想起过去”，再“意识到当下陪伴的缺失”，情感过渡非常自然。而不是突兀地突然“我意识到家庭重要”。 精准备考，高效提分！ 范文点评 2. 细节推动情感，而不是“无病呻吟” 通过物品和动作承载情感： “His eyes fell on the small wooden dog on the desk. Its surface was a bit rough, but it was made with care and love.” 小木狗=亲情的象征，不是讲大道理，而是“让情感看得见”。学生最常见问题是“只喊口号不写细节”，这里正好是典型的优秀示范。 精准备考，高效提分！ 范文点评 3. 衔接自然，首段结尾为第二段铺垫 第一段最后一句提前埋下“回到电脑”的情节动因： “...but his laptop on the side of the table still pulled at his mind, waiting for him to return to it after dinner.” 这样第二段首句“After the dinner, Ben sat in front of the laptop again.”就顺理成章，而不是“吃完饭就 magically 出现在电脑前” 这就是“有因才有果”的合理写作逻辑。 精准备考，高效提分！ 范文点评 4. 主题升华高效点题，不浮夸、不空泛 “In that warm moment, Ben understood that real success was not in numbers on a screen, but in the time shared with the people he loved.” 不是喊口号 ：没有“family is important”这种空话 回扣标题主题：成功的真正含义 = 陪伴 与前文呼应：前面是“盯着屏幕”，这里“从屏幕回到人” 属于高考阅卷老师“最喜欢”的那种升华句式：回扣主题 + 情感提升。 THANK YOU AIFENG AIFENGDAKETANG 精准备考,高效提分,上爱疯大课堂！ $