第二部分 第三、四讲 续写情节构建 续写衔接、点题-【衡中学案】2026年高考英语一轮总复习学案（北师大版）

④When I finally finished it,the thought of winning had given way即时训练2 to the enjoyment of writing.If I didn't win,I wouldn't care. 1.Satisfied with his performance 第三讲续写情节构建 2.ready to let her see the anger and disappointment in my eyes 3.helpless and hopeless i4.Worried about her mother's health,she had to return home ahead of 第一节拟定续写框架 time. 【情节设计】 5.Five hours later,they arrived home eventually,tired but excited. -1.I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other 6.Anxious about my daughter's safety,I called her many times. children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. 即时训练3 2.As a special education teacher at the school,I was familiar with the I.1.resting her aching feet challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. i2.Dressed in a Santa Claus costume 二、作者鼓励David继续完成比赛→Daid经过激烈的心理斗争→！3.slamming the door angrily 最终决定参加比赛David开始参赛→虽然中途遇到困难→4.Having waited in line for an hour at the bank 仍然坚持到最后，完成比赛 i5.Misunderstood by his teacher and laughed at by everyone 第二节续写情节优化 6.Sitting down on the bench saying gently 7.Having reviewed his lessons for a whole weekend at home 【续写分析】 II.1.Hearing my teacher's encouragement 1.(1)Can Emma perform in the show at last? 2.Struck by his words (2)How do the author feel when she heard that bad news? 3.Overwhelmed with cheers (3)What decision did the author make finally?Why? i 4.Knowing my strengths and weaknesses all too well 2.(1)What kind of mood did the author have to go to the stage to5.Hearing that using all her strength perform? 6.Having promised that we would get there before five (2)What did the author do when she was on the stage? 7.Feeling unbearably cold and exhausted (3)Did the author succeed in the end? 8.Feeling a surge of sadness,she couldn't help crying. (4)What are the author's insights about this competition? 即时训练4 第五讲续写语言提升 iI.1.his mouth dry and his legs trembling with his mouth dry and his legs trembling 第一节词汇升级 2.Her eyes sparkling With her eyes sparkling 3.his face wearing a wam smile with his face wearing a warm smile 即时训练1 4.her eyes full of tears with her eyes full of tears 1.selfish 2.merely 3.exhausted desperate 4.hurriedly II.1.(with)tears blurring my eyes 5.event/experience i 2.with a paper bag held tightly in her hand 即时训练2 3.eyes sparkling with curiosity and a little uneasiness 1.More often than not 2.with regard to 3.burst into tears 4.Bear 4.With)his eyes fixed on the family album in mind 5.catch sight of 6.of importance 7.appeals to i 5.With)tears welling up in his eyes 8.worn out 6.With the sky turning dark gradually,Jane got lost in the forest. 第二节句式升级 7.He rushed to the room with his heart beating wildly and his face flushing. 即时训练1 8.He was lying on the grass,with)his hands crossed under his head. I.1.A wave of delight seized me 即时训练5 2.a look of disappointment passed over/spread across/flashed her face I.1.Without/But for your advice 3.deprived him of his power of speech prevented him from speaking2.Had you taken my advice words failed him 3.Had it not been for your selfless help 4.blood passed over/rushed to my head But for/Without your selfless help 5.Tears welled up in her eyes II.1.How I wish I had worked hard before 6.a wave of guilt washed over me 2.Had it not been for you,mister,I wouldn't have made it 7.A feeling of relief Relief swept over him i 3.wishing that he had joined the party last night 8.(a sense of)fear seized her 4.Without/But for Eric's encouragement II.1.surprise and unbelief surrounded me 5.But for my rudeness,we wouldn't have quarreled with each other. 2.A feeling of incredible happiness swept over him 6."If only I had listened to my mother's advice!"the little girl 3.her mother's tears gave way to laughter whispered to herself. 4.Her face lit up with sheer delight and happiness 即时训练6 5.A burst of pride/Pride welled up inside her as she successfully iI.1.Stressed out as/though we were saved the old man. 2.out rushed the boy in an instant 6.The sadness robbed me of the power to say anything. 3.So particular about/over food was the little girl that her parents shed 560-第三讲 续写情节构建 第一节拟定续写框架 做读后续写题时，对所给文本后面的故事 What was wrong?He had worked so hard for 情节及故事结尾的推断是写好读后续写的前this event! 提。高考所给的读后续写形式是半开放性的， I quickly searched the crowd for the school's 这种形式既可以让考生充分发挥想象力，又能coach and asked him what had happened.“Iwas 让考生有章可循。考生在推测后续情节时一般afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at 根据两个方面：第一是所给文章的情节，特别是him,”he explained uncomfortably.“I gave him 伏笔之处：第二是所给每段的首句。 the choice to run or not,and let him decide." 一、捕捉续写点，妙照应衔接 I bit back my frustration(懊恼).I knew the 利用捕捉和对应的手法，找到原文设置的coach meant well-一he thought he was doing the 伏笔，合理推测照应续写的段落，以使续写段落right thing.After making sure that David could run 在语言、逻辑和内容上符合原文基调。 if he wanted,I turned to find him coming towards 二、研读两首句，巧构思框架 me,his small body rocking from side to side as he 1.两段首句定一框 swung his feet forward. 所给第一段的首句既能承接上文，也是本 David had a brain disease which prevented 段的起始句，由第二段的首句可以推测第一段 him from walking or running like other children, 的结尾内容。通过这两段首句可以大体推断第 but at school his classmates thought of him as a 一段的内容。 regular kid.He always participated to the best of 2.二框二首正能量 his ability in whatever they were doing.That was 由第二段的首句可以预测第二段的内容， 总 why none of the children thought it unusual that 尤其注意结尾一定是圆满的、皆大欢喜的内容 或者正能量的结局。由此可以推断第二段的主 David had decided to join the cross-country team. 英 It just took him longer-that's all.David had not 要情节。 【典例示范】 missed a single practice,and although he always 375 (2022·新高考I卷) finished his run long after the other children,he 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开 did always finish.As a special education teacher at 头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 the school,I was familiar with the challenges David It was the day of the big cross-country run. faced and was proud of his strong determination Students from seven different primary schools in 注意：续写词数应为150左右。 and around the small town were warming up and We sat down next to each other,but David walking the route()through thick evergreen wouldn't look at me. forest. I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence.He was small for ten years old.His usual big toothy smile was absent today.I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. I watched as David moved up to the starting跑步时的场景，David的努力，观众们的反应， line with the other runners. 比赛最终的结果，David的心情，主人公的 心情。 第一段：We sat down next to each other,but David wouldn't look at me. 情节构思： 第二段：I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. 【情节设计】 情节构思： 一、捕捉续写点，妙照应衔接 利用捕捉和对应的手法，找到原文设置的 伏笔： 【范文赏读】 1.大卫想放弃比赛： We sat down next to each other,but David 376 wouldn't look at me.Staring at David,"You never miss a single practice,and I firmly believe D25 that you will finish your run if you bravely face this 年 2.“我”对大卫的处境表示理解，但是赞赏 challenge,"I said gently.He took a relaxed 创 他的决心和毅力： breath."The reason why you should show up is that you have made full preparations for this 计 event,"I added in a sincere voice.At my words, 中 with tears rolling down his cheeks,David turned 二、研读两首句，巧构思框架 to me and firmly expressed his determination to 根据给出的第一段首句“We sat down next finish the cross-country run. to each other,but David wouldn't look at me.”可 I watched as David moved up to the starting 知，我们坐在一起，但是David并没有看我。由 line with the other runners.The race started.It was 此可见，David此刻很煎熬。这一段可以描写主 difficult for the young to run so long a distance, 人公对David心情的理解，用语言安慰和鼓励 not to mention David with a brain disease. David,最终David态度的变化。 However,David kept running as he practiced 根据给出的第二段首句“I watched as David again and again,though he was out of breath moved up to the starting line with the other within a few kilometers.He always picked himself runners..”可知，David来到了起跑线上，准备和up again and continued his running.To our 其他同学一起参赛。上一段最后的情节需要和 delight,David reached the finish line and won a 第二段首句呼应，描写David战胜了自己，改变 medal for his persistence.It was his strong 了主意，决定继续参赛。第二段需要描写David determination that made a difference. 第二节续写情节优化 读后续写中的情节设计不能天马行空、脱in my class,came to me while I was helping in the 离题目给定的前文和两段首句。我们必须依据 grocery store after class."How about singing 情节发展和常识，在给定的框架内，可按“所见、together in the talent show?”She grinned(笑)， 所闻、所说、所思、所做”或从环境、心理、动作、“I heard you singing a tune,along the way back 语言和情感等五个方面着手，每段写5至8个 home.I can't help following you here."Gosh,I 句子，丰富情节内容，推动问题的解决。 couldn't believe my ears.Emma,with personality 1.所见：环境描写/人物描写/神情描写 and popularity,acknowledged my little talent. 细致刻画文中主人公看到了什么，描写所 Since Emma had the world's prettiest voice,I felt 看到的景象：环境、人物和神情等。 like being favoured by fortune. 2.所闻/所说：语言描写 "You two?The talent show for the food 即文中人物说了什么，描写文中主人公和bank?”My mum bent towards us and her face lit 其他人物的对话。 up.“A big occasion.”Then a light bulb seemed 3.所思：心理描写 to go in her head."Why not practise right now 即文中人物心里想了什么，描写文中主人 upstairs？I bet you'll be a perfect match.” 公心理活动。 Winking at us,she seemed to know we were 4.所做：动作描写 thinking alike. 即文中人物做了什么，细致刻画描写文中 Emma and I embarked on rehearsing(排练) 人物的动作。 almost every single day after school. We 高 【典例示范】 brainstormed,exchanged ideas and rehearsed the 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开 scene.As the days rolled by,I was feeling pretty 总 头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 good about our act.But the day before the When I was in middle school,my family performance,Emma called that she had an acute moved to Seattle,where my parents started their stomachache and was not in any shape to perform. 语 new business-a small grocery store downstairs my 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； house.As a girl of shy and reserved nature,I had 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置 to take a fresh start to fit into the city life. 作答。 One sunny day,my school announced an I was completely shocked by the news. exciting event,a talent show for the local food bank.Students were encouraged to showcase their unique talents in front of the public in the city hall on National Day.A buzz of excitement filled the school as everyone began preparing for the big day.Deep down,I felt a spark of curiosity and a desire to participate.However,my self-doubt held me back,"I don't have any special skills to Finally came the big moment. share.” Days turned into weeks,and the talent show drew closer.I couldn't shake the upsetting feeling until one day Emma,one of the most popular girls Fear and anxiety coursed through my veins,and it seemed that all our hard work was in vain.But then the thought of the support and 【续写分析】 encouragement from Emma and my mom came 利用“五所”设问，丰富续写内容 flooding back to me.（所想：心理描写)It was at 1.第一段我们可以大胆设问： the moment that I realized that I couldn't let self- (1) doubt hold me back.Filled with determination, (2) I resolved to proceed with the performance by (3) myself..(所想：心理描写) 根据这些问题，第一段就有内容可写了。 Finally came the big moment.As I stepped 2.第二段我们可以大胆设问： onto the stage,I could feel my heart thumping (1) wildly in my chest..(所想：心理描写)Glancing (2) around the hall,I took a deep breath and (3) began to sing.（所做：动作描写)Surprisingly, (4) all my worries suddenly disappeared and a 这样，根据设问，整理答案，适当扩充，再运 wave of confidence washed over me.(所想：心 378 用恰当的动作描写、心理描写和一些高级表达， 理描写)I was completely immersed in the joy of 用上适当的过渡词语，就组成一篇完整的文 performing and the audience was spellbound by the D25 章了。 passion in my voice.When I finished my song, 年 【范文赏读】 the whole hall burst into applause.Tears of joy 创 I was completely shocked by the news. welled up in my eyes as Emma presented a big 新 Gloomy and desperate,I sat silently in the room bunch of flowers to me,and my mum stood 计 for what seemed like ages,unsure of what to do near,winking at us.(所做：s动作描写)From 衡 中 next.Then I started to pace up and down like a that day forward,I learned that by 学 caged animal,debating with myself whether or overcoming fears and self-doubts,we can not to go on stage alone.（所做：动作描写) make a difference.(主旨升华) "How can this be possible?"I thought to myself. 第四讲 续写衔接、点题 一、写好四句，3句衔接与主旨升华 “真善美”的大主题设计情节，弘扬社会主义核 1.四个顺畅呼应，进行有效衔接 心价值观，因此续写结尾要按此进行主旨升华。 (1)续写首句与给出的首段首句的衔接； 二、3句衔接语与主旨升华的常用方法和 (2)续写首段尾句与给出的次段首句的句式 衔接： 1.做好衔接的基本方法 (3)给出的次段首句与续写次段首句的 (1)提示句的主语继续成为续写的第一句 衔接； 的主语 (4)文章结尾升华与文章主题意义的衔接。 (2)提示句的某个关键词成为一个新的 2.围绕“真善美”，传递正能量 主语 续写故事的内容一定要传递正能量，围绕 (3)续写第一段的最后一句的主语和续写 第二段的首句主语一致，使得段落连贯一致 Your efforts paid off!",said he smilingly. [点拨]根据情况以上规则可以灵活变通， 颁奖典礼结束后，我去了老师的办公室。 如续写第二段的首句主语一致可以作为续写第 “祝贺你！你的努力得到了回报！”他微笑着说。 一段的最后一句的宾语。但无论如何要保持语 (6)状语从句衔接 义连贯一致。 (2023·新高考I卷)I went to my teacher's 2.衔接过渡语的常用句式 office after the award presentation.The minute I (1)形容词（短语）作状语 stepped in,he laughed out loud again as has had With everything ready,Bernard started out on before,and said“Congratulations！” his new business.Anxious and full of expectation, 颁奖典礼结束后，我去了老师的办公室。 he took the popcorn around to the houses and 我一进门，他又像以前一样大笑起来，说“祝 began to sell his popcorn. 贺你！” 切准备就绪后，伯纳德开始着手他的新 3.主旨升华的常用方法和句式 生意。既焦虑又满怀期待，他拿着爆米花挨家 6种主旨升华的方法 挨户地开始售卖 (1)名言结尾法 (2)非谓语动词作状语 需要注意的是：不可生搬硬套名言警句，一 (2022·新高考I卷)We sat down next to 定要具体文本，具体分析。 each other,but David wouldn't look at me.Seeing ①(2022·1月浙江卷)Just as the saying his face filled with anxiety,I felt sad,deciding to goes,one person can go far,but a group of talk something with him. persons can travel farther. 我们紧挨着坐了下来，但大卫不愿看我。 正如俗话说，一个人可以走得很远，但一群 看着他那充满焦虑的脸，我感到很难过，决定 人可以走得更远。 轮 和他说点什么。 ②Just as the saying puts,“Where there is a 复 (3)倒装句衔接 will,there is a way.Now I couldn't agree more. As the twins looked around them in 正如俗话所说，“有志者，事竟成。”现在我 英 语 disappointment,their father appeared.In no time 完全同意。 did their father seem to understand exactly what (2)情感升华法 379 had happened and what to do next. Seeing the javelin,I felt as if it had been 当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲 encouraging me and saying,"You've found your 出现了。他们的父亲似乎很快就明白了到底发 talent and I've found you. 生了什么事，下一步该怎么办。 看到标枪，我觉得它好像在鼓励我，并说， (4)介词短语或副词作状语衔接 “你找到了你的天赋，我找到了你。” (2023·新高考I卷)A few weeks later,. (3)运用修辞法 when I almost forgot the contest,there came the DI quickly took out the camera and news.Much to my surprise/Surprisingly,I beat photographed the rare scene-we were robbed by a lot of participants and won the first prize. a polar bear. 几个星期后，当我几乎忘记比赛的时候，传 我迅速拿出相机，拍下了这一罕见的场 来了消息。令我吃惊的是，我打败了很多参赛 景—我们被一只北极熊抢劫了。 者，获得了第一名。 2That affection towards our family is like a (5)对话或者独白衔接 touch of green tea,refreshing and heartwarming. (2023·新高考I卷)I went to my teacher's 那份对我们家人的感情像一杯清茶，沁人 office after the award presentation.“Congratulations！心脾，温暖人心。 (4)首尾呼应法 the way. DA funny thing happened to Arthur when 直到那时我才意识到，正是勇敢才能克服 he was on the way to work one day. 前进道路上的一切困难。 一天，在亚瑟上班的路上发生了一件有趣 2Only when we open up the door of our 的事情。 heart can we be bathed in the brilliant sunshine 2What a funny day!Arthur couldn't stop and enjoy the warmth of love. laughing whenever he looked back on this happy 只有当我们打开心门，我们才能沐浴在灿 experience. 烂的阳光下享受爱的温暖。 多么有趣的一天啊！每当亚瑟想起这次欢 (2)强调句型 乐的经历，他就忍不住笑个不停。 It was a simple knot and an understanding (5)感悟体会法 heart that saved me from the awkward situation. ①(2024·潍坊市五县市高三10月统考) 正是这一个简单的绳结和一颗善解人意的 From the experience,I was fully aware of the心将我从尴尬中拯救出来。 responsibility and great value as a doctor,which, (3)From then on+表行动的句子 therefore,inspired me to continue to pursue my DFrom then on,I made up my mind to pass dream on“love”to others. 380 从这些经验中，我充分意识到作为一名医 从那以后，我下定决心向别人传递“爱”。 生的责任和巨大的价值，因此，这激发了我继续 2 From that day on,every time I meet D25 追求我的梦想。 someone who needs help,I always reach out to 年 度 2I held the paper bag tightly,tears rolling them,hoping to pass on the kindness that Mexican 创 新 down without control.It is love that makes the family offered me 计 world go around,which I felt deep in my heart. 从那天起，每当我遇到需要帮助的人，我总 衡 我紧紧地握着纸袋，眼泪禁不住流了下来。 是伸出手去帮助他们，希望把墨西哥家庭给予 中 学 正是爱让这世界转动，在我心里深深感受到了 我的善良传递下去。 这一点。 (4)Sometimes+表感悟类的句子 (6)画面定格法 DSometimes,a moment of kindness could DThe children said loudly,"Happy Mother's mean so much to another,and that a simple act Day!"Mother hugged them tightly and kissed could make the world so much better. them again and again. 有时候，那一刻的善良对另一个人来说意 孩子们大声说：“母亲节快乐！”妈妈紧紧地 义重大，而一个简单的行为可以使世界变得如 拥抱着他们，一次又一次地吻着他们。 此美好。 2In the evening,Dad came back.I proudly 2Sometimes a small act of kindness may be took out my own money and handed it to Dad. powerful enough to make a huge difference. 那天晚上，爸爸回来了。我骄傲地拿出了 有时候一个小小的善举可能会产生巨大的 我自己的钱，递给了爸爸。 影响。 5种常用句式 (5)综合型组合公式：结果+难忘的经历+ (1)only引起的倒装句 体悟 DOnly then did I realize that it was bravery I thought about what had just happened.What that can conquer whatever difficulty came in I was eager to utter was that it was such an exceedingly memorable experience that I would my earnings might not be mine to do with as I never forget. wished. 我想了想刚才发生的事。我急切想说的 My labors lasted about two weeks,and the 是，这是一次极其难忘的经历，我永远不会 farmer said there might be more work,but I wasn't 忘记。 interested.I decided it was not fair that I had to 【典例示范】 contribute my money. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开 注意：续写词数应为150左右。 头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I brought my paycheck home-it was My dad,George,only had an eighth grade $119-my dad wanted to talk to me.: education.A quiet man,he didn't understand my world of school activities.From age 14,he worked.And his dad,Albert,took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses. I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker,and I thought that I would surpass(超过）anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation. Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets,hitting a baseball,or throwing a I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use 轮 football,preparing for my future as a quarterback 总 the money as I wished. on a football team.In poor weather,I read about 习 sports or practiced my trombone(长号). 英 The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field.He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off,riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals.After a short way,the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed.Then we began again.This happened over and over,but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,and the king of weeds,the pretty purple thistle.It was 【范文赏读】 tiring work,but I looked forward to the pay,even When I brought my paycheck home-it was though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to. $119-my dad wanted to talk to me.Obviously At home,my dad said,"A job's a big step to (副词作状语衔接)，my dad would try to growing up.I'm glad you will be contributing to the persuade me to contribute all my earning.It's never household.My dad's words made me realize that fair.I thought in my mind hopelessly,grabbing the money tightly in my sweating fist..After a expression(分词作状语衔接)，my dad long silence,he didn't ask as expected,instead, explained:"Though I can't understand your world he gently said"How do you plan to spend the of school activities,still I will stand by you". money from the farmer?"Without any hesitation,Moved by the touching words and seeing his the following words popped out,"There are increasingly hunching back,I felt a sense of many things I wanted,such as a new football,a guilt and selfishness welled up in my mind and baseball bat and a pair of sneakers and so on,surged through myself.At exactly that moment,I anything but to pay family expense like you."At realized why my father let me have the money-it that,my dad nodded and let me keep the was his expectation for my future,his noney(与第二段首句主语一致). encouragement and quiet love.It was this unique I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use experience that made me realize I would never the money as I wished.Staring at my confused surpass his love for me(强调句型). 第五讲 续写语言提升 由读后续写评分原则可知，读后续写作文对词汇应用的丰富性、准确性都做出了明确的要求。 文中除了要准确使用词汇外，也要注意所用词汇的丰富性：减少基础词汇（如笼统词、低年级常用 382 词等)的使用，培养使用复杂词汇（如具体词、派生词、短语等）的习惯，从而使文章内容更加生动、 D25 丰富，提升文章档次。 第一节 词汇升级 度 常用词汇升级方法如下： 镖一样射出去)，可以更准确地表现出小狗激动 设 基础用法 高级用法 的情绪，使读者产生更直接的观感，这是笼统词 变具体词的一大好处。但是在使用的时候也需 低年级学习的词语 高年级学习的词语 要注意用词是否符合语境，如上句中，若将run 中 改为sprint(冲刺)，则无法展现小狗对主人的友 笼统的词语（如walk) 具体的词语（如tiptoe,wander等） 好，不符合句子的语境。 单词（如visit) 短语（如pay a visit to) 按照词性进行划分，常用的笼统词变具体 单词的派生词（如happily, 词示例如下： 单词原形（如happy） happiness等) 名词 就读后续写来说，最主要的升级方法是笼 笼统词 具体词 统词变具体词和单词变短语。 business(事情)，issue(问题)，affair(事 类型1笼统词变具体词 thing 件)，matter(事态)，event(大事)，trifle(琐 笼统词指一些描述范围较大、指向信息不 事)》 明确的词语，而具体词往往是这类词语的具体 virtue(优点；长处)，merit(优点；价值)， adv antage 描述。笼统词变具体词可以使叙述的内容更加 benefit(优势；益处)》 准确，行文更加生动。 shortcoming(缺点；短处)，drawback(缺点； disadvantage As soon as the puppy heard his footsteps,it 不利条件)，demerit(短处) ran towards him. climax(极点；顶点)，peak(顶峰)，summit top 一听到他的脚步声，波比就朝他跑了过来。 (最高点；顶点) 如果将句中的ran改为darted(飞奔，像飞