UNIT 4 Section Ⅴ Writing—读后续写-【金版新学案】2025-2026学年高中英语必修第一册同步课堂高效讲义配套课件（外研版）

该高中英语课件聚焦读后续写，以欧·亨利《二十年后》续写范文为导入，通过分析环境、心理、动作描写及情绪变化线索，过渡到情境任务写作，提供仿结构布局、语言规范、句式表达的仿写步骤，结合动作、心理描写素材积累与友谊主题续写练习，构建阶梯式学习支架。 其亮点在于融合语言能力、思维品质与学习能力培养，如拆解范文“cold wind”衬托心境、“shaking”动作表现感动，提升语言表达准确性；通过句式转换训练（如简单句改定语从句）培养语法思维；提供“Her heart was thumping with excitement”等素材支架。学生能提升续写技能与情感表达，教师可借助系统教学链提高教学效率。

UNIT 4　Friends forever Section Ⅴ　Writing 　　　 　　——读后续写 内容索引 模仿写作　学范文 1 模仿写作　学范文 返回 原文呈现 　　Stepping out of jail into the cold wind，Bob，now 58，felt lost and helpless. 　　“Twenty years is a long time，” he smiled bitterly，not knowing where to go.He had no family，and had never heard a word from Jimmy again since that cold，dark night.“Was he ashamed of having a friend like me？” Bob longed for an answer. 　　“Excuse me，sir，are you Bob？” Bob heard the voice of a young man. 　　“Yes.” He turned around and was surprised to find a familiar-looking man in his thirties.“Have we met before？” 　　“No，sir，” replied the man.“My father told me to meet you today.I have a note for you from him.” 　　Doubtfully，Bob unfolded the note.His hands were shaking by the time he had finished reading. 　　Bob，the doctor says I’ve only got three months.I’m afraid I won’t be able to meet you this time，but you’ll always be my dear friend. 　　Jimmy 　　“You’re Jimmy’s son？！” Bob shouted in surprise. 　　“Yes，sir，” the young man smiled.“And my name is Bob.” 名师圈点 学语言 本文是一篇读后续写，原文是欧·亨利的《二十年后》，文章主要续写的是两个失去联系的好友是如何实现二十年之约的。 范文中，作者添加了新的人物——好友的儿子，他赴约给父亲送信，最终实现了两人的二十年之约。 文章开头作者运用cold wind，cold，dark night等环境描写衬托出了主人公Bob的心境；运用心理描写表现出了主人公Bob的无助、无奈与困惑；运用自言自语道出了主人公Bob对朋友的渴望以及对自己的自我安慰。最后，在朋友儿子出现后，作者通过shaking等动作描写表现出了主人公的感动之情；通过surprised，doubtfully，shouted等词对人物进行了生动的刻画。最后通过朋友儿子的自我介绍对文章主题进行升华，使文章回味无穷。 知结构 范文的主要线索为主人公Bob的情绪变化： lost and helpless→not knowing where to go→surprised→doubtfully→shouted in surprise 情境任务写作 　　阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　I still remember it，like it was yesterday when my parents told me the news.It was the week before Christmas on Thursday morning when my parents said，“Stacy，start packing your things so we can go to Florida for the holidays.” 　　“Okay，” I responded.We do this every year for Christmas and New Year.It’s kind of a family tradition we have.We go every year because we like to visit some family members living in Florida.There has never been a year when we’ve missed a trip to Florida for the holidays.I was so excited to go on this trip because Christmas is my favorite holiday，but to top it off I was going to get to celebrate it with my family. 　　The next morning，my mother entered my room.“Stacy，wake up! We need to go to the airport so that we can get our plane tickets to Florida before they sell out.” 　　I jumped out of bed and got ready as fast as I could.When we were on our way to the airport，I couldn’t stop talking and smiling because I was too excited about getting our tickets. 　　“Aren’t you just excited to go to Florida？” I asked. 　　“Yes，I am.We can finally catch up with the family and drink hot cocoa，” responded my mother. 　　The airport was so crowded.Some people were leaving to other countries and others were just visiting for the holiday.There was such a huge line in the airport because so many different people were buying plane tickets. 　　When it was our turn，my mother said，“Three tickets to Florida on Christmas Eve please.” 　　The lady working there responded，“Well，you guys are lucky.You got the last three tickets to Florida.” 　　My mother and I both smiled in relief and paid for our tickets and went back home to finish packing. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 　　2．请按如下格式作答。 　　When we arrived home，we found my father was lying on the floor，bleeding. ________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 　　After we left for the airport to buy tickets，a man climbed into our house to steal money.____________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 仿写程序步骤 1．一仿结构布局合理 第一段：根据首句可知，回家之后发现父亲发生意外，本段应该描述______________________________； 第二段：根据首句提示可知，本段应该描述________________。 2．二仿语言规范美观 ①在医生的帮助下，我父亲在平安夜苏醒过来，这使我们全家都很高兴。 ______________________，my father came back to life on Christmas Eve，___________________________． 父亲发生事故后我们进行的救治 事故发生的经过 With the help of doctors making our family pleased ②我母亲日夜陪伴着我父亲，完全忘记了去佛罗里达的旅行。 My mother _______________________ day and night，and she completely forgot the trip to Florida. ③听到这个消息，我们为他感到骄傲。 _________________________，we were proud of him. ④我永远不会忘记我和父亲在医院度过的圣诞夜。 I will never forget the time ________________________________________． kept my father company When we heard the news spent with my father on Christmas Eve in hospital 3．三仿句式高级表达 ⑤把句①改为含有定语从句的复合句 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ⑥用动词-ing形式短语作结果状语改写句② ______________________________________________________________________________________________ ⑦把句③改为含有非谓语动词的简单句 __________________________________________ ⑧把句④改为含有定语从句的复合句 _____________________________________________________________________________________________________ With the help of doctors，my father came back to life on Christmas Eve，which made our family pleased. My mother kept my father company day and night，completely forgetting the trip to Florida. Hearing the news，we were proud of him. I will never forget the time (which/that) I spent with my father on Christmas Eve in hospital. 4．四仿教材连句成篇 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 　　When we arrived home，we found my father was lying on the floor，bleeding.Though we felt very surprised，we sent him to hospital at once.With the help of doctors，my father came back to life on Christmas Eve，which made our family pleased.My parents loved each other very much，so my mother kept my father company day and night，completely forgetting the trip to Florida.After my father woke up，he said sorry to us and told us everything that had happened to him. 　　After we left for the airport to buy tickets，a man climbed into our house to steal money.My father caught him and bravely fought with him，but unfortunately the man hurt my father.Hearing the news，we were proud of him.On Christmas Eve，we held a party in hospital for my father.Everyone got together around the Christmas tree and sang Christmas songs to him.That Christmas Eve was quite unusual and meaningful.I will never forget the time I spent with my father on Christmas Eve in hospital. 精彩素材积累 1．动作描写 ①He dropped/lowered his head in shame. 他羞愧地低下了头。 ②Speechless，she smiled radiantly and gathered her son into her arms. 她说不出话来，把儿子一把揽入怀中，脸上洋溢着动人的光彩。 ③Wanting to appear agreeable，I bent down，picked up the ball and，eyes half-shut，threw it back as hard as I could. 我想显得和和气气，便弯下腰捡起球，半闭着眼睛，用尽全力把它扔了回去。 2．心理描写 ①A bright smile appeared on/spread across his face. 他脸上露出了灿烂的笑容。 ②My heart seemed to be torn. 我的心都要碎了。 ③Her heart was thumping with excitement. 她激动得心怦怦跳。 ④At the sight of the fierce wolf，I felt very scared. 看到那只凶猛的狼，我感到非常害怕。 3．情感描写 ①The smile on her face shone like a diamond. 她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发光。 ②A smile of understanding flashed across his face. 他脸上露出了一种会心的微笑。 ③He stood silently，tears rolling down his cheeks. 他静静地站着，眼泪顺着脸颊流了下来。 学以致用 　　阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 　　I truly learned what a best friend is in my first year at high school.Kate and I were good friends and we were inseparable (分不开的).We spent every day together and always had a good time. 　　Then basketball season started and we were on the same team.After a few games，however，Kate got moved up to the Rose Cup full-time.I wouldn’t admit it then，but in fact I envied (嫉妒) her much.Having different practice times，we began to see less of each other and talked less.Soon I was told by others that she was talking behind my back. 　　One night，I called Kate to tell her about my new haircut.To my great surprise，the next day at school she told everyone that I copied her style because she had told me she wanted to get hers cut like this.As a result，I was angry and quite disappointed with her.At noon she handed me a letter and walked away instead of talking with me.I couldn’t accept the cruel words on the paper.In great anger，I wrote right back to her.Over the next week，we exchanged more hurtful letters.I cried myself to sleep every night，believing our friendship was over. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 　　2．请按如下格式作答。 　　One night my mom took me to Kate’s home.________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 　　It has been five months since we broke up with each other. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考范文 　　One night my mom took me to Kate’s home.Our moms looked at each other，nervous and worried.Kate’s mom asked us questions but we both kept silent.I stared at the floor，angry and sad.At last，I let everything out with tears in my eyes.The huge burden in my mind was slowly lifted as we each talked about how we were feeling these days.To my relief，it was all out.Suddenly，to my great surprise，Kate rose from her seat，crossed the room and hugged me with tears.Then I could hardly hold back my tears and hugged her back. 返回 　　It has been five months since we broke up with each other.Last weekend we played together again，laughed a lot and had a good time.It makes me happy that we are not only learning to care about each other more but also value our friendship.Now I know whenever I am asked about my friends at high school，Kate will be my best friend forever. 谢 谢 观 看 ！ 返回 $