读后续写技能：动作描写 课件-2026届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

如何让动作描写 “活起来” Continuation Writing——Bring Characters to Life Through Vivid Actions 2 Lead-in TUNG WAH Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Summary Describe the tug-of-war in Chinese 3 Lead-in TUNG WAH Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Both teams clung tightly to the thick rope, leaning backward and pulling with great force. Their faces turned bright red with exertion, and their feet planted firmly on the ground. The red cloth marker in the middle of the rope swayed violently, yet the stalemate persisted. The surrounding area was packed with spectators shouting loudly for their sides, creating an intensely tense atmosphere. Two teams pulled the rope with all their strength, locked in a stalemate. The scene was extremely intense amid the cheers of the audience. Summary Which one is better? 4 Lead-in TUNG WAH Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Both teams clung tightly to the thick rope, leaning backward and pulling with great force. Their faces turned bright red with exertion, and their feet planted firmly on the ground. The red cloth marker in the middle of the rope swayed violently, yet the stalemate persisted. The surrounding area was packed with spectators shouting loudly for their sides, creating an intensely tense atmosphere. Summary What makes it better? 5 Lead-in TUNG WAH Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Describe rather than State 描绘 陈述 By the end of this session, we will be able to learn how to : Summary 6 Lead-in TUNG WAH Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing 原句: He went into the room. 升级: He rushed into the room. （rush=go quickly冲进 - 表现出速度与急切） 原句: He looked at the beautiful painting. 升级: He gazed at the beautiful painting. （gaze=to look steadily at sb/sth for a long time凝视 - 表现出欣赏和入迷） Tip 1:General→Concret Summary 6 7 TUNG WAH General Words(笼统词) Concrete Words(具体词) walk tiptoe蹑手蹑脚地走、drag/shuffle拖着腿行走、crawl匍匐前进 run dash/rush猛冲、sprint短距离冲刺 look glance一瞥、glare怒目而视、stare凝视 say/talk whisper/murmur耳语、shout/scream/yell呼喊、sigh叹息 cry weep/ sob啜泣 eat bite咬、swallow吞、chew嚼 Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Summary 8 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Practice (2 points each) 1. With only two minutes left, he ate his meal. swallowed 2. “Help! Help!”, she said at the top of her voice. shouted/screamed/yelled 3 . She walked down the stairs so as not to wake the sleeping baby. tiptoed Tip 1:General→Concret Summary 9 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Tip 2:Build Action Chains The girl hugged the boy. The girl dashed forward, jumped and hugged the boy tightly. Summary 10 TUNG WAH blew on it to cool it and then tore into (撕咬) the grilled meat The boys ate grilled meat. Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Tip 2:Build action chains Having blown on the hot meat to cool it, the boy eagerly tore into the grilled meat. Summary 11 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Tip 2:Build Action Chains Action Chain a writing technique where you describe a character’s process not as a single event, but as a connected sequence of smaller, specific actions. Resulting Actions More detailed and coherent连贯的 micro-actions Summary 12 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Tip 2:Build Action Chains 表示同一个主语，多个动作接连发生。 Chain1 : S+V1, V2 and (then) V3. 表示同一个主语，多个动作有先后关系时候，主动而且先完成的动作用having done Chain 2 : Having done....,S+ V hugged= dashed forward+jumped+hugged blew, and then tore into= Having blown……，tore into…… Summary 13 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Practice(3 points ) A.描述“传球”(use “S+V1, V2 and V3” structure) The boy ________ over, ________ the ball, and then ________ it to his teammate. (男孩跑过去，捡起球，然后扔给了队友。) Tip 2:Build Action Chains Summary The boy dashed over, grabbed the ball, and then flung it to his teammate. =ran quickly =picked up suddenly =threw with force (动词极具表现力，描绘出紧张或激烈的比赛场景) The boy ran over, picked up the ball, and then threw it to his teammate. (准确传达意思，使用通用动词) 14 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Practice(2 points ) 1.得知我英语很好之后, 他给了我一份打字的工作。 Having known that my English was very good, he gave me a typing job. 2.等了很久之后, 我独自在雪地里步行到学校。 Having waited for a long time, I walked to school through the snow alone. 3.完成这个项目后, Lucy就辞职了。 Having finished the project, Lucy quitted the job. Tip 2:Build Action Chains Summary 15 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Tip 3:Create Action Scenes The students hold their fists up/ took an oath宣誓/their eyes burned with conviction(目光坚定). Holding their fists up, the students took an oath with their eyes burning with conviction. Summary 16 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Tip 3:Create Action Scenes 表示同一个主语，同时发生不同动作，而且表主动，增加心理/神态描写 Scene 1 : Doing, S+V +with的复合结构 Waving her hand repeatedly, Lily stood at the station with her eyes filled with reluctant tears. Clenching 咬紧his teeth tightly, the boy sprinted towards the finish line with his legs moving as fast as lightning. Holding the heavy bag carefully, Tom walked beside the elderly lady with his face showing a warm smile. Summary 17 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing ★Situation: In the charity fair, a little boy finally picked up all his courage, holding his favorite toy, walking towards the donation desk... ★Your Task: Continue the story. Describe the key actions of the boy donating his toy. ★Requirements: Use at least ONE specific, vivid verb Create at least ONE action chain using Having done..., S+V or S+V1, V2, and V3. Develop an Action Scene by adding the boy’s facial expression or inner thought. Summary 18 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Summary Sentence Structure Reminder : 动作链 1 (先后): Having ___________, he _______________. 动作链 2 (连续): He _________, _________, and finally _________. 动作面 (同时/伴随): ___________, he __________, his heart __________. / With a _________, he __________. 19 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing 评价维度 评价标准 分值 1. 具体动词的运用 优秀 (4分)；良好 (2-3分)待改进 (0-1分) 4 2. 动作链的构建 优秀 (4分)；良好 (2-3分) 待改进 (0-1分) 4 3. 动作面的营造 优秀 (6分)；良好 (4-5分) 待改进 (0-3分) 6 4. 综合表达与流利度 优秀 (1分)；待改进 (0分) 1 总分 15 Summary 20 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Trembling slightly, the boy gazed down at the robot in his hands with his heart heavy with reluctance. Having made his decision, he planted（稳稳踏下） one final, firm step forward, cradled（捧在怀里） the toy to his chest, and then gently laid it upon the desk. The noise of the fair faded around him as he did this small, significant thing. 21 TUNG WAH Lead-in Observe & Summarize Creation Evaluation & Sharing Tips for the description of actions Action Chain Action Scenes Concret Words Chain1 : S+V1, V2 and (then) V3. 表示同一个主语，多个动作接连发生。 Chain 2 : Having done....,S+ V 表示同一个主语，多个动作有先后关系时候，主动而且先完成的动作用having done Scene 1 : Doing, S+V +with的复合结构 表示同一个主语，同时发生不同动作，而且表主动，增加心理/神态描写 Summary $