UNIT 5 Section Ⅴ Writing-【金版新学案】2025-2026学年新教材高二英语选择性必修第二册同步课堂高效讲义配套课件（人教版）

UNIT 5　FIRST AID 主题语境：人与社会——紧急救助 Section Ⅴ　Writing Writing 1——关于实施急救的故事 　　写关于实施急救的故事，属于叙事性文体。文章应该按照时间顺序展开，内容安排条理清晰。既然是关于实施急救的故事，写作内容应该集中在实施急救的过程描述上，以及急救的最终结果上。 满分微讲坛——范式素材感悟·有章可循 一、课文范式推荐 二、话题素材积累 (一)夺人眼球开头句 1．Last Sunday，I had an unforgettable experience. 上周日，我有一次难忘的经历。 2．I was wandering in the street when a terrible accident happened. 我正在街上闲逛，这时一起可怕的事故发生了。 3．Although it happened a month ago，I will never forget the scene. 虽然它发生在一个月前，但我永远不会忘记那一幕。 (二)亮点出彩篇中句 1．Before the ambulance came，the man performed first aid on the boy. 救护车来之前，这位男士对这个男孩实施了急救。 2．Cooling the burn helps relieve pain，reduce swelling，and prevent the burn from deepening. 冷却烧伤之处有助于缓解疼痛，减少肿胀，防止烧伤加深。 3．Do use the mouth-to-mouth method within five minutes.务必在五分钟内进行人工呼吸。 4．Don't move him/her，but instead，leave him/her where he/she is. 不要移动他/她，相反，让他/她待在原地。 5．Cover the wound with a bandage or a piece of dry clean cloth. 用绷带或一块干净的干布把伤口包扎起来。 6．He applied pressure to the bleeding area and then tied his handkerchief firmly to the wound. 他按压住出血的地方，然后把他的手帕紧紧地绑在伤口上。 7．At the same time，you must/should call for help. 与此同时，你应该打电话求助。 (三)韵味无穷结尾句 1．In a word，we can learn from the story that first aid is of great significance. 总而言之，我们能从这个故事中学到，急救非常重要。 2．The story is a good example in which first aid makes a big difference. 这个故事是一个很好的例子，其中急救起到很大作用。 3．From what happened，we know it is necessary to know basic first-aid skills so that we can be better prepared for an emergency. 从所发生的事情中我们意识到，了解基本的急救技巧以便为紧急情况做更好的准备是必要的。 4．We are all humans and we all have a responsibility to look after one another's welfare. 我们都属于人类大家庭，我们都有责任关心彼此的幸福。 满分练到位——妙笔成篇训练·立竿见影 　　假定你和你班同学李明从锅炉房打完开水，在回寝室的路上，李明的热水瓶突然破裂，开水烫伤了他的脚。于是你对他实施了必要的急救措施。请你结合这次事件，用英语写一篇记叙文，内容包括： 1．描述事件发生的经过； 2．你是如何实施急救的(冷水冲洗、送医院做进一步的处理)； 3．简要谈谈你对掌握急救知识重要性的认识。 注意：1．写作词数应为80左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 参考词汇：锅炉房boiler house　热水瓶 thermos bottle ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思维流程 一、合理布局，精心谋篇 二、遣词造句，规范得体 1．一天，李明和我从锅炉房打完开水，在回寝室的路上，李明的热水瓶突然破裂，开水烫伤了他的脚。 One day，Li Ming and I ____________________________________________ __________________ from the boiler house when Li Ming's thermos bottle burst and the boiling water ____________________________． 2．烧伤的程度非常严重，以至于皮肤变得红肿起来。 The burn __________________________________________． 　　　　　　　　　　 were on our way back to the dormitory after fetching some boiling water caused severe injuries to his feet was so severe that the skin was red and swollen 3．我把他抱到附近的一个水龙头旁，让他把双脚伸进冰凉的流水里，直到他的疼痛减轻为止。 I carried him to the water tap nearby __________________________________ _________________________． 4．我叫了一辆出租车，赶紧把他送到了医院，在那里他接受了进一步的治疗。 I called a taxi and _________________________________________________ __________． 5．只有那时，我才意识到急救基础知识能产生重大作用，特别是在这样一种情况下。 _________________________________________________________________________，especially in such a case. and put his feet under the cool running water until his pain lessened rushed him to the hospital where he received a further treatment Only then was I aware what a big difference a basic knowledge of first aid can make 三、恰当衔接，自然过渡 用immediately，afterwards等过渡词汇，把叙述急救的过程连接成段。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The burn was so severe that the skin was red and swollen.Immediately，I carried him to the water tap nearby and put his feet under the cool running water until his pain lessened.Afterwards，I called a taxi and rushed him to the hospital where he received a further treatment. 四、认真誊写，赏心悦目 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Accidents always happen suddenly.One day，Li Ming and I were on our way back to the dormitory after fetching some boiling water from the boiler house when Li Ming's thermos bottle burst and the boiling water caused severe injuries to his feet. The burn was so severe that the skin was red and swollen.Immediately，I carried him to the water tap nearby and put his feet under the cool running water until his pain lessened.Afterwards，I called a taxi and rushed him to the hospital where he received a further treatment. Only then was I aware what a big difference a basic knowledge of first aid can make，especially in such a case. Writing 2——语料积累 读后续写 教材语料积累 词 汇 情感 描写 ①panic vi.& vt.　 (使)惊慌 n．惊恐；恐慌 ②scream vi.& vt. (因愤怒或恐惧)高声喊；大声叫 n．尖叫； 尖锐刺耳的声音 ③choke vi.& vt. (使)窒息；(使)哽咽 ④desperate adj. 绝望的；孤注一掷的；非常需要的 →desperately adv.绝望地；非常 词 汇 动作 描写 ①swallow vt.& vi.　　 吞下；咽下 ②wrap vt. 包、裹；(用手臂等)围住 ③bathe vt. 给……洗澡 ④slip vi. 滑倒；滑落；溜走 ⑤drown vi.& vt. (使)淹死；溺死；浸泡；淹没 ⑥slap vt. (用手掌)打、拍 ⑦grab vt. 抓住；攫取 ⑧collapse vi. (突然)倒塌；(因病等)昏倒 ⑨ease vi.& vt. (使)宽慰；减轻；缓解 ⑩tightly adv. 紧紧地；牢固地；紧密地→tighten vt.& vi.(使)变紧；加强 ⑪help sb to one's feet 帮助某人站起身来 ⑫face up/down 面朝上(朝下) 环境 描写 ①foggy adj.　　　 有雾的 ②suburb n. 郊区；城外 美 句 1．It also helps control your body temperature，prevents your body from losing too much water，warns you when things are too hot or cold，and gives you your sense of touch.(排比) 2．A fellow diner at the restaurant，Zhang Tao，was choking on some steak.He was now holding his throat with his face turning red，while his desperate friends were slapping him on the back.(场景描写) 3．Grabbing your fist with your other hand tightly，push up and into his stomach in one motion.(动作描写) 4．We are all humans and we all have a responsibility to look after one another's welfare.(主旨升华) 5．The door opened，and I hurried into the elevator，desperate to escape.(读后续写之情感描写) 6．Everyone started laughing.I looked at them in panic.(读后续写之情感描写) 续写语料运用 请从以上语料中选择合适的词汇，完成以下语段，然后核对答案并背诵该语段。 　　①__________________，a wild wolf slipped into our house.My brother and I ②_______________ __________．③__________________ and we nearly choked to death.My brother ④___________________ ______________．He wrapped his arms around me tightly and nearly collapsed.At that time，seeing a thick stick，I jerked away my brother's arms，⑤____________________________ smashed it to the wolf. The wolf fled in roars.I ⑥________________，stumbled to my trembling brother，⑦_____________ ________________________________________________________． 　　在一个有雾的早晨，一只野狼溜进了我们的房子。我和我弟弟被吓得尖叫起来。我们的喉咙发紧，几乎要窒息而死了。我弟弟被无穷无尽的恐惧淹没了。他用胳膊紧紧地抱着我，几乎要昏倒了。在那时，我看到一根粗棍，我猛地推开弟弟的胳膊，抓起棍，拼命地向狼砸去。狼号叫着逃跑了。我使劲咽了口唾沫，跌跌撞撞地走向我颤抖的弟弟，帮助他站起来，拍着他的背部以缓解他的紧张。 On a foggy morning were panicked into screaming Our throats tightened was drowned into limitless panic grabbed the stick and desperately swallowed hard helped him to his feet and slapped him on the back to ease his nervousness Writing 3——读后续写 三步成文 写作任务 ①On a cold winter evening，I，together with my 6-year-old son Bob，was on our way home，heading towards a bridge，when I heard some strange noise ahead. ②As we approached the bridge，dusk was starting to fall and I could see a figure lying on the bridge floor，uncomfortably close to the railing (栏杆) of the bridge.It was a young man，clearly in great pain，crying and shouting，and his whole body was shaking.I was shocked，and suddenly realized the serious situation.The bridge ran over a high-speed train track and was a well-known death trap.A local family had lost their teenager in that exact place a few weeks earlier. I quickly looked around but there was no one else nearby.I knew I wouldn't be able to live with myself if his death was reported the next day and I'd done nothing about that. Without any hesitation，I inched towards the figure，and little Bob followed quietly on my side.I asked the young man if I could sit down，and then lowered myself on to the bridge floor opposite him.I tried a few gentle questions，asking，“What's your name? How old are you? What do you do？” His answers were rather simple，which were “Tom.21.Computers.” 　　“Are you OK？” I asked.“No，I'm not！” He shouted back.He said something about a betrayal (背叛)，not knowing what to do.His emotions were changing wildly.I tried to make a connection，so I told him my name，where I lived，and how I was a mother of two children.After asking him where he went to college，I pretended to be amazed that my niece (侄女) had studied there，too.I told him that his life was very valuable and the betrayal was just one tiny part of it.I even found myself telling the story of Neil Laybourn，who had persuaded a man to be down from Waterloo Bridge in London.“They're great friends now and have even run a marathon together for charity，” I said.“Who knows? That could be us.” I kept talking gently and eagerly. 注意：1．续写词数应为150左右； 2．请按如下格式作答。 　　I thought a train could come at any time.___________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 　　Then I broke the silence.________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 写作思路 读后续写三步曲 第一步：读语篇及所给首句 1．字词表达 (1)ran over 跨过 (2)make a connection 建立关联 2．语言结构 ①使用了be on one's way...when...句型，意为“正在……的路上，这时(突然)……”。heading towards a bridge为动词-ing形式短语作状语。 译文　__________________________________________________________ __________________________________________ ②As引导时间状语从句；lying on...为动词-ing形式短语作宾语补足语。 译文　__________________________________________________________ ____________________________ 在一个寒冷的冬夜，我和我6岁的儿子鲍勃正走在回家的路上，朝一座桥走去，这时我听到前面有奇怪的声音。 当我们走近桥的时候，暮色开始降临，我看到一个人影躺在桥面上，很不舒服地靠近桥的栏杆。 3．内容脉络 (1)作者和6岁的儿子一起走在回家的路上，突然听到桥上有奇怪的声音。 (2)作者发现是一个年轻人躺在桥面上，非常痛苦地又哭又叫。作者意识到这位年轻人是想自杀。 (3)作者努力劝说这位年轻人放弃这样愚蠢的想法。 4．所给首句 I thought a train could come at any time. 译文　________________________ Then I broke the silence. 译文　__________________ 我觉得火车可能随时会来。 于是我打破了沉默。 第二步：巧妙构思续写情节 1．预测续写走向 作者成功说服年轻人放弃了错误的想法，重新勇敢地面对生活。 2．安排续写要素 (1)主要人物：I；次要人物：the young man，Bob。 (2)时间：夜幕降临时。地点：桥边。 (3)事件发展(发现痛苦的年轻人情形严重)——高潮(作者苦口婆心劝说) ——结局(年轻人被说服，放弃了错误的想法)。 3．设计续写要点 (1)要点一：承接首段首句 根据首段首句中a train could come at any time，应描述“我”要告诉年轻人这里危险，要尽快离开。 (2)要点二：情节继续推进 描写在“我”坚持劝说下我们离开桥面，很多火车驶过等。 (3)要点三：铺垫第二段首句 根据第二段首句the silence，应描写火车经过时，我们的谈话被中断，出现了一段沉默。 (4)要点四：承接第二段首句 根据第二段首句I broke the silence，应描写作者说的话。 (5)要点五：情节发展变化 描写年轻人的变化。 (6)要点六：主题总结升华 描写年轻人放弃了自己错误的想法。 第三步：妙笔生花续写成文 1．基本表达 (1)首段首句：I thought a train could come at any time. (要点1：承接首句，描写作者劝说年轻人离开。) So I knew I had to act.I told Tom that we needed to get off the bridge and find a safer place to talk. (要点2：推进情节，增加描写年轻人的反应和我们的行动。) He seemed hesitant，but the concern in my voice must have touched him.Bob walked by my side, so we stood up and hurried towards the end of the bridge. (要点3：铺垫第二段首句，描写火车经过，谈话中断。) We saw a high-speed train running by from where we had just left.I had to stop talking，while the young man lowered his head in silence for quite a while. (2)第二段首句：Then I broke the silence. (要点4：承接第二段首句，描写“我”说的话。) I shared with him stories of struggle and hope，emphasizing that there was always a way to overcome the challenges we had to face. (要点5：故事结局，年轻人态度逐渐转变并最终决定好好生活。) As our conversation progressed，I noticed a shift in Tom's attitude.I could see that he was starting to open up and listen to what I had to say.Tom seemed much better.He thanked me for listening and promised to face this challenge. (要点6：主题总结升华) When we said goodbye，I could see a composed smile in the young man's face. 2．提升表达 (1)词汇升级替换：touch 影响，打动 →have an impact on ；run by经过，驶过 →roar by (2)丰富句式结构：用with复合结构改写要点2的黑体句子；用life作主语的无灵主语句改写要点4的黑体句子 3．打磨美文 请结合提升表达的内容对上文黑体内容润色升级，并适当添加过渡词或修饰词。 　　I thought a train could come at any time.___________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 So I knew I had to act quickly. I eagerly told Tom that we needed to get off the bridge and find a safer place to talk.He seemed hesitant at first，but the concern in my voice must have had an impact on him.With Bob walking by my side，we quickly stood up and hurried towards the end of the bridge.Just at that time，we saw a high-speed train roaring by from where we had just left.I had to stop talking，while the young man lowered his head in silence for quite a while. 　　Then I broke the silence.________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I shared with him stories of struggle and hope，emphasizing that there was always a way to overcome the challenges life threw at us.As our conversation progressed，I gradually noticed a shift in Tom's attitude.I could see that he was starting to open up and truly listen to what I had to say.Eventually Tom seemed much better.He thanked me for listening and promised to face this challenge bravely.When we said goodbye，I could see a composed smile in the young man's face. 谢 谢 观 看 UNIT 5　FIRST AID 返回 $