遇险救险+团队协作类读后续写-Jason摔倒，四人长大 讲义-浙江省杭州市2024-2025学年高二下学期6月期末教学质量检测英语试题

标黑加粗斜体（环境描写）可积累文本，绿色衔接点！！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单下划线（状从）；非谓语形式都会标注；其他重点，红色字体为重要单词B-eli-eve in daily accumulation!(注释)! () 浙江省杭州市2024-2025学年高二下学期6月期末教学质量检测英语试题 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was early autumn when the school organized a weekend camping trip to a nearby mountain forest.The air was crisp,the leaves were turning golden,and the students were buzzing with excitement(三小句并列). After weeks of studying and exams,everyone welcomed the chance to enjoy nature and relax outdoors(交代背景信息，人物). Among the students were four close friends:Leo,Eric,Jason,and Alice(多人物描写).Though their personalities were quite different, they made a great team.Alice,the only girl in the group,was smart and well-prepared(衔接要按照人物特点). She had brought along a compass,a map,and even a first-aid kit(名词并列，重要的衔接点). After arriving at the campsite,the students pitched their tents,gathered firewood,and helped prepare a simple meal(动作串描写).The campsite was surrounded by tall pine trees, and in the distance,a mountain stream could be heard.The teachers reminded everyone to stay within the marked area and never go off-trail alone(伏笔). After lunch, the students were allowed to explore in small groups. Leo's group decided to follow a trail leading up a hill.According to Alice,there was a small lookout point that offered a beautiful view of the valley. As they walked, Jason kept running ahead,calling the others to hurry(现在分词做伴随动作)."Let's see what's up there!"he shouted. Alice followed closely behind,holding the map(现在分词做伴随动作).Leo walked at a steady pace,checking(现在分词做伴随动作) that no one fell behind.Eric lagged at the end,clearly nervous about(adj短语做主语补语) being so deep in the forest(本段刻画人物的不同性格特征). The path became narrower as they climbed.Birds chirped in the trees,and dry leaves crunched under their shoes.The sunlight filtered through the branches above, casting(现在分词短语做伴随动作)dancing shadows on the ground. After about an hour,they reached the edge of a rocky area covered in leaves(过去分词做后置定语).The trail began to twist more than expected(情节推进，伏笔),and many landmarks they passed didn’'t match what was on the map(伏笔). “I think the viewpoint is just beyond this slope (斜坡),”Jason said,pointing(现在分词做伴随动作)excitedly. Leo looked uncertain."Let’s be careful.It looks slippery." But before anyone could stop him,Jason had already climbed ahead. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Just as he reached the top of the slope,his foot slipped. Paragraph 2: With the first aid finished,they realized a new challenge:how to get back. 浙江省杭州市2024-2025学年高二下学期6月期末教学质量检测英语试题 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was early autumn when the school organized a weekend camping trip to a nearby mountain forest.The air was crisp,the leaves were turning golden,and the students were buzzing with excitement. After weeks of studying and exams,everyone welcomed the chance to enjoy nature and relax outdoors. Among the students were four close friends:Leo,Eric,Jason,and Alice.Though their personalities were quite different,they made a great team.Alice,the only girl in the group,was smart and well-prepared. She had brought along a compass,a map,and even a first-aid kit. After arriving at the campsite,the students pitched their tents,gathered firewood,and helped prepare a simple meal.The campsite was surrounded by tall pine trees,and in the distance,a mountain stream could be heard.The teachers reminded everyone to stay within the marked area and never go off-trail alone. After lunch,the students were allowed to explore in small groups.Leo's group decided to follow a trail leading up a hill.According to Alice,there was a small lookout point that offered a beautiful view of the valley. As they walked,Jason kept running ahead,calling the others to hurry."Let's see what's up there!"he shouted.Alice followed closely behind,holding the map.Leo walked at a steady pace,checking that no one fell behind.Eric lagged at the end,clearly nervous about being so deep in the forest. The path became narrower as they climbed.Birds chirped in the trees,and dry leaves crunched under their shoes.The sunlight filtered through the branches above,casting dancing shadows on the ground.After about an hour,they reached the edge of a rocky area covered in leaves.The trail began to twist more than expected,and many landmarks they passed didn't match what was on the map. “I think the viewpoint is just beyond this slope (斜坡),”Jason said,pointing excitedly. Leo looked uncertain."Let’s be careful.It looks slippery." But before anyone could stop him,Jason had already climbed ahead. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Just as he reached the top of the slope,his foot slipped. Paragraph 2: With the first aid finished,they realized a new challenge:how to get back. 1. 文章分类与构思分析 类型：自然探险类+意外突发类+友谊与协作成长类叙事性续写 构思思路：布局：延续“意外发生→团队应对→解决冲突→情感升华”的脉络。 框架提炼： 第一段：描述Jason滑倒后的紧急救援（动作/心理描写），突出团队协作。 第二段：解决迷路问题（利用伏笔如指南针/地图），并回归主题（友谊/成长）。 实施要点： 衔接原文的“性格差异”（如Alice的谨慎、Eric的胆怯）和伏笔（指南针、地图）。 通过环境描写（如天色变暗）增加紧张感。续写注意事项： 事项 说明 承接原文 需呼应四人性格（如Alice冷静使用急救包）、环境（斜坡湿滑、地图不符）。 关键转折点 Jason受伤是冲突爆发点，迷路是后续挑战。 伏笔利用 急救包、指南针、地图、Eric的胆怯（可设计其勇敢转变）。 情感层次递进 从惊慌→协作→信任，结尾可升华到对自然的敬畏或友谊。 2. 故事山模式与原文分析 1. 故事山模式：开端：露营准备（兴奋氛围）。 2. 发展：探索森林（性格差异显现）。 3. 高潮：Jason滑倒受伤（冲突爆发）。 4. 回落：团队救援+迷路挑战。 结局：解决问题并成长（隐含主题）。衔接点与关键词分析： 分析角度 内容 原文反应句/伏笔 人物刻画 Alice的谨慎 vs Jason的冒进 “Alice... brought a compass, a map...” / “Jason kept running ahead...” 情感层次 Eric的紧张→可能的勇敢转变 “Eric lagged at the end, clearly nervous...” 关键情节点 地图与地标不符→迷路伏笔 “The trail began to twist... landmarks didn’t match the map.” 动作描写 Jason的冒险行为导致滑倒 “Before anyone could stop him, Jason had already climbed ahead.” 隐含线索 急救包、指南针的用途 Alice携带的装备为后文救援和导航埋下伏笔。 冲突点 性格冲突（冒进 vs 谨慎） Jason的冲动与Leo的劝阻形成对比。 解决方案 利用工具（地图）和团队协作 需通过Alice的装备和Leo的领导力解决迷路问题。 3. 续写设计建议 Paragraph 1（急救场景）：动作描写：Jason滑倒后翻滚，Alice迅速展开急救包，Leo稳住其身体，Eric颤抖着递纱布。 心理描写：Eric克服恐惧（“His hands shook, but he forced himself to focus”）。 环境渲染：“The shadows grew longer as the sun dipped behind the pines.” Paragraph 2（迷路挑战）：工具利用：Alice用指南针修正地图错误，Leo鼓励团队。 情感转折：Eric主动探路（呼应前文胆怯），发现溪流声引导回营地。 主题升华：结尾以“The valley view was forgotten, but they found something greater—trust.”点题。 3. 读后续写例句 & 高级替换词 动作描写 Jason’s foot slipped, sending him tumbling down the slope. （Jason 的脚一滑，让他滚下了斜坡。） Alice lunged forward, grabbing his arm just in time. （Alice 猛地向前一扑，及时抓住了他的手臂。） Leo tightened his grip on the branch to steady himself. （Leo 紧紧抓住树枝稳住自己。） Eric’s hands trembled as he fumbled with the first-aid kit. （Eric 的手颤抖着，笨拙地摆弄着急救包。） They scrambled over the slippery rocks, their breath ragged. （他们在湿滑的岩石上攀爬，呼吸急促。） Jason groaned in pain, clutching his twisted ankle. （Jason 痛苦地呻吟着，抓住扭伤的脚踝。） Alice rummaged through her backpack for the compass. （Alice 在背包里翻找指南针。） Leo scanned the surroundings, searching for familiar landmarks. （Leo 环顾四周，寻找熟悉的地标。） Eric hesitated before stepping onto the unstable ground. （Eric 在踏上不稳定的地面前犹豫了一下。） The group huddled together, shielding themselves from the wind. （大家挤在一起，躲避寒风。） 心理描写 Panic surged through Jason as he realized he was lost. （当 Jason 意识到自己迷路时，恐慌涌上心头。） Alice fought to stay calm, though her heart pounded wildly. （Alice 努力保持冷静，尽管她的心跳剧烈。） Leo’s mind raced, trying to recall the map’s details. （Leo 的大脑飞速运转，试图回忆地图的细节。） Eric’s fear gnawed at him, making every shadow seem threatening. （Eric 的恐惧啃噬着他，让每一个影子都显得可怕。） A wave of guilt washed over Jason for ignoring Leo’s warning. （Jason 因无视 Leo 的警告而感到一阵内疚。） Alice’s confidence wavered as the trail grew fainter. （随着小路越来越模糊，Alice 的信心动摇了。） Leo suppressed his frustration, knowing they needed a clear plan. （Leo 压制住挫败感，知道他们需要一个明确的计划。） Eric’s courage flickered like a dying flame. （Eric 的勇气像即将熄灭的火焰一样闪烁不定。） The weight of responsibility settled heavily on Alice’s shoulders. （责任的重担沉重地压在 Alice 肩上。） A glimmer of hope sparked in Jason’s chest when he spotted the stream. （当 Jason 看到溪流时，一丝希望在他心中燃起。） 环境描写 The wind howled through the trees, sending shivers down their spines. （风在树林间呼啸，让他们脊背发凉。） The fading sunlight cast long, eerie shadows across the forest floor. （渐暗的阳光在森林地面上投下长长的诡异影子。） The rustling leaves whispered secrets in the breeze. （沙沙作响的树叶在微风中低语着秘密。） The air grew colder as dusk settled over the mountains. （随着黄昏降临，山间的空气变得更冷了。） The distant hoot of an owl sent a chill down Eric’s spine. （远处猫头鹰的鸣叫让 Eric 脊背发凉。） The scent of damp earth and pine filled the air. （潮湿的泥土和松树的气味弥漫在空气中。） The rocky path twisted like a snake, disappearing into the undergrowth. （岩石小路像蛇一样蜿蜒，消失在灌木丛中。） The first stars twinkled faintly in the darkening sky. （最初的星星在渐暗的天空中微弱闪烁。） The distant murmur of the stream guided them like a lifeline. （远处溪流的低语像一条生命线指引着他们。） A thick mist rolled in, swallowing the trail behind them. （浓雾袭来，吞噬了他们身后的小路。） 4. 高级替换词（按场景分类） 场景 基础词 高级替换词 害怕 scared terrified, petrified, apprehensive, unnerved, panic-stricken 快速移动 run dash, sprint, scramble, lunge, bolt 思考 think ponder, contemplate, deliberate, mull over, weigh options 看 look scan, scrutinize, peer, survey, observe 受伤 hurt injured, wounded, bruised, twisted (ankle), aching （1） 常见固定搭配 Lose one’s footing（失足） Jason lost his footing and tumbled down the slope. Struggle to one’s feet（挣扎着站起来） He struggled to his feet, wincing in pain. Take the lead（带头） Alice took the lead, guiding them through the dense forest. Run out of options（无计可施） They were running out of options as night fell. Keep one’s cool（保持冷静） Despite the chaos, Leo kept his cool. （2） 词法解析 Crunch (v.)（嘎吱作响） The dry leaves crunched under their boots. 近义词：grind, crackle 反义词：silence Twist (v.)（扭曲） The trail twisted unexpectedly, confusing them. 近义词：wind, curve 反义词：straighten Falter (v.)（犹豫） Eric faltered before stepping forward. 近义词：hesitate, waver 反义词：proceed confidently Glimmer (n.)（微光） A glimmer of hope kept them going. 近义词：spark, flicker 反义词：darkness Muffle (v.)（使声音低沉） The thick fog muffled their voices. 近义词：dampen, silence 反义词：amplify 可积累的生词短语 短语 词义 例句 Breathe a sigh of relief 松了一口气 They breathed a sigh of relief when they found the trail. On the verge of panic 濒临恐慌 Eric was on the verge of panic as darkness fell. Take a wrong turn 走错路 They realized they had taken a wrong turn when the landmarks didn’t match. Fight back fear 抑制恐惧 Alice fought back fear and focused on the map. Stumble upon 偶然发现 They stumbled upon a small clearing where they could rest. · 总结动作描写：多用动态动词（lunge, scramble, clutch）增强画面感。 · 心理描写：结合情绪词汇（panic, guilt, flickering courage）体现角色成长。 · 环境描写：利用感官细节（sound, smell, light）渲染氛围。 · 高级替换词：避免重复，提升语言丰富度。 5. Possible Versions(3) Version 2 Paragraph 1: Just as he reached the top of the slope, his foot slipped. Jason’s body tilted dangerously as his foot lost grip on the loose leaves. “Jason!” Leo shouted, rushing forward just in time to slow his fall(现在分词做伴随动作). Though Jason still landed awkwardly, he avoided serious harm. Alice, already beside him, took out her first-aid kit and examined his ankle with care. “It’s not broken, but it’s swollen,” she concluded. Eric handed her a bandage, his hands trembling(独立主格). Jason looked away, shame burning in his cheeks(独立主格). “I messed up,” he muttered. But Leo patted his shoulder. “We all make mistakes. What matters is how we handle them.” The air grew heavy with unspoken worry, but in that moment, a quiet resolve settled among them. They were no longer just classmates—they were a team facing the unknown(现在分词做后置定语). Paragraph 2: With the first aid finished, they realized a new challenge: how to get back. The sun was dipping, shadows stretching longer across the forest floor(独立主格). Alice’s eyes scanned the map, frowning(现在分词做伴随动作). “These turns don’t match,” she murmured. “We might be off the trail.” Panic flickered in Eric’s eyes, but Leo pointed calmly to a small clearing. “That ridge—we passed it earlier.” Taking a collective breath(现在分词做伴随动作), they followed the dim path back, using the setting sun as a rough guide(现在分词做伴随动作). Jason leaned on Leo while Eric took turns carrying the bag. Every step was heavy, but every look between them grew more trusting. Finally, the sound of laughter and firewood crackling reached their ears—they were close. When the camp came into view, they found teachers searching for them. The four shared quiet smiles, proud of(adj做主语补语) what they’d become. ✨语言亮点解析（范文二） 类别 表达 同义/升级 情绪 shame burning, unspoken worry, panic flickered, quiet resolve guilt crept in, unease spread, silent determination 动作 tilted, scanned, leaned, carried, stretched, murmured collapsed slightly, studied, supported 语法点 倒装（Not only... but also）；虚拟语气（If we had stayed...）；情态过去（might be off...） 增强语法表达含金量 Version 2 Paragraph 1: Just as he reached the top of the slope, his foot slipped. Jason let out a sharp cry as he tumbled down the rocky incline, his arms flailing wildly(独立主格). Alice’s heart leaped into her throat—she leaned forward, but it was too late. Leo sprinted down after him, his steady demeanor cracking for the first time(独立主格). Eric, frozen in fear for a split second(过去分词做人物细节描写), finally snapped into action, scrambling down to help(现在分词做伴随动作). By the time they reached Jason, he was clutching his ankle, his face twisted in pain(独立主格). Alice immediately knelt beside him, rummaging through her first-aid kit with trembling hands. “We need to stabilize his ankle,” she said, her voice steady(独立主格) despite the panic gnawing at her(现在分词做伴随动作). Leo tore a strip from his shirt to make a makeshift bandage, while Eric held Jason’s shoulder, murmuring reassurances(现在分词做伴随动作). The sun was sinking lower, casting long shadows across the forest floor(现在分词做伴随动作). Paragraph 2: With the first aid finished, they realized a new challenge: how to get back. The trail had vanished in the dimming light, and Alice’s map proved no help in this situation. A cold dread settled over them—they were lost. Leo took a deep breath, forcing himself to think clearly(现在分词做伴随动作). “We can’t go back the way we came,” he said, scanning the surroundings(现在分词做伴随动作). “But if we follow the sound of the stream, it should lead us to the campsite.” Alice nodded, gripping her map tightly. Jason, though limping(现在分词做伴随动作), insisted on moving. “I’m not slowing you down,” he muttered through gritted teeth. Eric, who had been silent, suddenly pointed. “Look—fireflies!” Tiny lights flickered in the distance, guiding them like beacons(现在分词做后置定语). Step by step, they moved forward, their earlier fear replaced by determination(独立主格). When they finally saw the glow of the campfire, relief washed over them. Teachers checked Jason’s injury and other’s status, offering caring words(现在分词做伴随动作). They had made it—not just back to safety, but through a trial that had tested their teamwork and courage. Version 3 Paragraph 1: Just as he reached the top of the slope, his foot slipped. Jason’s triumphant grin vanished as he lost his balance, tumbling backward with a startled yelp(现在分词操作伴随动作). Alice gasped, dropping the compass(现在分词做伴随动作) as she instinctively reached out—but Leo was faster. He grabbed Jason’s wrist just in time, his muscles straining(独立主格) as he fought to pull him back. Eric, who had been lagging behind, stood paralyzed, his breath coming in short(独立主格), panicking(现在分词做伴随动作). The moment seemed to stretch forever before Jason was finally back on solid ground, his face pale with shock(独立主格). Alice quickly checked him for injuries, her hands steady(独立主格刻画人物). “No broken bones,” she announced, exhaling in relief(现在分词做伴随动作). But Jason’s ankle was badly twisted, and the sun was already dipping below the treetops. The cheerful chatter from earlier was gone, replaced by an uneasy silence(过去分词做方式状语). Paragraph 2: With the first aid finished, they realized a new challenge: how to get back. The path they had taken was now disappeared in twilight, and the rustling leaves seemed to whisper warnings. Eric, who had been the most hesitant earlier, surprised everyone by speaking up. “I remember hearing a creek when we climbed up,” he said quietly. “If we follow it downstream, it should lead us back.” Leo nodded, impressed. “Good thinking.” Alice adjusted her compass, and they set off, with Jason leaning on Leo for support. Every shadow seemed to loom larger in the fading light, but they pressed on, their footsteps crunching on the dry leaves(独立主格). When they finally heard the faint murmur of the stream, Eric’s face lit up. “There it is!” he exclaimed, his earlier fear replaced by cautious optimism(独立主格). The sound of distant laughter from the campsite soon reached them, and as they stepped into the clearing, teachers holding torches(现在分词做后置定语) searching for them(独立主格). That night, around the campfire, they all took pride in their teamwork. 官方： Just as he reached the top of the slope, his foot slipped.He lost balance and tumbled down with a cry. The others rushed forward and found him lying on the ground, holding his ankle(现在分词做伴随动作). Leo quickly knelt beside him and checked the injury. It was already starting to swell. Alice pulled out her first aid kit and wrapped the ankle firmly with a bandage. "Your ankle’s sprained. It doesn’t seem broken, but you really shouldn’t walk on it," she said gently. Eric was watching all of this nervously. "Don't worry,"Leo said, offering a reassuring smile(现在分词做伴随动作). "Everything will be fine!" With the first aid finished, they realized a new challenge: how to get back. They had to find the way back. The trees all looked the same, and the map no longer matched the surroundings. Alice studied the compass and listened carefully. “I can hear a stream,” she said. “If we follow it downhill, we might rejoin the main trail.” With Leo supporting Jason and Eric carrying the bag, they moved slowly. After about half an hour, the trees opened up—they saw tents in the distance. Back at camp, the teachers, who had been concerned about their safety, praised their calmness and teamwork. The event taught them that true adventure lies not only in the journey but in how they face the unexpected-together. {#{ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $