高考全国卷之读后续写微技能总结 课件 -2026届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

读后续写-微技能总结 Showing phrases 微技能 Active verbs Point of view Simile and Metaphor Five senses Five basic skills for description Showing phrases Showing phrases will help you to show characters from three aspects. Mental Responses 思想反应 Physical Signals 动作示意 Internal Sensations 内心感觉 What a character is feeling inside. What other people can see. What a character is thinking. Example: Tom was nervous Tom was waiting for his job interview to begin. His heart was racing (internal sensation) as he tapped his foot. (physical signal) He wondered if the manager would like him. (mental responses) Example: I was nervous However, when I stood on the stage, with so many eyes fixed on me, … My heart was beating quickly (internal sensation) with my legs trembling/ my palms sweating (physical signal) . I wondered if the audience would like me (mental responses). 关于兴奋/高兴的描写 形容词 动词 写作训练：当主持人宣布她获奖时，她兴奋极了。 When the host announced that she won the prize, she felt excited. When the host announced that she won the prize, she was seized with excitement/ a wide excitement took hold of her. When the host announced that she won the prize, her eyes twinkled with excitement / her heart was thumping with excitement. happy; delighted; excited; thrilled; wild with joy jump/leap/dance with joy; be seized with happiness/delight/ joy/excitement 关于 笑 的描写 smile brightly; grin at sb; laugh; burst into laughter; burst out laughing; wear a bright/broad smile; beam (笑容满面); one’s (eyes/face) light up with delight(喜形于色) 例句：看到学生都在认真地学习，她高兴地笑了。 Seeing every student studying carefully, she beamed with wild joy. Seeing every student studying carefully, she wore a broad mile. Seeing every student studying carefully, her eyes/ face lit up with delight. 关于难过/悲伤的描写 形容词 动词 写作训练：一听到那个坏消息，她悲伤不已。 Upon hearing the bad news, she felt extremely sad. Upon hearing the bad news, she felt seized by a burst of sadness and couldn’t help crying bitterly. Upon hearing the bad news, her heart ached, tears streaming down her cheeks. cry; weep; sob; one’s heart ache; burst into tears; tears fill one’s eyes/ stream down one’s cheeks; be seized with sadness; sad; bitter; sorrowful; heartbroken 关于生气的描写 形容词 动词 写作训练：被告知要加班，他感到非常生气。 Being told he had to work overtime, he felt very angry. Being told he had to work overtime, he was seized with anger. Being told he had to work overtime, he was too irritated to utter a word, eyes blazing with anger. angry; annoyed; irritated; clench (紧握) one’s fists; glare at; eyes blaze/flame (燃烧) with anger; be seized/ filled with anger 关于害怕的描写 形容词 动词 写作训练：当看到那只凶恶的狼时，我感到很害怕。 At the sight of the fierce wolf, I felt very scared. At the sight of the fierce wolf, I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch. At the sight of the fierce wolf, I was seized by a strong sense of horror with my palms sweating. frightened; panicked; scared; alarmed; in a panic; in alarm be filled with terror; freeze (僵硬) with terror (恐怖); palms sweat 动作描写类 11 【题型解读】 动作描写主要是通过对人物的动作、行为和活动的描写来展示人物的性格、品质、身份、地位、 处境和状态等。好的动作描写可以使人物形象栩栩如生、活灵活现，个性特征更加鲜明。读后续写的体裁是以人物为中心的叙事性记叙文，需要大篇幅的动作描写，因此做好人物的动作描写显得尤为重要。 【五个应对策略】 1. 要准确。要使用精准化动作类词汇对动作进行细致描写，用一系列小动作而不用大动作或者用含义比较明确的动词而不用抽象或虚化的动词来描述，以使描写更加具体生动。试比较下面两句： ⑴ The little boy said sorry to his mother. ⑵ The little boy hung his head (耷拉着脑袋) and murmured(嘟囔) an apology to his mother. 【分析】句⑴中said sorry to 不带任何感情色彩，而句⑵中使用了具体化的表示“说”的动词 murmured，从而使一个不愿意道歉又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地复现在读者脑海中。 （一）精选动词，精准描述 练习：用方框内的单词完成下面的短文，注意使用正确的形式。 tell ask shout reply demand yell cry “Help me!” 1 (尖叫道) the woman. “I can’t swim.” A little girl ran to the side of the boat and looked into the water. “Just a minute,” she 2 (回答道) to the woman. “I’ll go and get some help.” The girl ran towards two men standing on the other side of the boat.“Quick. Come with me,” she 3 ___ (要求道). “What do you want?” 4 (问道) one of the men. “There’s a woman in the water and she can’t swim,” she 5 (喊道) pulling at the man’s sleeve. The two men ran to the other side of the boat. “I’m coming!” 6 (喊道) one of the men and he jumped into the water. He swam quickly to the drowning woman and held onto her arm. “Stay still and I’ll pull you back to the boat,” he 7 (对……说) her. cried replied demanded asked shouted yelled told told 【走】 Walk wander (around) 漫步；游荡 pace (back and forth) 踱步 sneak (into) 溜；偷偷地走 rush (to) 冲；奔 creep (along) 爬行；缓慢移动 stagger (蹒跚) 【看】 look/ watch/ see have a good view of 清楚看到 catch sight of 看到 stare at 盯着 glare at 怒视 glance at 扫视 glimpse at 瞥一眼 blink 眨眼 eyes fall on sth. 目光落在 2. 有过程。记叙文中在描写人物个性的动作时，如果我们蜻蜒点水、一笔带过，就很难突出人物形象，也很难给人以深刻的印象。而应按照顺序描写一连串动作过程，既要把人物做事情的过程写清楚，又要把人物活动的步骤写具体，这样才能够使得人物形象鲜明，文章层次清楚。试比较下面两句： ⑴ She went to catch the butterfly. ⑵ She crept along the path, bent over swiftly and cupped her hands around the butterfly gently. 【分析】句⑴在描写主人公捕捉蝴蝶的动作时，没有细节的动作描写，因此显得很平淡。而句 ⑵运用了creep，bend，cup 三个连贯的动词生动具体地描述了主人公小心翼翼捕捉蝴蝶的微妙过程， 具有极强的画面感。因此，在续写过程中，在必要的地方恰当使用一连串的动词来表示过程，能为 文章增添不少色彩。 Mac打开车门坐了上去。（2017年浙江高考卷） 原句：Mac opened the car door and went in. 具象描写：麦克毫不犹豫地拉开车门跳进车里。 Mac pulled the car door open and jumped into the car without any hesitation. 2. Jane站起身来，继续往前走。（2016年浙江高考卷） 原句：Jane stood up and continued to walk forward. 具象描写：Jane挣扎着站起来，用颤抖的双腿向前走。 Jane struggled to her feet and moved forward with her shaky legs. 3. 她很紧张。 原句：She felt very nervous. 具象描写：她来回踱步,心怦怦直跳。 Her heart was thumping/ racing as she paced back and forth. 3. 借修辞。可以利用恰当的修辞手法（比喻simile and metaphor 、拟人personification ,夸张exaggeration 等）来帮助描写动作，让动作描写变得更有表现力。比较以下几组句子： ⑴ The old man’s face wrinkled. ⑵ The old man’s face was like a withered apple. ⑴ My stomach was aching for not eating on time. ⑵ My stomach was punishing me for not eating on time. ⑴ When she heard the bad news, she cried. ⑵ When she heard the bad news, a river of tears poured out. rhetorical device simile personification metaphor & exaggeration My heart is like a singing bird. 欢呼雀跃 She spoke hurriedly, as if her heart had leaped into her throat. 焦急紧张 He ran back home in a flood of tears. 泪如泉涌 She was walking on air after wining the first prize. 得意洋洋 They are now like a cat on hot bricks. 热锅上的蚂蚁 4. 富节奏。动词按其意义可分为静态动词和动态动词。动态动词可以生动展现人或事物的运动 状态，让原本静止的画面像放电影一样，吸引读者投人故事中感受人物的情绪和内心，使用富有节 奏变化的动词可以推动波澜起伏的故事情节，从而更加直观地表现主题。比较以下几组句子： (1) Unpacking the box, there was a delicate necklace inside. (2) I unpacked the box, a delicate watch inside was in sight and my jaw(下巴) dropped. 【分析】句⑴中 was 是静态动词，无法凸显“惊喜”生日派对的主题，而句⑵中的 dropped 就是 动态动词，形容非常吃惊的状况。 ⑴ There is a broken car on the road. ⑵ The car went out of control and crashed into a wall. 【分析】句⑴中的 is 是一个静态动词，而句⑵改用 crash into 之后，能够凸显出事故发生的过程， 让读者感受到事故的严重性，加深主题意义。 5. 提升句式。在描写动作时，可利用现在分词、过去分词、形容词表示伴随动作动作，使动作描写更丰富。 When he saw the coat in the bag, he looked very astonished and then asked his mother to come out. Seeing the coat in the bag, he asked his mother to come out, looking very astonished. Jane walked in the forest and felt tired and hopeless. Jane walked in the forest, tired and hopeless. 改写： In the evening, the children returned home. They were tired and hungry. In the evening, the children returned home, tired and hungry. 实战演练：阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 A farmer grew some vegetables in his garden. One day his wife was ill and he had no money. He had to sell some cabbages and carrots in the market. The next morning, he took two baskets of vegetables to town. But it was raining hard that afternoon and there were few people in the street. When his vegetables were sold out, it was dark. He bought some medicine and hurried to his village. On his way home he saw a person lying on the snow. He placed his baskets on the ground and was going to help the person to get up. At that time he found it was a dead man and there was much blood on his body. He was so afraid that he ran away quickly, without taking the baskets with him. 实战演练：阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 The next afternoon the farmer was sent to the police station. Having shown the baskets, an officer asked, “Are these yours” “Yes, sir.” the farmer answered timidly（胆怯地）. “Have you killed the man” “No, no, sir.” the farmer said in a hurry. “When did you see the dead man” “About seven last evening.” “Did you see who killed the man? ” “No, sir.” The officer brought out a knife and asked, “Have you seen it yet” “No, sir.” The officer became angry and told the policemen to beat him up and sent him into prison. The officer wanted to trap the farmer into the confession(供认), but the farmer didn’t admit he was the murderer. 注意： 1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； Paragraph 1: The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again. __________ _________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: The farmer was lucky. A few days later, _______________________________________ _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Elements of a story Who (characters) When (time) Where (place) What (event) Why (reason) How (development) Step 1: 浅层信息定位 A farmer, an officer, (major characters) A dead man, a policeman (minor character) A farmer was accused of murder The farmer left his baskets at the crime scene …… ? One day At the police station Para. 1: The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again. Q1: What did the farmer feel at that time? Q2: Would the farmer plead guilty (认罪)? Para. 2: The farmer was lucky. A few days later … Q1: Why was the farmer lucky? Did someone help him? Q2: What happened a few days later? Was the farmer set free? Q3: Who was the murderer? Step 3 精读段首句，推测情节，利用 G-N 策略 Exposition Climax Ending On his way back home, he saw a dead man He was so afraid that he ran away quickly without taking the baskets with him. worried; hopeful confused; surprised; scared afraid; helpless feelings? Step 2 文本解读:理清情节,抓住事情的发展和人物情感两条线索。 A farmer went to the market to sell vegetables to buy medicine. Inciting incident Rising action The farmer was lucky. A few days later… Falling action Explore the plot that is: Positive 积极的 Reasonable 合理的 Consistent 连贯的 afraid; alarmed panicked; timid; clumsy The next afternoon the farmer was sent to the police station, but he refused to confess. The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again. Common mistakes Not positive The policeman smashed the farmer’s leg strongly with a spontoon. The blood was flowing like flood. The police’s eyes was filled with red and he was trembling, hardly saying a word. Not consistent The farmer clenched his fists and glared at the officer. When the farmer listened this, he clenched his fists and fight against with the officer. Common mistakes Not reasonable The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again. But he don’t have something to 证明 farmer kill the man. So the officer go to the farmer’s village to look around, in order to find something. The village near to a river so the officer swim into the river. The farmer was lucky. A few days later, He go out to the police station. The police 抓到了the killer, but unlucky the killer is the farmer wife. Common mistakes 字数：每段字数不宜悬殊过大，每段至少60词 对话应加“”，便于读者区分叙述语言和人物语言 词性误用： true adj.符合事实的 vs truth n. 真相 confession n. 供认 vs confess vt. 供认 Paragraph 1: The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again. After that, the farmer was seized by a strong sense of horror, with his face bleeding and his body trembling. He thought he would be sentenced to death by killing people. But he was innocent. He must tell people the truth, but no one could hear his voice. He felt extremely helpless, hoping that someone could come and save him. Paragraph 2: The farmer was lucky. A few days later, a young man came to the police station, saying that he saw the murderer. It was the police officer who killed the man! Seeing the police officer use a knife to kill the man late in the evening, he was so frightened that he quickly ran away. The young man thought the farmer was innocent, so he plucked up enough courage (鼓起勇气) to expose the truth. After the investigation, evidence showed that what the young man had said was true. Consequently, the evil police officer was sent into prison and the brave young man was regarded as the hero by the villagers. Thank you! $