高考全国卷之读后续写微技能讲解 课件 -2026届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

Five foundation skills High School English Descriptive Language Series Five foundation skills for description Showing phrases Active verbs Point of view Simile and Metaphor Five senses Showing phrases 1.Showing phrases will help you to show characters through three areas. Mental responses Physical signals Internal sensations What a character is feeling inside. What other people can see. What a character is thinking. Examples: Tina was nervous Tina was waiting for her job interview to begin. Her heart was racing (internal sensation) as she tapped her foot. (physical signal) She wondered if the manager would like her. (mental responses) Practice: Rewrite the following sentence by using showing phrases. John was so happy because he had achieved a high score on his exam. John felt his heart flutter and he let out a loud cheer. He was certain he would be accepted into a key university. Feeling his heart flutter , John let out a loud cheer. He was certain he would be accepted into a key university. 2.Active verbs Active verbs with motion and action make the scene more exciting and alive. be appear want feel see go come … motionless 静止的 not effective not informative not detailed not vivid Description using active verbs: 1.His eyes stare at what is left of the brother’s dinner on the table. 2. The hostess screams, the other customers look at her and she put a hand to her mouth. 3.The owner, hostess and waiter all bow as Henry leaves. 4. It was obvious that the manager of the coffee shop was waiting for Li Fang to leave—he wiped the tables, then sat down and turned on the TV. 5.She stepped back appearing surprised and put up her hands, as if in defence. 6.Daniel runs into his room and shuts the door angrily. During a bullfight, a drunk suddenly wandered into the middle of the ring. The crowd began to shout, but the drunk was unaware of the danger. The bull was busy with the matador at the time, but it’s suddenly caught sight of the drunk who was shouting rude remarks and waving a red cap. Apparently sensitive to criticism, the bull forgot all about the matador and charged at the drunk. The crowd suddenly grew quiet. The drunk, however, seemed quite sure of himself. When the bull got close to him ,he clumsily stepped aside to let it pass. The crowd broke into cheers and the drunk bowed. By this time, however, three man had come into the ring and they quickly dragged the drunk to safety. Even the bull seemed to feel sorry for him , for it looked on sympathetically until the drunk was out of the way before once more turning its attention to the matador. 圈出生动描写醉汉的醉态的词 During a bullfight, a drunk suddenly wandered into the middle of the ring. The crowd began to shout, but the drunk was unaware of the danger. The bull was busy with the matador at the time, but it’s suddenly caught sight of the drunk who was shouting rude remarks and waving a red cap. Apparently sensitive to criticism, the bull forgot all about the matador and charged at the drunk. The crowd suddenly grew quiet. The drunk, however, seemed quite sure of himself. When the bull got close to him ,he clumsily stepped aside to let it pass. The crowd broke into cheers and the drunk bowed. By this time, however, three man had come into the ring and they quickly dragged the drunk to safety. Even the bull seemed to feel sorry for him , for it looked on sympathetically until the drunk was out of the way before once more turning its attention to the matador. 描写斗牛的凶险 描写人群 Language for telling Description using active verbs I was really nervous My hands shook and my eyes raced from one side to the other. Bobby was happy Bobby’s eyes sparkled as his mouth stretched into a smile. Description using active verbs Practice: Rewrite the following sentence by using active verbs. 1.The boy was tired. 2. Ramon’s father was angry. 3.The dog was fast. 4. The scenery looked beautiful. 5.Louise felt so worried about the test. 1.The boy covered his mouth to hide his yawn. 2. Ramon’s father folded his arms and stared at him. 3. The dog leaped over the fence and raced towards me. 4. The lake reflected the light and the trees danced in the wind. 5. Louse’s arms hung to the ground and she chewed her lower lip. 3.Point of view It’s a good idea to focus on only one person’s thoughts and fellings when describing characters, Showing other characters by what they do or say. Thoughts and feelings of both Walter and his sister Walter’s heart raced when he thought about flying for the first time. He was feeling so nervous. His sister ,sitting beside him, was not worried at all ; she was excited to take off. Closed, limited point of view that focuses on Walter Walter’s heart raced when he thought about flying for the first time. He was feeling so nervous. His sister ,sitting beside him, had a big smile on her face. Practice: Rewrite the following sentence by using a closed, limited pointed point of view that focus on Lawrence. Sam can be shown through physical signals. Lawrence was worried about the test and wanted to study, but Sam just wanted to play. Lawrence’s pulse quickened. He wanted to start studying right away because the test was approaching. Sam sat back on the chair and picked up the game console. 4.Simile and Metaphor Similes and Metaphors are used to compare two different items, by creating a picture and giving extra information. Similes compare two different things using like or as The boy ran as fast as wind. Metaphors compare two things directly My mother is the glue that holds our family together. Simile Using as, like, as…as, as if 1.The country ,covered with cherry tree flowers , looks as if it is covered with pink snow. 2.The smile on her face shone like a diamond. 3.He didn’t think he could go any further. His leg felt like pieces of wood—heavy and stiff. 4.He heart is as hard as a stone. 5.Her soul is as pure as snow. 相关词块积累 as soft as water 柔情似水 as pure as snow 纯净如雪 as clear as crystal 清如水晶 as weak as water 柔弱无力 as unique as a fingerprint 独一无二 as drunk as a mouse 烂醉如泥 like a duck to water 如鱼得水 like a drowned cat 落汤鸡 like a cat on hot bricks 热锅上的蚂蚁 like a rat in a hole 瓮中之鳖 1.Life is a ship on the ocean meeting both sunny days and stormy days. 2.Laughter is the sun that drives winter from the human face. 3.Her hair was a flowing golden river streaming down her shoulders. 4.I’m drowned in a sea of grief.（悲痛） 5.She is going through a roller coaster of emotions. Metaphor Practice: Complete the sentences using some similes and metaphors. 1.The kite flew in the air like________________________ 2.Jerry ran as fast as _______________________________ 3.My best friend is ________________________________; she is always there when I need her. 4.Gregory’s heart ______________________ when he found out he achieved 100% on the test. 5.He is as busy __________________. a bird flying in the sky a speeding train an anchor in my life leaped out of his chest as a bee 2. 他一边听着一边一如既往地递给我们香甜的果子。看着我们三五下就吃完果子，他总是温柔地拍着我们的头说： “别着急，慢慢来”。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Translate the sentences using some similes and metaphors. 听着我们谈论丰富多彩的生活，他笑得很灿烂。 _______________________________________ (运用metaphor) 听着我们谈论丰富多彩的生活，他的笑容灿烂得如宝石一样闪闪发光。 __________________________________________________________ Hearing us talking about the colorful life, the smile on his face shone like a diamond. Hearing us talking about the colorful life, he smiled brightly. While listening, he handed out luscious fruit to us as usual. Watching us eating quickly, he always patted on our heads, saying, “No hurry. Take your time!” While listening, he handed out luscious fruit to us as usual. Watching us wolf down the fruit, he always patted on our heads, saying, “No hurry. Take your time!” 3. 一收到这个坏消息，我们焦虑不安，第二天直接赶到医院看望他的健康状况。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ (运用simile) 一收到这个坏消息，我们焦虑不安，如坐针毡，第二天直接赶到医院看望他的健康状况。 _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ On receiving the bad news, we felt anxious and restless. The next day, we rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition. On receiving the bad news, we were anxious and restless, feeling like sitting on pins and needles. The next day, we rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition. 4. 这台手术的成功与否也许决定了老人是否能活下来。 _______________________________________________________________ (运用simile) 这台手术也许不能成功，老人能否活下来就是一场赌博。 ______________________________________________________________________ Whether the old man could survive depended on the success of the operation. The operation might not succeed and it was a gamble whether he would live or die. 5. 一想到一起度过的那么多个美好的夏日，我就感到悲伤，开始哭起来。 _______________________________________________________________ (运用metaphor)一想到一起度过的那么多个美好的夏日，我不禁哽咽欲泣，泪水湿润了眼眶。 ______________________________________________________________________ At the thought of the happy summer days we spent together, I felt rather sad and began to cry. At the thought of the happy summer days we spent together, I felt a lump in my throat, tears welling up in my eyes. 5.Five senses When writing descriptively, it is effective to choose sensory Descriptions that fit the mood of the scene. A beautiful day at the beach Five senses seeing The waves sparkled and danced in the bright sunlight. hearing The laughter of children playing sang to me. smelling The fresh scent saltwater drifted into me. touching A warm breeze brushed against my skin . tasting I licked the creamy vanilla ice cream cone. A beautiful day at the beach The waves sparkled and danced in the bright sunlight as the laughter of children playing sang to me. A warm breeze brushed against my skin and I smiled. Practice: The Storm Was Coming The wind howled (hearing)and pushed me off balance. (touching) Up above the dark threatening clouds grew larger and larger. (seeing) The Description of Autumn and Fallen Leaves The leaves had almost all fallen off, creating a sea of fiery colors that crunched beneath our feet. The bare skeletons of the trees shivered in the crisp, autumn breeze and a few dried up leaves rolled across the walkway like tumbleweeds. 译文：几乎所有的叶子都掉了下来，在我们的脚下形成了一片火红色的海洋。在清爽的秋风中，光秃秃的树木骨架在颤抖，几片枯叶像风滚草一样滚过走道。 Autumn's hand was lying heavy on the hillsides. Crisp golden leaves lay like a blanket on the forest floor. Startled birds shot from the empty branches like a bullet, as twigs snapped and leaves crunched under my feet. The sun hung low in the sky, it's rays shining through the last few hanging leaves, illuminating the auburn, yellow and orange veins that ran through them. 译文：山坡上，秋天来了。脆脆的金叶像毯子一样躺在森林的地面上。树枝折断，树叶在我脚下嘎吱作响，吓得小鸟从空树枝上像子弹一样射出。太阳低垂在天空中，光线透过最后几片垂下的叶子，照亮了穿过它们的红褐色、黄色和橙色的叶脉。 The leaves crunched beneath my feet as I strolled down the street. Occasionally, one would fall past me, lightly swaying as the air gently carried it to the ground. The air was crisp, the kind of cold that made you feel alive when you breathed it in. 译文：我在街上漫步时，树叶在我脚下嘎吱作响。偶尔，有叶子会从我身边掉下来，轻轻地摇晃，因为空气轻轻地把它吹到地上。空气是清爽的，当你吸入空气时，那种寒冷让你觉得有活力。 如何读 Elements of a story Who (characters) When (time) Where (place) What (event) Why (purpose) How (solution) Read for basic information Ada(major character) Roy , Betty, Victor…(minor characters) Roy had his leg broken He was trying to stand on the donkey’s bare back but fell off it. …… ? 浅层信息定位 In the morning On the road in a village 1.Why did Ada sigh and shut her first-aid book? How did she feel at that moment? 2.Where did Ada live ? Was there developed traffic ? 3.Where was Betty at that time? What did she do there? 4.Did Betty take Ada with her? Why or why not? 5.How was Roy when he fell off the donkey? 6.Why did Ada ask Roy to find someone with truck? 7.Why did Ada ask the other kids to give her their shirts? What could them be used for? Interpretation of the Text 文本解读 (理清情节) Exposition Climax Denouement had his leg broken Betty’s gone to the city frozen in place moaned in agony get Roy’s mama, find someone with truck Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight. disappointed anxious confident feelings? Central conflict (Related conflict) Interpretation of the Text 文本解读 (理清情节) Roy was trying to stand on the donkey’s bare back Inciting incident Rising action The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home. change Falling action Explore the plot that is: positive theme-related logical worried calm scared 档次 描述 第五档（21-25分） 1.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富。3.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。 细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系； 抓住关键词，合理创新故事情节。 Para. 1 Ada then found a strong stick , which she would use to keep his leg straight. What would Ada do next? How did Ada feel ? What was the state of Roy and what did Ada say to comfort Roy? What would Roy’s mama do when she heard the new and how would she feel when she saw her son? How was everything going on? Para. 2: The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home. Why did Betty come to Ada’s home? How did Betty feel when she heard the news? Did Betty change her opinion of Ada ? What would Betty do ? What effect did it have on Ada? (精读段首句，推测情节) G-N Strategy Exposition Climax Denouement had his leg broken Betty’s gone to the city frozen in place moaned in agony get Roy’s mama, find someone with truck Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight. disappointed confident feelings? Central conflict (Related conflict) Interpretation of the Text 文本解读 (理清情节) Roy was trying to stand on the donkey’s bare back Inciting incident Rising action The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home. Falling action worried calm anxious nervous confident worried painful surprised appreciated happy proud 如何写 language(语言) 运用 1. 具体的动词 2. 形象的形容词、副词 3. 有效的非谓语 进行动作描写、语言描写、心理描写、外貌描写以及环境描写 How? Five foundation skills for description Showing phrases Active verbs Point of view Simile and Metaphor Five senses Active verbs Active verbs with motion and action make the scene more exciting and alive. be appear want feel see go come … motionless 静止的 not effective not informative not detailed not vivid Using five foundation skills for description: What would Ada do next? How did Ada feel ? What was the state of Roy and what did Ada say to comfort Roy? What would Roy’s mama do when she heard the bad news and how would she feel when she saw her son? How was everything going on? Showing phrases Active verbs Physical signal Minor character Ada then found a strong stick , which she would use to keep his leg straight. Without hesitation, Ada used the shirts to tie the leg together and then kept the leg straight by a truck. So nervous was she that did it extremely carful. A big sweat rolled down her head. Quickly Roy’s mother was coming and sent Roy to the hospital right.蔡泽敏(49词) 字数不够；表达干瘪；内容和语言不丰富；没用上所教的写作技能。 12’ Ada then found a strong stick , which she would use to keep his leg straight. After that, Ada was frozen, feeling her plams sweated. She was hesitate about whether she should straighten Roy’s bone or not. “what if I failed? Will I be blame for my failure?” worrying Ada. It was the idea of becoming as trustworthy as Betty that drove Ada to take action. Ada did the aid as fluently as the rive flows and finally made it, which made the doctors who arrived for several seconds. 谢静琪 找出文中的无效连接和不符合逻辑的句子 缺乏施救的细节描写 人物刻画没有抓住重点，缺乏次要人物的描写 15’ Ada then found a strong stick , which she would use to keep his leg straight. Ada breathed deeply to calm herself down. She carefully put the stick beside Roy’s broken leg. In the meanwhile, she used the shirts to tie his leg slowly and seriously. She felt her stomach tightened and palms sweating. She wondered if she could succeed in it. After tying the leg, Ada asked Roy “Is it OK?” Roy smiled at her and said “What a wonderful measure it is! How great you are!” Then, Roy’s mama came there worriedly, but her kid told her that he was well. Eventually, a kid took a man who is driver and Victor asked him to deliver Roy to the hospital. Luckily, the man accepted this requirement.徐志豪 Having taken a deep breath , She carefully put the stick beside Roy’s broken leg, wrapping it using the shirts slowly and seriously. Ada comforted Roy in a soft voice “It is OK. You will feel better.” Roy smiled at her with a pale face. rushed there staggeringly followed by Victor and a man with a truck. Eventually, Roy was sent to the hospital right away. 20’ Ada then found a strong stick , which she would use to keep his leg straight. By using the shirts, she carefully tied the stick to Ray’s legs to make sure not to hurt him again. Worried but forced to calm, Ada slowly tied Roy’s leg with her proper operation. At this moment, she yelled that if someone could give her a hand. But the kids around her were too weak to get Roy up. Fortunately, Ada caught sight of Victor ---He was running after Roy’s mum with a truck. No sooner had Roy’s mum arrived than she attended their saving team. With the powerful help, they worked together to move Roy safely to the hospital.黄蕊 23’ 文章衔接自然合理，符合逻辑，人物描写主次分明，句式丰富，语言流畅但不够生动，缺乏心理和语言描写。 Ada then found a strong stick , which she would use to keep his leg straight. “Tolerate it, Roy, it may be painful to you.”Ada said with her voice shaking. The moment Ada wrapped the broken leg using the shirts, Roy burst out a sharp scream, tears rolling down his cheek. It’s the horrible action that scared Ada to keep helping Roy out. Palms sweating, Ada felt like sitting on pins and needles. She was about to give it up. All of a sudden, a bright voice--“I believe in you!”from Roy, a big smile worn on his pale face. Fortunately, the whole process was successful. Ada was in relief and Roy was sent to the hospital by his mother and the doctor said it was a appropriate measure to straighten the broken leg in time.宋鑫杨 So scared was Ada that she hesitated to give up helping Roy out. Why did Betty come to Ada’s home? How did Betty feel when she heard the news? Did Betty change her opinion of Ada ? What would Betty do ? What effect did it have on Ada? Using five foundation skills for description: The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home. Wearing a shining smile on her face, Betty gave a tight hug to Ada. Betty told her that Roy was out of danger owing to her timely first aid. What’s more, Roy’s mama was grateful to her for what she had done for Roy. At the end of the conversation, Betty made an apology to Ada for her shallow idea and invited Ada to join her medical care. Ada was beyond delight and accepted Betty’s invitation.王城有 When she heard the news, with her heart pounding with excitement, Ada eyes sparkled as his mouth stretched into a smile. She held a firm belief that she would make her dream come true sooner or later. Internal sensations Mental responses Physical signal The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home. With a smile on her face , she hugged Ada for a long time and said “You have saved Roy, Ada. ” Knowing that Roy was out of danger, Ada sighed in relief. Betty curiously asked Ada how she knew the first aid to save someone. After hearing that Ada learnt it from the first aid book, she was surprised and continued to praised Ada “ You made me change my mind, I will teach you more skills on how to do the first aid in an emergency.” So delighted was Ada that she jumped up and down. Now she could learn more not just from reading .蔡粤悦 The next day, Betty came to Ada’s home. She thought highly of Ada and encouraged Ada to be a doctor in the future. Having heard it, Ada jumped up and down excitedly with the tears rolling down. After a large amount of hard work ,she eventually got praise and approval from Betty, which indicated that she should not be a young girl without any ability. What’s more, Betty promised that Ada was able to be take to learn more medical skill. There was nothing more exciting than it. After a few days, Roy’s parents came to Ada’s home to appreciate her brave and kind behavior. Going through this accident, Ada thought that she grew up and was more confident.朱荣琦 一、根据评分标准和本节课的内容，再次分析自己的续写，进行自我评价，并从情感描写、故事的合理性两方面修改自己的习作： 序号 评价项目 是 否 1 对原文理解正确     2 写前列出提纲     3 与提供的各段落开头句衔接合理     4 与原文融合度高     5 续写内容丰富，情节生动合理     6 时态正确，词汇准确、地道     7 有多种高级句式，有效使用连接词，结构紧扣     8 标点符号，大小写等正确，字数150左右     9 自我评价： 【课后实践巩固】 I. 词的积累 名词：excitement, delight, happiness, ecstasy 动词：laugh, smile, jump, skip, hop, dance 形容词：excited, joyful, cheerful, pleased, thrilled The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能： 之准确的动作神态描写：兴奋篇开心篇 词的积累： 形容词：happy, glad, delighted, thrilled 名词： happiness, joy, pleasure, delight, thrill 动词： delight, thrill II. 词块和句的积累 1. He was so excited that he could hardly speak. 2. She could hardly contain her excitement. 3. Both Mark and I are feeling on the top of the world. 4. His eyes glittering with excitement. 5. The children were thrilled with joy at the sight of the Christmas tree. 6. Hearing the news, he jumped up and down with excitement. 7. I couldn't help but grin from ear to ear. 8. The player jumped for joy when he scored the winning goal. 9.A slow smile worked its way across his face and into his eyes. 10. Bubbling over with happiness, she hummed as she strode through the corridor in search of Raymond. The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能： 之准确的动作神态描写：兴奋篇、开心篇 II.句的积累： 1. be wild/overwhelmed with joy, cry/ jump/burst with joy, ① She wore a smiling smile on her face. ② She shed tears of joy/regret/relief. ③ She was overflowing with happiness. ④ I was floating on air./ I'm on top of the world. 2. His eyes shone/beamed/twinkled with pleasure/ delight. ① His eyes twinkled/danced with pleasure/ delight. ② Her eyes lit up. ③ His eyes danced with joy and sweetness. My heart swells with happiness/joy. 利用所学写作技能进行描写: 当妈妈亲吻他时，小baby开心极了。 概括描述When his mother kissed him on the cheek, the baby was happy/delighted/full of joy. 1) When his mother kissed him on the cheek, it seemed as if the baby were on top of the world. (非常开心) 3) When the mother kissed the baby on the cheek, he danced with joy and sweetness.(欢欣雀跃) 2) When the mother kissed the baby on the cheek, his face beamed (堆满笑容)and his bright smile lit up the room. (眉开眼笑；笑容照亮房间) 关于高兴的描写 Micro-writing 用所学的知识，编一个60词的小故事 Last week, I bought a lottery(彩票). _______ __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________ Last week, I bought a lottery(彩票). This morning, I got a call from the seller. He told me that I got the prize with 5 million yuan! I was too happy to stand faint! However, five minutes later, I was called again and was told that they made a mistake! I didn’t get the prize of 5 million yuan but 5 yuan. I fell to the ground, heart broken. 1. Paula的脸通红，声音也兴奋地颤抖起来。（Have a try） Paula’s face turned red ____________________________________________. (运用with + n. + doing结构) ② Paula’s face turned red, ________________________________________. (运用独立主格结构) with her voice quivering with excitement her voice quivering with excitement 2. 我非常开心，几乎就要跳起来了，眼泪含满了眼眶。 ① I was ____________________________________and tears filled her eyes. (运用so…that…句型) ② ____________________________________________________ with tears filling her eyes.(运用so放在句首的倒装句) so happy that she almost jumped up So happy was I that she almost jumped up 3.他不敢相信，睁大了眼睛。看到这个惊喜，他不知道说什么来表达他的喜悦。 It was _________________he made his eyes wider. (运用so…that…结构) _____________________, he couldn’t speak anything to express his happy feeling. (运用非谓语动词) so unbelievable that Looking at this surprise 4. 他的眼泪落了下来，他奔向妈妈温暖的怀抱，对她说谢谢。 ____________________________, he ran to mum’s warm hug, and said gently, “Mum, thank you.” (运用with + n. + doing结构) ________________________, he ran to mum’s warm hug，and said gently, “Mum, thank you.” (运用独立主格结构) With tears dropping from his eyes Tears dropping from his eyes 5.外婆把车停在路边，急忙走向Bobby的前门，整个人兴奋地颤抖 Grandma parked down the street, rushed to Bobby’s front door____________________________________________. (运用连动句句型扩充句子内容) . ② Grandma parked down the street and rushed to Bobby’s front door, ________________________________________. (运用非谓语动词丰富文章句型) and her whole body trembled with excitement trembling with excitement 6. 听到他们对圣诞老人说谢谢，她的眼中闪烁着一丝快乐的光芒。 ① ________________________________________, her eyes were sparkling like diamonds. (运用非谓语动词) ②___________________________________________ a ripple of excitement gleamed in her eyes. (运用强调句型) On hearing them say “Thanks” to Santa Clause It was hearing them say “Thanks” to Santa Clause that 7. 当他们看到爸妈，如释重负，眼里含着泪光。 _______________________________________, they felt relieved with spark in their eyes. (运用时间状语从句)(When they spotted/caught sight of their parents) ② __________________________________________________, they felt relieved with spark in their eyes. (运用“一……就”句型) When they spotted/caught sight of their parents The moment/instant they spotted/caught sight of their parents $