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读后续写大讲堂(3)
Arthur English Research Centre
20250928
Ⅰ基本讲析
1.写作步骤
2.读后续写3“原则”
3.读后续写4“衔接”
Ⅱ技能培养与训练
解题技能3 构造情节,搭建框架
读后续写的形式是半开放的,这种形式可以让考生充分发挥想象力,又能让考生有章可循。可利用“两段首句定一框,二框二首正能量”确定续写方向。
Step 1: 两段首句定一框:根据两段所给首句来确定第一段的框架;
首:续写第一段的首句——衔接——第一段已给句子的关键信息;
中:描写故事发展过程,增加细节;
尾:第一段尾句衔接——第二段已给句子中的关键信息。
Step 2:二框二首正能量:第二段的框架由第二段的首句和正能量结尾来确定。
首:续写第二段的首句——衔接——第二段已给句子的关键信息;
中:描写故事发展过程,增加细节;
尾:第二段尾句由正能量的结尾来确定,可呼应原文首句,总结、感悟、点题、升华主旨。
合理性是考查读后续写很重要的一个维度,采取逐步推进和逐一击破的方法,可以从人(人物)、事(事情)、情(情感)、悟(感悟与升华)四个方面实现构建情节的合理性。
【作文示例】
[2024·九省联考]
Last summer, Hilda worked as a volunteer with dolphin trainers at a sea life park. Her job was to make sure the tanks were free of any items so that the trainers could train the dolphins to fetch specific items. However, one day after cleaning, one of the dolphins, Maya, presented Hilda with a candy wrapper from the tank. When Katherine, the trainer, saw this, she blamed Hilda for her carelessness. Upset but not discouraged by this event, Hilda decided to do some spying on Maya.
The next morning, Hilda arrived at the park early. She put on her scuba gear (水下呼吸器) and jumped into the tank for her usual, underwater sweep. Finding nothing in the tank, she climbed out of the water just in time to see Katherine jumping in on the other side. After what happened yesterday, Hilda knew what she was doing. She watched as Katherine performed her underwater search, but Hilda wasn’t surprised when she surfaced empty-handed.
During the tank sweeps, Maya had been swimming playfully, but now the dolphin stopped suddenly and swam to the back part of the tank where the filter (过滤) box was located. She stuck her nose down behind the box and then swam away. What was Maya doing back there? Hilda wondered. She jumped back into the water and swam over to take a look behind the box, and her question was answered. Hilda then swam across the tank following Maya’s path and emerged from the water to find Katherine removing her scuba gear. As Katherine turned around, her mouth dropped open. There was Maya at the edge of the tank with a comb (梳子) in her mouth waiting for her treat.
“Maya! Where did you get that?” demanded Katherine, taking the comb and throwing her a fish. “I know where she got it,” declared Hilda climbing out of the tank with a handful of items still wet from their watery, resting place. “What’s all these?” Katherine asked, obviously confused.
注意:续写词数应为150个左右。
Paragraph 1:
“This is Maya’s secret,” Hilda said with a big smile.
Paragraph 2:
Now Katherine realized what had been going on.
【思路点拨】
1.原文情节情感线
精读原文材料,理清情节脉络,把握基本信息,抓住情感主线。
When
Last summer
Where
A sea life park
Who
Hilda, Maya (a dolphin), Katherine (the trainer)
What
Hilda was blamed by Katherine for leaving a candy wrapper in the tank after cleaning. Then Hilda decided to spy on Maya and found that Maya was the one who was hiding items in the tank.
why
To clear her name and find out how the foreign objects were ending up in the dolphin tank.
Main ideas
Emotions
Themes
Para.1
Hilda was blamed for a candy wrapper in the tank and decided to spy on Maya.
Hilda:
upset
↓
determined
↓
curious
↓
satisfied
Katherine:
angry
↓
astonished
↓
confused
误解与真相、观察与发现、动物智慧、解决问题
Para.2
Hilda and Katherine searched the tank, but found nothing.
Para.3
Maya hid items behind the filter box; Hilda discovered Maya’s secret.
Para.4
Hilda revealed Maya’s source of hidden items, surprising Katherine.
冲突与问题
水中的东西究竟是怎么来的?
2.续文情节推理
把握了文章基本脉络和主题后,着眼于四个点(即构思第一段给定的首句后顺推的第二句、构思第一段的尾句、构思第二段给定的首句后顺推的第二句、构思第二段的尾句或全文的总结句),合乎逻辑地构建续写情节框架。
①根据“解决问题原则”和续写第二段首句(现在Katherine明白究竟发生了什么。)可知,续写第一段的情节可以是:Hilda向Katherine解释海豚Maya所拿物品的来源,消除Katherine对Hilda的误解。两人同时意识到海豚Maya格外聪明。
②根据“解决问题原则”和“正能量原则”,结局是皆大欢喜的。续写第二段的情节可以是:Katherine向Hilda为她的误解行为而道歉并取得原谅。海豚Maya的聪明给她们的工作带来了乐趣,使她们更加团结。
3.情节流程
Hilda揭晓秘密→Katherine恍然大悟→共同合作→园内和谐温馨
【参考范文1】
“This is Maya’s secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. In her hand, she displayed the items she had
retrieved behind the filter box (定语从句). “She’s been keeping these from the tank, not me.” Katherine’s eyes widened as she examined the small pile of objects (时间状语从句)that Maya had collected (定语从句). Hilda explained how she had watched Maya cleverly hide the items away (宾语从句), and turn the tank into her own little collection spot. The tension in the air dissolved as Katherine realized that Hilda’s dedication had revealed Maya’s playful habit, not a mistake on her part (宾语从句).
Now Katherine realized what had been going on. She looked at Maya, then at Hilda, and her stern expression softened into a smile. “I owe you an apology, Hilda. You’ve shown great initiative and care,” she said, her tone filled with newfound respect(独立主格). Together, they watched Maya perform her tricks, understanding now that the dolphin’s behaviour was not a training issue but a sign of her intelligence and curiosity(分词短语作状语). The day ended not with blame, but with laughter and a sense of teamwork, as they all enjoyed Maya’s clever antics (原因状语从句).
【参考范文2】
“This is Maya’s secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. The truth of the matter, Hilda continued, is that Maya has been secretly collecting items from the tank, hiding them near the filter box in the back of the tank(表语从句;分词短语作状语). When you train her(时间状语从句), she will give you some items so that she can get treats from you(目的状语从句). “Really? How do you know that?” Katherine asked in surprise. Hilda laughed and replied, “It took me a long time to discover (it作形式主语)this secret, too. It’s not easy to follow Maya.”
Now Katherine realized what had been going on. Katherine thought to herself, “This is really a clever dolphin.” And she said to Hilda, “Well, I’m sorry for blaming you yesterday. Anyway, Maya loves treats, so we’ll work together, and you’ll secretly help her collect a few things and put them near the filter box. I’ll give her treats, the number of which I can increase(定语从句).” Hilda replied, “It’s all right, and let’s do it.” From then on, the sea life park is full of warmth and harmony. Maya’s performance in front of the audience is getting better and better.
Ⅲ真题示例与解析
[2024·新课标Ⅰ卷]
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.
That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.
Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it, ” he said.
Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bank card. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry.”
注意:续写词数应为 150 个左右。
Paragraph 1:
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
Paragraph 2:
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
【思路点拨】
读后续写之一读:记叙文基本要素——抓住情节线1
通过记叙文基本要素5W(When, Where, Who, What, Why),分析故事的人物、时间、地点及事情经过,了解文章的情节脉络。
When
On a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September
Where
In Vienna, at the airport and the bus station
Who
I, Gunter(a taxi driver)
What
I jumped into a taxi and Gunter took me to the bus station in time despite some struggles, but I had no cash to pay the taxi fare after trying every possible means.
Why
I had no cash and the card machine and a nearby cash machine did not work.
读后续写之二析:
1.分析人物(性格)特征与情感——抓住情感线;
2.分析存在的冲突、问题或悬念——抓住情节线2。
I
原文句子
情感线
情节线
I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.
anxious
↓
flight delay
↓
urgent schedule
↓
unknown bus
station
↓
no cash
↓
card machine
failure
↓
last chance
uncertainty
Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus.
relieved
↓
I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bank card.
embarrassed
↓
A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
desperate
↓
I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry.”
disappointed
Gunter
I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station.
confused
↓
…Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend.
helpful
↓
After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.
patient
↓
Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it,” he said.
optimistic
读后续写之三定:确定主题,遵循正能量
本文以第一人称描述了作者“我”乘飞机到维也纳,然后要转乘公共汽车去布拉格参加一个会议。但由于暴风雨,飞机被延误一个半小时,当作者到达维也纳机场时,离最后一班到布拉格的公共汽车仅剩半小时。于是,作者下飞机后狂奔出机场,跳上出租车,紧赶慢赶,终于赶上末班车。但由于没有现金无法向出租车司机支付车费。作者承诺四天后返回维也纳时再联系出租车司机。其核心价值在于引导考生讲诚信、守承诺,学会感恩以及赞扬出租车司机信任他人、宽以待人的品质。
读后续写之四思:读段首句,构思情节——设问推动情节走,情感延续双线行
通过“自问自答”的方式,激发对后续情节的好奇心及想象力,并借助自己心中的疑惑,为续写构建写作大纲,情节情感双线并进。
段落
设问推进
情节延续
情感延续
第一段
How did the author and Gunter feel in that situation?
Did Gunter allow the author to leave without paying?
What did the author promise to do?
由第一段首句“我跑回到Gunter 那里,告诉他这个坏消息。”和第二段首句中“按照承诺”可知,第一段可描写“我”留下Gunter 的电话,承诺会还钱给对方,Gunter 同意,最终作者及时登上了公共汽车。
urgency and desperation
↓
frustration and embarrassment
↓
trust and understanding
↓
gratitude and relief
第二段
What did they say over the call?
How did they react and feel when meeting?
What did the author get from this experience?
由第二段首句“四天后,当我回到维也纳时,我按照承诺给Gunter 打了电话。”可知,第二段可描写“我”如约付费给Gunter ,两人再次见面的情形,及后续友谊的发展,最后是作者的感悟。
relief
↓
warmth
↓
generosity
↓
connection
读后续写之五写:遣词造句,书写成章——精细打磨语言,丰富细节描写
【参考范文1】
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. I explained to him the urgency of catching the bus, emphasizing that otherwise I would be forced to stay overnight and buy a new ticket the next morning(分词短语作状语;宾语从句). Ultimately, I suggested, “I will return to Vienna in 4 days. If it’s OK with you(条件状语从句), I can pay you then, with an additional 10 euros as a gesture of my gratitude.” Following an uncomfortable pause(分词短语作状语), he simply nodded, saying, “I agree to this arrangement and trust you.” I thanked him with the biggest smile you can imagine(定语从句), and we exchanged contact information before I got on the bus(时间状语从句).
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. We arranged to meet at the airport, and upon our arrival, we hugged each other like long lost friends. When I gave him the extra 10 euros I had promised(定语从句), he didn’t accept. “Buy me a beer next time you are in Vienna(时间状语从句),” he said with a warm smile. Then we parted ways with a firm handshake and a promise to keep in touch(不定式作后置定语). Gunter’s kindness had turned a potentially disastrous evening into a memorable story I would cherish for years to come(定语从句).
【参考范文2】
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. “Oh,God!”he responded in a somewhat surprised tone,traces of disappointment easily detected(独立主格). I was greatly embarrassed, blushing to the roots of my flaming hair(分词作状语). “May I…”I proposed tentatively in a timid whisper. “You may pay me when you are back here (时间状语从句). And 50 euros more for you to catch the bus.” From within the car floated the determined voice(倒装)before I could finish my words(时间状语从句). He had spoken what I vaguely hinted at, but dared not speak(宾语从句). “Thank you from the bottom of my heart,” I chirped, my voice brisk(独立主格). I gave him my telephone number, promising to pay when I returned to Vienna (分词作状语) .
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. From his voice, I could easily distinguish the surprised disbelief. We both approved of
the idea of an appointment at a nearby cafe. With gratitude and unspeakable joy in my heart(with复合结构), I headed for the cafe, visualizing the delighted look on Gunter’s face(分词作状语). The sense of gratitude, however, gave way to the joy of reuniting with Gunter. We embraced like old friends. I handed him the envelope containing the money I owed him(分词作后置定语),along with some extra money to show my appreciation. But he refused the extra money. What an experience! Gnawing troubles paled in comparison to trust, generosity, and more importantly, the happy reunion.
Ⅳ 语篇训练
[2024·山东德州高三二模]
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
American football can be pretty competitive. From old opponents to fan drama, it’s just another part of the game. There have even been all-out violent fights in the name of defending your team. However, one high school football player Mario Hoefer showed that his love for the sport didn’t take priority over helping a person in need.
One afternoon in September, Charles City High School football team was facing nearby New Hampton in a Friday football game. Mario was captain of his team and Carter the quarterback of the opposing team.
It was really foggy and awfully hot. Filled with excited audience in the stands, the stadium felt like a heated steamer. Every player was wet with sweat even during the warm-ups. All this meant the game would be a tough one and a test for the mind and body of both teams.
Soon the game began and for the first three quarters, each team seemed to have a chance to win and they took the lead by turns. So exhausted was Mario running back and forth that he got cramp (抽筋) twice. Each time he got a cramp near the New Hampton sideline, his teammates came to his assistance and stretched his leg to ease the cramp. Though feeling uncomfortable and worn out, Mario soldiered on as Charles City protected a slim lead and New Hampton attempted a late comeback.
In the fourth quarter, Mario saw his teammates across the field break up a crucial pass intended for Carter. Mario was about to cross over to the other side of the field to high five his teammates when he noticed that beside him, Carter fell onto the ground, screaming in pain, his eyes wide open and a look of panic on his face. Carter grabbed his left calf (小腿肚), trying to move his leg in different positions. Judging from Carter’s desperate expression, Mario realized Carter was possibly experiencing an unbearable cramp just as he himself had gone through minutes before. But the New Hampton players were farther away from the quarterback.
注意:续写词数应为150个左右。
Paragraph 1:
Mario knew what to do next.
Paragraph 2:
The photo was posted on social media.
Ⅴ素养提升与背诵
读后续写高级句型
句型一:She felt a great sense of+情绪名词+welling up and surging through her.
1. With tears streaming down her cheeks, she felt a great sense of relief welling up and surging through her, finally free from the burden she had carried for so long.
(她泪流满面,一股巨大的解脱感涌上心头,席卷全身,她终于从背负已久的重担中解脱出来。)
2. As she stepped onto the stage to receive the award, she felt a great sense of triumph welling up and surging through her, washing away all the anxiety and doubt.
(当她走上舞台领奖时,一股巨大的胜利感涌上心头,席卷全身,冲走了所有的焦虑和怀疑。)
3. Reading her father's long-lost letter, she felt a great sense of belonging welling up and surging through her, connecting her to a past she never knew.
(读着父亲失散已久的信,一股强烈的归属感涌上心头,席卷全身,将她与她从未了解的过去连接起来。)
4. Standing at the summit after the grueling climb, she felt a great sense of awe welling up and surging through her at the breathtaking view that stretched before her eyes.
(经过艰苦的攀登站在山顶,面对眼前延展的壮丽景色,一股巨大的敬畏感在她心中涌起并席卷全身。)
5. When the crowd cheered for her unexpected act of kindness, she felt a great sense of fulfillment welling up and surging through her, warmer than any sunshine.
(当人群为她意想不到的善举欢呼时,一股巨大的成就感涌上心头,席卷全身,比任何阳光都温暖。)
句型二:主语+V1,V2 and V3
1. She grabbed the letter, dashed out of the room, and disappeared into the heavy rain without a second thought.
(她抓起信,冲出门去,毫不犹豫地消失在滂沱大雨中。)
2. He knelt down on one knee, gently took her hand, and asked the question that had been lingering in his heart for years.(他单膝跪地,轻轻握住她的手,问出了那个在他心中萦绕多年的问题。)
3. The old man sighed deeply, put on his reading glasses, and began to trace the faded words on the page with his trembling finger.(老人深深地叹了口气,戴上他的老花镜,开始用颤抖的手指描摹书页上褪色的字迹。)
4. The little girl burst into the house, dropped her schoolbag on the floor, and rushed to the kitchen to tell her mom the exciting news.(小女孩冲进房子,把书包扔在地上,然后冲进厨房去告诉她妈妈那个激动人心的消息。)
5. She carefully folded the letter, sealed it in an envelope, and placed it on his desk where he would surely find it.
(她仔细地折好信,把它封进信封,然后放在他的书桌上——一个他一定能看到的地方。)
句型三:with +宾语+宾补
1. With her heart pounding like a drum, she finally mustered the courage to step onto the dimly lit stage.
(她的心像打鼓一样怦怦直跳,她最终鼓起了勇气,走上了灯光昏暗的舞台。)
2. With the difficult problem solved, a bright smile instantly lit up his face, full of pride and relief.
(随着难题被解决,灿烂的笑容立刻照亮了他的脸庞,充满了自豪和宽慰。)
3. With a map in her hand and determination in her heart, the young explorer ventured deep into the unknown forest.
(地图在手,决心在心,这位年轻的探险家深入了那片未知的森林。)
4. With time running out, he scribbled the final answer on the answer sheet just as the bell rang.
(时间所剩无几,就在铃响的那一刻,他匆匆把最终答案潦草地写在答题纸上。)
5. With all eyes fixed upon her, she took a deep breath and began to sing the song that reminded her of home.
(所有的目光都聚焦在她身上,她深吸一口气,开始唱起那首让她想起家乡的歌。)
句型四:倒装No sooner had sb done sth than sb did sth.
1. No sooner had she uttered the words than a deep regret washed over her, realizing her mistake.
(她刚说出那些话,一股深深的悔意就席卷了她,她意识到了自己的错误。)
2. No sooner had the hero disappeared into the distance than the crowd erupted into thunderous applause and cheers.
(英雄刚消失在远方,人群就爆发出雷鸣般的掌声和欢呼。)
3. No sooner had the exam ended than students flooded out of the classroom, discussing the answers excitedly.
(考试刚结束,学生们就涌出教室,兴奋地讨论着答案。)
4. No sooner had he opened the old diary than a faded photograph slipped out and fell onto his lap.
(他刚打开那本旧日记,一张褪色的照片就滑了出来,落在他的膝盖上。)
5. No sooner had the light in the room been turned off than a strange noise from the attic captured his attention.
(房间的灯刚被关上,阁楼传来的一阵奇怪声响就引起了他的注意。)
句型五:adj and adj, 主句。
1. Exhausted and breathless, she finally reached the mountain summit, greeted by a sea of clouds.
(筋疲力尽、上气不接下气的她终于登上了山顶,迎接她的是一片云海。)
2. Anxious and hesitant, his hand hovered over the doorbell, unsure if he should press it.
(焦虑又犹豫,他的手在门铃上方徘徊,不确定是否应该按下去。)
3. Pale and terrified, the little boy backed into a corner, his eyes wide with fear.
(脸色苍白、惊恐万分的小男孩退到角落里,眼睛因恐惧而睁得大大的。)
4. Relieved and overjoyed, she clutched the lost necklace to her heart, tears welling up in her eyes.
(如释重负且欣喜若狂,她把失而复得的项链紧紧攥在胸口,泪水在眼中涌动。)
5. Determined and focused, the athlete block out all the distractions and stepped up to the starting line.
(坚定且专注,那位运动员排除一切干扰,踏上了起跑线。)
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