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该高中英语高考复习讲义聚焦读后续写核心考点，依据情感转变类文本特点构建“考点分析 - 方法指导 - 真题训练”教学框架，通过梳理续写要求、解析伏笔冲突、提供描写语料，帮助学生建立从情节逻辑到语言表达的续写思路，体现复习的系统性与针对性。 资料创新采用语料分层积累与范文对比策略，如分类整理动作、心理描写例句培养语言能力，借助故事山模式分析情感转折提升思维品质。设置不同版本范文对比练习，配合考点突破方法指导，确保学生在有限时间内高效掌握续写技巧，为教师精准把控复习节奏提供实用参考。

阅读下面材料，标黑加粗斜体黄，可积累文本！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单斜体（状从）；其余非谓语形式都会标注；B-eli-eve in daily accumulation!(注释) 河南省郑州外国语学校2024-2025学年高三调研考试（八）英语试题 67.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Next to our house lived an old couple, who, accustomed to country life, were unwilling to move to the city to live with their son and stuck in a lonely existence for many years. It seemed that they didn’t feel like making any new connections with others, including their next-door neighbours. The neighborhood kids nicknamed the strange old couple Crazy Jack and Ruby Rednose. Rumor (流言，传言) was that they sat inside and drank tea all day. The only words we ever heard from them were “Keep out of our rosebushes!” The rosebushes crawled along the fence. Or rather, they served as a fence between our house and theirs, overgrowing the support. I was eleven at the time and the oldest of our family girls. A suitable playing court was a headache problem for us when we felt like playing softball games, which was our favourite sport then. We should have played our softball games elsewhere to avoid hurting the roses, but we secretly enjoyed annoying Crazy Jack and Ruby Rednose. One day, we had a softball game in our yard. Mary was trying to catch a fly ball. She stumbled (绊倒) over one of Ruby Rednose’s rosebushes and fell on top of several more. Just at that moment, Ruby Rednose sprang out and ran toward Mary. She screamed angrily, “Look at what you’ve doneto our family’s roses! You’ve always been a trouble. You have no idea what this rosebush means to me!” Hearing this, my sisters and I ran into our house. Breathlessly, we told Mom what had happened. “Girls, I have told you not to play softball near those bushes. Come outside right now and help me fix them.” “Mom, we thought you didn’t like the couple,” we protested. “They’re mean to us.” Mom just glared at us. We followed her outside to help repair the rose fence. While Mom was examining the damaged roses, Ruby slowly walked out. She looked sad. And it wasn’t her nose that was red, but her eyes. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150字左右。2. 请按如下格式在答题卡相应位置作答。    Paragraph 1: Ruby walked over to my mother, we girls holding our breath. Paragraph 2: A few weeks later, the plants all came back to life. 河南省郑州外国语学校2024-2025学年高三调研考试（八）英语试题 Next to our house lived an old couple(倒装句), who, accustomed to country life(adj短语做主语补语), were unwilling to move to the city to live with their son and stuck in a lonely existence for many years.(描写刻画人物形象) It seemed that they didn't feel like making any new connections with others, including their next-door neighbours. The neighborhood kids nicknamed the strange old couple Crazy Jack and RubyRednose(双宾语动词). Rumor(流言,传言)was that they sat inside and drank tea all day(表从). The only words we ever heard from them were "Keep out of our rosebushes!"(表从)(人物刻画) The rose bushes crawled along the fence(环境描写，无灵主语句). Or rather, they served as a fence between our house and theirs overgrowing the support. I was eleven at the time and the oldest of our family girls. A suitable playing court was a headache problem for us when we felt like playing softball games(状从), which was our favourite sport then. We should have played our softball games(虚拟语气) elsewhere to avoid hurting the roses(目的状语), but we secretly enjoyed annoying Crazy Jack and Ruby Rednose.One day, we had a softball game in our yard. Mary was trying to catch a fly ball. She stumbled (绊倒)over one of Ruby Rednose's rosebushes and fell on top of several more. Just at that moment, Ruby Rednose sprang out and ran toward Mary. She screamed angrily"Look at what you've done to our family's roses! You've always been a trouble(always加现完或进行时，表示厌恶的情感). You have no idea what this rosebush means to me!" Hearing this(现在分词做伴随动作), my sisters and I ran into our house. Breathlessly, we told Mom what had happened. "Girls, I have told you not to play softball near those bushes. Come outside right now and help me fix them(祈使句)." "Mom, we thought you didn't like the couple, " we protested."They're mean to us." Mom just glared at us. We followed her outside to help repair the rose fence. While Mom was examining the damaged roses(状从), Ruby slowly walked out. She looked sad. And it wasn't her nose that was red, but her eyes.(递进句式) 注意: 1.续写词数应为150字左右。 2.请按如下格式在答题卡相应位置作答 Paragraph 1: Ruby walked over to my mother, we girls holding our breath. Paragraph 2: A few weeks later, the plants all came back to life. 1. 文章分类与续写思路分析 文章类型：本文属于“情感转变类”读后续写，主要讲述邻里关系从冷漠到和解的过程。续写应围绕情感转变展开，重点描写人物心理变化和关系修复。 续写思路： 布局：续写应分为两段，第一段描写Ruby与母亲的对话，展现情感转折；第二段描写几周后玫瑰恢复生机，象征邻里关系的修复。 框架： 情感转折：通过Ruby与母亲的对话，展现她的内心变化，解释玫瑰对她的意义。 关系修复：通过玫瑰的恢复，象征邻里关系的和解，孩子们与老夫妇的关系逐渐改善。 实施：续写时需注意承接原文的情感基调，保持语言风格一致，合理设计对话和描写。 注意事项： 承接原文的情感冲突，合理过渡到和解。 注意人物心理描写的细腻性，避免突兀的情感转变。 保持语言简洁，避免过度冗长的描写。 2. 故事山模式与原文分析 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 老夫妇孤僻，孩子们调皮，母亲理性且善良 “They’re mean to us.” “Mom, we thought you didn’t like the couple.” 情感层次 从冷漠到理解，从冲突到和解 “She screamed angrily...” “She looked sad. And it wasn’t her nose...” 关键情节点 Mary绊倒玫瑰丛，Ruby愤怒指责，母亲带领孩子们修复玫瑰 “Mary stumbled over one of Ruby Rednose’s rosebushes...” 语言特色 语言简洁，情感描写细腻 “She screamed angrily...” “She looked sad...” 关键词分析 玫瑰丛象征老夫妇的情感寄托，修复象征关系修复 “You have no idea what this rosebush means to me!” 心理描写 Ruby的愤怒与悲伤，孩子们的恐惧与愧疚 “She screamed angrily...” “We followed her outside...” 动作描写 Ruby冲出屋子，母亲带领孩子们修复玫瑰 “Ruby Rednose sprang out and ran toward Mary.” 环境描写 玫瑰丛作为隔离的象征，环境描写突出情感冲突 “The rosebushes crawled along the fence...” 隐含主题 邻里关系的修复与情感理解 “You have no idea what this rosebush means to me!” 情感转折 从冲突到理解，从冷漠到和解 “She looked sad...” 空间转换 从院子到屋内，再到院子 “We ran into our house...” “We followed her outside...” 时间过渡 从冲突发生到几周后玫瑰恢复 “A few weeks later, the plants all came back to life.” 伏笔与冲突点： 伏笔：玫瑰丛对Ruby的意义未明确说明，为后续情感解释埋下伏笔。 冲突点：孩子们的行为引发Ruby的愤怒，母亲的处理方式成为转折点。 隐含线索： 玫瑰丛象征老夫妇的情感寄托，修复玫瑰象征关系修复。 解决方案： 通过母亲的理解与行动，引导孩子们认识错误，修复玫瑰丛，最终实现邻里和解。 3. 续写语料推荐 动作描写例句： She gently touched the broken stems, her hands trembling slightly. With a sigh, she knelt down and began to carefully rearrange the damaged bushes. The children hesitantly approached, their eyes wide with a mix of fear and curiosity. Ruby’s shoulders slumped as she whispered, “These roses were planted by my late husband.” Mom reached out and placed a comforting hand on Ruby’s shoulder. The girls exchanged guilty glances before quietly picking up the fallen branches. Ruby’s voice softened as she murmured, “I never meant to scare you.” Slowly, a small smile crept onto Ruby’s face as she watched the children work. 心理描写例句： A wave of guilt washed over Mary as she realized the damage she had caused. Ruby’s heart ached as she recalled the memories tied to each rose. The children felt a mix of relief and shame as they listened to Ruby’s story. Mom’s stern expression softened as she understood Ruby’s pain. Ruby’s anger melted into sadness as she saw the children’s genuine remorse. The girls’ initial fear turned into a quiet determination to make things right. Ruby’s eyes glistened with unshed tears as she spoke of her husband. A sense of hope began to grow in Ruby’s heart as she watched the family work together. 环境描写例句： The evening sun cast a warm glow over the repaired rosebushes. A gentle breeze rustled the leaves, as if nature itself approved of their efforts. The once-damaged roses now stood tall, their vibrant colors a testament to their resilience. The fence, once a barrier, now seemed to blend harmoniously with the surrounding garden. The air was filled with the sweet scent of blooming roses, a stark contrast to the earlier tension. The garden, once a place of conflict, now felt like a shared sanctuary. The moonlight bathed the roses in a silvery light, creating a peaceful atmosphere. The chirping of birds added a cheerful note to the serene garden scene. 高级替换词： Angry → Furious, Livid, Incensed, Wrathful, Irate Sad → Melancholic, Sorrowful, Heartbroken, Despondent, Mournful Fix → Mend, Repair, Restore, Rectify, Amend Quietly → Silently, Mutely, Hushedly, Noiselessly, Soundlessly Slowly → Gradually, Leisurely, Unhurriedly, Deliberately, Steadily 4. 语法现象与语料积累 高中语法现象： 过去进行时：用于描述过去某一时刻正在发生的动作。 例句：Ruby was sitting inside when the children started playing. 间接引语：用于转述他人的话。 例句：Ruby told the children, “You have no idea what this rosebush means to me.” 条件句：用于表达假设情况。 例句：If we had played elsewhere, the roses wouldn’t have been damaged. 现在分词作状语：用于描述伴随动作。 例句：Hearing Ruby’s scream, the children ran into the house. 地道搭配： Make connections：建立联系 例句：They didn’t feel like making any new connections with others. Stick to：坚持 例句：They stuck to their lonely existence for many years. Come back to life：恢复生机 例句：A few weeks later, the plants all came back to life. Hold one’s breath：屏住呼吸 例句：We girls held our breath as Ruby walked over to my mother. 生词短语： Accustomed to (adj.)：习惯于 近义词：Used to 反义词：Unaccustomed to 例句：They were accustomed to country life. Overgrow (v.)：过度生长 近义词：Spread 反义词：Wither 例句：The rosebushes overgrew the support. Stumble (v.)：绊倒 近义词：Trip 反义词：Steady 例句：Mary stumbled over one of Ruby Rednose’s rosebushes. Spring out (v.)：突然冲出 近义词：Rush out 反义词：Retreat 例句：Ruby Rednose sprang out and ran toward Mary. Glare (v.)：怒视 近义词：Scowl 反义词：Smile 例句：Mom just glared at us. 5. Possible Versions (3) Version 1 Paragraph 1: Ruby walked over to my mother, we girls holding our breath. Her trembling hands clutched a faded photograph, her voice barely audible(独立主格刻画人物). “These roses… they were planted by my father before he passed away,” she murmured, tears glistening(独立主格，刻画人物状态). Mom, sensing the depth of her sorrow(现在分词做伴随动作), gently replied, “We’ll fix and restore every one, I promise.” My sisters and I, struck by guilt(过去分词短语做原因状语), knelt beside them, carefully untangling the broken stems(现在分词做伴随动作). Ruby’s anger dissolved into quiet action to deal with the mess as she whispered, “No one has cared about them since he left.” Paragraph 2: A few weeks later, the plants all came back to life. The once-withered roses now bloomed vibrantly, their fragrance weaving in the wind. Ruby began joining our family dinners, her laughter mingling with ours(独立主格，刻画人物变化). Even the neighborhood kids stopped calling her “Ruby Rednose,” instead helping her water the roses. Mom replaced the overgrown fence with a trellis, where roses climbed freely, symbolizing our newfound bond(现在分词做后置定语). Years later, at my wedding, Ruby handed me a bouquet from those very roses, her eyes shining with pride(独立主格刻画情绪). “Your mother taught me that fences can become bridges,” she said. 加分语法与替换词： 独立主格（Trembling hands clutched → 近义替换：Shaking hands grasped） 例句：Her trembling hands clutched the photo. → Her shaking hands grasped the photo. 比喻修辞（Fences become bridges → 近义词：Barriers transformed into connections） 亮点词汇： 动作描写：Clutched, untangling, replant, mingling 心理描写：Struck by guilt, dissolved into gratitude, shining with pride 环境描写：Withered roses, fragrance weaving, trellis 高级替换词： Bloom → Flourish, Thrive 例句：The roses flourished under our care. Laughter → Chuckles, Giggles 例句：Her chuckles echoed in the garden. Bond → Connection, Kinship 例句：The kinship between the families grew stronger. Version 2 Paragraph 1: Ruby walked over to my mother, we girls holding our breath. To our surprise, she extended a small trowel, her stern face softening(独立主格刻画形象). “I… I could use some help,” she stammered. Mom, smiling warmly(现在分词做伴随动作), took the tool and replied, “We’ll teach the girls to respect your roses.” As we worked, Ruby shared stories of her youth—how each rose was a memory of her travels. My sister Mary, who had caused the damage, whispered, “I’m sorry,” her voice trembling(独立主格刻画状态). Ruby paused, then placed a hand on Mary’s shoulder. “Apology accepted(口语化的表达),” she said, her eyes no longer cold(独立主格刻画状态). Paragraph 2: A few weeks later, the plants all came back to life. The restored rosebushes became a joint project, with Ruby teaching us pruning techniques and Mom baking pies for tea breaks(with复合结构). The nickname “Crazy Jack” faded as Ruby hosted gardening lessons for the neighborhood. Even the fence, now adorned with ribbons and fairy lights(过去分词做后置定语), became a gathering spot. At Ruby’s 80th birthday party, we gifted her a rose named “Friendship Blossom.” (过去分词短语做后置定语)She hugged us tightly, saying(现在分词做伴随动作), “These roses finally found their purpose.” 加分语法与替换词： 倒装句（To our surprise → Never had we imagined） 例句：Never had we imagined Ruby would offer a trowel. 同位语从句（The fact that...） 例句：The fact that Ruby hosted lessons amazed everyone. 比喻修辞（Ribbons and fairy lights → 替换为：Twinkling decorations） 亮点词汇： 动作描写：Extended, stammered, pruning, adorned 心理描写：Softening, trembling, amazement 环境描写：Fairy lights, gathering spot, tea breaks 高级替换词： Respect → Cherish, Value 例句：We learned to cherish the roses. Faded → Vanished, Disappeared 例句：The nickname vanished from our conversations. Purpose → Significance, Meaning 例句：The roses gained new significance. Version 3 Paragraph 1: Ruby walked over to my mother, we girls holding our breath. Instead of scolding, she sighed deeply and murmured, “I’ve been too harsh… These roses are all I have left of my son.” Mom, her eyes widening in understanding(独立主格描写人物状态), embraced Ruby. “Let’s rebuild them together,” she said firmly. We spent hours transplanting seedlings, Ruby guiding us with surprising patience(独立主格). By sunset, the garden was tidied, and Ruby invited us inside for tea—a first in years. As we sipped some tea, she showed us photos of her son, his smile mirroring the roses’ warmth(独立主格). Paragraph 2: A few weeks later, the plants all came back to life. Ruby’s garden, now a vibrant tapestry(同位语对比), attracted butterflies and neighbors alike. She gifted Mom a rose-cutting, saying(现在分词做伴随动作), “Plant this where fences once stood.” We transformed the boundary into a shared flowerbed, its colors blending like our friendship(独立主格). At the town fair, Ruby won “Best Garden,” dedicating the prize to “my unexpected partners.”(现在分词做伴随动作) Years later, her son visited, astonished by the transformation(过去分词做adj做定语). “Mom,” he said, “you’ve finally let the world in.” 加分语法与替换词： 虚拟语气（If only… → 替换为倒装句：Had I known…） 例句：Had I known their meaning, I’d have been more careful. 分词作状语（Guiding us → 替换为：While guiding us） 例句：While guiding us, Ruby shared stories. 比喻修辞（Tapestry → 替换为：Mosaic） 亮点词汇： 动作描写：Transplanting, sipped, dedicating 心理描写：Widening in understanding, astonished, warmth 环境描写：Vibrant tapestry, flowerbed, butterflies 高级替换词： Rebuild → Restore, Revive 例句：We aimed to revive the garden’s glory. Boundary → Border, Division 例句：The border between our homes disappeared. Attracted → Drew, Lured 例句：The garden drew admiration from everyone. 语料补充 动作描写升级：Replace "Fix" → Mend, Salvage, Reconstruct 例句：We salvaged the broken stems with care. Replace "Work" → Collaborate, Labor, Toil 例句：We collaborated to revive the garden. 心理描写升级： Replace "Sad" → Melancholic, Wistful 例句：Ruby’s wistful gaze lingered on the roses. Replace "Happy" → Elated, Jubilant 例句：We felt elated when the roses bloomed. 环境描写升级： Replace "Grow" → Thrive, Flourish 例句：The roses thrived under our joint care. Replace "Old" → Aged, Timeworn 例句：The timeworn fence was replaced by blossoms. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$